/vpwt/: 'Fighting with love' Edition
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Previous Thread: >>25721078
Check out the catalog for a directory of fics from fellow writefags,
>https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1PtN4D_9CSw8JJ9uO6v0oQqdtKEkS8aFAvfxqI96XfSE/edit?usp=sharing
>Can I post NSFW fics?
Absolutely! There are no rules against NSFW text links.
>How should I post my fics?
Please, for the convenience of everyone involved, link to a host like Fanfiction.net, Pastebin or Google Docs rather than dumping your fics in text posts. This not only keeps the thread tidy (and keeps you from getting an infraction for spam), but it also provides a more permanent place to store your work.
>Can I add a fic I wrote to the catalog?
Sure! Check the catalog for the submission link. In there, you can find a link to a Google Form - fill out all the necessary information and it will be submitted for review automatically. Technology is incredible!
We're also looking to collect ideas for fanfics as a resource for stumped writers. Feel free to throw an idea out there; someone may choose to use it themselves!
Ideabin: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1X072SSWulcC6RJRrPA6v9XtyohRybvMBl6Fh49wHsRw
Topic of the Thread: What character personalities make for the best clashing? Competitive and Lax? Clingy and Distant? Red and blue? Just to name a few.
>>25855949Flowey a cute.
>>25855949
Fic recap:
An anon wrote an introduction involving Lyra (not batshit insane one) and Khoury arriving at goldenrod. Who knows what they'll do. SFW
http://pastebin.com/9ZemZFjc
Cge revealed his new story to us, Eternally Vernel, involving deer or something. Two chapters. Seems SFW.
http://archiveofourown.org/works/6400045/
A storm of bully fics appeared overnight, with some new stuff from the bully anon.
Lilligant, SFW
http://pastebin.com/7eKfcCVr
Bianca, NSFW
http://pastebin.com/frsZ3tsP
Braixen, SFW
http://pastebin.com/ajmDDnxQ
Selli-Hiddenite did a fic of a goodra teasing her trainer as well. NSFW
http://pastebin.com/RkxLkcFF
And another anon does a bully piece involving Lass and Emolga taking on an overpowered opponent. SFW
http://pastebin.com/2V0DgFuV
Updated Fics:
Sports Retarted added chapter 5 for whatever fic he is doing. SFW
http://pastebin.com/5Sj7XDKp
Traipsingexodus adds a chapter 5 to his story about taboo romances I think. Assume it's NSFW
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11293393/5/Their-Second-Autumn
Mimiga adds more ears to his fic involving chapters. SFW
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BDDEJaVjSxd1PPabcOqXP3nAYYwyzDYpGxb5_cprZZs/edit?usp=sharing
I uh...think I messed up the order somewhere.
More Fledging chapters by unown. SFW
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11084689/32/Fledglings
>>25855949
Can we please exclude Gardevoir fics.
>>25856025
No.
>>25856025
I wish we could, anon.
>>25856025
>exclude a thing I don't like
go back to /lit/
>>25855968Pleas do not patronize the Absolute God of Hyperdeath
>>25856003
There's one more to add to that list: one bully story starting leaf.
Sfw
http://pastebin.com/H37E9PXK
>>25859132
don't forget Torterra
>>25856176
What this anon said.
>>25859132
I like how Groudon is too flabbergasted by the situation to even resist.
>>25856025
Thank you for saying please, but unfortunately, we can't reject fics unless they are of purposefully unreadable quality. We can't just exclude that which we don't like.
Requesting a bullyfic whereA rival makes Serena perform on stage completely naked.
>>25859617
you might get a better response in the bully thread
Bump
>>25859617
Now I want this.
>>25857997
Really enjoyed this. Great work anon.
In response to the anon requesting rapefics in the last thread, make sure you also check the unlisted submission sheets in the catalog. They might be hidden on a normal browser, but they're accessible on mobile for me at least. The catalog's been broken forever so nothing has been properly added in months, but the submission lists are up to date.I submitted a rapefic a month or so ago if you're interested
>>25861702
I promise, I'll get it done, thoughI kinda wanna rewrite the first two parts partly because I could make it better, and partly because I lost both parts so I don't have a reference for my own work.
>>25861996
took a look. Unfortunately it seems like what I asked for a few threads ago was never delivered, but at least there's a god stream of fics to tap into now. Hope you guys can fix up that catalog.link to yours
>>25855949
>fighting with LOVE
ftfy
Bully story. May bullies Wally.
http://pastebin.com/6EEsZXgL
>>25861996
Uhh how do I view unlisted things on a Google doc?
What are some of your pet peeves?
>"Told them everything"
When two characters meet and one needs to be filled in on all the things the readers have seen to date, the narrator will simply state that the character in the know told the other about everything that had happened. Sometimes authors will try to mitigate it by referring to the things discussed: "told them about the time X, the time Y, and even time Z." That fails to address the real issue - that it's a missed chance to show a character reflecting on what's happened so far and show the other's character through their reactions. What's left is an artificial feeling exchange that didn't really help to further develop the characters.
>"Eyes are the windows to the soul"
Eyes are great for showing general emotion, but where did anyone get this idea that you can tack some random descriptors onto them and convey any emotion of any intensity? Some of the grandiose descriptions you see are just ridiculous.
"Chuckle"
I can't quite put my finger on why, but reading fanfiction has ruined this word for me. Every time I see it, I die a little inside. Maybe it's because people fail to show humor with anything but chuckles, because it's used so often for things that aren't funny, or because it's so often used in that unintentionally condescending way by every Mary Sue ever created.
>>25865064
The word 'glomp' is usually a fairly good sign that the fic isn't worth your time.
>>25861996
How does a spreadsheet break?
>>25863835
Bottom of the page has tabs. Look for the submissions tab.
Anyone have a link to the original Bianca bully fic? Can't seem to find it.
>>25866391
http://pastebin.com/uWyPqm8J
>>25866064
I don't fucking know, ask whoever has been updating the catalog. Every time I ask for an explanation I get nothing specific.
>>25866064
>>25866554
Hi! Catalogue (co-)manager here. It's mostly my fault the catalog's fucked up; I was trying to mess around with the link from the google form to the spreadsheet to bypass the waiting list, and I almost immediately fucked everything up so that the submission form no longer outputs data to the catalog's waiting list. Originally, I had someone else help me with the form, and it was working well, but ever since I broke it I haven't been able to get back in touch with said helper to fix it.
Admittedly, I haven't been trying very hard to fix it, and I haven't really got a good excuse for that. I kinda forgot about it for a decent while. If anyone knows their way around gdocs/gforms and wants to give me a hand, feel free to drop by the IRC and we'll work something out.
>>25866429
Thanks m80
If your fic is missing from the catalog and is not on the waiting list, please resubmit it. I needed to clean up the submissions list but I didn't realize some of them had yet to be added to the main list.
In addition, any fics involving fetishized Pokemon abuse will not be added to the catalog. Don't bother submitting your fic if it fits that criteria.
>>25867085
>fetishized pokemon abuse
...bullying?
>>25867107
seems like it. Guess the manager of the catalog isn't into that kind of thing
>>25867085
>>25867107
>>25867167
That's the co-manager I mentioned. We may disagree on this matter.I actually hate bullying, butI see no reason to exclude it from the catalog. I think he was mostly joking. Either way, that aside, the catalog should be working again, finally. Sorry about the wait, for anyone affected!
>>25867177
Ah okay. I'm not a fan either, but it'd be wrong to exclude something just because you dislike the premise.
Anybody have any fic recommendations for stories with Jessiebelle? Or maybe can I request one? It was mentioned in a different thread, and I've spent the last hour or two looking for decent ones.
>>25867212
you could request one, though it'd be up to whoever god is out there to hope someone takes it on.
>>25867239
Mfw I will never have a story with jessiebelle dominating James in her sexy dungeon
>>25862051
in hindsight, a rewrite can reinvigorate the imagination for a cute story like minty
>>25855949
Should've been /vpa/ really.
I'm glad the catalog is being fixed up by the good souls out there. Also makes me happy to see best author whenever I see the overview page.
>>25865064
For me, it's diving into smut without much buildup. Like, it's hard to describe, but I just can't get into such things these days without at least a little buildup, whether positive (relationship) or negative (harassment over time)
>>25865064
"Overexaggerated"
The point of the word exaggerate is to be over the top about something. Overexaggeration is redundant and I want to kill a baby every time I see it.
"Attend to"
You either tend to something or you attend something. I see this so often now, and I think it's just being passwd around the internet from one retard to another. It takes years off my life span.
"Bored of"
I know half of you guys have done this so I'm telling you politely as a literate individual to fucking cut that shit out. It's "bored with", not "bored of".
Wow language makes me angry.
>>25869931
Over-exaggerated is as valid as hyper-extended. Sometimes the dial goes to 11.
Attend, like many of its kin that lost the infix "t", indicates a state described by the verb. "Tend" is a verb that is the act of caring for something, while "attend(ing)" is being in the state of actively tending. Thus, to "attend to X" is to be actively tending to X. If I attend the meeting, I am seated at the table; if I attend to the meeting, I ensure that there are coffee and doughnuts. These are different things.
You may be tired of "bored of" but it's more correct than "with" because "of" indicates that what follows is the object; although "with" is understood, it better suits indicating an addition to the subject: I can be bored with you if we are both bored concomitantly, but if I am bored of you, the cause of my boredom alone is clear.
>>25871930
This thread is now Voynich general.
>>25872056
DID SOMEONE SAY VOYNICH?
OH BOY OH BOY REV UP THOSE ABSTRACT GOGGLES BOYOS ITS TOME TO GO DOWN THE RABBIT HOLEI gave a presentation on it in college during my senior year and was met with the collective blank stares of my fellow undergrads.
>>25863388
RIP Wally's Dingus. We knew thee well
>>25871930
>>25872332
This was quite fascinating. I'm impressed.
>>25863388
>“I don’t think you’re a dingus expert,” Wally said.
Do you guys listen to music to try and get a feel for the mood you're writing for?
>>25876814
I like to listen to video game music while I write. That way I get the battle vibe and just about every other feeling from playlists (towns, caves, mountains, somber reflection, you name it). I've also listened to rock, but then I usually start jamming more than writing.
>>25876814
I have yet to give it a try, but I also heard from another anon countless threads ago that doing so may cause you to feel for a scene differently than how the reader will interpret it. For example, listening to heavy metal while writing a battle scene may make you feel the feeling of "battle" more than the reader will.
Just thought I'd give my two cents on the subject.
>>25876814
Since I only listen to the more energetic stuff, I tend to see it distracting more than helpful since I can't stop myself from grooving
>>25876814
When I'm writing battle/action scenes I put on one of the playlists of pokemon anime/movie music I have to suit it since I'm a visual writer, if that makes any sense.
For other times I have a regular music playlist.
>>25855949
>TotT
you already posted it, a killer/violent person paired with a pacifist
>>25861996link to it, now that it seems submission list was reset?
>>25856003
Sorry, I'm late to the party.
Uploaded a new chapter, series is sfw: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10121590/7/Gift-of-the-Protector-Radiant-Heart
>>25882187
>submissions list was reset
Well there goes every submission from dead anons. Fuck's sake. Hold on anon, I'll try to find the link. I don't have it saved on mobile.
Anyone got a link to Suwa's pastebin? I haven't got it saved.
>>25882900
http://pastebin.com/u/Suwa
Fur future references, you can type in /u/username to find who you're looking for
>>25882951
oh I never realized that this was the same author that did that male frillish and kirla story.
>>25883709
Hopefully I can get some more oneshots out soon. I've been chipping away at a bunch of other things, but nothing is finished or worthy of upload.
Also >>25882187
See >>25882951
Attention is the one
>>25884828
Ah damn, already seen these. Well thanks for the help anyway
Wrote a test run situation, mostly just trying to get a feel for writing again. It isn't perfect, so any criticism's great.
http://pastebin.com/HfZJ5eAZ
>>25876814
Almost always
It greases my brain so that the complex flow of a paragraph might run smoother, it helps me create imagery that feels better than if I was writing raw and in silence, and it's ultimately a more pleasant experience to enjoy two mediums at once. Though I don't necessarily NEED the correct music to stimulate a mood and just need a melody, but if it's a serious enough section then I ain't going to be fucking listening to a drastically contrasting album.
>>25876814
Music tends to distract me, so I generally listen to asmr while writing instead. Bonus points for no speaking/foreign language.
>>25876814
Mostly just listening to Trails of Cold Steel's soundtrack.
Seems like poor Wally can't get a break from being a victim because of his condition, and fell to the bullying hands of Team Aqua. A three parter from that one guy that did oodles work. Two of three parts completed so far before thread 404'd (honestly it was a miracle that it lasted so long). Most likely NSFW.
http://pastebin.com/WXWa8ivw (1)
http://pastebin.com/SVgkpvhU (2)
He may probably do more after he's done.
>>25885877
I think you might be laying it a bit too soon with the speaker in line 6. At least put the more violent description of his voice after he talks.
Otherwise I don't see much else wrong with the snippet.
>>25887733
what kind of health condition does wally suffer from anyway? Was it ever explained in the games? I don't recall much detail about it...only that he got better because of Pokemon
>>25888067
"His illness is never explained, but his symptoms appear to clear up in clean air, suggesting that it is either acute bronchitis or asthma."
So says Bulbapedia. No clue how accurate this is.
On an entirely unrelated note, I'm having trouble naming a case wherein a suspect and his Pokemon (singular or plural) are leaving a wake of disemboweled, bisected, or otherwise mangled corpses in their wake. Any ideas?
>>25888108
mince meat murderers, just like out of Parasyte.
Jokes aside, Corpse Sampler might work if they take something from the body each time. You can also try incorporating the suspect's pokemon type to affect the name.
>>25888067
There's enough wrong for me to fill the 2000 character limit, but I refrain because when people pre-excuse themselves (in this case, "just trying to get a feel for writing again") I anticipate my efforts would be met with a post-excuse and thus dismissed.
>>25888108
Call it Case #25888108.
>>25888067
>>25888108
In the manga he has to wear a special breathing mask and vest, so it's most likely that.
>>25888147
Might be good. I'm still cooking up motives and wondering if I want the Aegislash he has to be an influencing factor.
>>25888161
(abc)(jkl)(tuv)(tuv)(tuv)(_)(oper)(tuv)
For fuck's sake cge, what is this mess right here, I'm gonna be trying to crack this forever.Unless I was supposed to take it as "the case name is unimportant" in which case, yeah, that might be a good way for it too.
>>25888248
:)
>>25888370
FUCK, YOU CRAZY SON OF A BITCH
Since the bully thread's down, I figured, I'd post this here. Elesa gets bullied by Hilda and Servine.
http://pastebin.com/ybMe6CSh
>>25889048
...this should serve as a reminder to always have prize money on hand, especially a gym bade if you're a leader.Honestly I thought the gummed up hair would've been torn off trying to get the gum out
>>25889048
>puns
She deserves everything she gets for making them
>>25862885in this world, it's LOVE or be LOVED
>>25882199
oh hey you're he guy that did those gift of the protector series in the past.
I've been meaning to ask: why did you split your story into so many different fics? Do they all revolve around the same cast or does it differ every volume?
Any stories with interesting (original) villain teams, or any 10/10 villains in their own rights? Favourite original antagonists?
>>25892558
The main reason I did that was to avoid some chronological discrepancies throughout the fiction. Writing side chapters gave me the freedom to put the cast in a different light which might not make as much sense if thrown in to the main three arcs. The side chapters are all part of the same series published under that pen name, and there's no crossovers with my other fictions, so they exist in a self-contained universe. My original vision for those side chapters was to have them be anecdotes. Specifically, not in conflict with the main story, but expand upon a few themes that would be additional embellishments developing the characters. This would, in my belief, solve the problem of not always finding a proper place in the main story, but I may have misjudged this if you are finding them to be a confusing part of my series.
>>25893457
I think there's a fic in the catalog that revolves around hunter J's comeback, with her doing more evily developed things
>>25893860
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10416023/1/Blood-In-Blood-Out
this one, right?
>>25889048any more coming soon?
>>25895134
will probably depend how busy he is, much like any other writer that does it for free here.
>>25895134
>>25896305
I'm writing more right now.
bump
If you need to create a backstory for your fics, how much detail do you guys go into for it?
>>25898667
sometimes I end up creating a lot of backstory for a character/setting, only for a small fraction to be present in the full version.
Depending on where/when you add backstory will depend on the pacing of the fic probably. Life changing events for individual characters would probably get great detail, while details about wars often get the short end of the stick (especially at the start of a fic), only being revealed in more detail over time
>>25898667
I imagine a broad sketch of the backstory, but I leave things vague when they don't need to be specific. Primarily, because if they don't need to be specific, then going on a detour to detail them would be TELLING, and secondarily, because that lets me color in the sketch however I please at a later date.
Actual Spoiler:Eternally Vernal is doing just that, as Gates is a character who appeared only once and was mentioned by name once and three times in passing until I wrote this story. Had I carved in stone his backstory back then, this story would never have happened.Perhaps that would've been better…
>>25899061
>spoiler
Shut up faggot, I'm already in love with Gates and his ragtag band of bed-stealing pets. Your writing influences, I'm sure, a great many of us in this thread. I'm glad you've shared your most recent story with the world.
>>25898667
Taking from my experience DMing, I write out backstory into a separate document for whatever I feel will need it. It is usually as in-depth as I feel like making it and then I incorporate it into the story as it demands.
>>25899118
>bed-stealing
I'm doing last minute revisions to Chapter 3, and I happen to be right now on yet another scene involving things happening on that bed.
>pets
I hope that is a turn of phrase because one of my objectives was to portray Gates' pokemon as working animals as a contrast against the family/pet positioning that is common to both canon and much of my previous writing.Specifically, he treats the dogs as working animals but they treat him in a familial fashion, while Gates is drawn into seeing Warden in a familial light yet he looks to Gates as a pure authority/role-model. And I will say no more here because the rest is in the story; despite all the fun stuff like bacon and berries and brawling and bedding and blasting and bantering and butting, the whole drama of Eternally Vernal is about a network of these and other relationship dynamics.
Is there such a thing as good pokemon femslash?
>>25899577
There is only one possibility.Agatha/Day-Care Granny.
>>25899458
>pets
I was mostly just teasing. I have noticed that they all seem to have different ideas of where they stand in their relationships than where their relationships see them.
Anyway, here's a general question: How have you all incorporated your real-life experiences into your stories? Any copy-and-paste scenarios? Any super risky strong opinions thrown in?One of my antagonists in an original work is literally a prostitute I saw on the street when I was younger. I wonder where she is now.
>>25899577
>pokemon femslash
Elaborate
>>25901245
Like Elesa and Skyla
>>25901676
oh. Probably, but you'll have to wad through the turd that is of FFN's load of fics.
I think the catalog has some too, but might be limited.
It's been two years since I've been here. Has anyone written a smutfic with Diantha or Drasna/Calem?
>>25903333
nope and nadda. Someone tried doing something with Drasna/Calem a while back, but then went ghost mode.
>>25899703
Why would you p
>>25903704
-ost thatI don't know what happened, I think I hit some hotkey by mistake
>>25903333
>two years
That's a lot of lurking
The thrilling 4-Part epic of my story on Wally getting bullied, mostly by the hands of Shelly fromTeam Aqua. A bit on the lewd side, especially Part 4. Enjoy.
Pt 1- http://pastebin.com/WXWa8ivw
Pt 2- http://pastebin.com/SVgkpvhU
Pt 3- http://pastebin.com/tyvY0gt5
Pt 4- http://pastebin.com/re9kWttp
>>25905486
>3 parts turned into 4
guess you really like teasing wally huh?I don't mean to pester, but how goes the process of part 3 of pic related?
>>25905530
Getting there. I'm not really quite as into it, sadly. Still writing the second rape scene in the hotel room.
>>25905555
Wasted quads.
>>25905555
Quads wasted
>>25905560
>>25905607
Apologies, I wasn't even paying attention to my digits.
>>25904254
>>25903372
Damn. And yeah, it's been a while. I stopped coming here a bit before ORAS' release. Might start coming back due to SuMo.
>>25905486
part 4 on the lewd side is not the right word. At this point it would also containguro.
Seeing someone snap for revenge always brings a smile to me. Maybe I'm a sadist now. Thanks I guess.
>>25905560
>>25905607
>yfw bullies always steal the numbers
>>25905486
>all those low blows
It's like no one plays fair these days
I wonder, do fics ever get leaked to the public?
>>25905486
All this violent bullying is making me depressed. How about you do something similar like the Leavanny piece to lighten things up once you're done bullying those trainers?
Ooh I know!
A trainer's Aromatissee watches news talking about how smelly her species is, making her insecure around her trainer. Said trainer has no sense of personal space, so each hug n cuddle bothers her greatly, especially deep breaths. Trainer eventually gets annoyed at her squirmish behavior and asks what's up, only for news to come on again about the pungent odor. He shoves Aromatisse down in surprise, buries hs face into herbumand takes the strongest inhale/smell possible, reassuring her that there's nothing wrong with her scentthough she does have a fat ass
>>25908615
Ooh, I like this one, thanks. If I have time I'll start it once I finish Beauty part 3.
>>25908615
>butt stuff
Impure
>>25909388
>Implying the butt isn't the strongest scent point on Aromatisse, the source of its wonderful odor.
>>25908021
What do you mean? Like stuff that's posted here? Because a fair bit of bit ends up on sites like ff and ao3 because authors post them there.
>>25908615
What the fuck happened
How did we get here
>>25909452
referring to fics in general, whether fan made or actual fiction, where sections/chapters get 'leaked' earlier than their release date outside of previews.
>>25909473
If you have a beta reader then it is a possibility, but most of the people willing to help you edit your story are beyond cool for taking the time of day to lend a hand and would not actually do that.
>>25909473
Given that people write into google docs, pastebins and word processors on their computers, no I don't think leaked stories are a thing unless you somehow mange to get a copy of the doc link or word file.
But anythings possible I suppose. We're you hoping for some kind of leak, anon?
>mfw people want to read fics that aren't yet ready for consumption
>>25909532
just thought that it was an amusing thought, considering the state of /vp/ and their corocoro leaks (reee, etc etc)
>>25909599
It's not so much that I want them before they're done, moreso that I want them to be done faster than the author can make them done.
...huh, that's sort of selfish, now that I lay it out like that, huh?
>>25909621
Just a little bit. Writing chapters takes time. I can barely write out 10k a week and that doesn't even account for the profuse amount of time spent editing.
>>25909621
Nobody wants the work to become completed sooner than does the author.
This applies in all cases.
>>25909607
It'd be an amusing event anyway.
Then again I'd hate for my shit to get leaked because that'd be mortifying. Reminds me of all the college papers I proofread for people.
hey, nsfw writer here. I feel like making something completely work safe, cute and not lewd at all. What should I consider?
>>25909868
here's one from the ideabin that can work if you're taking ideas.
A day in the life of Korrina's Lucario, and his futile attempts to get his trainer to notice him.
>No good deed goes unpunished.
Eternally Vernal, Chapter 3: Tunnel Visions
http://archiveofourown.org/works/6400045/chapters/14934724
>>25909599WHERE ARE THE LEAKS!?
>>25909868Yellow cuddling with Red
Where do you guys organize your story notes, if you do at all?what do you think of WorkFlowy?
>>25913446
I keep them all in pastebins and word documents. Some are more filled than others, if 10kb is anything to compare to 30kb.
>WorkFlowy
never heard of it.
>>25913522
Basically, it's a notetaking service where you can collapse items that are under bullets. It could be useful if you're making a timeline or something similar.
>>25913446
They sit here on my desktop until I decide to file them away in my FF folder.
>tfw the text document for your novel sits on your desktop mocking you day after day
>>25913779
>not filing away in the proper folder from the start
I kinda like Cloudy Gemstones. There are some spelling errors and other things like characters occasionally saying "Arceus damn it" that I find pretty dumb but otherwise it's alright.
So I am writing a fanfic about my original characters. Here is the basic concept, tell me what you think and maybe I will post some more (")^o^(")
Princess Felicity is the princes of her Kunoichi ninja tribe. She has pink and silver ombre hair, one green eye and one blue eye, likes to wear kimonos and eat bentos and ramen. Her Kunoichi tibe is trying to hide her because she can read the thoughts of pokemon and her power could be used to control every pokemon on earth. She has a special pink Gardevoir and she can also transform into a Gardevoir and they are known as the Gardevoir sisters. Princess Felicity had an evil entity put into her as a baby which is actually the source of her power. So sometimes when she transforms into a Gardevoir and mega evolves she looks like a shiny Gardevoir with a black kimono and that is her evil half showing. She is being hunted by team shadow that wants to use her powers of pokemon telepathy and control to control all pokemon on earth.
She ends up meeting Dan and Braixen trainer. Dan has brown hair, brown eyes, likes anime and manga and speaking Japanese. Dan wants to help princess Felicity get away from team shadow but he doesn't know about her powers or dark side or ability to transform into a gardevoir. Dan's braixen is in love with Dan and princess Felicity knows this because she can read pokemon thoughts but she doesn't want to tell Dan because she also thinks she likes him and this is a major source of plot in the stores.
So my fanfic is full of action and drama but also comedy like when someone says something funny and everyone yells baka. I am currently writing how Dan and Felicity met and up until their first fight with team Shadow. Felicity isn't sure how she feels about Dan until after he saves her from team Shadow but don't worry their relationship will be shown more in later posts. Also there might be some M/F and M/FPoke and M/F/FPoke NSFW stuff if you guys want.
>>25915692
It's...meh. There's quite a bit of media/fics out there already that allows for transformation to dark/evil sides, and most that do tend to fail to capture the interest of the audience long enough to keep them reading (saturation). I'm not sure if a love triangle action/drama is enough to keep things interesting throughout the story.
At the very least you do have a clear idea of what you want to do. The big issue is whether it can be executed properly without relying on excess tell instead of show.
>>25915500
>tfw used Arceus in place of God once so far and it was hard to swallow
It sounds goofy as fuck so I avoid using it when I can but, I dunno, it makes sense doesn't it?
>>25915945
I think it does make sense but it just doesn't roll off the tongue.
Personally I would just use God in place of Arceus. Sounds better.
>>25915692
gr8 b8 m8
>>25915692
Every fanfic trope.
Into a blender they went.
Quite a toxic brew.
>>25916133
I want to but the angry little man in my head is shouting at me about "using the right word if it's there" and he's being really insistent.
Maybe in the next series.
>>25915692
>animu tropes
>english names
Errytime
>>25915945
I don't think it makes sense at all. God is a word. He has an actual name that many people use, but as a sign of respect the majority refer to him simply with the noun, indicating that he is of the highest order. The same can easily be applied to Arceus.
Bullyfag, here, just finished Aromatisse. I really had fun writing this one. Not lewd in the slightest, just harmless fun.
http://pastebin.com/Nf4v2fCa
Also, finished Beauty's Booty Part Trois. I don't think it's really my best work, but I tried my best writing it to the requesters specifications. It was difficult for me to justify her wanting him to see her again later that night, but I did as good with it as I could. Very lewd and rapey.
http://pastebin.com/B1KywNew
>>25917479
>tfw she was possibly playing him like a damn fiddle all those previous parts.
Interesting bait and switch if I say so myself. In hindsight I may have been too specific and not given you a lot to work it. However, this still turned out to be a pretty nice readdespite the backfiring. Thank you so much bullyanon.Here's to hoping that you find your job.
>>25917479
Damn that aromatissee one came out a lot more cuter than I though. Glad you had fun!
>>25917479
I might not like bullyfics much, but if you're taking requests, there's a character that's in dire need of a fic in general, even if she's on the receiving end.
Either during or after the main game events, Brendan has been dating Courtney (ORAS), but she has retained that annoying speech pattern/behavior of hers, so he takes matter into his own hands to get her to talk/react properly. Use a mixture of both lewd and mean tactics, but whether he succeeds or just makes her cry is up to you. Either way, he should have fun teasing her.
>>25915692
>>25915692
Okay, I read all of that. I only have one question. Why is the Gardevoir (and sister) pink?
>>25919204
How is _that_ the only question you have after reading that soup of tropes and cliches?
>>25919271
Everything else planned seemed very spelled out in the description. Besides, isn't shiny form supposed to be blue?
>>25919525
Anon, you don't understand, I think that entire post was just one big shitpost.
Yes, the shiny version of Gardevoir is blue, but special snowflake pokemon are associated with being any color other than standard or shiny.
>>25917872
Thanks! I think I have a job lined up now, it was a lot easier getting one than I thought it would be, just waiting for my references to get through.
>>25918215
I never played Ruby version, but I looked up her lines and her bit is talking like a robot, right? I can do that. I can work with messing with her over talking like a robot.
>>25919860
ORAS version specifically has her talking funny iirc
The protagonist's local mart is having supply issues. It turns out that someone's taken the shipment of Potions/Revives, but (weirdly) left everything else. As the story unravels, a mystic cult is behind this and plans to create a new type of Revive that can awaken the dead.
Any thoughts?
>>25920558
Who's the protagonist?
>>25920635
A treasure hunter, except he's never actually found anything other than discarded trash. Which is also a running joke/theme throughout -- although I'm still on the skeletal "what-if" stage of everything. Just wondered if the concept sounded interesting.
>>25920737
It sounds like a pretty cool premise. You should include a twist where the finished occult product can only revivemuses.
But on a serious note, it would definitely be interesting. Is the occult sinister in nature, sinister looking but actually okay, or just super secretive?
>>25920788kek
A mixture of the first and the last. I don't want them going around proclaiming themselves to everyone through rallies or public activities, and I definitely don't want to reuse the whole "villain team sets out to capture/harness the power of the regional legendary for ____". They'd take people in secret, immolate/purge their souls with Chandelure flame, that sort of thing. Known, but never spoken of.I had an idea before with this, but I kind of want the leader to be a Ditto exposed to human DNA whose mind slowly degenerates
>>25919860
http://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Magma_Admin_Courtney
Some dialogue sample under the section for Omega Ruby, if this helps
>>25920920
It certainly sounds like a pretty neat idea for a story. Make for a good suspense story I'd think.
What's the crazy Ditto-Man and his merry band of cultists trying to revive?
>>25920984
Thanks, man.
Honestly I'm not too sure at this point. Any ideas/contributions would be welcome, though. I'm thinking along the lines ofthe remains of neglected, failed Ditto experiments.
>>25921030
That could work well, yeah. Even lets you go the mild horror route if your protag ends up wherever they're keeping all those failed experiments.
Ditto's a pretty cool dude given how much you can shape it to a variety of genres.Bah dum tish. I am the smartest, most original man alive.
>>25921051
OHO. OHOHO. You JOKER.
And the protagonist walks away with the greatest treasure in the world --life :^)
Final confrontation with Ditto-Man could be his body statically mutating into six different Pokémon, giving the illusion of a full-team battle.
>>25921072
Sounds like a pretty neat way to end it. Go for bonus points and make him speak in a tortured, horrifically discordant voice the entire time to really drive the whole "abomination" motif home and engender maximum disgust and pity in the reader. To date one of the strangest combinations you can experience in text, I think.
On a completely unrelated note to anyone that wants to answer my degenerate question: I have made Kanto exceedingly conservative concerning Pokefucking because it just seemed to fit and put Sinnoh on the cusp of legalizing marriage between man and mon because of the region's history.
Is this a stretch? Well, a bigger stretch than it already is? For the record I made Hoenn lean more towards Sinnoh (given a large number of Sinnoh tourists in the region) and made Johto the abused younger brother of Kanto that listens to him but also doesn't really want to because he just wants to be left alone.
It's bad enough that Kanto is going to bar tourists from Sinnoh.
Unova and Kalos don't really give a shit.Kalos has the underground network of brothels I detailed in Maison though.
>>25921111
If Sinnoh's justification is spirituality-based, Kanto being the least poképhilia-tolerant region could make sense. Kanto doesn't have any native legendaries beyond the elemental birds, which just kind of exist and don't have any pseudoreligious lore attached to them; as such, there wouldn't be as much of a basis for present-day spirituality (and specific values attached to it) the way it may appear in regions where legendaries are said to have world-shaping powers.
>>25921245
Hrm. Alright, thanks, that's an excellently reasoned explanation. 'Preciate it anon.
>>25921111
>Unova and Kalos don't really give a shit
Somehow I feel like the murrka region would be a little more self-righteous about man's elevation over beast. Kalos probably wouldn't care, though.
>>25921111
Kalos needs to have a running joke among trainers that the only way to achieve the "bond" requirement of mega evolution is to bang the pokemon. It would be a tradition for veteran trainers trick beginners into believing it.
>>25921111
Truth quads finally defeat the Taxmaster.
Three quads, all odds; a message from the gods?
>>25923161
You've got a point about Unova, I think I'll mention that.
>>25923345
This is perfect. I'm definitely using this.
Hello, I'm trying to balance schoolwork and writing.
Do you have any tips on how to balance time at a computer accordingly? Personally I notice that after studying for several hours I generate a lot of ideas in the back of my mind, and then I'm too tired to write after the HW. It's a shame.
>>25925254
>too tired
Too tired as in you actually go to bed and sleep till morning or too tired as in you sit before a screen and watch TV/Internet shit for a while?
In the latter case, take a half-hour nap instead and see if you can get something done upon waking. It's probably just fatigue.
>>25925599
Okay that is worth a try. Last time I took a nap, I came up with a good idea for a chapter that had me stumped.
>>25925254
Why dont you record your study sessions so when something pops into your head you can blurt it out right then instead of trying to write it later when you're too exhausted.
>>25926402
Great suggestion, anon. Not a fan of alt-tabbing to write ideas down quickly, but makes a ton of sense. Will try it tonight.
>>25926402
>>25926448
In my day we used little tape recorders. You probably can do it with a phone, now.
>>25926592
I was thinking about using a speech to text program with a mic actually. If I just record my voice I still have to type it out later, no? As long as I have something written down, I'll make an effort to improve upon it. That's why pic related is my nemesis.
>>25926755
There should be some softwares out there that can write as you speak, but you will ofc need to edit them later on to clean up the errors and such.
>>25926755
>pic related is my nemesis.
tfw
Why so many haters? I don't care here is Chapter 1 (@<>@ ) of my OC
The Gardevoir sisters
Princes Felicity and Gardevoir are alone in a forest eating bento boxes.
"Itadakimasu!" Felicity exclaimed, "Watashi daisukis bento boxes (authors note: this is japanese for I love bento boxes) . "Thank you for making this for me Gardevoir." Reading Gardevoirs mind Princes Felicity knew Gardevoir was happy that Princes felicity enjoyed the bento box.
*snap* "Was that chopsticks?" Felicity thought but no, it wasn't. She realized she was surrounded by team shadow members.
"Your coming with us." exclaimed a team shadow grunt as he threw a pokeball with a woobat inside. "Oh no, it is team shadow." Felicity exclaimed. Gardevoir jumped up to protect Felicity. "Why are you after me!" exclaimed Felicity. "We are going to use your power to communicate with pokemon and amplify it off of the moon to cast an Infinite Tsukuyomi which will control all the pokemon and people of the world." exclaimed the team shadow grunt.
"Well I may be a princes but I am also a kunochi and I am not afraid to fight you." Exclaimed Felicity with her hand over her heart. And after exclaiming that she began transforming into a pink gardevoir. "Now you will see the power of the legendary Gardevoir sisters." exclaimed Felicity.
The other team shadow members threw their pokeballs "Go Woobat/Swoobat!" they exclaimed.
Using her telepathy Princes Felicity told Gardevoir to use moonblast which they did in perfect unison as sparkles glittered around them. Some of the woobats and swoobats were hit but they came back to the fight. "Haha." exclaimed the team shadow grunt "we knew you would use your power to turn into a gardevoir and that is why have a plan."
"Woobat/Swoobat use psychoshift!" The team shadow members exclaimed! The power of all the woobat and swoobat combined psychoshift unleashed princes Felicity's dark side and she turned black from her usual pink.
Find out what happens next time.
>>25927182
What happens next?
>>25927031
>There should be some softwares out there that can write as you speak
There have been for twenty years. Yes, there will be editing if you want to speak your fics, but there's always editing anyway. For taking notes to text, though, who cares?>tfw no off-the-shelf equivalent to Dragon for Linux; just people who point at half-finished projects that kinda work in limited ways.
>>25927182
>"Chapter 1"
>Only 300 words.
>These particular words in this order.
>mfw
Meanwhile…
>Why so many haters?
It's not hate, but suspicion. Judging what you have posted here, either you are completely inexperienced as a writer and likely under-age, or you are trolling us by pretending to be.
I wish you a fun time writing your story. You clearly have a vibrant vision in your imagination. But I caution you that you are not likely to find much praise for technical merit if that is what you seek. Were I your editor, I would remark that of about two dozen sentences here, these are the only two that do not want for correction:
>Gardevoir jumped up to protect Felicity.
>Some of the woobats and swoobats were hit but they came back to the fight.
Although your writing is mostly intelligible, poorly-crafted writing repels readers, and expertly-crafted writing means every tittle correctly selected and properly placed in addition to grammatical precision and discerning choices of word and phrase.
My suggestion is that you focus on writing the whole story. Completing a story, alone, will put your progress beyond that of many aspiring authors.
Don't stop to ask the Internet for feedback, at least until you have a few thousand words to present; just keep writing. Once you finish it, you'll have enough experience to decide if you want to do the hard work of learning to write expertly. If not, that's okay; you don't need to write properly to enjoy the hobby. But if you want to give stories to the people of the world, you must be prepared to receive a lot of criticism and to respond to it by becoming better at writing, not by accusing them of being "haters" without first considering their perspective, because when you push your audience away with derision, they will leave you alone, and if your goal is to be alone with your story, then there is no use in posting it online. Going public with your writing is a step into the wilderness; take that step, but take it knowingly.
>>25926755
Sounds like your ownlack of disciplineis your nemesis
>>25927182
This is the best story here, I don't know what these faggots are talking about
Also
>tsukuyomi
You lose one point, a real weeb would have used the more obvious tsukiyomi "because soo-kee is moon in glorious nee-hawn X3"
>>25928357
You have a valid point. When I have something written down it moves me forward. The blank document, by its very nature, becomes just an excuse to not produce. A poor one, but an excuse nevertheless.
I actually keep the last chapter I worked on up by copying it into the new document and then writing from there. After that, I delete the preceding chapter that I duplicated. I'm fucking weird.
>>25927784
>people who point at half-finished projects that kinda work in limited ways
That's Linux in general; you should have known that going in.
>>25911967
it wasnothing
>>25917479
hey, is it okay if i can still sneak in and request something?
>>25928513
No I understand. I produce much more easily by doing it while I'm supposed to be doing something else (paying attention to the class, etc). If there's something generally "boring" going on around me, I write a ton of stuff lightning fast. Otherwise, my rate of production is meh at best.
>vpwt isn't doling out good lewds
>authors are dying out in the creativity pool
>the authors with works behind them that remain unread are running outwhy live?
>>25930435
As far as I can see, production is fine, people just don't seem to want to be producing lewds all that much.
>>25930435
Why have lewds when you can havedrama and suffering?
>>25930467
Well besides here I suppose.
>>25930550
>drama and suffering
>this pleases him
Go back to watching television. Some soaps and novellas are still up.
>>25930550
>drama and suffering
You have my attention. Whatcha writing/reading, anon?
>>25930435
>authors are dying out in the creativity pool
Isn't writing like the easiest shit to do? How are they dying out?
>>25929893
Sure, if it's something I like I'll do it. I specialize in bully stories. What idea did you have in mind?
Working on Courtney and Brendan right now.
>>25930842
not that guy, but I'd like to see Malva getting knocked down a peg by Calem.In X/Y she is an arrogant news broadcaster and elite four member that was a team flare member.Possibly blackmail to doing humiliating things for him, possibly even in public (groping, acting like a couple, something embarrasing taking place during live broadcast, just to name a few)?
I dislike arrogant trainers.
I'm hopping on the bully train. Here's one called Meloetta's Concert.
http://pastebin.com/QhqzG9DG
>>25930766
>isn't writing like the easiest shit to do
See you'd think that, and you'd be half-right. Good writing though, ah, there's the rub.
>>25930996
10/10 propoganda ending.You might wanna add a little warning or something if the fic would contain something like that
>>25930996
I haven't read such a fine ending in a long while.
However only one gripe:
>tomato
>vegetable
wut?
>>25930572
I do nigga. Asian dramas all day. The more beautiful women die, the higher the ratings.
>>25930600
I can't seem to write anything unless the MC is horribly traumatized in some way.In one story a girl trades her innocence for her Gardevoir's safety, in another the MC uses her trainer license to run away from her shitty DCF-appointed home, in another a lonely housewife has only her Gallade to depend on and they commit double suicide, the list goes on and on
>>25932109
I'm seeing a lot of a certain family of Pokemon here.
>>25931248
>>25931372
I probably should have warned about that ending. I'll be a bit more careful about it next time I write want to do something like that. Anyway, thanks for reading!
early/late idea time!
>end of hgss
>Lyra convinces Silver to move to the starting town
>He accepts because otherwise he'd get arrested for stealing his starter
>Apologizes to Elm, Elm asks to see the pokemon
>Elm is amazed at how the pokemon has grown
>Asks Silver to help him with his research
>Silver slowly warms up to Elm
>He finally has a positive male role model in his life
>At the very end, Silver has a bad cold
>delirious, half asleep mutters "I love you, dad" while elm is sitting by him
>Elm tears up and smiles, saying "I love you too, son"
>>25932602
are you okay my man
do you need a hug
>>25932602
b-but what about Giovanni?
>>25932114
I can't help the appeal
>>25932602
Write it
>>25930766
>Isn't writing like the easiest shit to do?
Same can be said for art. Both got their own techniques n shit, so difficulty will vary from writer to writer, but to say it's easy might not be the right word
>>25932736
Of course i'm not okay, this is /vp/ after all
>>25933157
Giovanni is the reason silver acts like he does, he's the epitome of bad fathers
>>25933320
as soon as i stop being a lazy fuck and go somewhere with a computer
>>25932602
I'd read it. Silver attracts a lot of stories driven by his initial role as the player's antagonist in GSC, not to mention his ties with TR makes him bait for projecting edgy concepts, so seeing a sensitive side would be interesting for a change.
>>25934812
>go somewhere with a computer
Hat what the fuck happened
>>25935081
My comp got rekt, been stuck with my phone.
I'm pretty close to a computer library sorta place if i wanted to actually get off my ass and be productive
Any good Hurt/Comfort sorta fics? Much like warming up on a cold winter day, I've always felt that fluff is much nicer and more meaningful after a bit of sad stuff.
>>25935278
a look around in my bookmarks fished up an old tale of comforting a Ledian after she lost a bnch of battles, if that's your kind of thing.
http://pastebin.com/FnBcWN1F
>>25935250
Oh okay. Maybe I mistook you for some other guy from the irc that tossed himself onto the mean streets for some reason related to mental health
>>25936096
well, mental health slightly related to my comp getting rekt, and i did end up in a mental hospital for 84 days, but i'm not homelessyet
>>25936316
H-hat? You okay man?
>>25856186flowey was never god of hyperdeath
flowey is to asriel like darth vader to anakin. technically the same, but not quite
>>25936924
drama happens I guess.
>>25932109
total drama confirmed
>>25934888
Why does everyone write Silver as either a villain or a bitch? He's a dick and an ambitious trainer who learns to not be a dick to his pokemon by the end of the game. I always appreciated that he was one of the only characters in any of the games to show any real growth, so it's weird to see how many stories including him completely ignore the direction of that growth.
>>25939067
I always imagined things went down like this:
>Silver gets busted by you, the player, when you inform the police about him stealing Prof. Elm's Pokemon.
>He's already accepted that he can resort to crimes in order to satisfy his ambitions to become a strong trainer.
>This would be related to his issues with his father being the leader of a group of criminals.
>Eventually he sees himself getting beat up over and over by you of all people, the faggot who turned him in.
>The journey eventually shapes him, I like to think he's living a life running from the law during this time.
>Discovers this is getting him nowhere in the world.
>Inadvertently follows in his father's shoes who tried to disband TR.
>I always imagine a positive ending where both those characters end up learning from their failures.
I'm just an anonymous poster on the internet.pic unrelated
>>25930842
im actually that guy (went to sleep, sorry), and i'll just put things in a pastebin to avoid clogging the thread:
http://pastebin.com/cmdQ04qN
thank you for hearing me out, let me know if this is dumb
>>25940083
I don't really do pokemon bullying people, I don't like that stuff. The closest thing I'll do to that is one trainer bullying another using their pokemon as tools for it (like telling your corphish to use crabhammer on your victim's balls or something). Generally I like to write about humans being the dominant one in the relationship.
As far as pokemon talking, I guess it depends. Usually I say they make animal-like noises, like grunting, squealing, squeaking, etc. I suppose something with very strong telepathy like Alakazam could telepathically talk, though. I don't really follow the anime (just na episode here and there), but do Zoroark talk in the anime? I know that one Meowth can talk, but I think he's a special one-in-a-million case or something.
Either way, pokemon bullying people isn't really my thing. Now, if it was reversed, where the meek Zoroark admitted to having a human fetish to its large-breasted/macho-manly trainer, that's something I could work with.
>>25940304
ok. i get it.
i'd be happy with that. thank you!
>>25940304
>do Zoroark talk in the anime?
Anime: A zoroark that lived in a (now-defunct) pokecenter speaks while disguised as a Joy.
Game: A zoroark appears in BW and BW2 as a backpacker who lays some philosophical shit on the player. Another zoroark and a zorua also appear disguised as humans but refuse to talk, implying that talking zoroark acquired the ability by socializing with humans.
>>25940447
Would you rather have a meek male zoroark with a female trainer or a meek female zoroark with a male trainer?I like to keep my stories hetero. Gay/lesbian shit aint my bag either.
>>25940461
>implying that talking zoroark acquired the ability by socializing with humans.
I want a fic about this. That sounds super cool.I just played through both BW and BW2 recently and I don't remember them at all. I remember an NPC in B2 -mentioning- the talking Zoroark, but I don't recall ever seeing it. What gives?
>>25940529
ACTUAL SPOILER don't look at this if you don't want to be spoiled.A socialized zoroark who learned to speak the hard way is currently on the possible characters list of my next work-in-progress.
In BW, you meet him when you approach the trailer in the woods. In BW2, the same place but the field is different. In both games, he's one of the few NPCs that walk away after talking, and in BW2 he drops the illusion before stepping off screen.
I wrote this today. It's a fluffy story about one man and his love for Kyurem.
http://pastebin.com/g2TWjz4n
>>25930842
I think I get something of a sadistic enjoyment out of most of these stories, I suppose I like the ones where the Pokemon acts all haughty and dignified and the trainer slowly strips that all away from them, or when they're in denial about their trainers being cruel and try to rationalize what happens to them. One thing I think would be amusing is a trainer taking care of a whole team of cute/elegant pokemon (Milotic/Delcatty/Wigglytuff etc) and for seemingly no apparent reason starts treating one of them like crap while continuing to pamper the others. Maybe the trainer manages to convince their other Pokemon that this one Pokemon deserves it even though they have no idea why, and this abuse gradually escalates to the point it starts having an emotional meltdown.
I dunno, it might work as a starting point.
>>25940753
pastebin it
>>25939067
You ever read this one-shot about Silver and his Crobat? I think it shows that growth quite well.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/7232566/1/Fidelity
