Is there any potential in this shoddily thrown together short story type thing?
http://txt.do/5idoq
After reading the first sentence, no.
>>8234799
I'll give you that, the first sentence is shit.
lost interest at 'One day I was', skimmed the rest. you have a beginning and ending joined by nothing and a ton of cliched language to clean up, but without any dialogue i can't see it being anything more than an entertaining but awkwardly long summary. also don't refer to people as 4chan boards, please, it's cringey.
all in all, there is potential, needs a lot of polish and a better sense of structure and pacing. that said, almost everything has potential.
