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Name 7 cyoas with actual lore.
>>47608839
Define "actual lore".
>>47608839
Ordion anon usually posts his CYOA with some lore.
>>47608839
The Game of Aliceforbidden lore
>>47608839
>implying any CYOA named in response will be found to have "actual lore" as opposed to "fake, stupid, lewd lore".
Also, Accidental Magical Girl.
>>47608847
I looked this shit up.
Accumulated knowledge or beliefs held by a group about a subject, especially when passed from generation to generation by oral tradition. See Synonyms at knowledge.
So anon wants a CYOA that imparts him with the wisdom of his forefathers.
>>47608925
Someone post Viking Rape CYOA then.
>>47608839
Princess Revival
Traveler
Conduit
Hunter CYOA
Kingdom Diplomacy
Royal Guardian
If...
Space Opera Refugee
>>47608931
Here ya go
>>47608945
this .>>47608839
Princess Revival
Traveler
Conduit
Hunter CYOA
Kingdom Diplomacy
Royal Guardian
Space Opera Refugee
The arrival though, that's pretty damn good if you want to be a prince.
another change
currently working on the equipment page
and i do appreciate if y'all point out the typo and grammatical error. any criticism is a fine too
>>47608839
Royal Revival
Hunter
Royal Guardian
Kingdom Crusher
A lot of Liminal's stuff
Grand Hunt
Stardust
I think these all handle fluff really well in different ways. Like, those first four are just variations on 'you get powers in medieval fantasy world' but they all manage to have a distinct feel to them, and they fit a lot of worldbuilding into a limited space without just resorting to some sort of big infodump section.
Just setting things in the real world is a good alternative, too. Both versions of Spellbook made it work well.
>>47608981
it's not critic, nor a request, i just want to say that i like immortal cyoa. That's it. (out of topic but your CYOA is great keep it up! (hopefuly there's a healing power though nvm) God bless! )
>>47608945
>If....
Unfamiliar with that one do you have it?
>>47609010
If....only i had it, but i don't
>>47609010
Yea, here.
>>47609009
thanks anon, maybe i'll try to make an immortal cyoa if i can.
>>47609034
What the hell is that thumbnail, is that jist my phone being retdarded? Anyway, page 2
>>47608973
This is hilarious, but also painful to read through, and confusing as hell.
>>47609049
Fotgot to mention Rapture Academy as well. Any male focused cyoas?
>>47609034
yeah, something's fucked up with that page.
I can open it in a new tab, but it looks tiny.
>>47608977
>>47609006
Add-on:
Pokemon Personified
Great War of Ordion
Armored Core
Raptue Academy
>>47608973
Sry, captcha timed out or baka
>>47609049
>All your companions are memories.
>All of them are most likely dead.
>You can't save anybody.
>All of them had shit lives.
Fuck this shit.
>>47608839
But anon you haven't started making any of the seven cyoas yet.
Things you like in CYOAs or want to see more of?
>Environments
>Detailed food and drink choices
>More focus on world and self and less about companions
>Potion making
My struggle with balance continues. I finally got myself to fix this thing. Consider this a some sort of a WIP of an update. If you have a complaint about something, please put in a suggestion on how to fix what you didn’t like, this will make things easier. I know I shouldn’t turn rebalancing into a collective effort, but don’t we all want good CYOAs here? I certainly don’t want people to keep throwing shit on my non-existing name because of this CYOA being unplayable.
Changelog:
1. There now is a nice little “Update Bet” inscription in the upper left corner.
2. Because of many, many complaints about this one phrase in the end of Hero path, I was forced to change it, put away my fedora and wear a smaller one instead.
3. You now have 8 points to spend instead of 5.
4. You are no longer limited in number of powers you can take, though still punished.
5. I switched costs of some powers around.
6. Added a number of clarifications to various powers.
>>47609244
7. No one likes my followers, but there is nothing I can do about that. No changes here.
>>47609049
>Thessians
>The Festering
>Endless cycle of beasts being born.
>Pursuers are those who hunt down creatures in Thessian
>Some legends say he gathered many objects he made from portraits to dolls of her and moved to the land of Thessian seeking a way to bring Beverstia back using something called Umbala.
>Fealece thinks her age makes her useless.
Is Thessians, Yharnem? It sounds like Yharnem and Fealece sounds a little like Eileen the crow.
>>47609227
>replayability
>enough power to actually do shit
>good lore
>>47609227
>More focus on world and self and less about companions
I don't care about them, and hardly read them. I know it's easy to use companions as loredumps, it just means I won't read it (and yes, I know that's entirely on me).
>>47609257
8. You are no longer limited in number of flaws you can take, but in the number of points you can get from them instead.
9. Number of points you can get from flaws is increased all around.
10. Clarified the number of ‘Wanted’ you can take and added a limitation to ‘Allies’ perk as well.
I’m going to break my long standing tradition of disappearing into the darkness each time I post a CYOA (which makes a grand total of 2 times) and remain in this thread to listen to your suggestions and propositions. I am determined to fix this CYOA, so if I get harsh critique, I will endure it. But please don’t be mean.
Also, while I am here right now, I am open to hear what you didn’t like about Blood magic. Especially from those people who said it was mediocre and half-baked. I’ll expand it too one day, so it will be good to fix some things I wasn’t aware of before I started working.
>>47609227
>Lore
>Focus on companions
>Replayability
>Enviroments/Quests with lore
>>47609103
This guy just starts talking about his stupid nerd shit like I know what he's talking about.
>>47609270
>I’m going to break my long standing tradition of disappearing into the darkness each time I post a CYOA (which makes a grand total of 2 times) and remain in this thread to listen to your suggestions and propositions.
Absolute madman, how will you remain sane?
>>47609292
But Anon, I am not sane to begin with.
>>47609296
Of course not, you stopped disappearing into the darkness.
>>47609304
He was born in it, molded by it. He didn't see the light until he was already a man.
>>47609227
>Detailed food and drink choices
...How does this play out? Like, is the whole thing about food?
>this is OC btw
>>47609114
Don't forget that even some of the memories are apparently dying.
>>47609114
Welcome to not!Dark Souls/Demon Souls/Bloodborne
>>47609227
>interesting choices, where you can't have everything and have to think about it
>some balance between positives and negatives
>good visuals
>cyoas with philosophical or political themes
>>47608839
Vampire King
>>47609338
Oh hey another new CYOA-
>It's more Kit shit
oh
>>47609384
Be nice, baka.
>>47609338
It would be neat to have a hybrid option.
>>47609382
>>47609378
>philosophical themes
You meanmemory death?
>political themes
there's ends of this spectrum you either get something like Kingdom Crusher and its DLC or something /pol/ cooked up to stir shit.
>>47609338
Can you choose multiple options under Body/Special?
>>47609338
Race: Loli (17)
Body: Jacked (16), Cute (Free)
Special: Yan (15), Chaos Magic (11), Weapon Master (9)
Hero: Cillie (5)
Need more choices and more men options. I want the dick.
>>47609406
>>47609244
>>47609257
>>47609270
A few notes just from a quick glance:
You might want to make it clear that the "you will only maintain the status quo" is not necessarily literal, unless you really do mean that people who take that option are locking themselves in to never effecting any change on the setting, in which case, why the fuck would you do that? Same thing for some of the others (particularly the get caught on the Villain option).
What happens if you take The Seraphim without actually taking a power? Would you have to choose a shard if you don't actually take a power? What about "Identity Revealed"?
You might clarify the cost on the Cauldron Vial. Just having an "X" there makes it look like a placeholder got left in the CYOA, it took me a minute to realize what it meant.
I think the Blind Spot-equivalent of most previous Worm CYOA were considered pretty essential perks to take, so you might want to try to make it a bit cheaper. Now that you have more starting points it isn't as much of an issue, but if someone who considers it a requirement to survive plays, it's hefty enough to still pretty much force the use of drawbacks. Alternatively you might just make it explicit that Contessa/Simurgh aren't going to autokill you for out-of-canon knowledge (I know you sort of imply it at the very end, but it's pretty easy to skim, and doesn't really say anything definitive).
Also two of the extras definitively make the world harder to survive, which makes me think they should count as drawbacks/give points, and one of them ensures you don't have to deal with an awful person, which makes me think it should cost points.
I think the Drawback point limit may be a bit on the low side, but that's probably just me. If you ever consider adding difficulties though, I think having different difficulties have different Drawback point limits would be a better way to make them feel distinct than the way most of the other Worm CYOA do (just alternate starting point values).
>>47609270
I liked bloodmagic. One of the better ones posted in a long time
>>47609422
This. What's the point in being the waifu if there's no dicks in the equation?
>>47609338
Half Dragon 6
Jacked 1, Intriguing 1, Lustful 2
Yan 1, Weaponmaster (Level 2) 2, Chaos Magic 4
Barem 3
"Hooneeeey, I dealt with those villagers that were looking at you lustfully!
...and with the rest of the village too!
Hoooney, where are youuu?"
>>47609338
Race: Catgirl
Body: Cute, Feminine, Well-endowed
Special: Sweet, Weaponmaster (Longbow), Power Magic
I'll use the rest of my points to summon the girl I've outlined, and then transport us both back to Earth.
>>47609227
-Waifus
-Lewds
-Lolis
>>47609476
>You might want to make it clear that the "you will only maintain the status quo" is not necessarily literal
Would mentioning that in the text before the paths suffice?
>not taking a power
Since the whole point of this CYOA is about being a parahuman, this is a minor concern. I don't think I should clarify anything about this.
>You might clarify the cost on the Cauldron Vial.
Alright, I guess.
>I think the Blind Spot-equivalent of most previous Worm CYOA were considered pretty essential perks to take, so you might want to try to make it a bit cheaper.
Just because everyone wants additional safety doesn't mean it should be cheap. If you want to survive an encounter with a precog and can't afford this perk - don't mess with them, that's simple.
>one of them ensures you don't have to deal with an awful person, which makes me think it should cost points.
If you are implying that Taylor is awful, I'm going to fight you. Not literally. Or maybe yes. Though I will add points for extras, maybe.
>different difficulties
Definitely no, I'm not adding modes.
>>47609410
There's the utopia cyoa. It's ironically far from perfect but I like the way it reveals people's political unconscious.
http://m.imgur.com/ZEHtyRG
>>47609227
>being a manly man
>alcohol
>lewds
>power
>no caster supremacy
>>47609338
really? monstergirls and there's no cowgirl choice?
>halfdragon (14)
>jacked (13)
>well endowed, insanity edition (9)
>Lifetime, I ain't dying yet! (4)
>Weaponmaster (4)
>Cillie (0)
>>47609338
Race: Half-Dragon (-6)
Body:
Intriguing (-1): Scars. EVERYWHERE.
Jacked (-1)
Lifetime 2 (-6)
Special:
Weaponmaster 2 (-2)
General Magic 2 (-4)
Power Magic (-3)
Mechanic (-2)
Hero: Pffhaha
Oh, what a shame, I didn't have enough points for a hero. How tragic.
>>47609382
>>47609406
>>47609431
Here's a PDF of this for those who want it
>>47609338
You'd think a few of the heroes would be male..; I bet Angelanon would have liked this one.
>>47609620
>If you want to survive an encounter with a precog and can't afford this perk - don't mess with them, that's simple
Unfortunately, Contessa regularly uses her Path to Victory to kill or suborn anyone who would put Cauldron and by extension ,their plans, at risk. Since Cauldron is made of hard people making hard decisions (while hard) it's not a good idea to go into the situation while being able to expose them.
You might decide you need to shortly before getting killed to death.
>>47609680
They could all be traps and futas anon.
>>47609338
You know the picture for the light elf race and the picture for the lifetime perk are the same right?
>>47609680
Did she finally leave or is she dead?
>>47609724
Now there's a world for the Utopia CYOA.
>>47609620
The questions about not taking a power were questions I was actually curious about the answer to, not something I thought needed to be clarified in the CYOA.
>If you want to survive an encounter with a precog and can't afford this perk
It's less about having an advantage in a fight against a precog, and more about not getting autokilled by Simurgh/Contessa/possibly Scion with no provocation on your part. Particularly since WB has actually dropped some WoG implying Scion might, in fact, roam around murdering potential threats (https://www.reddit.com/r/Parahumans/comments/3dc0wz/lets_say_you_can_choose_the_classification_and/ct3ssij?context=3 see the line "You were a threat to Scion, his path to victory figured that out, so he took you out of play in the most efficient way possible."). To be fair, though, that is part of a hypothetical scenario. Contessa and Simurgh still stand.
Also, my condolences on posting your update within ten minutes of a Waifu OC getting dropped.
>>47609227
Drawbacks less about "you get fucked over" and more about "you need to overcome this".
>>47609227
Agreed on food and drink choices.
>>47609708
>>47609787
>Unfortunately, Contessa regularly uses her Path to Victory to kill or suborn anyone who would put Cauldron and by extension ,their plans, at risk.
> WB has actually dropped some WoG implying Scion might, in fact, roam around murdering potential threats
Well, damn, I guess I should change it or give immunity to the big 3 precogs away for free.
>The questions about not taking a power were questions I was actually curious about the answer to, not something I thought needed to be clarified in the CYOA.
Alright.
>What happens if you take The Seraphim without actually taking a power?
If you still take one of the Gifts, she'll still follow you, since they are they main reason she's interested in you. How do they work? Where do they take energy for their abilities? No one knows. But even if you won't take them, she'll still watch over you, thought not as diligently, because you still came from an entirely different multiverse altogether through unknown means with seemingly no energy spent.
>Would you have to choose a shard if you don't actually take a power?
I guess no, since there won't be a point to it. But you still can take it and then go through a trigger event, though your power will be randomized instead.
>What about "Identity Revealed"?
It will basically mean that you became (in)famous without the cape requirement.
>Also, my condolences on posting your update within ten minutes of a Waifu OC getting dropped.
Waifu CYOAs are getting posted all the time, I'm not really surprised.
>>47609338
Brown Elf OP
>>47609338
This looks complete and there isn't really room for one more race, but as a general request for the future I would ecstatic if there were an Orc option. Gap moe buff tusk cuties are a best!
>Race
Delicious Brown Elf 15
>Appearance
Jacked 14
Feminine 13
Lustful 11
Well-endowed 9
Lifetime 6
I ain't dying yet! 3
>Special
Weaponmaster 1
General Magic
>Hero
>Nobig-dickedhusbandos
Niilo
Cute CYOA! Definitely some other options I could've taken. I probably stacked too many points in the Appearance category but oh well. Jacked, feminine, and well-endowed? Not sure exactly what that looks like, but it sounds sexy to me.
>>47609953
Needs suit made of bones of enemy.
>>47609227
>>47609613
Lewd Loli Waifus.
>>47609338
>My drinking buddy made a new OC
Hyped
Has there been any updates on the Blackmail CYOA?
>>47609421
yes, of course.
>>47609398
noted
>>47609731
shit, thanks a lot, gotta change that.
>>47610002
ay. I see the intro doesn't add up with the Hero section, but hey, it took me4hours of drinking.
And then another4because I had so many spelling mistakes, had to make things look pretty etc.Can't make drinking cyoas for a few days, unfortunately.
Can you guys protect this WIP while I get something to drink? Feel free to tell me if it is comfy enough. That is kinda what I am going for.
>>47609244
>Conspirator
>Animal Control 1
>Iscariot
>Evangelist
>Abbadon -1
>Blind Spot -6
>Manton Bypass -10
>Godslayer -15
>S9 Recruit -8
>Birdcaged -15
>Candle
>Cycle Continues
Whoops, I accidentally the multiverse.
I mean, bringing Eden home on a leash may not have been the best idea, but I saw both of them through Evangelist and just had to go for it.
Okay, fine, maaaaaybe I could've used Contessa to find a better way, but I conquered half a country without her, and it seemed obvious what to do.
>>47610037
Looks neat so far.
>>47610047
You know "animal" actually refers to a specific category of life that the entities don't necessarily fit, and not just "any life that isn't human," right?
>>47609227
>stats
>comedy
>serious world buillding
>lewd/waifu
i know its a saturated market but the dick wants, what the dick wants.
>>47610037
I, for one, like what I see so far.
>>47610037
>WizardSchool.png
Looks good so far.
>>47609338
kit, i fucking love you.
>>47610064
And Godslayer specifically lets my powers affect Endbringers and the Entities.
>>47609338
Shouldn't Loli get Lifetime for free?
Or do they not look youthful for most of their lives (not sure if I want to even imagine what old loli looks like)?
>>47610145
good point, but their cost would have to increase proportionally.
Lolis would have to cost 5/6 points, and all you end up with is a childlike Human that picked two perks.
Then, the same point can be applied to Catgirls, making those also expensive as fuck. I don't like forcing certain traits upon you (not that often).
>>47609338
No trap option... why even bother.
Hey kit, can you do me a favor and make a husbando CYOA or at least add in those options in the next/current one? I'm a straight male, but with all the waifu stuff, even I'd enjoy seeing some more male action.
>>47608973
>>47609103
>Now with extra width because fuck you!
Fuck you too, Odin
Redhead Halfblood Viking
>Muscle (8)
Two-Handed Melee 6
Full-Body Beard 4
Bellow Lungs 3
Might +3 0
>Beard (4)
Flagellation 2
Lubed Beard 1
Bushiness + 1 0
>Rape (7)
Freya 5
Katla 4
Sigrid 2
Gryten 0
>Full Traits
Two-Handed
Breathe Anywhere
*Swimming
Shield
Double Team
Might: 10
Bushiness:3
Rape Level: 7
>Challenges
The Warp 140
Giant Mountains 280
The Ithica 400
>Reward
VALHALLA (THE REAL ONE)
Could've taken some slightly easier challenges and had some fun with it, but I thought I'd mildly minmax my points. If I could've taken my wives with me I might not have chosen Valhalla but it's a damn good reward either way.
Kind of a confusing CYOA since I had to keep going back and changing my build a little bit to try and get the challenges I wanted. 420 points is possible for the dankest viking out there but I am happy enough with my build that I didn't want to mess with it more. Craftworld probably would've been a more enjoyable rape than the Warp but oh well.
Wife ranking (descending order):
Katla
Freya
Gryten
Sigrid
>>47610301Sounds like you don't consider having a penisintriguingenough.
>>47609227
>Lewd
>Waifus
>Lewd waifus that are more than just a selection of fetishes
>Stats
>Not enough points to get everything you want
>Drawbacks
>Numbers and points and hard decisions
>>47609227
>world building (or a decent try at using a pre-existing setting)
>options
>drawbacks, especially those that aren't drawbacks to everyone
>lewds
>required secondary powers, either as part of the initial purchase or separately
My favorite example of the last one is all those CYOAs that expand dong and then don't give you power/stretchy companion/whatever to let you stick it in anyway.
>>47610047
>>47610128
...
Fine, this seemed obvious before, but I'll have to specifically forbid people from controlling entities, godslayer or no godslayer.
>>47609338
Love it.
>>47610369
I still don't see a penis option. Am I blind?
>>47609338
Race
>Loli
Body
>A cute
>Intriguing
>Lustful
>Lifetime
Special
>Yan
>Weaponmaster (KATANAH)
>General Magic
>Chaos Magic
Hero
>Kellie
I want to corrupt me a magical girl, but for some reason I get the feeling that she has already been corrupted (and not just because I remember seeing this pic when searching with corrupted and magical_girl tags on gelbooru).
>>47610369
>Darling, don't you find my huge testicles intriguing?
>>47610446
I think he is trying to say that you could take Intriguing and make that something special about your looks be that you have a big futa dick.
>>47610021
>Partner I
Gorgeous wuxia teacher: count me in. Health and long life sound cool.
>Item IV
A safe haven. With the internet! Just gotta schedule regular tasks outside, like practice, meditation, swimming.
>Trade III
Sexbot because muh dick. Sorry sensei. Also she can plug me into the matrix. Hope she's okay with water cos I'm picking:
>Paradise Domain
The tropical islands! I figure my choosing the modern house and the gamer'bot compensates for what this domain lacks. There's this worrying bit about black ooze and abominations...
I'll put my secret house right near an aquastone. That plus my 5 years of mystical martial training should make me pretty safe!
>>47610021
Ask and ye shall receive. Not quite sure how point distribution worked out. And I was going to add in more requirements and stuff. But pretty much done for v1
>>47609338
Can we have more heroes who aren't a huge gigaslut? I want someone I can actually waifu, almost all these girls are cock carousels.
I wanted to pick the succubus for example, but how am I supposed to waifu someone who cucks people at random and can't control her urges? She'd be doing this to me and everything else,and that's not good. Or heroic. Like at all.
>>47609244
>>47609257
>>47609270
Its better but the powers still suck. Most of them just feel bland and uninspired. Why no option for classic telekinesis? Why does Blaster not have an option for lasers? Technopathy us shit because of its drawback.
Tinker, Thinker, Brute are the only good sets.
>>47610037
I'll finish it tomorrow. I'm a bit too drunk and tired and I'm to write nonsense.Last time I join the drunken cyoa bandwagon. It ain't for me.
>>47609907
In the vein of
>I was actually curious about the answer to, not something I thought needed to be clarified in the CYOA.
How do you actually get Birdcaged if you take that drawback and have Intimidation Aura? I can't think of a scenario where that goes down.
>>47610607
>I wanted to pick the succubus for example, but how am I supposed to waifu someone who cucks people at random and can't control her urges?
She's a goddamned succubus, what else could you expect? You're supposed to love her regardless of her shortcomings, not throw fits because of one flaw...
>>47610606
Awesome, thank you
>>47608337
Neutral Princess
Little Girl/Wise Matron - 21 years old
Captured Princess
Not-So-Royal Behavior
Warrior Princess
Millenium Princess
Rival Stepsister
Adventure!
Never Alone
Once and Future Queen
>>47610659
I love this one, it's just so comfy.
>>47610653
She's a goddamned hero, she's meant to do good, not vile and evil. Being a succubus doesn't mean you can't control yourself, or that you need to target married people. I mean fucking hell, the racial option that you can pick to be a succubus doesn't force you into doing that kind of thing.
>Cheating on you and causing others to cheat is 'one flaw'.
>>47610606
I hate posting from my phone.
>>47608981
Can I get the original picture of that cowboy dog on D. Perception
>>47610627
>Most of them just feel bland and uninspired
>Why no option for classic telekinesis? Why does Blaster not have an option for lasers?
You complain about having bland powers and suggest bland powers.
>Technopathy us shit because of its drawback.
Which is why it costs so little, yes.
>How do you actually get Birdcaged if you take that drawback and have Intimidation Aura? I can't think of a scenario where that goes down.
How about a scenario where you get there on an accident? Like, you were walking down the street, fall into accidental portal laid down by someone which sends you near the entrance to the Birdcage, where automated machinery sends you down there on its own. A domino effect like that. And once you're there, nobody will bother to get you out.
>>47610653
>You're supposed to love her regardless of her shortcomings, not throw fits because of one flaw...
But how else can you expect the Alpha and Deserving (snrk) men of the illustrious Four Chans to act towards fictional women?
>>47610730
>Anon smirks, tipping his fedora.
>"That'll show those 4chan autists." , he says. "After all, nobody in the real world would be upset about their girlfriend fucking other girls or men."
>>47610652
Meant to reply to you, but forgot to quote.
>>47610659
0/50
>The Enigma Machine
>Jessica
>Sally
>Chad
>Rocky
Closest I can get to Skooby Doo
>>47609338
I take back what I said about Kit writing good waifus. These are bad. No headpats for you.
>>47610607
Just keep her lust in check, you cuckmeister.
Also none of the other girls reference them being unfaithful.
>>47609338
Alright, i like that you are forced to be a girl, but why no male heroes? I mean, shouldn't it be a male hero by default, but you have to pay extra for it to be a girl or they have worse drawbacks or something. Sure, forbidden love and all that, but it's kinda wierd, i mean it doesn't feel like you become a waifu if it's a girl, it feels more like you get a waifu at the price of bieng a girl yourself so be waify CYOA name doesn't make sense.
>>47610796
Nowhere does it say that's possible. She still did it to other people, regardless. That means she's a worthless, irredeemable scumbag and not any kind of hero.
Also I wasn't implying all the other girls were unfaithful. Just that they're cock carrousels, real slutty bunch.
>>47610737
Get with the times, grandpa. There's nothing wrong with open relationships and cuckoldry.
>>47610830
You're angry about a succubus being lustful and having a had sex with someone else previously?
>>47610913
No, I'm angry about the succubus having random urges to cuck people, and for this said cuckubus supposedly being a 'hero' and my 'waifu'.
I made another thing.
pg 1/2
>>47610689
>She's a goddamned hero, she's meant to do good, not vile and evil.
Not every hero has to be a pure virgin knight in shining armor, Anon.
>>47610942
pg 2/2
>>47610958
Rance is only a hero because all his villains are rapists without magic dicks that rape people into loving them.
>>47610958
>implying he wouldn't be insulted if someone implied he was a slut for having the urge to fuck random chicks.
>implying hero means "person who does good" in the first place
>something, something Hercules raping that one amazon queen something
>>47610726
>You complain about having bland powers and suggest bland powers.
Telekinesis is a classic type of power that's super useful or powerful. It makes sense for Blaster to have lasers since the classification is called "Blaster". Both Legend and Purity are iconic Blasters from Worm. Should Brute not have super strength because since its also "bland"?
>>47611010
>implying hero means "person who does good" in the first place
We doing Fable Heroes now?
>>47610958
Rance isn't much of a hero. Slutting about isn't evil (though it makes for a lower quality waifu in many peoples opinions), but Rance is a rapist. Now a days that generally means he's evil.
>>47609244
>>47609257
>>47609270
Ironically, capping points at 23 might mean you may never see any use of 20-point powers. 30 would probably be a better cut-off point.
But for the most part good work.
>>47610973
Yeah nah
max charisma pope a great
>>47611056
Is the loli the pope?
>>47611043
>fights off demon invasions
>wipes out pedophile slave rings
>destroys apartheid caste systems
>spreads democracy
>unifies humanity
>not a hero
>>47610411
So does Godslayer just do nothing with Animal Control, or does it affect whatever you control instead?
>>47611069
>Fucks everyone's waifus and spreads basic human misery
>>47609338
Race
>Brown Elf
Body
>Intriguing
>Jacked
>Lustful
>Lifetime
Special
>General Magic
>Specialized
>Chaos Magic
Hero
>Barem
Oh, you find this bulge in my pants intriguing? What a coincidence, because I find those swellings on your chest to be very intriguing. Would you mind removing your arms from them, so I can have a better look?
>>47611068
Former Pope
Went rogue after deciding to kill god
>>47611085
he doesn't fuck everyones waifus and he has left every nation better than when he arrived
>>47611026
More of an implying you failed your literature classes thing.
>>47611085
Given that literally everyone else in that setting is forced to perpetuate the status quo by the doom whale there really isn't anyone else who could do it.
And that whale is a super dick.
>>47610627
I kind of hate to just outright say "I disagree," but I do. This one's a lot closer to what I think powers should be like in a Worm CYOA than in any of the others. Pretty specific in concept/what they do, and with a huge variety so they cover most bases just by there being a lot of them, instead of by being really vague or overpowered.
>>47610606
Brute Force doesn't really work all that well with with a lot of the material, especially like A Friend in Need and Another Life. Might be fine since those are the highest Power options and you could not want them to stack, but you might want to mention that.
"Horrible Bastard" build:
>Method
Brute Force
>Material
Odd Fetish, Illegal, She's in the pictures
>Victim
Abigail and Mya (both of them)
>Complication
Shy
>Total Points
Power: 23
Cost: 0
Time: 3
Threat: 20
>Goals
Stockholm Syndrome
Public Play 20
Humiliation 16
Tricks 12
Sexual Contact 10
Penetration 5
Taboo 1
Attire 0
I haven't decided exactly what it is I forced them into yet but it's pretty out there and I used it to gain a lot of leverage over them. After that I started whoring out my "Wife" and "Daughter" (Mya is a young adult, I'm assuming) to earn myself about $600 a week while also enjoying them myself as well. 20% chance of rebellion is really high but it shouldn't take too long before the Stockholm Syndrome should kick in before too long and at that point I'm golden. How long does that take, actually? It says "1.5 times your Time points to have her fall in love" but is that in weeks, months? In the description on the first page Time is defined as how many hours per week you have to spend keeping everything going; will mother and daughter fall completely into my grasp after 4 and a half hours?
>>47611010
>>47611104
Rude.
>>47610606
>Brute Force
>Innocent
>Alina
>Shy
>Stockholm Syndrome
P:22
C:-4
T:0
Th:11
So I break her into submition right after brutaly did nothing to her and get FREE MONEY
No idea why Shy is complication, FREE -4 threat
>>47610939
Then don't pick her you stupid cuck.
>>47609338
>Half-dragon
>better off using their claws and breath than conventional weapons
>Take the "Weaponmaster" perk for free
I'm getting mixed signals here. Why would you want to have Weaponmaster?
>>47610942
>Amon-Gorloth
Flesheating supermosquitos that asexually reproduce at an incredible speed, exponentially. That's my first creation.
>Divine Physique
>Regenerative Healing
>Iron Will
>Plot Armor
My wish:
I'll take all the powers of Bill Cipher times 10 with none of his weaknesses please.The ability to create life is ridiculously overpowered considering that your creations don't have to be sustainable.I know I could have made a better wish but being Bill Cipher is just too much fun.
>>47611136
But her picture was cute and I wanted a nice succubus waifu.
>>47611142
The claws are the weapon, I assume. I figure other races could pick Weaponmaster for kung-fu action as well.
>>47611124
Zeus? Given that he turns into animals and rapes women while in that form all the time, I'd think he'd be OK with the sort of shit Rance does.
>something something "rapes a woman in the form of a shower of gold" something
>>47611154
Well I can't argue with that.
How about pick her and keep her chained up in your love basement where she can't cuck anyone again?
Or fuck being a hero. Free love, fuck bitches!
>>47609338
God dammit.
> Catgirl [18]
Not the; "Nyan :3" but more in line with the 'stray' "Oh god what was chewing on you?"
> Jacked [17]
When in a fight you either get good or get clawed to death.
> Intriguing [16]
In this anime land, a dirty alley cat sticks out. A lot.
> Tsun AKA: Please don't touch me [15]
No god dammit stop with that star crossed lovers crap, we've got bigger concerns.
> Yan AKA: The Idiot Alarm [14]
There's nothing romantic about a desire to pick someone up and put them in a hole until they stop being stupid. How hard is it to NOT wake the fucking lizardmen?
> Weaponmaster full [10]
When the sewers are crawling with rat-folk, you either learn how to use a halberd and shanks or you get eaten.
> Mechanic [8]
Fucking people not taking care of their fucking gear. How hard is it to clean your sword asshole?
> Sikk [6]
Perhaps shyness can become sensibility, and I can at least get her to wear something that won't make me feel cold by proxy.
>>47611173
I think the world needs saving, anon.
>>47611177
>Catt
>>47611154
Why don't you just try to guide her to the light with your boundless love?
I'm sure you can succeed eventually.
>>47609338
Gonna go slightly off-script for a theme, but it's still within the point limit.
Hero: Cillie (4p)
Race: Loli (2p)
Body: Jacked (1p) and Feminine (1p) to be physically powerful without those super-defined muscles (ew), Twin (2p)
Special: General Magic (2p), Specialized (2p)
> Cost Subtotal: 14p
Red Loli (Twin A)
Body: A Cute (Free)
Special: Weaponmaster: Hammer (2p), Chaos Magic (4p)
> Additional Cost: +6p (total 20p)
Blue Loli (Twin B)
Body: Replace free A Cute with Lustful at -1 cost (1p)
Special: Weaponmaster: Sword (2p), Power Magic (3p)
> Additional Cost: +6p (total 20p)
>>47610942
Marduk and Odin seem a little overpowered, if you can do "fuck with water in the body" and "how do I kill X champion?" respectively.
Also
>Death
>Impartial to the Old Ones
>"With strange aeons even Death may die"
>>47611205
I only know how to convert people with the power of the D. Is there any hope for me?
>>47611192
Where?
>>47611242
Considering you're a girl now, you don't have a choice.
>>47611124
Zeus would probably be proud that his son is manly man rapist like him. And is that some kind of a blonde negro Captain America?
>>47611205
Because I think what she did is irredeemable and I'm also not the kind of CYOA player that automatically assumes I can save everyone and do everything.
>>47611237
What figure would you suggest that behaves more impartially than death?
>>47611022
>Should Brute not have super strength because since its also "bland"?
Hey, you are the one who started calling things "bland", don't turn this on me now. And yes, if I could think of anything else for Brute, I would've put it there instead. But creating an original and unique power for a category described as "you are very strong" is a hard feat.
As it stands, I won't replace any powers with new ones, I have enough problems with the ones I have already.
>>47611052
>Ironically, capping points at 23 might mean you may never see any use of 20-point powers.
How so? The whole point of a 20-cost powers is that you trade literally everything you can to use just one overpowered ability. And I was pretty generous, you have 3 additional points to spend on things like money or an appartment.
>>47611073
>So does Godslayer just do nothing with Animal Control, or does it affect whatever you control instead?
You are usually forbidden from using precog against Scion or Endbringers, or having your powers work against an Endbringer core. Godslayer is meant to remove those restrictions, not to make you a direct counter to the Entities.
>>47611257
Filename.
>>47611271
>Zeus would probably be proud that his son is manly man rapist like him.
...and that's what makes him realize what a twat he has been.
>>47609338
>Half-Dragon (6)
I like being hella strong.
>Intriguing (7)
I'm actually a male waifu.
>Jacked (8)
Male waifus have to be ripped.
>Well-endowed (10)
My waifu lovestick is pretty big.
>Weaponmaster (free)
Greatsword
>[Specialized] General Magic (14)
Magic is always nice.
>Power Magic (17)
Male waifus tend to like such things.
>Barem (20)
I'm going to be the best male waifu this world has ever seen.
>>47611222
you're saying you are the hero now? That the first things you picked are what Cillie has?
>Replace a free option
I don't think that's how free things work, anon.
>>47611283
>I'm also not the kind of CYOA player that automatically assumes I can save everyone and do everything.
Why play one if you admit defeat before you start?
>>47611269
>Not even the barest hint of a muscle on any of them except for maybe the far right
This picture does have a delectable array of variety, for once, but I am a little bit tired of spaghetti arms.
>>47610827
I will agree with this, I'm trying to build a combat monster with the highest rank in weapons and all the magic, but I can't afford it. So I think you should add guy heroes and picking one gives you extra points.
>>47611307
Yea. And?
>>47611286
The thing is that those 20 point powers are not even overpowered.
>>47611331
They're succubi, they're literally made for love not war!
>>47611336
Is wrong
>>47611329
I don't admit defeat. I think there are things I can do, I just don't assume I can do everything.
>>47611352
>Muscles aren't for loving
I'm disappointed I'm away from my computer today, I'm sure I'd have one or two work safe images to prove you wrong!
>>47611342
Sure, if you think that things like Path to Victory or having a pet Endbringer are not overpowered, there is nothing I can tell you.
>>47611107
Noted. Perhaps months? Not sure if that's too short.
>>47611310
>Succubi 2.jpg
What are you doing Wiz? You're a lich, not a succubus?
>>47611355
For U.
>>47610942
>>47610965
I like it. Good ideas. The fluff at the beginning is a bit muddled tho? Not sure what Nox really does travel-wise. Is it like teleportation between two shadowed place or is it like a speed boost while you're in shadows?
Anyway quick build:
>Gods
>Odin
Omniscient being who's on my side answers one question a day? Amazing edge in intelligence and possibly Contessa-like Path to Victory in perspective. I also get to gather the team early and find the enemies'more easily.
Gifts
>Iron Will
>Spectral Form
>Sigils
>Plot Armor
Took defensive powers plus iron will prevents me from getting too scared or despairing I think?
On the off chance that I win... I wish for something corny like peace and happiness everlasting in the multiverse, except carefully worded.
>>47611372
They're not overpowered. If you honestly think a single pet Endbringer compensates for turning the entire wormverse against you which is pretty much what you need to do for those points, then you don't know Worm. Path To Victory is a hack.
>>47611376
Maybe make it 2x Time in months? I dunno, I think a lot of the point totals could do with some reworking anyway, see >>47611134, so you might go between 1.5 and 2 depending on how much Time you expect players to build up.
>>47611389
thank
>>47611379
She badly needs cash to pay back for all her financial failures.
>>47611402
Okay, if you say so.
>>47611286
>The whole point of a 20-cost powers is that you trade literally everything you can to use just one overpowered ability
Even the 20-point powers are going to need the support of a one or two perks, companions, or minor additional powers. Maybe not for Path to Victory, but even there consider that Contessa debatably didn't really do much to save the world or herself, and she had Cauldron at her back and none of the drawbacks the player would have to take to get PtV at her front. But consider facing the entire parahuman community and Golden Morning with just the 20-point mover power to your name. It's fuckstrong, but it won't save you by its lonesome.
>>47611322
>you're saying you are the hero now? That the first things you picked are what Cillie has?
I'll admit, the Weaponmaster and Jacked things were most to spend points since I had the other stuff I wanted. I suppose I could replace Jacked with Sweet, and replace Weapon Master with Mechanic (and note that Red Loli specializes in weapons while Blue Loli specializes in armor). That makes more sense, actually, now that you mention it, we'd be much better support for Cillie that way.
>>Replace a free option
>I don't think that's how free things work, anon.
That's why I pointed out I was going off-script at the start. It's technically not what's listed, but it fits the theme (the two being different in certain ways). And to be honest, part of it is just because Lustful costs 2p, and since there's a 1p difference in the two types of attack magic I had to spend an extra point on Blue Loli, and I wanted to spend that on something that accentuated the duality of the twins. And so, Red Oni is cute and endearing with a blunt, honest charm, while Blue Oni is sly and seductive, with a very cool and calm demeanor.
Besides, fuck the rules... it's all just make-believe anyway.
>>47611432
You made the second most unpopular iteration of the Worm despite yours having a superior design. Anons continue to tell you how to improve it but you don't listen. Weeks ago one anon even posted a novelette's worth of constructive criticism on every power which you said you would look into but never did.
What the fuck are expecting from us? To ignore the glaring issues and build for that masochist death trap anyway?
>>47611285
What's the point of having the impartial mediator in the first place? Just to ensure there's no cheating or something? It doesn't seem like a really crucial part of the scenario to me.
>>47610942
>Odin
"What is the easiest way to kill all the chaos chosen without any other casualties?"
If I get a dick answer, I can just try again tomorrow.
>Iron Will
Needed.
>Shapeshifting
This is kinda confusing; do I get to turn into any natural creature within the mass limit, but only one mythological one? In that case, I'd probably choose something small and magically potent. Maybe a fairy or something.
>Telekinesis
>Sigils
Ten sigils are more than enough to create a death box.
How is that warcraft type fantasy cyoa with demonbane powerlevel coming along, anon?
>>47611465
>literally released an update today to try and address the balance issues
I agree that the 20-point powers aren't really that strong (except maybe PtV and the 20-point Changer), but I think you're overreacting for a single (admittedly dismissive) comment.
>>47611483
Why is iron will needed?
>>47611124
>>47611454
>need the support of a one or two perks
You have enough for that. Perks are cheap. Most of them, anyway.
>companions
Majority of companions don't cost points. Don't see a problem on this front.
>minor additional powers
Again, you have 3 points to buy an additional minor one instead of a perk.
>But consider facing the entire parahuman community and Golden Morning with just the 20-point mover power to your name.
I already said it before, the point of my Worm CYOA is to be a challenge, not a cakewalk. Maybe I can raise the number of points you can get from the drawbacks, but this won't change this problem, will it?
>>47611465
>Anons continue to tell you how to improve it but you don't listen.
But I do?
>Weeks ago one anon even posted a novelette's worth of constructive criticism on every power which you said you would look into but never did.
But I just did?
>What the fuck are expecting from us? To ignore the glaring issues and build for that masochist death trap anyway?
I fixed most of the problems there were. I don't see anything major worth changing. If you see, why don't you point it out and suggest how to fix it?
>>47609244
>>47609257
>>47609270
The text is hard to read.
>>47610653
off topic, this anime, is it good? comedy or serious hentai? (doubt its the second)
>>47610606
>>47610942
more new cyoa. you guys really are feeling creative this week.
>>47611504
It irks me that you went through all that trouble to create a cyoa only for it to end up getting trashed because you insist on having anon assraped by every single person in Worm. Like Infinite Ammo costing 5 - fucking 5 - points. How is that balanced?
>>47611149
Wouldn't your mosquitoes kill your allies too?
>>47611549
What happened to Marvel?
>>47611561
Which text, the one on white-ish background, the one on the power section, the colored one or everything overall?
>>47611544
Because you're in a deathmatch where you very likely have to follow a set of instructions very precisely or at least thousands of people (including you) will die.
Stress might get to you a little bit.
>>47611569
I'm guessing I can program their instinctive behaviour to the extent that they don't harm my allies. It's all fine as long as they don't get too big or are magical, I guess.
>>47611107
Yeah. I think I'm going to make it (time+threat) months instead.
>>47611565
It's a pure comedy, and it's awesome.
Nothing remotely perverted there, nope.
>>47611559
>Maybe I can raise the number of points you can get from the drawbacks
That's exactly what I meant with
>30 would be a better cut-off point
And yes, you can get perks or additional powers, but only three points worth. The 20-point Striker seems pointless without Godslayer (unless it works on bullets and golden lasers flying at you), and pretty much all of them aren't worth what'll happen to you by attracting that much attention without Blind Spot (Contessa happens to you). Which you can't get at a 23 cap.
>>47611580
They hired a bunch of tumblr-tier writers because their sales are shit and they mistook all the cries of OFFENDED on the internet for real potential interests in their comics, so they sought to appeal to and capitulate with them. Like everyone who does this, they went into the toilet.
>>47611565
>is it good
Yes
>comedy
Yes
>>47611566
I'm not the guy who made it, and I'm not saying there's no balance issues. I'm just saying that you were complaining that they were making no attempt to fix the balance issues when the current reply chain is in response to them releasing an update intended to do just that (and in fact was a pretty decent step toward that, in my opinion).
>>47611134
>>47610691
Time paradox edition
>Brute Force
>Innocent
>Alina
>Complication
The can be only one: Active Police (+2 cost -1 time)
I can take more: +Shy -4 threat and Strong Will -2 threat
>to do:
Stockholm Syndrome
Friendly
P:22
C:-1
T:-1
Th:9
I don't even know how to describe this situation. She breaks even before I tell her my bluff/ do the act of not doing anything
>>47611608
Oh, jesus, yeah that's a smart idea and gives me a good reason to work on lowering that Threat. 23 months with a 20% chance of them running away each month is not particularly acceptable.
>>47611613
I'm pretty sure by "nothing remotely perverted" you mean that the someone always interrupts all attempts at sex.
Like a lot of annoying animu plots.
>>47611638
It's fun watching companies try to placate people who insist any action (or inaction) possible is oppression.
>>47610653
Source?
>>47610607
>why isn't the literal semen demon chaste and faithful wife material
Holy shit you're retarded.
>>47611672
>attempts at sex.
No such thing.
>>47611680
Konosuba.
>>47611672
>I'm pretty sure by "nothing remotely perverted" you mean that the someone always interrupts all attempts at sex.
The character is surrounded by a retarded goddess who probably has no idea what a dick is other then to call the MCs' small. A Masochistic Paladin who just wants to be beat up and humiliated. And a loli who just wants to explode things. He does not really have a love interest in the show. Yet.
>>47611687
Read the succubus race choice.
Read the part where it calls her 'the hero'.
Read the CYOA where it points you at these people to waifu.
Read her own personality description.
I get the feeling you didn't read the thing at all, and just saw 'succubus' and spewed stupid all over.
>>47611566
>you insist on having anon assraped by every single person in Worm.
I don't insist on it, which is why I am sitting here right now, listening to what you have to say and buffing everything to high heavens.
>Like Infinite Ammo costing 5 - fucking 5 - points. How is that balanced?
I can make it cost less and put a new power for 5 points instead. If you can think of something which fits in the opened slot, tell me, otherwise it will be filled with generic lazors.
>>47611625
>That's exactly what I meant
And this won't fix anything, people will keep whining that they have to face entire Omniverse hellbent on killing them. Maybe I can round the number of initial points fully to 10 and raise the limit from drawbacks to 20. Does this sound better?
>>47611712
I'm not remotely surprised by this revelation, but I do wish I'd managed to see it in the context of the show first. My own fault though.
>>47611613
I want that power very badly.
>>47611608
what you will do with ( >>47611134
>>47611667)
Brute Force+Innocent combo? Since it's King Crimson level of "It just works"
>>47610942
>Kaalut
>Nox
>Toxic
>Fortress Seal
>Telekinesis
Summon big K to eat the floor under my opponents and give them a Toxic Texas burial all the way down to the earth's core. Swat flies down with Nox. ez pz
>>47611712
Thanks
>>47611743
>Take any CYOA where there's a "pick a martial art and know it", e.g. the Demigod one
>Pick Anything Goes Martial arts
>Happosai, the grandmaster, has a less obvious version of that as a technique
>steal all the underoos
>>47611743
It's the Thief Skill, it steals something randomly with no input from the User
For some reason the MC always steals panties if he's targeting a woman.
>>47611731
Its all from one episode with the succubus. The rest of the show is dealing with autism.
>>47611789
>For some reason the MC always steals panties if he's targeting a woman.
That is due to him having max luck.
>>47611789
>For some reason
His luck is very high, that's why
>>47611715
>Maybe I can round the number of initial points fully to 10 and raise the limit from drawbacks to 20. Does this sound better?
It sounds pretty good to me.
>I can make it cost less and put a new power for 5 points instead. If you can think of something which fits in the opened slot, tell me, otherwise it will be filled with generic lazors.
Maybe I'm in the minority here but I really like most of the current powers. Accepting that you don't have much room in the layout for elaborate descriptions, I think most of them manage to be pretty neat. So I don't really want to see any getting pushed off for "generic lasers." I do sort of agree that some are pretty imbalanced for given point-costs, though. I'm not sure what to do about that other than just break the "1, 2, 2, 3, 5, 5, 7, 7, 10, 10, 20" pattern in some cases.
>>47611582
The followers text is too small. Powers text could be bigger as well but it's not as bad. The colored text is pretty readable. Only the extra's/thinker is kinda blurring together for the colored text. The white/black text on white-ish background is jarring to me.
>>47611789
>For some reason
He's ultra lucky, his only strength.
>>47610650
I love how it looks so far! May I ask where you find all those pictures?
>>47609244
>>47609257
>>47609270
Glad to see you haven't given up on this. Always thought it had potential. Significant improvements but quite a few glaring issues (in my eyes, at least) remain, which I will outline in depth either later tonight or tomorrow morning.
>>47609476
I would have to agree as far as the Extras are concerned.
Also, I'm pretty sure he meant Eidolon, not Taylor.
>>47611465
Hey, go easy on the guy. I'm the person you were referring to (Autismo, the Great and Powerful, I believe is the handle I chose at the time) and he has actually incorporated some of the feedback I provided. Which is nice.
>>47611819
>>47611821
>>47611865
>Very high luck
>Gets three almost useless Party Members.
>Goddess with great stats spends all her skills on useless party tricks
>Super Powerful Mage only knows one spell, refuses to learn more, said spell knocks her out after one use
>Super Strong Knight is a masochist and ungodly embarrassing at all times. WILL draw the aggro of enemies just so she can get attacked.
>>47608873Don't you put that on me.
>>47611745
Well I'll make brute force and innocent only compatible with certain things. Although, desu it'd work for alina. Let's say you don't really need a strong reason, just intent, with her.
>>47611876
No, I meant Taylor. I waspartiallykidding, since without Khepri as a fallback surviving Golden Morning becomes a shakier proposition.She really is just the fucking worst, though.
>>47611883
All are hot as shit though. And probably the only ones who can defeat the demon king due to their retardation and the demon king underestimating them. Hell they already defeated TWO of the Demon King's generals.
>>47611869
Pixiv and google images. I'm not particularly good at finding them. I just waste hours of my life on it and crop/resize the shit out of them.
>>47611883
>spends all her skills on useless party tricks
She does so because she already has all heal and other water/divine spells. Just watch as she kills best character, RIP in pepperonis, dallahan with her divine spells
>>47610942
Kaluuts power sucks balls
>>47611883
Megumin is still Best Girl, despite refusing to learn Spells that aren't Explosion.
>>47611883
All three strong party member with advanced jobs, that decided to go to the party of the weak MC.
The reason they went to the MC party was related to their peculiarities.
And together they work quite well.
I image if it wasn't for his high luck MC could not even have created a party.
>>47609244
Nice update.
Rogue
(23)
Schrodinger (18)
Combo (8)
Phantom Punches (7)
Protocols (5)
Shock and Awe (2)
Marduk
Outsider (0)
Endbringer target
S9 Recruit
Identity Revealed
The Memento
I'm just gonna go around making profit and taking inventory with my OP'd combination of powers. The obscurity I get from Marduk will hopefully prevent a lot of bad press and trouble outside of the drawback enemies I picked.
