Wax

>>8060282
That poem sucks, it doesn't even rhyme. And it's not saying anything other than describing the process in which a candle burns.

>>8060282
What do you think of this two liner poem?

I cried and cried when I left Phoenix. So much I used a box of Kleenex

>>8060282
black holes & protons
are on the mind of the man
who thinks of the spaces
between the atoms.
me? i think of
which fast-food place
i'll go to for dinner,
then whether to surf
the net for porn erotica
or just watch espn 25.

Post this shit in the critique threads.

I assume this is a poetry thread, so I'll leave this here.

She is a bee with a sting in her hand
She left the wrong bag in my confusing land
We fell into plans and we dropped into the force
And now she spread her legs, she wants to ride me like a horse