Non-Human Zombies edition!
>To make cards, download MSE for free from here
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>Formatting Guide
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Jn1J1Mj-EvxMxca8aSRBDj766rSN8oSQgLMOXs10BUM
>Mechanics doc (For the making of color pie appropriate cards)
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheet/ccc?key=0AgaKCOzyqM48dFdKRXpxTDRJelRGWVZabFhUU0RMcEE
>Q: Can there be a sixth color?
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>Q: What's the difference between multicolor and hybrid?
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>Q: What is precedence?
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>Art sources.
http://digital-art-gallery.com/
http://www.artstation.com/
http://drawcrowd.com/
http://fantasygallery.net/
http://grognard.booru.org/
http://fantasy-art-engine.tumblr.com/
>Stitch cards together with
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http://www.fotor.com/features/photo-stitch.html
>/ccg/ sets (completed and in development)
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OT: >>45921777
Inspired by my other card, I made this guy.
>>45998635
This is really fucking powerful, especially for an uncommon
>>45998512
>new edition
Well that's a different Edition. I'll give it a go.
>>45998635
This is really good, on the very high end of acceptable. Make it rare and 3/1, and it's just about perfect.
>>45998730
Not a spellshaper, it's not discarding cards to mimic another card.
I changed this guy's mana costs to be number hybrids, to allow him to run in mono or dual colored decks. Whether that was a good idea or not i don't know.
>>45998867
This is ABSURD
>>45998928
I've been tricked!
First draft. Canopic Jars are what Pharaohs stored some of their organs in when they died.
>>45998730
Hexproof isn't mono-Black. Also, I'd like the last ability more if every player lost life.
>>45998754
Nice.
>>45998963
It should be every player, you're right. Should I make him G/B or B/W to account for the hexproof?
>>45998858
Not bad.
>>45998867
Way too strong. Also, BR with Prowess doesn't feel right.
>>45998910
Well, this certainly proves my hypothesis that people didn't pay attention to the edition of my threads because they're boring. I'll definitely try to make them entertaining in the future, everyone.
>>45999039
>B/W
What? Neither Black nor White get Hexproof on a regular basis. In order to get Hexproof, it should be either BG or UB.
>>45999079
Interesting. Though I think the Bestow cost should be higher. But I'd have to double-check it against existing cards to be sure.
Go go draft.
>>45998635
What the other Anons said.
>>45998730
Spellshapers discard cards to mimic the effects of instants and sorceries. So a type change is in order. Also, space between the comma and the tap symbol, just like in regular sentence use. I am not a fan of what can happen with this since it can untap itself. That usually leads to degeneracy.
>>45998754
Casting exiled cards without paying their mana cost if you don't own them is UB, typically. This could be UBG.
>>45998847
Black doesn't do tapping like this. It can have some land hate, but it's usually destruction, not tapping. Blue can tap lands though.
>>45998867
Neat. But really effing strong. Like, dear god.
>>45998903
I commented on this last time I saw it; Changes were made that I suggested, so perfectly fine.
>>45998910
It looks like E.T. is wearing someone's face. Jesus fuck. This is cool, but I think it'd be cooler if it came out as a copy of a creature in your graveyard. More interesting interaction with Delve. As it is, there's no real strategy behind it, it's just goodstuff.
>>45998933
A counter on a stick that can untap itself is going to be degenerate.
>>45998938
Neat. I like this. I dunno if it needs to be a touch pricier because of its last ability, but it's still cool as fuck.
>>45998963
This has an interesting synergy to it. I would make the non-Zombie creature also be nontoken. Might be able to mess with the cost to its benefit if you do.
>>45999136
>Intimidate
Go go retro. Card seems really cool otherwise though.
>>45999159
Very cool.
>>45999159
I remember this guy. I think he's fine.
>>45999079
I like this. I think the biggest issue is the Bestow being 1BB; the weird part is I can't see it as being 2BB; it kills too slow late-game. It's in an odd place.
>>45999202
>>45998963
>>45998730
I'm considering switching out hexproof for indestructible, given that it would give more things to think about concerning tapping, as well as letting it be removed more easily to prevent some degeneracy on his part.
>>45999159
I really like this card, very cool idea.
Unfortunately, I don't have a great way to represent "worthiness", so it just checks for being legendary. I was wondering about adding a ping effect, but I'm not sure right now.
>>45999608
This is interesting. Probably broken, but interesting.
>>45999515
Really like this one. The flavor comes out really well. Though I think it might be better if it came back as a Zombie.
>>46000010
I'm afraid that this card might be TOO strong.
>>46000010
Choose one uses the double hyphen, not a colon
The modes use bullet points.
>>45999744
It's fine but kinda boring, and letting it ping won't really help with that. You need to find a better way to represent worthiness.
>>46000222
Any suggestions?
>>46000051
It's a Mox but you also can't get rid of it AND you can choose your color
Have you ever heard of the Power 9?
>>45999634
kek
>>46000536
It was meant to be a token that can only be summoned by the bag of beans, but it was too much text for the card.
>>45999744
Maybe a Sunforger effect?
>>45999584
I made a whole cycle similar to that for my AvP cube.
>>45998754
super cool art
>>46003792
I think I would reverse the order of the flavor text. Something like it draws its power from our magics, but our flesh is what gives it form.
Just my two cents.
Card might be costed a bit aggressively but it's not crazy or anything.
>>45999457
I don't think the effect is -quite- broken but it definitely needs to be either mythic or rare and legendary
>>45999490
Breddy gud
>>45999515
Love this
>>45999537
At common this should enter tapped, otherwise good
>>45999562
Love this too
>>45999584
And this
>>45999608
Costing WUBRG makes this one great in 5 colour decks but not OP I think
>>45999634
This >>46000700 and any other effects like it mean that couldn't ever be a card
>>45999744
For 8 mana you can give it more stats or effects, or make it uncommon
>>46002127
I think it should cost 4/5 or the abilities should cost 3, otherwise good
>>46003792
Definitely needs to cost 4 and be mythic or 5 and be rare, good idea though
>>46003802
I think it should be GGU and be mythic or GGUU and be rare; good card idea but the rareness is way off
>>46003811
Looks like a card wizards has made or will be making to be honest
>>46003945
Arcane Vessel isn't that strong
>>46004005
Maybe not in standard, but you have to think about other formats too
>>46003945
>This entire post
Nonstop trolling.
>>46004154
Even in other formats he's not that strong
>>46004154
Not even remotely playable in legacy or modern, either. Any deck that can toss a ton of instants and sorceries in the bin will be playing an actual wincon.
But tell us more about the UG pump spell that should be a mythic rare.
>>46004154
Look at goyf, then look at that card, now back to goyf. Sadly, it isn't goyf. It's fine as it is.
>>46004355
I would first pick that uncommon over more than a few two color rares. Not saying it's busted, but it's quite good.
>>46001603
Remove the mana cost. A spell without a mana cost cannot be cast through conventional means.
>>46002127
Tourach the Dark One can't actually hymn to Tourach also the second ability is boring like it's kind of like Ebon Praetor but it seems tacked on. I would drop that ability and the anthem and give his BB, tap and discard to Hymn to Tourach a la Jaya Ballard.
>>46004915
It'd be kinda weird to have him giving his own hymns
>>46000010
>>46000051
>Bag of bean for 2
>pull out chicken
>indestructible blocker and free lotus petals
>nope
>>46004964
Someone had to write them
regardless I feel his abilities seem tacked on and are standard black legendary powers
give him
B Tap discard a card: Search your library for a card and put that card into your graveyard. Then shuffle your library
1B tap, discard a card: Destroy target non black creature
4BB tap, Discard a card: Target player discards two cards. If you activated this ability during your main phase, that player discards four cards instead.
Entomb, Doom Blade and Haunting Hymn, the last of which he created
>>46003824
Did you ever finish that? I'd be interested in seeing the final product.
>>45998512
>Non-Human Zombies edition!
Had this in my Drow set.
>>46004355
Should probably cost 2B
I think I've fixed this one to be a little less OP. Before it was bouncing any permanent and was cause a loss of 3 life per bounced card. Was waaaaay too OP. Now I think it's in a good spot. Agree? Disagree? Suggestions?
>>46005121
>Haunting Hymn, the last of which he created
Actually no. It was made by people familiar with the Hymn to Tourach, likely his followers, long after his death. Also, despite being associated with the Hymn, it is also more likely that it was made by his followers. And honestly, I think turning Tourach into a Black Jaya is just dull.
>>46005439
Let's try
>Whenever a non-Zombie Elf creature you control dies, you may cast ~ without paying its mana cost. If you do, draw a card.
>>46005413
I haven't made any progress in a long while. I'm getting close to the end in terms of numbers, I don't need to add very many more cards. But in terms of play testing, well, it's been years since I last tried that. No one seems to want to try it out digitally using Lackey. After a lot of searching on the internets I finally figured out how to add a custom set to Lackey... but no on was willing to play, lol. Looks like I'll have to print the whole set even though I'll likely change a good number of them and have to reprint later.
https://www.mediafire.com/?40oxbz1ym70fp81
>>45999744
>Unfortunately, I don't have a great way to represent "worthiness"
Colors would probably be your best bet. I would say "Mjolnir can only be attached to a white creature." Being legendary wouldn't have fuck-all to do with it: would any superhero (or villain) be legendary? But the color white is associated with honor, valor, courage "worthyness" traits. It wouldn't exclude creatures of other colors (Thor would be red and white IMO) but white should be the requirement.
And I feel like the Legendary requirement is pretty bleh. Having relatively random (but worthy) dudes pick up the hammer and be Thor for a while is a major thing. In fact, I would consider including a clause on the Hammer "While a card you own named Thor is in your graveyard or in exile, equipped creature is a copy of that card." because that's exactly what happens.
>>46005614
>But the color white is associated with honor, valor, courage "worthyness" traits.
And before you jump down by throat /tg/, yes I know this isn't all that white is about, white does not have a monopoly on these traits, and not all white creatures display these traits. But it's a hell of a better test for Mjolnir than "legendary" is and about the closest I can think of to what CO guy is looking for flavor-wise.
Interestingly, I think that wording would mean that a creature that LOSES the color white would automatically drop the hammer, which is neat, because Thor suddenly becoming unworthy does make him unable to wield the hammer from time to time.
>>46005556
Aw, sorry to hear that, man. Well, good luck with any and all future playtesting. I'll try to go through your set and give you some feedback on it later today.
>Bull Zebroth
I think I'd make it
>When ~ dies, each player who controls a creature that dealt damage to ~ this turn gains 3 life.
Hmm, you could definitely play around with this.
>Whenever another creature deals damage to ~, that creature's controller gains that much life.
Or
>When ~ dies during combat, if it was atracking, defending player gains 3 life. If it was blocking, attacking player gains 3 life.
>>46005614
>>46005690
Eh, I'll think on it. At this point, I might just cut the card entirely and incorporate Mjolnir as a token created by Thor when he ETB. Though I would like you to know that I've done the "This equipment turns a creature into someone else" thing and I actually do like it, with the attached pic obviously turning the equipped creature into Doctor Fate. However, I'm not going to have it mess with the name and make it legendary, because then it would get kinda weird since Equipment don't have to be controlled by the creature's controller, so you could have this odd situation where you control two Doctor Fates and have to sac one. To fix it, I'd have to add another clause that would just clutter the card, so I'm just leaving it like this.
>>46005556
>>46005695
Wait, why didn't you just upload the set file? Would've made it a lot easier to go through. And you could've added commentary to explain your cards.
>>46006088
So is she like a robot, or what? Doesn't look very much like an artifact.
>>46006111
She's a synthetic, the AVP universe's version of an android, which are actually somewhat difficult to differentiate from humans without literally pulling back their skin and seeing what's inside. I guess I should change the subtype to either Synthetic or Construct then.
Challenge time.
Design a top-down card based upon the Reply of the Zaporozhian Cossacks.
>>46006307
I'd make it a red/black instant that gives the enemy -Something/-Something for a turn. Every creature that dies this turn deals 1 damage to it's controller.
You will write them a letter such that they will die.
>>46006339
Reduce both costs by 1.
Still isn't the most interesting use of suspend, but wouldn't be terribly unplayable.
>>45999490
OP if designing for non-rotating formats, if you don't care about those, it is pretty cool though and could be fine for standard/block constructed/draft depending on the circumstance.
If you are designing for non-rotating (or if it still proves too powerful for whatever you are designing for) you could make the trigger cost some amount of something to activate.
>>45999346
I like combo decks and all, but I'm not sure the purpose of making a combo (best in combo/aggro I know) card difficult to interact with in general.
I'm not even talking about abusing the untap function, any card that makes you pay life at will turns this into 'if I have more life than you I instantly win'.
That being said, I don't know how to fix it exactly.
>>45999159
Once again, broken in older formats, fine in other ones.
>>45998933
>>45999346
Hello, fellow Fire Emblem fan!
>>46004915
>>46004964
>>46005121
>>46005486
How about this? It's stronger, but maybe more in-flavour of him actually being a necromancer, and not his legacy.
>>46009560
Second ability should make him a Human Royal. Also you should either include the Sarkhan reminder text (He doesn't lose loyalty while he's not a planeswalker.) or Gideonify him with "that's still a planeswalker. Prevent all damage that would be dealt to him this turn."
The reverse martyr effect on his first ability is kinda cool. Nearly impossible to kill him, though, and he turns into repeated removal. Not sure how much I like it.
>>46010069
No reference to any Tourach cards, do not want.
>>46010259
Thank you. I added the Human bit, but I intentionally left off the reminder text for the sake of font size. It's not actually going to print, after all.
With how slow he is, I don't anticipate the -5 being a real powerhouse -- even in the magical christmas land where he goes completely uninterrupted, you get to zap a guy five and eight turns after dropping him, or five-nine-twelve-fifteen if you're willing to take it even slower. The creature side makes him a super weak late draw.
>>46010069
I think I'd just make him combo with discard, since he's heavily associated with it.
>>46009560
Fun fact, fellow Fire Emblem fan; the 5 colors of magic line up 1:1 with the 5 gems of the Fire Emblem.
>>46010694
Ah fuck me, forgot to remove the P/T.
>>46010461
Yeah, fair enough. But on the creature side I would almost attach a clause that says if he attacked this combat. Otherwise you synergize with, I dunno, some stupid +1/+1 counter pump spell and he flips immediately.
On the other hand, you'd be playing a +1/+1 counter pump spell and that's usually a dumb thing to do, so it's probably fine. Artificially level up your hero king.
>>46010694
You can't cast it from your hand according to the first ability.
Also, I would merge the second and third abilities, then make the fifth ability read "At the beginning of your next upkeep, you lose the game."
>>46011109
Oh, wait, it's an instant. Make it you lose on your next end step then, so you can do it on their turn then untap and play.
>>46011109
>>46011157
>>46010694
>>46011341
I hope you know how ridiculously broken this is.
>>46011876
Yes I do. This is more proof of concept then actual card I think would be in the game.
>>46011881
>>46011902
I see shifted Torrent Elemental and Pull From Eternity, but I don't like that the former loses the hybridity and the latter costs one more. It hurts the meta-flavour of shifts when they have differences other than colour.
>>46012040
Oops, I don't know why Pull got +1 mana. I think it was originally riftsweeper and I forgot to change it.
>>46006088
It hadn't occurred to me that I could just upload the set. I mean, I've done it before when I've switched between computers... Thanks for the idea.
https://www.mediafire.com/?s8d8ot3a2pm3wyp
>>46005695
The reason I wanted to keep combat out of it and make it have to die in order for people to receive the benefit was because there are a lot of creatures with guns and ping abilities and stuff in the set and I wanted to make it so that it was like the Zebroth was being hunted and killed for its meat. I suppose I could change it so that it had to be during combat since most (if not all) of my ping effects only happen vs creatures that are attacking or blocking.
>>46012299
No prob.
...And no offense, but I'm really glad you did that because now I can go in and correct wording errors and update your cards. First and foremost being coding Acid blood so that it works like an actual keyword. Ever notice how flavor text on actual cards never uses the card's actual name?
>>46006307
Here's my shot at it, with a formatting correction.
>>46005483
difficult to cast 5 mana card that's a 6/3 flyer with 2 free super vapor snags on hit.
the mana cost makes it pretty situational so I would say it's alright. the only possible change I would make is changing the super vapor snag to just normal unsummons.
>>46005588
Solid common
>>46014810
Too much complexity for an uncommon, I'd put it at rare with that much text.
To make it an uncommon, I'd bring it down to 2/1 and remove the must-attack clause and make it so that another target creature gains haste instead.
>Spitfire Elemental 1R
>Creature - Elemental Warrior
>2/1
>When ~ enters the battlefield, another target creature you control gains haste until end of turn.
>Dash 1R (reminder text)
Wheel of Yawgmoth.
Part of a cycle. Basically if you don't pay the cost in the appropriate color of mana a color-appropriate drawback kicks in instead.
>>46016424
Looking at it now it's obviously undercosted. I made these a while ago.
>>46016424
>>46016491
>>46016513
>>46016557
HORROS
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It's a shame that modern MTG sees horror as UB and not BG
More Eternal Darkness stuff. Trying to do pious, WITHOUT making3 of them because timeline fuckery.That's just awkward.
>>46017051
I don't thing it needs the first hellbent clause.
>>46017130
Why? It's also a hellbent-like ability.
>>46017025
Change the first ability so you have to sac any Horror. It's a Horror itself, so if you don't sac another Horror, you'll have to sac it. Keep it simple.
It's a shame that Wizard hates Super Trample nowadays.
>>46017174
Yeah, makes sense. Fixed.
>>46016689
>>46016987
>>46017025
I just don't see those as "horrors" really. To me horrors are eldritch abominations which fuck over your sanity and are not entirely of our world. It's the sanity element that makes them horrors: they are literally named after the emotional damage they provoke. Because mind-damaging effects are U/B, it stands to reason that horrors should be U/B.
This isn't a "you're wrong" post, btw, this is a "I disagree with you" post. What is and isn't a horror is totally subjective and even WotC has gone back and forth to some degree.
>>46017778
I see. I kinda think about horrors as inexplicable beings. Unbounded by reason or any form of order. With unknown motivations or behaviors.
Kinda like black and green phyrexia. But you're right, it's something subjective.
Maybe we could agree that it varies from set to set?
>>46017878
The things you're posting I would classify as "beasts". To me the idea of green mana and horrors (which should be outside the bounds of nature) are antithetical. Eating other creatures, eating corpses, parasitism, disease, all of those are concepts well founded in the natural world, and while such beasts cause revulsion or fear, "horror" is IMO something else, an element of incomprehensibility, a "this cannot be" concept which works best with creatures that are not a part of nature as we know it.
>Maybe we could agree that it varies from set to set?
Of course it does, and there are sets in which horrors are BG. Presumably even incomprehensible extra-planar horrors are a part of nature in whatever plane they call home.
>>46018142
Well, not really all Horrors here are. The B/G are kinda like the ones you described but more like hybrids between normal Horrors and beings from the plane, and the pure G are even more "beast-like" since they represent beings from the plane that got corrupted and/or driven to Madness.
But the pure B ones are more like you described after. Their behavior cannot actually be comprehended aside from "Death and Madness will come to all". It's like horrors in this plane are corporeal representations of Death and it's aspects (Doom, Madness, Disease, etc).
>>46018311
Also, sorry if my grammar is bad. English is not my native language.
>>46018142
I guess to bridge the divide I'll post pic related, a horror that I think would fit well with your set's design.
>>46018372
Nice. It could even fit as a G/B since green also has graveyard matters mechanics and counters.
Opinions on the planeswalker for my dorf faction?
Ignore the mastercraft counter reference for now, I'm still not settled on how those work or if I even want to keep them in as an element.
I'd put this in a futureshifted frame, but number/snow hybrid only works in one frame...
>>46018584
Because objects don't remember what they were before when they change zones, this needs to be worded like so:
>...When that creature dies this turn, return {a card named} Nightgaunt from its owner's graveyard to the battlefield under its owner's control.
>>46018372
Seconding the G/B suggestion. I like the way it's constantly "rotting."
>>46018346
Hellbent isn't really necessary (it's a Rakdos thing), but in any case, the wording should be:
>As long as you have no cards in hand, skip your draw step.
I like the idea of being completely locked out of card draw when hellbent, but a 4/4 hexproof for 4 with a (slight) downside could be powered-up a little. Perhaps you could make the ability affect both players? That would be cool. (By the way, your grammar is pretty much perfect.)
>>46017391
>>46016424
>>46016491
>>46016513
>>46016557
The idea is interesting, but I don't think giving (for example) blue access to burn even with the downside is okay.
>>46018815
>+1: Until your next turn, whenever a creature you control blocks, put a +1/+1 counter on it.
>-2: Put an Equipment card from your hand onto the battlefield with a mastercraft counter on it. You may attach to a creature you control.
>-7: You get an emblem with "Whenever a creature you control is dealt damage, put that many +1/+1 counters on it."
>>46018584
Wouldn't three nightgaunts create an infinite loop?
1. Nightgaunt A dies and targets Nightgaunt B
2. This kills Nightgaunt B and Nightgaunt A comes back
3. Nightgaunt B dies (in step 2) and targets Nightgaunt C
4. This kills Nightgaunt C and Nightgaunt B comes back.
5. When Nightgaunt C dies (in step 4) it targets Nightgaunt A
6. Return to step 1.
Use it to generate as many ETB triggers as you want.
Also kind of silly how easily you can use this with any sac engine to just one-shot all the 1/1s on the board in one go, for free. Or if you have 2 of them out use that sac engine to kill all the 2/2s.
>>46006156
Cool card, but does she still know a son of a bitch when she sees one?
>>46005483
Four color design is just...
It's not fun. It's also not fun to review them, so I'm not even going to try.
>>45999608
I love that you used the Bringer subtype. Perfect fit. Also, amazing card.
>>45999744
Legendary is a pretty good fit. I briefly thought about "as long as equipped creature is a red and white warrior" but then I realised that was dumb.
>>46019032
Why wouldn't this work with two nightgaunts? Is it just a timing thing? Is the first nightgaunt not back from the graveyard yet when the second one is looking for something to infect?
>>45999136
That's some great flavor text.
>>45998867
I am in love with that ability. Such a cool way to use delve.
>>46012431
Wait, did I use some card's own name in the flavor text?
Also, what way did you think up for wording Acid blood? I'm all ears, because acid blood has been by far the hardest thing for me to get to work in this set.
>>46019051
>survives bolt
>immune to doom blade, go for the throat, every single counterspell
>generates stupid amounts of mana and card advantage
If this could be played in anything other than a monogreen deck, it would break Modern in half.
>>46019362
Protection doesn't stop counterspells
>>46003811
Firelit Thicket is literally the same thing, except it's a land.
>>46019310
Ugh, I meant to say REMINDER text. Yeah, reminder text should never refer to cards by name. But let me see what
Wait, you made Acid blood into a keyword? WHAT?! I thought this whole time you used the card names because you didn't know about that! UGH! Hold on, I'll save you. Just give me a few.
>>46019310
>>46019490
Also, you used parentheses in the coding for absolutely no reason. The brackets are needed, but not the parentheses.
>>46019490
>>46019526
>>46019310
Change Space Jockey so that is uses one of the normal frames that comes with MSE, or in one of the standard plugins. MSE couldn't display it and refused to save any changes to the file until I deleted it.
Oh, and here's a finished version of Acid blood, properly coded this time. Inspiration from Bushido, I think this is clear and concise.
>>46019446
I don't like the way this is worded.
>>46019676
You know, in effect, this is pretty similar to last strike. Or since the creature has power, weird last-plus-normal double strike, but on a 0-power creature it'd be like last strike.
>>46019697
>>46019676
Close.
>>46019780
Bushido's oracle text has changed, it now reads like this:
Bushido 1 (Whenever this creature blocks or becomes blocked, it gets +1/+1 until end of turn.)
Would that mean that acid blood should read like this?
Whenever this creature is dealt combat damage by a creature, it deals {param1} damage to that creature.
But that sounds really confusing.
>>46019463
>>46019780
By the way, the hell's up with Envision the Cosmos? Is it a big reference I don't get?
Oh, and you accidentally mistyped the set name as "Aliena"
>>46019862
I think WotC's new wording for the ping-strike ability greenlights that wording.
>>46019877
This is fucking bizarre and I love it.
>>46019877
Set name isn't mistyped, it's named that because I made several copies of the set ages ago "alien" "aliena" "alienb" etc. Aliena was the version of the set that worked best. I just haven't gotten around to changing it. Since then.
I fixed the space jockey for you, but acid blood is probably still messed up in this version.
https://www.mediafire.com/?s8d8ot3a2pm3wyp
>>46020018
Oh, come on man, I gave you the code. Well, it's not 100%, but it's close.
>>46019877
Also, the art on Envision the Cosmos is the concept art from Prometheus for when they were on the space jockey ship looking at the star map.
>>46020065
I meant the ability. I mean, 52? Is that, like, a DC reference?
>>46020018
Oh, and thanks for fixing the set.
And by the way, do you want to use +1/+1 counters for the set, or -1/-1 counters? Wizards really doesn't like mixing them, and I'd also like to avoid doing that.
>>46013828
I'm not sure that's the right wording.
>>46020100
Is the cards you'd have left in your library minus your hand and the first draw in a 60 card deck.
>>46020100
Turn 2, the earliest you could cast it.
60-7 for starting hand- 1 for draw.
I would have made it 50, actually.
I'm not going to apologize for this glorious mess.
>>46020018
This is also fucking bizarre, and I want to have its babies. Get rid of "artifact" , because as is it's the most practical of the choices, and who the fuck wants that. Maybe replace it with Fortification or some other weird subtype for maximum weird.
>>46020134
Only because Wizards are pathetic bitches. Real men mix counters like they mix their drinks.
>>46020100
No, it's your opening hand+1 so you can play it first turn for good effect. However, considering that this is a cube, I should probably reduce it to 32.
>>46005588
That card should not be a common.
>>46018955
Fixed Nightgaunt as said.
About the Bringer of Doom, what about buffing it to 5/5? I don't really like locking both players because of the Hexproof. I'd lead to some really unpleasant board states.
>>46019032
Well. I like combos, but this looks kinda degenerated. What about a life cost?
>>46020156
Derp, thought it cost 1U for some reason.
>>46020158
He actually does have a Fortification in here. For some reason, I think it's just the one. And it's kinda odd that the Jockey can get Tribal, but the set doesn't have any, especially given the heavy tribal theme, especially with Predator-based equipment.
>>46020158
Yes, fortification. I was originally thinking about them being able to bring their ship out of your deck. But I could fix this by making the Space Jockey ship a fortification. Muwhahahah!
>>46020174
Why not? Too complicated?
>>46020256
I know this might sound harsh, and I'm sorry for that, but now that I'm looking at your set as a whole, I have to say, it seems super disorganized. It's like you have 4 or 5 different themes in the set competing with each other but none of them get emphasized all that much.
>>46015934
I sincerely hope you realize how busted that card is.
>>46020318
Do you not realize the difference in board complexity from a creature that automatically removes from combat if it's blocked versus a
creature that can remove from combat based on the activation of an ability?
On top of that it's a 2/2 flier for two mana. I don't think you'd see that at common without a drawback.
>>46020427
Not him, but I searched with Magic Cards, and found three 2/2 creatures for 2 that always have Flying at common without any "straight" drawbacks. Leonin Skyhunter, Azorius First-Wing, and Gaea's Skyfolk. Now, the first has four printings, and is uncommon in all but one, the last two are both multicolor, though Azorius has pro enchantments, which can be a downside, and Skyfolk has flying and nothing else. But it does look like you're in the right.
>>46015934
>Wheel of fortune + Yawgmoth's Will for 3 mana
Also, this is R/B or pure B, not R. R can't cast anything from the graveyard like that. Only instants and sorceries normally.
>>46020318
Yes, + it's a 2/2 flyer for 2 with upside. The two color casting cost balances it, but I wouldn't have it at common.
>>46019283
Thanks <3
That's a nice nofun card.
>>4602357
Oh yeah, absolutely. Probably should be until your next turn only.
Original concept, do not steal
>>46020901
Should be a Tribal Enchantment -- Eldrazi Aura Curse, because why the fuck not?
>>46020930
Dear sweet mother of god, can you say limited bomb? This thing is more terrifying than Phyrexian Obliterator.
>>46020985
Nice. I'd make it tap though, since I like to make most artifacts tap if possible.
>>46020985
>Should be a Tribal Enchantment -- Eldrazi Aura Curse, because why the fuck not?
Well, because of the length of the typeline, for one.
>>46020930
You might consider bumping the cost up to 2bb.
So, I started on modifying the Aliens set. I hope the anon approves.
>>46020985
To be fair there are lots of removal, even in common, to deal with it in limited. But yeah, the cost is kinda low.
>>46021050
Yeah, I agree. It's too pushed. I'll make it 2BB.
>>46020357
Well, when it comes to rarity, I hadn't even really started to establish that. Most rarities were just a guess when I made the card.
As for themes and abilities I wanted to add in a lot of things from time spiral, one of my favorite sets. This is going to be a cube, not a commercially available set for newbies to play at FNM so I don't feel like I need to keep the number of themes or keywords to a minimum.
>>46019957
Not bad. I believe you need to state that it checks for "greater power than equipped creature's power." Should probably have a normal but expensive equip cost.
>>46021035If I made it tap, the text would spill over onto the fifth line. That would be bad.
>>46021338
I like it. Really nails the essence of BG.
>>46021338
I would remove the draw a card part, I don't think a hill giant needs that much upside.
>>46020201
Oh, that's right, there used to be tribal cards in this set. They aren't in there anymore. One of them became an enchantment, the other was completely repurposed. Newer version are on the right.
>>46021317
>>46021338
Nice!
>>46021397
>P/T modifier based on P/T modifier
Yeah, that's not confusing at all.
>>46021485
>Host tokens
I feel like this set could make good use of the capture mechanic I came up with for my drow/spiders faction.
>>46021548
All it does is reverse the effect of -1/-1 counters. Pretty simple.
>>46021397
Why not...
"~ enters the battlefield with five fungus counters on it
~ gets +1/+1 for each fungus counter on it.
When ~ dies, distribute -1/-1 counters on any number of target creatures for each fungus counter on it"
>>46021397
I wouldn't let it distribute the counters, make it a single target at most.
>>46021597
Eh, true. It is counter-intuitive though. Still, not as bad as I've seen it. Like one anon who made a card that got +3/-1 for each -1/-1 counter on it.
I always wanted to correct Soulshift.
>>46021880
>>46021907
All you've done is change the type of card it looks for. That doesn't really "fix" Soulshift, because it's still narrow as fuck, it's just narrow in different ways now.
>>46021939
It's more of a fix in a design view. At least this way every Tribal can use it. You can even make broad applications like Backup Creature or Backup Artifact.
>>46021766
I like how it works against wither and infect.
I feel weird making this keyword just before Madness coming back.
>>46023057
I know it's not what you're going for, but it really sounds like the equipped creature is literally throwing the entire crossbow at the enemy.
>>46022751
I get the tribal thing, but it being huge AND getting keywords from you controlling more Horrors is pretty strong at 4 mana, even in two colors. It's very likely that when you drop this, it's gonna be a 5/5 at least, and as long as you can defend it, you can probably keep it hexproofed for most of the time it's on the board. I'm not sure it needs to be 5 mana though, because it DOES rely on other things being around. Hm. I'm gonna go with "needs playtesting".
>>46022730
Not bad. The tutor seems a bit strong though. UU perhaps?
>>46022265
I think you need "that card" instead of "it" but other than that, looks okay. Rare though, since it's a relatively unrestricted tutor.
>>46022059
Backup is pretty cool, and I liked Soulshift. I feel like it needs to be "un-tribaled" though in a way, at least name-wise. Maybe instead use "Resonant" or something and then change the reminder text to "When this creature dies, you may return target creature card with converted mana cost 2 or less that shares a type with it from your graveyard to your hand." It makes it so you know it can be used on other things more readily.
>>46021907
Okay so this kinda throws out what I just said, if you want it to be able to fetch other types of cards. Well... I dunno then. Damage re-direction is monowhite though; this would need to cause life loss or something additional to need black.
>>46021680
Not bad. This is very playable in Limited, and I almost want to say it should either be 1G or at least uncommon.
>card
More edition crap. I wanted to make a nonhuman Jund zombie.
>>46020189
Hate to tell you, but the flavor text on this is pretty bland. Doesn't seem to have much of a flavor at all. It seems like it's trying too hard to be spooky-creepy whatever and fulfilling that via a really lame cliche.
Colorshifted card because why not?
>>46023327
>I think you need "that card" instead of "it" but other than that, looks okay. Rare though, since it's a relatively unrestricted tutor.
B-But Diabolic Tutor is uncommon nowadays. Well, it's a fairly new concept of red tutor anyway. I'll make it rare.
>Backup is pretty cool, and I liked Soulshift. I feel like it needs to be "un-tribaled" though in a way, at least name-wise. Maybe instead use "Resonant" or something and then change the reminder text to "When this creature dies, you may return target creature card with converted mana cost 2 or less that shares a type with it from your graveyard to your hand." It makes it so you know it can be used on other things more readily.
I do have a concern about it too, but it'd be fairly hard to describe since I'm trying to make it the most broad as possible.
>Okay so this kinda throws out what I just said, if you want it to be able to fetch other types of cards. Well... I dunno then. Damage re-direction is monowhite though; this would need to cause life loss or something additional to need black.
It's a heavy multicolored set, so sometimes it happes to have multicolored cards with monocolored abilities.
What about just giving him deathtouch and making it 3WB?
>Not bad. This is very playable in Limited, and I almost want to say it should either be 1G or at least uncommon.
Every set needs some solid commons. Also, it'll be hard to use both hexproof and regenerate efficiently everytime you cast.
>>46023516
No hard feelings. I'm not a good writer, even more because english is not my native language.
>>46023693
>Colorshifted card because why not?
Because Black typically doesn't do direct damage?
>>46023855
Oops, I forgot that I changed the numbers, so it's not a direct colorshifted version of Puncture Bolt. But it's inspired by it anyway.
And yes, black doesn't do direct damage normally aside from drain damage (deals damage and gains life). But it does shows up from time to time in flavorful ways like Cruel Sadist, Corpse Lunge and Pestilence-like cards.
Last card before I hit the bed.
>>46023972
Eh, true.
>>46021143
It's fine, though I abandoned tribal cards a while back. Even I knew that the set was going in too many directions. I like that it's a darksteel plate but different.
>>46025356
Oh, that's fine.
>I like that it's a darksteel plate but different.
Wow, this is how I feel about most of my cards. "It's like this other card, but just different enough so I'm not a complete hack."
For example, this thing, which is basically just a pumped Blood Artist.
New version, suggested by anon. Let's see how this does.
>>46025554
Hey, you know what card type it should look for? World.
For your consideration.
>>46026630
Not bad, though it is a strictly better Blasted Landscape.
>>46009560
Yeah it's wordy. No it's not serious. I made this a while back and it's garbage. But still.
>>46025641
I like this idea. I wanted to keep trap and curse on there too but it shrinks all the text down.
Rather unsure about the price.
But yeah, time for red to introduce a bit of clusterfuck into the frontlines and backlines.
>>46028982
That wording seems really bad
Whenever a creatures enters the battlefield it fights target creature it's controller doesn't control.normally i gatherer for this but im tired, sorry if its just as bad
>>46029031
That'd let the controller of the enchantment choose the targets.
>>46029031
I pondered that wording. However, that would make the controller of the ENCHANTMENT do the choosing.
This is 'Each player gets to pick for his own creatures'. Which took a little fiddling.
>>46029075
Which would have been fun but would have made the cost very silly as you'd be able to just feed creatures to your brick whenever they come out.
>>46029425
Not bad, though it should probably have black or white, since blue doesn't get much graveyard hate.
>>46029518
Its meant to be a mill tool, so I could put black into it but I'd prefer to keep it monoblue.
It seems inflexible enough as graveyard hate to me, although I could change it so the opponent gets to choose what gets exiled but that'd be a bit inelegant wording wise.
Alternate design
>>46029671
Have to specify where the card is coming from, so just add "from anywhere" and that'll work.
The cost is very preliminary.
>>46029876
Whenever a legendary creature enters the battlefield under your control, Bolster X, where X is that creature's converted mana cost.
You need to fix the X in bolster, it shouldn't be a mana symbol.
>>46029959
Yeah, didn't notice it.
Also fixed up the rarity. Nothing that requires a legendary to work should be common.
Turn all your card draws into Anticipate.
I wanted to do something completely oddball and came up with this. Urborg, Cursed Graveyard requires a rule adjustment, since you can cast commanders but lands can't be cast, and the intent is that nu!Urborg doesn't wind up costing you mana to keep playing. Fun fact, though: You can slap the Legendary supertype on instants and sorceries and it doesn't technically break any rules.
I want to come up with an artifact and instant legendary commander to complete the cycle, but blue would naturally be artifact and that leaves green with an instant, which feels wrong.
>>46032367
I liked Tomorrow, Azami's Familiar too.
>>46030136
Could use reminder text. Bolster was a mechanic in only two sets. Otherwise, seems incredibly niche unless included in a set revolving around legendary creatures.
>>46029952
Cute way of sneaking in cheap nonbasic land destruction, but results in turn two land D in basically every constructed format against 50% of decks. I'd probably make it 2RR, but even then, ehhh...
>>46029671
>>46029425
Buildup towards payoff. I personally like the second ability more since it almost encourages durdly mill strategies. Ability should read "Whenever a card is put into an opponent's graveyard from anywhere, ..." Also, "Of" doesn't need to be capitalized.
>>46029218
I don't see anything wrong with this. Basic common with an on-color effect. I'd only print it if the set had some sort of hand size theme, which would be odd in and of itself.
>>46028982
"Whenever a creature enters the battlefield, that creature's controller chooses target creature he or she does not control. Those creatures fight each other." Assuming you want to make it mandatory. I'd reduce the cost to 1RR, since it effectively comes with downside.
>>46028898
Should probably be rare for the tutor effect alone, but it seems so oddball that it's hard to evaluate.
>>46027288
Flash might need reminder text, but then again, it might not. I do love Zombie Horse Fish, though.
>>46027288
Also, this doesn't seem black at all, unless persist is a black thing in the set.
>>46027248
I don't really know how to reword the ability, but you should use the legendary creature's full name the first time it's mentioned in its rules text, and then you can shorten it afterwards. The ability seems really iffy though, considering damage doubling is a red effect. Also, the ability is just straight weird.
>>46026702
Should enter tapped to match the rest of the Onslaught cycle.
>>46026630
Should also enter tapped, to match the Urza's Saga cycle. Gemstone Quarry should be an uncommon or rare just because that extra ability makes it straight up better than the other cards in the cycle.
>>46025641
Absolutely bonkers infinite regenerator. If it survives long enough for you to untap, it never dies, it just accumulates up to two venom counters per turn until the controller decides to arbitrarily flip it and murder dudes. I'd change it so that it gets a venom counter on upkeep, transform on three, and attach a mana cost to the regenerate ability.
>>46025622
Falkenrath Noble flew and was uncommon, but this card hits all opponents. I don't think that's really worth it. You could afford to make the countess fatter, but she doesn't really scream "rare" to me.
>>46025554
>Ship
First ability should read "... Sacrifice this land: Destroy all nonland, non..." etc. I don't like the repeated board wipe, when all you really need to do is pay 8 mana spread across two turns and sac a land. Seems too powerful.
>>46024419
Second ability doesn't need the "as long as ~ is on the battlefield" part. Also needs rewording. "Creature cards can't enter the battlefield from graveyards." and "Creature cards can't be returned from graveyards to their owner's hands." as separate abilities. Assuming you don't care about exiling creature cards from graveyards.
>>46024276
Actually a value uncommon. I like it. Very powerful but fitting for its rarity.
>>46024012
Hah. Cute. I like it.
Came up with a new design for nu!Urborg. Also, artifact commander.
>>46033129
Ancient Tomb with an additional ability and a harsher cost. Can also be used to color screw opponents, though. I'm not a fan of lands that produce more than one mana at a time, though. Would probably be fine for anything but standard.
>>46023855
I like that the humans are red, because red is the color of booty, apparently. Good design.
>>46023693
Seems fine, if a bit boring. Puncture Bolt isn't terribly memorable, though.
>>46023327
Barely meets the criteria for rare status. It's decent, but I could see it at uncommon. Three colors to get the full effect out of it seems a bit harsh though.
>>46022751
I'd throw flying on the second ability to have two keywords from each color. Also, it seems really aggressively costed, given that you'll probably have at least a couple permanents in those colors on the board.
>>46022730
Probably make the second ability only be for creatures under your control and your own library. Looking at opponents' libraries is kinda ehhhh. Just seems weird to get extra pseudo-benefit off an opponent playing your tribe.
>>46022265
I really really like this. Very nice take on an alternate madness style ability. I also like the card itself. Tutor for your win con and cast it this turn. A+ card, but should probably be a rare given that it's a tutor.
>>46022059
I didn't like soulshift, and I don't really like dudeshift either. Not really a fan of the other abilities either.
>>46021907
Don't like condomshift either. Also this effect is white, nothing black about it, unless black gained martyr effects when I wasn't looking.
>>46021880
Don't like moralfagshift either.
>>46021680
Common fodder. I'd play it as a 23rd card in draft if I had to.
>>46021596
Capture seems super durdly and I love it. Should probably be uncommon, though? And I'm a little irked by the fact that it doesn't have a larger toughness than power, as spiders usually do.
>>46032913
>Could use reminder text. Bolster was a mechanic in only two sets. Otherwise, seems incredibly niche unless included in a set revolving around legendary creatures.
To be honest it was a take on Kamigawa's 'Legendary Matters' idea what was more worthwhile.
On the topic of 'Odd attempts to play with Kamigawa's Legends Matter theme'.
>>46028898
>>46032913
If I make it rare should it be stronger? That would also make the increased text length less of a burden.
>>46036049
Does blue really need a 4/4 for 4 that has a tutor ability stapled to it? Granted, it's a weird tutor, but it's still a tutor.
>>46036046
It seems like too many hoops to jump through with the Legendary supertype that couldn't just be done with any other tribal theme.
I had an idea.
>>46036412
The problem is that they're either going to be free upside, or necessary costs to make the spell not shit. Without double red, Feral Aggression is a tremendously shitty version of giant growth. Mindtheft is Divination, but bonus card advantage if you happen to be playing black. Mass Compleation is just ridiculous, but I appreciate the attempt at alternate charge costs.
