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what do you think of my webcomic
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what do you think of my webcomic
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Somebody did this with spearow already. Still a good job.
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shit that takes too many panels to tell a basic joke
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>>26974843
I like it. I rarely see comics based on Sinnoh too, its always Kanto or Unova
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It's shit.
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>>26974843
This is older than /vp/. Fuck off.
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When you have such a crappy art at least try to be funny.
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>>26974843

It's about as shitty as the rest of your website, Joe, and that takes some doing
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>>26974956
The reason they're in sinnoh is because these things are ancient, from before Black and White were even announced. I know because I remember seeing them all the way back then.
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>>26974923
i don't get it
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>>26974923
bad egg?
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>>26976148

In PBR, badly hacked Pokemon show up as bad eggs.
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>>26974843
Joke's already been done an outrageous amount of times, nomorekeks/5
Art is actually good, 4/5
Keep up, anon!
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>>26974843
>>26974888
>>26974923
These are the Serebii comics, right?
Even ten years ago I thought these were pretty lame.
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In short: not that good.

Constructive feedback:
You take too long (too many panels) to get your point across. You over explain the "joke" to a point where it's no longer funny--though the content you try to make funny isn't for anyone who has played Pokemon for more than one generation. Hanging a lantern (illuminating and poking fun at) on tropes of the franchise can work but the delivery is off in these comics. It's like a stand up comedian who has a funny joke but can't get the timing right.

Still, there's an over-reliance on wink wink nudge nudge pokémon jokes, memes, and other references (R. Kelly song).

Your panel layouts aren't bad. I've seen far worse. I'd suggest trying to tighten the focus of your comics so things flow better. Don't be afraid if you need "two pages" to get the point across if it needs to be longer.

No point in critiquing your art. It's your style, do with it as you please. Though do watch your proportions, light sources, and keep things consistent.

I do suggest looking at Scott McCloud's MAKING COMICS and UNDERSTANDING COMICS. Both are great tools for seasoned and amateur comic creators.

t. An actual literary agent who specializes in graphic novels and comic books.
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>>26976507
Here again.

Bait topic or not. I'm happy to lend an opinion on something I work on and know well.
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>>26976366
>>26974956
>>26974864
>>26974862

>All these serious reviews of Serebii's decade-old comic
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>>26974923
i like this one
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