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another section

i haven't read much erotica in my life, but the main purpose, its sole raison, as DFW would say, is to arouse, which this doesn't

it's nothing special

>>7797443
pretty shit desu.

This is awful and it's horribly written.

>>7797443
>>7797452
Did you write this shit on your phone?

>>7797443
You've never had sex before have you?

Good erotica is insinuation. It's about what's implied, not what's said.

Protip: No good erotica has ever used the word "asshole." Go read some Anais Nin

>>7797472
>>7797480
can you go more into detail?
>>7797484
;_;
>>7797482
ye

>>7797443
Shittier than the shit on Risel's cock

The words Butt cheeks only work to make me annoyed or disgusted.

>>7797487
disagree. the build up is important. there needs to be some good old fucking at some point.

Ignore these cunts. It's good, OP. Publish it.

>>7797510
no

fantasy is more potent as a source of desire

>>7797443
does he slickle her peeny?

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>>7797443
>>7797452

>>7797510

As soon as you start sticking lollipops in peoples' butts it's not erotica, it's just porn.