3 hours left, how am i doing so far?? You like my thesis? How should i start the body paragraphs?
Im thinking of the next paragraph start with something about survival of the fittest but some help could make it better!
BUMP WTF
>>28871211
>In the book "The Road",
>"The Road",
It should be "The Road,"
Your thesis is also generic as fuck. I thought this might be a shitty bait post, but Google image search yielded no results, so I guess this is just genuine shit.
>>28871373
*By shitty bait post, I was of course suggesting it might have been pasta.
>>28871211
You're getting a C. If you're lucky.
>>28871373
i have 3 HOURS, HOW COULD THERE BE A BETTER THESIS?
>>28871211
Do you even speak English? Your punctuation is absolute shit.
>>28871435
punctuation's fine?
>>28871373
This anon is right, OP.
What is this for? High School? College?
You have good ideas but express them in a somewhat awkward manner. The start is a little vague.
For an introduction, that might be a little short.
Body paragraphs tend to focus on a particular idea or theme. In your case, then maybe discussing the concept of how people are forced to do x in order to survive could be explained, then link it to how it might not be bad or evil.
Then you could write another paragraph on survival of the fittest. For this you could use one of the characters as a 'base' so to speak and link examples in the book about them which relate to that theme.
Most essays/thesis' would have 3 body paragraphs as standard .
>>28871458
>punctuation's fine?
As he says while placing a question mark at the end of a statement.
>>28871211
Just fuck it dude, no time
Get a copy of 'My twisted world' and just paste that shit in there.
>>28871460
collge
>>28871478
im confused, and this is 4chan....?
HERE is the start of the second paragraph. r8
>>28871508
What is with that indent are you trying to kill me.
>>28871211
People in this distopian world are forced to do the unthinkable, acting on animal instincts, for survival, blurring the lines between good and evil.
next paragraph is about the "animal instincts" they must do, talk about how they have to eat and shit.
3rd paragraph is about some of the evil things that have to do.
4th is about the good.
5th is conclusion. restate the thesis first then you can say something deep and meaningful like "maybe our current world isn't so different" or something.
>>28871486
>college
You are not going to graduate
>>28871567
community college, then transfer
this gets turned into turnitin, does that website scan 4chan archives?
OP is legitimately fucked
>>28871508
WHY DIDN'T YOU PUT A COMMA REEEEE
it should be
>In the book, cannibalism is...
>>28871486
This is not college-level writing. Also, question marks are used with questions. You were stating that the punctuation was fine, not asking a question.
>>28871666
You overestimate community college and GenEd required classes.
Physical grey of the sky reflects the ambiguity of moral action in a world without social structures in place.
Slot that in somewhere, it's an idea and it looks like you could use some
>>28871595
not for images
>>28871784
but text on here?
How the fuck are you in college? Kids wrote better than this in 10th grade English.
>>28871521
Students have this weird obsession with indenting every fucking paragraph these days. Must be taught to them in the shitty institutions they call "school".
I could so easily just write one of your paragraphs for you, and it would be a fucking kickass paragraph. I got a 780 (11/12) on the SAT writing, and a 5.5 on the GRE AW.
But I'm not going to because I'm tired and I kinda feel like masturbating to incest
>>28871508
Maybe rephrase it like...
"The Road' depicts cannibalism as cruel and cannibalistic, giving the impression that it is evil but logical for people to resort to when there is no other food source.
IDK, your version seems like a really long sentence that becomes difficult to read. It also doesn't flow nicely.
>>28871521
>>28871839
That's the standard in both MLA and APA format you fucktards, which they force everyone to adhere to.
If you weren't indenting like this you either didn't go to school or went to a shitty one.
Heres my second prgh
this guy >>28871527
gave me ideas
thinking of a conclusion
>>28871896
>MLA
People actually use this?
Lmao.
>>28871803
I believe it checks google, so if google indexes the archives (they do), then yes it will show up.
>>28871879
>"The Road' depicts cannibalism as cannibalistic
Pure pottery.
You are a shit writer and should have compensated by going to office hours and getting help instead of waiting this long. I'm not saying this to hurt you but hopefully you'll do better next time.
>>28871933
The dude is in community college, what do you expect?
Who's manifesto am I reading?
Please just don't be polish again, my people can't take another loonly. And while we are at it, don't let this be dad/son porn either.
>>28871933
He's in community college most likely writing this for a required class, unless he's going into a field involving writing he's fine.
>>28871953
Community college is pretty dope. You meet a lot of gang members.
This is like my writing in Middle School desu, although it hasn't developed since senior year of hs
>>28871211
How can you be on this board and not know how to craft an essay? I breezed through every writing course in college because of what I learned here. On r9k. No, that is not a joke.
The best posts on here don't ramble on, they make a point and guide the reader to it as effectively as possible. Your first sentence is utter garbage. Who the fuck are you trying to be, saying the most obvious shit about people which has no significant ties to the content of your essay?
Start your essay by getting straight to the point:
"Two men face the horrors of a dead planet, constantly on the lookout for others and themselves. Through the lens of McCarthy's post apocalyptic world, grand questions are raised regarding morality. What defines the point at which a person's actions deem them evil? Do different circumstances excuse choices unthinkable from a modern perspective. [Follow with thesis statement better than "just cuz u do bad things doesn't make u evil]"
>>28872057
I dont go on r9k, i go on /mu/ and /g/, sometimes /a/
Make a google doc op
>>28872057
>The best posts on here don't ramble on, they make a point and guide the reader to it as effectively as possible
That's not how community college works, every writing class I took before I transfer had word/page limits so you have to stuff your writings with bullshit to get a good grade.
finally got pass the first page
>>28872102
>so you have to stuff your writings with bullshit to get a good grade
Jesus Christ the education system really is fucked, isn't it? Such bullshit that I can learn how to convey my ideas on a fucking mongolian barbeque sharing board instead of classes that cost thousands of dollars per quarter for tuition.
>>28872309
Op here, hundreds for me
Im on my THIRD PARAGRAPH
here is the assignment question btw
OP do you know what a reference is? Because you need them.
>>28871211
How long does the essay need to be OP? A- to B+ papers can usually be cranked out in a little over an hour if it's only 1200 or so words. Plus writing over The Road is super easy.
For writing advice, 1st change the title. It's too sophomoric. "The Road and Grey Morality" could be a good one if you're going to write about that. Also make your writing more professional, as right now it looks like a paper produced from a junior in High School.
>>28871508
God tier advice: Never use the word "this" in an English paper. Ever.
>>28871865
I'm a doctor, a lawyer, have written over 60 published works, and also happen to be the President of the United States.
>>28871916
College student here. Can cofirm that we're forced to.
>>28871865
>I got a 780 (11/12) on the SAT writing, and a 5.5 on the GRE AW
ok sure thing
>>28871953
A lot of people go for economic reasons, not for intellectual ones.
Can confirm, am a poorfag CC student
>>28871211
terrible, first sentence too short. second is a run on. youre not transitioning smoothly into the book. should be underlined too. title is too vague. (took english 24 b-)
>tfw I write just like OP
>>28871508
good but its a run on.
Your writing is quite frankly mediocre.
>in the book
Starting third paragraph, feels REALLY shitty
>>28873020
feels great
>>28871909
not sure if ur prof says but usally you include a quote and then describe it and then how it relates to ur thesis.
>>28871508
is that book any good? you're doing a book report for middle school, right?
>>28873044
Your whole thesis is that McCarthy reveals a realistic view of what a post-apocalyptic earth might look like. Who cares? The 'so what?' of the thing is what matters most; your writing suffers from the superficiality of your thesis.
>>28873089
community college mayne
>>28873136
nothing you do in community college matters. just coast through on a C average.
>>28871211
OP are you in grade 12 in Ontario
>>28873157
yes but im 18. ima grrl
4th paragraph, talking about the "bad guys" now
help me
>>28873292
Wow, you suck at this shit.
>>28873340
Im running out of shit to say, did i mention i didnt really read the book?
>>28873354
You should probably go download or read the cliff-notes for the book, man.
>>28873292
>didn't read the book
>no quotes
You're going to fail. Like, LITERALLY going to fail.
I mean, you don't even know who the antagonists are jesus christ.
I read the book and it was okay, but fuck you
>>28871211
>>28873292
Good lord, woman.
Just wow.
Eat a can of alphabet soup and take a shit. That will yield better results.
>>28873268
Suck the professors dick. That's the only way you're going to get a good grade on this assignment, because your 'thesis' (if we can even call it that) is terrible.
>>28871211
Don't call it a thesis, please. You're not fooling us.
I have to ask, did you read the book? There isn't a single character name or specific event from the book in anything you've shown us so far. Not to be mean, but those are kind of important. I haven't read The Road, and I am struggling to understand how your points relate to each other and the book in general.
In general, my advice is to simply put more information into the essay. It seems as though you are glossing over everything.
Also obligatory this is why you don't procrastinate until the very last minute.
itt: anons saying op's writing sucks yet giving no suggestions
>>28871435
This was half of my English 101 and 102 class in a nutshell. Despite having at least a passable grasp on the language (native speakers being the majority), the majority of them were simply too gormless to even show up half the time. The rest of the time, they were too busy shifting their weight around and finding loopholes to get out of working to actually write their essays.
It was fucking disgusting, felt like I was the only one in the entire classroom that actually gave a rat's ass about learning the skills taught in the course and improving my writing skills. Enjoy your failing grade, OP.
Guys how do i use this quote in the essay?!?!!
You have to carry the fire.
I dont know how to.
Yes you do.
Is it real? The fire?
Yes it is.
Where is it? I dont know where it is.
Yes you do. It's inside you. It was always there. I can see it.
>>28873381
I did slightly, and the teacher spoils it every day so i think i know enough
>>28871211
>Contractions in an academic setting
Trashed
Anon, if you really want advice and help, (with a CHANCE of getting a D) you're going to have to post your google doc and allow us to comment. Don't need to edit, just comment. Otherwise if you take any suggestions or direct quotes from this thread, turnitin's going to mark 90% of your paper as plagiarism. It should mark around 10-30% plagiarized because you should be giving examples from the text, and breaking them down. Use sparknotes quotes, don't rely on their analysis, make them connect to your thesis "Depravity is inherent to survival" or whatever bullshit that was. Idk I got too bored to read it. That's a bad sign.
>>28873691
Could at least skim it for direct quotes to use and then get the gist of the plot, characters, and so on from Wiki/CliffsNotes/your own skimmings/etc.
It's like you want to fucking fail.
>english essay
>no evidence from the text
already gonna take a fat ass L might as well not even turn it in
>>28873717
>Otherwise if you take any suggestions or direct quotes from this thread, turnitin's going to mark 90% of your paper as plagiarism.
I know plagiarism-checking software is strict, but does it really scan /r9k/ for original content? That seems like a bit of a daunting task technically-speaking, given that the average life expectancy of a thread on here is anywhere from a couple of hours to a full day at most.
Here is the fucking google doc
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bbFoEEzqJYDxoa2-C_y6bIYMgZl0HPdM8_1etQHYDSs/edit?usp=sharing
30 minutes
>>28873669
Not your personal army.
and fuck off bitch. Do your own homework.
>>28873584How about actually reading the book so you can understand and answer the question, fucktard roastie.
>>28873669
Again if you want a word-for word analysis, you need to link a google doc or your submission is going to be flagged as plagiarized.Also holy shit that doesn't have anything to do with your thesis omg this seems hopeless. I'd pity you, but this is your own fault lol.
Also when is it due? Need to know timezone and if late submissions are accepted.
Jesus fucking Christ OP.
You fucking better be in a first year english class. I'm raging at your shit writing.
>>28873791
HERE
>>28873763
25 min
>>28871865
>SAT
>Hard
Come back when you've actually done something kiddo
>>28873584
Not our job to write your essays for you.
Why would you even come to a place notorious for being populated by stupid, apathetic losers and highschool dropouts for help on schoolwork anyway? Ask on studentroom or something, fuck.
>>28873763
>>28873803
the thirstiness is palpable
>>28872277
how many pages left senpai?
also double dubs check'd
>>28873756
It checks Google, Google caches desustorage, and obviously desustorage caches this underwater origami forum.
>>28873141
This anon speaks 100% truth.
This world is transient bots. Enjoy your time here
>>28873828
Aha, didn't take Google into consideration (ironic, since Thirsty OP is trying to get us to write his fucking paper in GDocs). I suppose that's fair enough then.
>>28871373
>It should be "The Road,"
Does America use MLA citations? If so, it should actually be in italics.
Also OP this looks terrible, but you only have 3 hours left so why are you even worried about it. What you need to focus on now is finishing.
>>28873803
25 minutes? At this point just accept that you're going to fail this and hope it doesn't tank your grade.
This isn't college level right?
>all these people hoping OP isn't in college
As someone who marks college level essays for a living, I would put him right on par for the course. College students are idiots.
>>28871211
no quotations for the title it should just be underlined dumb ass
>>28873856
>Does America use MLA citations? If so, it should actually be in italics.
MLA style is most common in English over here, APA in the broader field of communications, and Turabian/Chicago style in humanities (the latter of which is an utter pain in the ass to write with by the by). Can second the suggestion to italicize, not that it'll do OP much good at this juncture in his academic career. kek
>>28873905
>As someone who marks college level essays for a living, I would put him right on par for the course.
Wait, so this is actually passing?
When I was in my english classes in high school, that would have earned a B- in an honors English class and a C or D in AP.
Holy shit is college even worth it if its this basic.
>>28873915
In my BA I had to switch back and forth between Chicago and MLA; I actually preferred Chicago.
If your major is English or any Humanities field, OP, I really suggest you go to a writing tutor.
>>28873937
It depends on the course, university, and instructor. Most instructors I've worked for have been strongly encouraged not to fail students. Basically if they've actually done the bare minimum and are in some way responding to the essay prompts, then they will get at least a 50 (which is a pass here). I only read OP's first paragraph and skimmed the second: based on those and his MLA knowledge, he'd get a high 50, low 60.
College is a fucking racket, of course they're not going to fail paying customers.
>>28873992
>College is a fucking racket, of course they're not going to fail paying customers.
I also don't want my money being literally redistributed while also having leftist stuff fed to me
>>28873766
>implying i own meat flaps
>implying i'd waste my time reading meme literature
>>28873815
>implying i'm op
also
>Ask on studentroom or something, fuck.
>using fuck at the end of a sentence
nice roastie vocabulary
>>28874007
>I also don't want my money being literally redistributed while also having leftist stuff fed to me
>implying that's not exactly what's happening as colleges gradually ramp their tuition up a few percentile each semester while encouraging their faculty to spread the "poor neglected academic" meme among the student populace
haha okay
>>28873803
Lol whoops looks like I can't edit public docs on mobile. Sorry, OP.
Good luck!!
>>28874046
Wait, I thought he was being serious.
>>28874046
This shit is why I would feel so scammed if I paid for college
Plus its also a societal expectation that you go
>pay this private, for-profit company tens of thousands of dollars so they can literally redistribute your money in the name of equality while berating you for your "privileges", lest you be a loser
fuck how do I convince myself that its worth it?
>>28874089
You don't.
Learn a trade and make huge money. Seriously.
>>28874034
It's an easy mistake to make when neither of you capitalise your sentences for some reason.
>>28874111
trips confirm
I've been thinking seriously about it
>>28874065
He was from what I gathered. I probably wasn't communicating it very well, but I was trying to explain how that's exactly what happens anyway.
All students (even the dean's list/cream of the crop students) play into this statistic-bending scheme on the part of school and faculty by paying to attend the schools, listening to the false propaganda of the "poor uneducated school system" as the school itself plays fast and loose with the excess funds it has accumulated from jacking their own prices up over the years. It's all a very well-coordinated racket on the part of broader academia, so you can't exactly knock their hustle.
I could also go into how academia is now a necessity rather than a luxury, due to an undergrad degree being an absolute-minimum requirement for even the lowest-paying jobs on the market today; however, that would be veering quite a bit away from the main topic at hand. lol
>>28874136
>It's all a very well-coordinated racket on the part of broader academia, so you can't exactly knock their hustle.
fuck this makes me mad, especially knowing how some people save up their whole lives and lower their quality of lives just to "send their children to college"
>>28874089
>fuck how do I convince myself that its worth it?
Get your parents to pay for it, if you can. It's what I'm doing, and I'm scraping by okay towards the end of my first year in a community college.
Takes a hell of a toll on one's psyche, but if you're already accustomed to human beings being inherently socially-manipulative pieces of shit it's not so terrible.
>>28874184
>Get your parents to pay for it, if you can.
I would feel like shit for making my parents pay that much fucking money just so the college can profit off them and redistribute the rest
I TURNED THAT FUCKER IN GUYS
im just glad im done with this shit
First two essays for the course I got As, third I got a D and it was shorter than this
You think I passed?!
>>28874210
>I would feel like shit for making my parents pay that much fucking money just so the college can profit off them and redistribute the rest
It's really a drag, but it seemed like a more viable solution than sitting around the house all day as a depressing NEET who can't even get a fast food job 'cos I'm too white to get Affirmative Action'd into the local McDonalds or whatever.
Scammers are everywhere, but it's quite scarce to find one that will actually help in one's life (even if only superficially so). That, in combination with my parents' insistence on my going to college, is really the only way I can justify it myself. Plus it gives me something semi-productive to focus my effort towards.
>>28874212
YA TOTALLY GJGJ
>>28874212
>You think I passed?!
3/10 IGN rating
You'll probably pass with a sub-mediocre grade, but only for the depressing behind-the-scenes reasons we've been postulating on.
>>28871211
OP
HOW LONG? HOW MANY PAGES DO U NEED?
>>28874300
>>28874289
I have also used a l8 pass on my third essay, just went to the submission box and i can STILL TURN IT IN OH FUCK
ill make a new thread about it soon
>>28874333
too l8 main
>>28874212
>>28874212
Assuming the first two were worth 20% each and the last two 30%. Yeah, barely. It won't be a good grade but if you get more than 20% on this you've passed.
>>28874274
I guess so, thanks
original
>>28874367
>I guess so, thanks
No problem. Hope you can find something that works out for you, whether or not you actually end up going
>>28874353
dammit.
I'm into writing feminist satire when desperate people want essays.
I was all set to spew bullshit about how Athenian pederastry hurts women, and how "the smokehouse" is a metaphor for the human condition.
But bro, seriously, you're writing like you're trying to sound smart and nothing else.
That's boring bullshit.
1. Pick something you want to write about
2. "Find" this as a "hidden message" in the text
3. Argue for what you like, mock what you don't like
Done right, essays are basically shitposts that get a dick-size rating.
You can write about fucked-up shit if you sound 100% "politically correct".
You can literally write an essay about how Jews did 9/11 and this made you become a Nazi.
Here are your topic headings:
> "The Road" is about loss
> 1st example of loss paralleled in the road: 9/11 was national tragedy. The Road was a reaction to loss, helps people cope, blah blah blah.
> 2nd example of loss paralleled in "the road" German nationalism in the 1930's was a reaction to loss. Make parallels to civilization breakdown.
> 3rd example of loss paralleled in "the road": unattractive men are un-loved. Examples of weak people getting killed on "the road". Talk about how "toxic masculinity" is bad.
> now, go deep:
> Pick two characters in the story. Argue that one is a figment of the other's imagination.
> Pick a character who dies. Talk about how he's a Christ figure.
> Pick an attractive male character. Describe his masculine hotness, then say he's a "bad person" (only do this if teacher is female)
> Pick a modern artist whose work is bullshit. Talk about how their work is brilliant and like "the road".
> Baneposting. But, change the words a little so it sounds academic.
200 years ago, people wrote essays about old scrolls that no one understood. So it made sense to "find the hidden meaning".
That's the game. "Find the author's true intent."
Could be anything you want.
Argue the author is secretly Gay / Fascist / a Robot.
>>28874335
WHAT IS TOPIC TELL ME BRO
I WILL CRUSH YOUR SHIT TIER ASSIGNMENT
>>28874614
its bout CRISPR
NEW THREAD
>>28874752
>>28874594
But what about a report on nonfiction ? I need many sources for this gene editing essay and come up with how ethical it is and how it will serve us in the future
>>28871211
>start your book with a factually untrue statement that will make any educated individual put it down right then and there
good idea op, most people are idiots anyway
this way you don't have to hold yourself to any quality standards, because no one able to critize will ever read your book in the first place
>>28874907
*book review
>>28874594
>Done right, essays are basically shitposts that get a dick-size rating.
This is why I hated literary analysis in high school english
Luckily now i'm in STEM, where instead of the work being vague and poorly defined, i'm just too lazy to do it
