Prove my homework wrong /pol/
Protip: You can't.
(if you can please point out also grammar mistakes)
>As you can see
drop it
>improvement and of course
drop a comma in there
>viable for me are:
lose the colon
>cheaper and more available
change to cheaper, more available
>socialist like
drop a hyphen in there
>some would ask
entire paragraph is a run-on sentence
>this leads me
don't refer to yourself in formal writing
I'd rather have you submit it as-is, just to make your opinion seem even sillier.
>>67634875
Appreciated.
>>67634908
Doubtful it would look silliy to some old lady.
>>67634327
PUNCTUATION, GRAMMAR, AND GENERAL EDITS:
>should be a semi-colon after the word world in second sentence (otherwise it's what we call a "run-on sentence")
>should be a comma after "space for improvement" in the same sentence
>remove colon in third sentence, it's not needed
>remove comma after the word "statistics" in second sentence in third paragraph
>end that same sentence after the word economy and start a new sentence with the word "since" (it is a run-on sentence otherwise)
>now remove the word "so" from that sentence after the comma as it's not needed in the new sentence
>in second sentence in the last paragraph say "As I pointed out in my last point" instead of "Like I pointed out in my past point".
AS FOR YOUR IDEAS:
they suck. also you claim "according to many statistics" which begs the question which statistics you are talking about.
Also, no need to say "As you can see" in the second sentence.
>>67635524
>they suck. also you claim "according to many statistics" which begs the question which statistics you are talking about.
Have seen countless researches on TV on the matter and it is fucking common sense to hire someone on your job that has an education. I can probably find you real statistics for a few minutes searching.
Also, thanks for the gramatical output.
>>67635939
i'm not saying the statistics aren't there, but phrasing it that way is known as using "weasel words". you would be better off just dropping the "according to many statistics" claim and just flat out saying that people with education are more productive in the economy. But that's not really relevant to an assignment for an English class which is presumably just to show that you have command of the English language so feel free to ignore that point.
Also, the reason why the word benefit is underlined as a mistake in the first sentence of the third paragraph is because it should say "how it will benefit", not "how will it benefit".
>>67636314
Thank you again. Edited even more stuff.
>>67634327
It is not the government's job to make these improvements.
There are government guaranteed jobs after school, join the military.
Educated people are more productive ON AVERAGE. When fields become saturated their degrees are useless for everything but driving down wages.
Outside of military, guaranteeing a job is NOT useful to the economy, as it contributes to deadweight loss in the form of psuedo-charity
>241 word homewokr assignment
Not sure if b& or ultimate degradation of higher education.
Hell, if you are at least twelve this assignment is embarrassing.
>>67636439
No problem, it's kind of fun to help someone learn English. How long have you been studying the language? Your English is good overall.
>>67634327
>education and literacy in one country
Change one country to a nation. By saying "one" you are creating specificity that isn't mentioned previously in the paper.
>Like I pointed out in my last point
Replace pointed out with a synonym. "pointed out in my last point" sounds redundant
Fuck homework, get comfy
Wait, will /pol/ do my homework?
>>67636609
For around 10 years. I turned 18 last month, but the internet is my main source.
>>67636520
I guess I am wrong on a larger macro scale. Can't quite refute your point there.
>Not sure if b& or ultimate degradation of higher education.
>Hell, if you are at least twelve this assignment is embarrassing.
>>67636757
>>67636439
Although this is retarded, since English isn't a native language here and I am not even in a language school.
>>67636520
i hope this isn't a college-level assignment...OP?
>>67636757
good additions, i thought the same about "pointed out in my last point"
>>67636886
What's your homework nigger?
>>67636905
>Not sure if b& or ultimate degradation of higher education.
>Hell, if you are at least twelve this assignment is embarrassing.
Although this is retarded, since English isn't a native language here and I am not even in a language school.
meant to type it like that.
>>67636908
>i hope this isn't a college-level assignment...OP?
At the age of 19 years people end the last level in high school, which is next year for me.
>>67636918
I was just kidding, to be honest, fambam. Thanks, anyways.
>>67637012
Your english is very good.
I would also say "at 19", or "at 19 years old" instead of "at the age of 19". The latter is much too formal ;)
>>67634327
Indent your paragraphs holy shit.
>>67637424
I noticed that mistake the moment I made the post. Kinda comfy mode atm and didn't pay much attention to my reply. The sentence isn't structured well too. Thanks for the compliment.
>>67637458
They are, though.
>>67634327
>of course it's the government's job
Prove it, just a baseless assumption
>guaranteed job
How do you guarantee that someone will pay you to do something?
>>67638000
>Prove it, just a baseless assumption
Education is a government institution.
>How do you guarantee that someone will pay you to do something?
Government jobs or subsidizing businesses to accept grads for at least for a part time job.
