https://brorlandi.github.io/StarWarsIntroCreator/#!/AKJWD8ap092JzlCCcZ7D
You let it die early edition. Yay.
Hello and welcome back to /mlpswg/! You thought we were dead? Think again! There is no death, there is the Force. We were only on break. But now we're back, and ready to resume the important work of bringing you tales of ponies from a galaxy far, far away.
Primary Pastebin (contains all authors and stories): http://pastebin.com/P62yDcw1
Steam Community: http://steamcommunity.com/groups/swmlpg
Discord: https://discord.gg/014FnnCmDmGMo5KHz025
>>27685776
Went over this before posting it to make sure I didn't miss anything. If I did, let me know.
Another thing. Onii, if you're here, could you change the link to my paste in the primary bin to this? I've put the other on hiatus due to how bad I wrote it, and not wanting to clean up 4-5k pastebin lines of content.
http://pastebin.com/hW4xfmkF
Waiting for green.
>>27685776
I blame the fact that I was playing SWTOR for an unhealthy amount of time today for the threads death, either that or there was an influx of summerfags. On the plus side my Bounty Hunter looks pretty damn good now.
>>27686409
I can't pinpoint it but it looks a bit off. Like there's too much stuff on the armour.
>>27686860
Just for you, my slightly less bulky looking and more mando looking set.
GOD DANMIT YOU LET IT DIE!
>>27687089
Sorry, but this nigga needs his sleep.
>>27686924
That game worth a try by now though?
Or should I just play kotor if I get an itch for SW rpgs again?
>>27687231
Just play kotor, it's soooooo much better.
Is everybody back?
>>27687533
Just here doodling that AAT-TD from the short green yesterday.
Anyone got a request on who to put on the crew ... or well commander's seat really because that's probably going to be the only visible person.I suck at drawing people but I'll try my best.
>>27687598
Then don't draw the people. Make the tanks closed up and stuff, or just do rough outlines of people so we know they're there.
>>27687824
That kinda defeats the purpose of the exercise, but I'll take it. Mostly because I figured out that there's no good way to put too many characters on this.
I take a break for like, three days, and the thread dies?
I've failed you again, swg.
I'll have an update ready for tonight.
>>27688207
>I've failed you again
Not at all. If anything, we failed ourselves.
>>27687598
Alright there we go.
>>27688246
This
Let's talk about the story
Sarge said Anon is going back to the Jedi temple soon but said it wouldn't be happy (posted a pic of the Jedi Temple raid from TOR)
>Who is he going to fight?
>Who is he going to kill?
>What's going to happen to the Jedi?
Hey guys, I'm thinking of writing something related to this thread. Just wondering if there is anything you guys think I should keep in mind?
>>27688281
Only that the Force will be with you, always.
>>27688281
>>27688281
Keep it star wars related and you're good.
>>27688279
>Who is he going to fight?
Anyone from the main 6 i suppose.
>Who's is he going to kill?
Hopefully he backstabs Scorpan.
>What's going to happen to the Jedi?
Nothing good.
>>27688336
Vague are the answers the force gives
>>27688281
Don't make it a generic OT stormtroopers and rebels fic. We've had plenty of that and it's sorta stale. Same could be said for CW/ToR, but to a far less extent.
You don't necessarily have to limit your characters to blasters and lightsabers. Maybe the protag is a nostalgic and uses slug weapons?
Not all stories have to be about a Jedi or a Sith. While it always seems like they're the main characters in the SW universe, there are plenty of other ways you could write ithe. Some examples we have here are Droid Anon's CIS Admiral story, Solaire's Mando fic, and others.
Not much more I can say off the top of my head. Looking forward to this nonetheless.
>>27688281
Go out there and ask for feedback. When I started writing, the other writers gave me advice that I think really helped my style. Go out there and do something interesting.
>>27688279
>Who is he going to fight/kill?
Everyone. Probably kill a few side characters, maybe wound a main 6.
>What's going to happen to the Jedi?
The jedi, like the Sith, can never truly be killed off. Whether a temple is ransacked or the leaders are butchered, people will always seek out the ways of the force.
In short, they dead and they keep being killed when they show up.
>>27688281
Do something about smuggler Anon in search of treasure and romance.
>>27688666
>DH-17
Absolutely disgusting.
>>27688678
DL-44 masterrace
>>27688623
>Not all stories have to be about a Jedi or a Sith
This so much
>>27688696
>picrelated
You don't know blasters until you go full-auto Broomhandle
>>27688762
>>27688696
>>27688678
Plebs. All of you.
>>27688696
>>27688762
>>27688827
You all have shit taste.
>>27688827
>>27688858
Obligatory DC-17m shitpost
Objectively patrician taste coming through.
>>27688953
>>27688879
>>27688858
>>27688827
>>27688762
>>27688696
>>27688678
>>27688666
Just gonna destroy all the blasters that have been posted here.
>>27689012
Here's the last droid that tried.
>>27689019
hey now, some of you are on the same side
>>27689019
Kyle motherfuckin katarn!
Every second he's not canon is an affront to justice.
>>27689019
>>27689012
Best walking machine gun..
Coming today.
>>27689340
Do I really need to start to read your story now?
>>27689367
>now
yes
also is there a story behind your pic?
>>27687231
I would say its's worth at try if you haven't played it before, but that's just because I enjoy it quite a bit.
>>27689395
Not that Anon, but if I'm correct there was a story about a battle droid that was damaged during the Clone Wars and defected from the Confederate Military. This might not be it though,
>>27689431
Was TOR the one that went F2P a while ago or am I thinking of some other thing?
>>27689395
I got through a bunch of the academy parts but then I started reading the Mando one.
As for the pic, unfortunately no.
I think we brought it up here or on /co/ a few times but it'd be cool to have a story about some droid that never got deactivated that goes on some adventures on some backwater planet.
>>27689455
Oh unless >>27689437 is right. No clue though.
Just really like that pic.
>>27687231
I played a lot of SWTOR and raided for a while. If you're a SWTOR vet, I would say just go play Kotor. The Knights of the Fallen Empire expansion is not that good to be quite honestand I am salty as fuck over Bioware's decision to not have new raids because of "m-muh metrics". If you have never played SWTOR before, then the game is worth it.
>>27688696
>>27688762
>>27688827
>>27688858
>>27688879
>>27688953
>>27689012
Fucking casuals.
>>27689483
>Looks like it falls apart when you drop it
>Grip made of plastic
Get this cheap shit out of here.
>>27689483
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>>27689012
>>27688879
>>27688858
>>27688827
>>27688762
>>27688696
>>27688678
Outta my way!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wvd4oPc3_5I
>>27689518
>i can't be trusted with sensitive equipment
That's ok anon we didn't expect you to
>>27689566
>find yourself in hand to hand combat
>hit your opponent over the head with your plastic toy
>it instantly breaks leaving them unharmed
There is a reason people like sturdy and reliable blasters over this new crap.
>>27689596
>well I warned you but thanks for letting me borrow your gun anon
>whoops I used it as a club
I'll take your word for it next time
>>27689609
And now you lost me. Shitposting aside.
This might be late, but since the primary paste seems to have info that needed to be updated, I went and copied and edited it on a new paste. Link here: http://pastebin.com/DdQt92xY
If anything needs added/removed, tell me.
Changes:
Sage Dark Jedi Part II added, first half labelled part I.
Discord link added.
Updated story link for my CIS Admiral story.
>>27689609
>not bashing the head of your enemies with your gun.
You sissy shit
>>27689703
>using anything besides your bare, blood stained hands
no u
>>27689727
>I have all these blunt objects that I could use to help me kill this guy
>Gotta appear cool so I won't use them
How are you even still alive?
>>27689758
>all these blunt objects that I could use
You mean the one handgun that you rely on for ranged combat? The one you borrowed from me and which you know cannot sustain excessively rough handling?
>how are you even still alive?
I'm notthat doesn't mean I don't want my damn gun backin one piece
>>27689787
>I'm not
>>27689669
unf
>>27689830
>1000rpm
>ungodly recoil when not used with a stock
If you hold it sideways you can mow down an entire line of enemies, or clear a room for that matter, without even aiming or moving your arm.
>>27689609
>whoops I used it as a club
but anon, that's what it's for
>>27689884
>>27689526
>>>27689483
>>>27689012
>>>27688879
>>>27688858
>>>27688827
>>>27688762
>>>27688696
>>>27688678
I wish there were more of this blaster. There's only two versions of this particular model.
>>27689929
Good to see you, saberanon.
>>27690052
Likewise.
>>27689455
It is F2P but you can subscribe for more benefits, lucky for me the referral system is broken and as far as I know you can just keep using those and getting a free week of sub.
I'm disappointed that the guy with the server didn't show back up for any Jedi Academy stuff.
>>27690153
F2P players get dicked hard, though. It'd be a good move to just buy a five dollar cartel coin once and get the benefits of Preferred status.
>>27690168
True but once upon a time I did sub for a few months, the only thing I really miss is the fact I can't use artifact grade equipment
Update incoming.
Previously...
http://pastebin.com/c4yYUP6S
>During your return trip, you mostly sleep and eat.
>Fatigued from the journey, rest and food are both agreeable to you and Maud.
>When you are both awake, she is curious about your time with the Jedi.
>You reveal a number of details about the temple, the training and your friends.
>Tales about the Jedi Archives and their vastness, the animal sanctuary, the tournament where you first learned about your powers, an act that earned you your status as a Padawan and set you on the path to where you are now.
>And, of course, you tell her about your descent into the Dark Side and how you left.
>She sits and listens for a long time, speaking only when appropriate or when she has a question.
>In particular, your passing mention of a series of stones catches her interest.
>You tell her about the Muntuur stones within the Kuddaka chamber, and how it is a challenge to see how many you can lift with telekinesis.
>She mentions that she would have liked to see them and try for herself, if things had been different.
>You are glad that, even in this dark time, you have been able to forge an ally out of someone you thought would forever be a hated enemy.
>It is not lost on you that only when you allowed yourself to open up, did she as well.
>Even the most seemingly emotionless beings are still living creatures with thoughts, feelings and a heart.
>But you cannot forget that there will always be those whose hearts have been lost to the corruption of the Dark Side---like your current master, whom you are speeding towards.
>And on that note, your time is nearly up and you’re almost at your destination.
“I should warn you,” you say, changing the topic, “that when we drop out of hyperspace, if he’s activated the beacon, my head may explode.”
>”Do you think he has?”
“I started this excursion by believing he would not, so in a few minutes we’ll find out if I was right or a fool to think so.”
>>27690276
Yay
>>27690282
>The next few minutes are spent in silence until the ship drops out of hyperspace, not far from Korriban.
>An ominous sensation in the Force strikes you as you look upon the planet.
>It has always felt dark, but something on it has changed---the energy is stronger, faster, more excited.
>You look at Maud, and she senses it as well.
>”What could it be?” she asks, but you let the word hang out in the open.
>You’re busy thinking about how, as your head is not exploded, you were right.
“I guess we’ll find out,” you tell her, setting the coordinates for the Sith Academy’s hanger.
>As you enter the red atmosphere and approach the academy, you see activity below in the fields.
>Ships, and soldiers, are preparing for something.
>The Sith Army, which you have only glimpsed from time to time, is carrying supplies and loading up their ships, as well as marching in large formations.
>It is a mobilization, and one of this scale can be no drill.
>That means an attack, or an invasion, is imminent.
>You silently guide the ship into the academy hanger, where you see more ships being prepared and worked upon.
>As you land and engage the exit ramp, you feel something else as well.
>A strange familiarity that makes you hurry towards the ramp and disembark.
>As you do so, you look up and down the hanger, until you see what has caused you to feel this way.
>Coco.
>She is in her Mandalorian battle armor with her helmet off and alongside her while she works on what appears to be a starfighter of some kind, using a tool in an open panel on the wing.
>>27690292
>You approach her, somewhat dumbfounded, as this is the first time you have seen her since your last mission and night together, before Scorpan discovered the truth.
>When she looks up, you stop, and your eyes meet.
>The first thing that appears on her face is immediate and total disgust.
>She stands up, putting her hands on her hips, as her eyes narrow.
>”Hello, ‘Nito.’ Or should I say Anon?”
>She scoops up her helmet and jumps off the wing, approaching you.
>You realize that you no longer have your visor, but she knew you from a distance.
“So, you know.”
>”Lord Scorpan made me watch,” she says, stopping a few meters away. “Everything he did to you.”
>Standing very still, you simply look into her eyes and stare.
>”I watched him pick the shards of glass out of your eyes, and then cut them out. I saw him put a bomb behind your right eye.”
‘Right eye.’
>The thought surges through the back of your mind---you never knew which eye it was until now, but you’re a bit preoccupied with the mandalorian in front of you, wondering if she is going to attack you.
>She’d certainly be in her right to.
>”Nothing to say?” she says, her lip quivering only slightly. “Nothing at all? That’s fine. Because I’ve been thinking of what I would say to you when I saw you again. I’ve been thinking about almost nothing else.”
>You see a terrible fury in her eyes, and the hand gripping her helmet is tight as can be, to the point of being uncomfortable.
>And still, you don’t know what to say.
>This reunion seemed inevitable, and yet, you never planned on what you would tell her, like she apparently did.
>>27690308
>She takes a step forward and opens her mouth before closing it quickly.
>It seems like she’s having trouble properly articulating her feelings, but you can sense her emotions and you know what great, terrible scorn brews there.
>”I’ve wanted to tell you how much I hate you,” she says. “How I’ve hated you, how I’ve always hated you, from the moment you killed my father to now. How I hate you for lying to me about who you are.”
>As she takes a step nearer, she adds, “And you knew how much I hated the Jedi. You lied about who you were, about what you were…”
>Maud, having only just left the ship, approaches to listen.
>Coco notes her approach with a dart of her eyes.
>“What were you doing with her?” she asks you accusingly.
>It seems pointless to explain things to her in this state; no matter what you say, she’ll still hate you.
“Does it matter?”
>”Of course it matters!” she shouts, starting you a bit. “It matters because I love you!” Almost as an afterthought, she shakes her head. “I meant loved! Loved!”
>To your ultimate surprise, despite her best efforts to conceal it, the truth still slipped out.
>She still loves you.
>Your eyes slowly widen as you look upon her as she fights back tears, gritting her teeth.
>”I’ve wanted to hate you but I can’t. I hate myself for not being able to hate you. I want to hate everything you are but---!”
>She drops her helmet and runs up to you, slamming a hand against your chest.
>It’s not an attack, but an expression of painful frustration.
>>27690319
>”Damn you!” she says, looking up at you. “Damn you… Ever since you dropped into my life it’s been nothing but---Just, just damn you!”
“Coco, I’m sorry---“
>”Don’t you dare!” she cuts you off, tears now flowing across her cheeks. “Don’t you dare say that you’re sorry! You pretended to be someone you’re not, made me fall in love with you again, all the while knowing that I hated you and wanted you dead!”
“I did.”
>”How did you think I’d react? You played me for a fool and used me!”
>She pounds a hand on your chest as she cries, “You selfish, self-righteous, arrogant, lying bastard! You lied because you were afraid! You’re a coward! A coward, a coward, a coward! Weak! You… you…”
>You stand and accept it, even as the blows grow half-hearted and weak.
>She slumps against your chest, burying her face in your neck.
>”Damn this galaxy, why can’t I hate you… Just drop everything and hate you like I want to…”
>Slowly, you bring your arms up and attempt to hug her.
>She reacts violently and pushes you back.
>”Don’t touch me!” she shouts. “Don’t you ever touch me again!”
>She turns away and shudders as she pulls away from your reach.
>As you recompose yourself, she puts her helmet on, hiding her tear-streaked face.
>She doesn’t want you to see her like this.
“Nothing I can say would make this better,” you whisper through your mask. “I did what I did.”
>She sniffles under her helmet. “Why? Why did you lie? Because you thought I would kill you?”
“You said you would.”
>>27690326
>”Well, here we are,” she says, taking out her sword. “I keep telling myself that nothing would make me feel better than to plunge this through you, avenge my father and pay you back for what you did to me.”
>You don’t move to take out your weapon.
>Whatever she’s going to do, you’ll be ready for it.
>You’ll defend yourself if need be, but only if she means to truly kill you.
>And as she stares you down, though you cannot see her eyes beneath her mask’s visor, you can feel her burning hatred.
>After a tense moment, she lowers the songsteel sword.
>”But I don’t believe it. I want to believe it, but I can’t. I wanted to kill you. I can’t.”
>She turns, putting the sword away in its sheath.
>”Anon, Nito, Jedi, Sith---whatever you are, I don’t know and I don’t care, just know this: I’ll never forgive you,” she says, the mask only slightly muffling the pain in her voice. “I swear it.”
“I know.”
>As she walks away, she leaves a trail of despair behind her, an aura that seems almost visible in the Force.
>Though she had prepared for this meeting, planned to hate you and kill you, she cannot bring herself to kill the thing that she hates herself for loving.
>What must it have been like for her, you wonder, while you were being operated on?
>To look upon you at your most vulnerable, to see you tortured and changed?
>Did she enjoy the pain that was inflicted upon you, or lament it?
>What was she thinking about as she watched what he did to you?
>As she walks away, you close your eyes as you realize that you may never truly know.
>Whatever relationship, or fake relationship, you had with her is null.
>Even if she can’t bring herself to truly hate or kill you, she’ll forever despise what you’ve done to her, what you did to her father to save Flash, and what the Jedi did to her mother.
>>27690339
>As she walks away, you recall that bright-eyed, smiling, beautiful young girl you met on Ord Mantell.
>She was bright, and clever, and creative with the scrap she could find, and hopeful that she would one day get off that accursed planet.
>That sweet girl?
>You’ve taken her from the galaxy.
>With your treachery and lies, you stole her smile, the light in her eyes, the hope from her heart, and now the mandalorian warrior walking away from you is all that remains.
>A strong warrior, but one who hates herself.
>You did this---it wasn’t Scorpan or any other Sith, they merely helped her along, but the one who set her on this painful path?
>It was you.
>And yet, even as you find your heart sinking, you feel a cold detachment as your more pragmatic side tells you that it was always meant to be this way.
>Ever since the beginning, even while you and she made love, part of you knew that this was going to happen and had prepared you for it.
>There is more work yet to be done.
>With the same dispassionate disconnection that drove you from the Jedi even as your friends attempted to prevent it, you let out a breath and let Coco go.
>She’s just another person you let down, and failed to protect.
>Protect from whom, you wonder?
>Most of all, it is yourself.
>>27690356
More coming soon.
Pastebin is updated.
>>27689157
This is the best walking machine gun.
>>27690393
Ew.
Droideka>>>>>>>>>Bastion
>>27689691
Good work Droid Anon.
>>27690393
>Bastion
>>27690365
Another wonderful update.
Keep up the good work.
>Looking at Droid's pastebin, it's slowly starting grow, and a decent amount of new content is done
Boys looks like we're getting two dumps of green today. Hype.
>>27690365
Why must you make me feels like this... I wanted broken bones, not broken hearts.
I love it.
>>27690365
Coco truly is a tragic character.
Good jod.
>>27690888
>implying this isn't just an act
Coco will be crawling back to us.R-Right, Sarge?
>>27690365You bastard you made me sad.Legitimately upset right now.Dick.
>>27691168
OH, she will be.After we've cut her in half
>>27691168
That's one of several factors that will varry depending on what ending you get.
>>27691350
will you write out all the endings or just the one that gets chosen?
>>27691350
Don't make this CYOA please. Please!
Well I was going to keep it a secret but, as I'm not revealing anything ABOUT the choices...
>>27691371
>>27691389
>will you write out all the endings or just the one that gets chosen?
>Don't make this CYOA please. Please!
There is no "one" that will get chosen.
There are going to be five endings, each based on one of five choices YOU, THE READER are going to make when Anon faces the Shatterpoint/Sacrifice. YOU are Anon, and YOU will choose the ending, and even if you don't like it and go back and read the others, you will forever know that YOU made a choice in Anon's position, in his shoes. You made the choice, and that's the ending you're going to have to live with for the rest of your existence.
Each will be wildly different, and lead to the futures that Anon glimpsed in the cave, much like Luke glimpsed himself in Darth Vader on Dagobah.
ALL will be posted at the exact same time with links to five separate pastebins, which will each be only the ending that you chose.Only one's going to be canon though
>>27691409
>You made the choice, and that's the ending you're going to have to live with for the rest of your existence.
Sounds good.Will there be a joke ending?
>>27691467
>Will there be a joke ending?
There was heavy consideration on the "fifth path" being a joke, but no, it's going to be just as serious and in-depth as the others.
>>27691475
Aw, that's too bad. I get what you're saying though. Looking forward to what you got.
Happy Father's day everyone!
>>27691648
]Joke's on you!I don't have a father.
>>27691678
Fuck off Anakin
>>27691475
>no dog ending
I am disappoint
>>27691648
When Kylo Rends your heart
>>27691648
hes such a little shitI'm still mad he got his ass beat by Rey.
First ever green incoming
>You are scout trooper #42
>You’ve been following Lord Nyx for the past 500 klicks.
>And you still have no idea of where she’s going.
>She’s been heading in the same direction the entire time but the only thing in that direction, a small imperial outpost, which is 22,119 klicks away, or exactly 500 klicks in the OPPOSITE FUCKING DIRECTION!
>Oh, and did you mention you’re on Hoth?
>Yeah, you’re on Hoth and it’s winter.
>You’re freezing, you’ve eaten a quarter of your rations, and what makes it even worse is that nyx is in a tank top, just to rub it in.
>Why did you volunteer for this job?
>You knew it was going to be arduous, cold, and painful.
>But you were getting sick and tired of your current position and you were hoping to get a promotion out of this.
>You’re not sure if it was worth is now.
>At Least you get some eye candy, Nyx has a fine ass. And her breasts are abnormally large for a Mirialan.
>It’s been 700 klicks now and you think you see a mountain in the distance.
>You really hope she doesn't plan on climbing it.
>You’re at the foot of the mountain, it’s not very large, only about 1200 metres tall but very pointy.
>Nyx doesn't look like she’s going to climb it.
>Thank fuck.
>Infact she’s just sitting there... meditating?
>You think that’s what the general Ironwood called it.
>It’s been 2 Standard days.
>You are immeasurably bored.
>Half your rations are almost gone, and your transponder stopped working.
>At least when she was walking you could watch her boobs and ass jiggle but she hasn’t moved an inch in the last two days and still meditating.
>You’re sure that's what she’s doing now.
>And you’ve started to notice something now. She’s sweating... somehow, in this cold.
>And a large faint circle has formed around her along with strange looking symbols.
>Okay, shit just got real.
>The circle and symbols are now very well defined and are now glowing a very ominus red. And you’re pretty sure she’s floating.
>She opens her eyes and has a pained expression on her face.
>The ground starts shaking and you can see a small avalanche starting to form on the left side of the mountain.
>You’re not very worried about it though, there’s a pretty big ridge all the way up your side of the mountain so it’ll probably go around you.
>A large crack has formed on the side of the mountain and is slowly widening revealing an extremely large hall with massive stone pillars on either side.
>Nyx stands up and starts walking into the hall.
>You slowly and as carefully as possible follow her in.
>Once inside, the opening inches its way closed behind you.
>In order to avoid Nyx’ gaze you dodge between pillars and keep your footsteps as silent as possible.
>At the end of the hall you see a large statue of what looks to be a Kel Dorian looking very imposing sitting in a chair with two huge pillars that look like strange lightsabers on both sides.
>Nyx kneels before the statue and offers some kind of knobbly wooden sceptre to the statue and starts chanting.
>”Oh great and powerful Anonymous, lord of darkness and vanquisher of light, accept this offering of blood and sacrifice so that you may return once more to dispose of the jedi filth that has infested the galaxy. Please accept this sceptre of war and anguish so that the sith may rule again. Oh great and terrible Anonymous I beg of thee, come back so the jedi will rue the day they thought they could defeat us!”
>The sceptre starts floating with no support towards the statue of whom you assume to be this Anonymous fellow and starts glowing a vibrant greenish yellow.
>An opening appears on the chest of Anonymous and the sceptre disappears into it.
>The eyes of the statue start to glow and the lightsabers blaze to life, one green, one red.
>As Nyx raises her head the base of the chair starts to open with light pouring out and a tall commanding silhouette stands there.
>It starts walking towards Nyx as she kneels again.
>”I humbly welcome you back from your long sleep Master Anonymous.”
>>”Rise, young girl.”
>She does so with her head still bowed.
>>”Tell me your name.”
>Everything he says seems to resonate through the room and you barely stop yourself from speaking your own name.
>”Nyx, Master. Lord Nyx.”
>>”And you are a sith?”
>”Yes master.”
>There is a pause.
>>”Raise your head. Look into my eyes.”
>”Yes Maste-hugh.”
>She does so very eagerly but is cut off abruptly.
>She’s facing away from you so you can’t see her face but she’s making slight choking sounds.
>You hear a slight squelching noise and then a sudden-
*CRACK*
>Oh god that was the most horrible sound you’ve ever heard.
>And the sight of what he just did made you want to vomit.
>Anonymous had just twisted her head 180 degrees and her face was streaming with blood from her hollow red eye sockets.
>This was with no apparent movement, but you just knew that it was him, you just had a gut feeling.
>He suddenly looks up directly at the pillar you were hiding behind.
>You hurriedly go back behind the pillar and close your eyes, hoping against hope that he didn’t see you.
>After a few seconds you look back. He’s gone.
>Where did he-
>>”Who are you?”
>You nearly jump out of your skin and hastily turn around.
>He was right behind you.
>How did he get there so fast?
>No time. Answer him.
“Uuhhhh, n-no-one sir”
>>”Liar. I know Noone and you’re nothing like him. What is your name?”
>He says the last bit in a slightly deeper more menacing tone.
“My name is Clear Skies sir.”
>>”And you are a spy for those who oppose the sith?”
“Yes sir.”
>Why did you say that?
>>”Where is the nearest space ship capable of interstellar travel?”
>What?
>That would be the base where Nyx came from right?
>But what could he want with that?
“About 750 kilometres west of here.”
>>”Hmm”
>He hums, as if in thought.
>>”You shall guide me there. Come.”
>He starts to walk away.
>Wait, what?
“Wait what?”
>What the hell is going on?
>>”Was I not clear? You shall take me to the nearest interstellar vessel. It is rather quite simple, I should think.”
>Probably best not to argue with the guy who could rip out and cook you liver in a single stroke.
>You don’t know where you got that thought from but it felt right.
“Of Course!”
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>>27692382
All comments and criticisms are appreciated.
>>27692393
Story: I'm intrigued. No one else has written from primarily not Anon's perspective, but I love the trooper's side of things. If you plan to switch to Anon, I'm sure it'll be an easy transition.
Descriptions: Physical details are great. I can picture exactly what is going on in my mind, like watching a movie. Some of the emotions are a little blunt in my mind, though I may be a little critical. I'm not all that emotional to begin with.
Other: One of the comments given to me when I started out was to try to fit as much per post as you can. Most of it is good, though >>27692349 and >>27692356 bothered me. Just a pet peeve.
7/10 can't wait for more.
>>27692382
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>>27692335
Liked it. Got only one nitpick, that being
>Lord Nyx
I personally think it should be Lady Nyx or something of the like. It's like if you were in the military, and you called your female superior sir. Just a tiny thing that could make it better.
Also,
>Nyx
>Ever
Just kidding. Keep up the good work man.
>>27692382
A good start. I hope you continue.
>>27692356
>Kel Dorian
Just Kel Dor, actually.
Bump. Big update nearly done. This should be the last part where I borrow from Sepnon, and even then what I do borrow is only an explanation for pony magic.
>"...and because of this odd sighting, I believe we're dealing with much more than one could possibly imagine! I'll continue to observe the objects, and when they touch down the girls and I are going to investigate. I might be crazy, but I think there is much more in place than we might believe.
>Your faithful student, Twilight Sparkle."
>Well this is odd.
>Not only were you rudely awakened, but Twilight has sent you the most peculiar of letters.
>She believes something not of this world
>Either she's gone mad, or she's on to something.
>But why would she care so much? It could very well just be a few rocks.
>Oh well. Maybe she'll find something interesting.
>But if something were to go wrong...
>Better safe than sorry. Of course.
You turn to General Iron Bond on your right, saying "General. Instruct some of your guardsponies to head to Ponyville as soon as possible. They are to keep an eye on Princess Twilight Sparkle and her friends, and to follow them when they leave to investigate whatever is happening. Make sure they aren't detected."
>"But of course, Princess Celestia! I'll tend to this issue immediately!"
>He salutes and leaves the room.
>>27693238
>The next day, somewhere in Ponyville's streets.
>"You want to do WHAT, Twilight?"
"I already told you Rainbow, last night I saw these weird things falling from the sky! I want to check it out and make sure they're not dangerous."
>The already puzzled look on Dash's face twists even more.
>"How does that even make any sense!? Every time something falls from the sky you're going to investigate it?"
"But that's the thing, Rainbow! These aren't ordinary things! They're... different! I mean, wouldn't the weather team have warned us of a meteor shower if it wasn't?"
>Rainbow rubs the back of her head, looking at the ground.
>"Well... I guess I can see where you're coming from Twi. If you're so serious about these things, I've got no reason not to follow you."
>Finally!
"Good! I've already told the others, and we'll be leaving in a couple hours from now. From what I saw, the objects landed somewhere in the Everfree Forest. We'll be meeting on the edge of town around 7 o'clock. Try not to be late Rainbow, okay?"
>She shoots you a smug look before replying, "Twilight, you of all ponies should know by now that I'm not the type that leaves their friends hanging. I'm betting twenty bits I'll be there before anypony else!"
>You can't help but laugh a bit inside.
"Okay, we'll see. Talk to you later, mmkay?"
>"Sure thing, Twilight! See ya!"
>Rainbow takes off into the sky, leaving the area in a cloud of dust.
>The ponies nearby certainly aren't happy with this. Oh well, you've got something to prepare for.
>Turning around, you begin to head back to the castle.
>>27693247
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kt_WWZIHq9E (Think of this theme or something similar playing in these scenes of Anon in his ship.)
>"Sir, two of our seven probe teams have made contact on various parts of the planet. Given one week's time, they should have everything we need to know to start our operation. I'm also getting that information that Dooku promised us. Loading it onto your terminal now."
"Very good. Keep up the work, we need as much intel as we can get before heading into this. Do you have anything on our frigates that went back?"
>The droid presses a couple buttons, and his computer screen flashes red.
>"Admiral, it appears one of our frigates has gone dark. The others are still in progress of completing the objective."
>What?
>"What do you mean, 'went dark'? Have we been found out?"
>"I doubt it sir. From what is on the screen here, the ship was well on its way before it suddenly stopped transmitting signals. Not even one distress call. I calculate a 0.24% chance of contact with Republic forces. They simply wouldn't have been able to destroy the ship so efficiently, and then continue to let the others go freely with no knowledge of such an attack."
>Odd.
>What could be the cause of this?
>Some new Republic super weapon similar to Grievous' Malevolence?
>Highly unlikely. It's only been a matter of months since its destruction. They wouldn't have been able to replicate its weaponry that fast.
>Whatever it is, you just lost one of your frigates.
>That's going to cost you.
>A lot.
>>27693259
>Perhaps there's something worth salvaging from the site.
"Just keep an eye out, commander. Send some of our scout fighters to the site of the ship's destruction. Should they encounter any hostility they are to send us a beacon of their position before initiating self destruct. If they find anything worth taking back, have them report what it is. If what they report seems like it may be useful, send some shuttles with additional fighter escorts, and ensure that they retrieve the salvage."
>The tactical droid processes your instructions for a moment.
>"Noted, sir. I shall give out the order right away."
>You switch on your terminal, opening the information sent to you.
>The first line of text seems to be some sort of scramble of numbers and letters. Beneath it seems to be the first actual line of text, which seems to be serving as a precautionary statement.
>-Should the vessel receiving this transmission come under enemy attack, any and all information contained in this message is to be destroyed along with the ship carrying it.-
>Weird. You've never gotten a transmission in this format before.
>Then again, you're discovering something potentially crucial for the Confederacy.
>You continue to read the document.
>-This transmission contains all known data on Project Hope.-
>-The planet of Equis, in the unofficial Equis system, seems to be home to a wide variety of non-humanoid creatures. While they seem to be capable of speaking basic, their technology and way of life is rather primitive. Not much is known of this, but scans have shown that the inhabitants of this planet have little to no access to any form of electronic devices.-
>Great. So you're dealing with some backwater world that doesn't even have any form of modern tech.
>-The following information is highly classified. Any and all personnel qualified to see this intelligence are to enter the security code below.-
>>27693271
>That must be what that mess was at the top.
>You copy the code, and paste it into the text bar.
>Instantly, the document extends further down.
>-There is something certainly unique about this planet. Something that could be of interest to Count Dooku, or perhaps Lord Sidious. The planet of Equis has blown our scanners off the charts in midichlorian count. These readings suggest that the planet and the local populace are, in a way, heavily tied to the Force and its usage. There doesn't seem to be one spot on the planet where there isn't an extremely heavy concentration of midichlorians. With such power, it seems that the natives of Equis are born with such powers. Some intelligence officers believe that it comes to them naturally. And it may. Caution is advised when dealing with these potentially dangerous beings.-
>The document ends there, showing no more information.
>Holy shit.
>You've struck a gold mine Anonymous.
>In all your time in the Confederate Navy, you've never come upon something like this.
>At all.
>You probably didn't even need to launch those probes now that you've got this information.
>Seriously, this could change the war in the Confederacy's favor!
>Imagine the power of thousands, potentially millions, of force sensitive individuals fighting for you! For the Separatist Alliance!
>Those Republic dogs would be annihilated in such a campaign!
>You start to feel giddy inside, realizing what potential is being left in your hands.
>Your campaign here has to be a success.
>The Confederacy, your career, everything could depend on it.
>>27693287
>6:57 PM, near the edge of Ponyville.
>"Where is everypony? I thought you said they would be here?"
"Relax Spike, we've still got a couple minutes. They'll be here, they always are."
>Spike starts to kick his feet in the dirt, obviously bored.
>"Well they better hurry up, we've been out here for an hour! Did we honestly need to come this early?"
"Duh, how else wo-", your response is cut short by the loud rumble of a wagon coming in from town
>Taking a closer look, you can tell that Applejack and her brother, Big Mac, are pulling it, while the others ride in the back.
>"Ugh, of course they get her right when I start to complain. Just my luck!", Spike says, sitting down with a pout.
>The wagon arrives after about thirty seconds, and the ponies begin to pile out.
>Applejack is the first to greet you, embracing you with a hug.
>"Well Howdy there Twilight! Mighty nice to see you!"
>You break the short-lived hug.
"Same for you, Applejack. How was it getting here?"
>She replies almost instantly, "Wasn't too bad, besides the hassle of gettin' everypony in the wagon. Mac here wanted to tag along so he could take it back when we're done here. He'll be back to pick us up when we're outta the forest."
>Well, if anything she's practical.
>>27693296
"That's good, makes things easier I suppose. You girls about ready to head out?"
>In unison the four of them reply similar responses, agreeing with your statement.
"Alright then. We just need to wait for Rainbow, and we'll be all set."
>"Oh dear, is that mare late again? I thought she might've learned her lesson last time!"
"Oh believe me Rarity, she'll be here any moment now."
>As if on cue, the blue mare zips in from the sky, landing in the middle of the group.
>She's panting heavily, like after a long exercise.
>After noticing the looks she's getting, she stands up straight.
>Batting a hoof, she says, "Okay, okay I was late. Nag me about it later, won't ya? I thought we had something to do here?"
>You roll your eyes at your response, and you can hear several giggles coming from your friends.
"Okay, now that we've got everypony, are we ready to get moving?"
>You get the same response as before, but Rainbow merely gives you an annoyed mumble.
"Right. Let's go girls, we've got some objects to find!"
>You take your first step into the forest.
>None of you seemed to notice the snap of a twig behind you.
>>27693303
Aaaaand that wraps that up. Feels good to finally get that out.
I'd very much like to know what you think about this story.
Is it decent so far?
Does it seem like something worth continuing?
Is my Star Wars/technical lingo good? How could I improve?
What would you like to see next?
What are somethings you didn't like about this?
Answers to any of these would make my day. Feedback and criticism from you guys is what makes or breaks a story, and I sure as hell need some to make sure I'm not screwing myself over. I'll enjoy reading what some of you have to say, and will most certainly take it all into account when writing the next bits.
>>27693323
I really enjoyed it. I'll leave a bigger criticism next time, because I'm tired now, but you're doing well. I'll post more tomorrow, promise
>>27693303
Back again. Fixed a couple errors in the bin. My mistake. http://pastebin.com/hW4xfmkF
>>27693296
Is it bad that I'm more interested in what happened to that frigate than the ponies looking for the probes?
>>27693323
I like the direction your going, but maybe read your story out-loud to yourself before posting, from past experiences doing this can help find a lot of errors like the ones your running into.
Bumping before I pass the fuck out and the thread dies again.
>>27694525
>>27691409
Wait a minute, i-is th-the ride ending? B-but I'm not ready to get out. Hold me...
>>27695444
Not yet, but soon.
But Anon, Dark Jedi has gone on for a long while now.
It's time it came to an end.
>>27695511
You mentioned that you would make a rewrite in the future, something about adding in smut.
Are you ending the entire "series" or just Dark Jedi? if it's the latter you make me sad.
>>27695602
*Ment former
>>27695511
I've been reading since the beginning and I'll be reading til the big finish. I don't want it to end, but I've prepared myself.
>>27695511
So I guess we can expect to beHowling at the moonlater then.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zUQiUFZ5RDw
>>27695602
Whole series. Been thinking about finishing and editing the side stories and adding links to them in the Anon Jedi pastes, as optional things you could read while reading the story.
Smut is still a big maybe. Might do it just for fun.
>>27695859
You can absolutely count on it.
I don't know if this year will be the last, but Anon Werewolf 3 is a definite.
>>27695904
Oh well. As long as you don't disappear again we are good.
>>27695914
Don't forget about those epilogues you promised. I'm expecting at least three of them before Anon Werewolf 3.
Will you be making your own thread or will you post on Fingerbang?
Busy day today, but I will try to make time to write. Update by Thursday, so don't go anywhere.
>>27695904
I can't help but think that as soon as you're done with your story, this thread will just wallow in emptiness for a little while before it dies forever. Even if the other writers aren't done with their stuff yet.
>>27696481
Ouch. At least I try, y'know? I just wish some people could take a break from shilling Sarge's story, and give the other content creators and I a couple pointers. No offense to Sarge or anything, his story is great, but it seems like when everyone else dumps green it gets lost in the sea of praise for Sarge's story and bumps for the thread. Not sure how to say this without pissing off half of the people on this thread, but if I or one of the other writers ask for feedback or criticism, we might get a response or two, but nothing interesting in particular. If Sarge were to do something similar, he'd be swarmed with replies and comments on where to take his story and what to do, y'know? I'm sorry if I come off as an attention whore here, maybe it's because my story is still in its infancy and needs time to develop. It's just kinda bothered me lately. I dunno. Maybe I'm just overreacting like a little bitch.
tl;dr: Smaller content creators such as I and other writers are getting drowned out in praise and cheers for Sarge. Would appreciate if we got some feedback too. Nothing against you Sarge, honest.
>>27696550
Well you have a point, then again it's no different from other thread with this type of content. A lot of people will read one prominent thing because that's their interest.
>>27696550
Thanks for being the one brave enough to say it.
>>27696550
I agree with you but some of us anon's out hereMostly targeting myselfare pretty shit writers and in turn, pretty shit at giving advice. Do I enjoy your story, yes, and I even tried to give you some advice, see >>27693788 but that's about all I can do when it comes to criticizing. As for Sarges popularity, if it weren't for his story these threads probably would have died a long time ago because the only early writers we have left are Sarge and Oni ChanRIP Sepnon. I'll compare it to how Disney is taking Star Wars now, we get the main trilogy every two years but we need people to fill the gap like with the anthology movies and novels and Sarge is the main trilogy at the moment. In conclusion, take about a quarter of what I said seriously, I feel kind of stressed out right now and I just needed to rant, I still love all you beautiful faggots, and sorry, yes I said sorry on the internet, if I pissed anyone off even more.I actually feel so much better after that
>>27696965
Thanks for that advice by the way. Definitely helped me clean the story a bit.
>>27696550
You're not alone there, friend. I, for one, have felt that way in the past too.However, because of this, it has made the few responses I do receive a lot more meaningful to me. Thanks again, you Anons. It really does mean a lot.
>>27688270
That looks pretty fucking sick. Surprised I didn't notice this earlier. Is that an original design? Would you mind if I maybeincluded it in my story?
>>27697309
I believe the acclamator was for Churro's story, Midnight's ship. but I forget what the other ship even is or if it's in anyone's story.
>>27697309
If you call sticking a bigger gun on an AAT original, then yes.
Called the AAT-TD, for tank destroyer, it is meant for just that, destroying hostile armour. Also commonly used as a short range howitzer or bunker buster.
The main gun has comparatively limited traverse due to its sheer length and more often than not crews would have to aim the entire tank at their targets. As a result frontal armour is as thick as it gets. However the side and rear are more lightly armoured than a standard AAT. In an attempt to make it easier to conceal it is also slightly lower than the base model.
And not at all I doubt I'll continue that short green I had with it.
>>27697337
Added that myself for shits and giggles. They are space pirates/privateers.
>>27696550
Back when I wrote for Fingerbang, they said I had the cleanest dick because people were so fond of sucking on it.
But every thread I've ever been in, from this one to Fingerbang, to my werewolf threads, every story I write or have written, I wish would be discussed more. I get my posts and (You)s, sure, but always as a writer I crave more. I want more than just praise, I want critique, I want people to call me out on things they don't like, I want to know what I'm doing right or wrong or well or badly because I'll never be so perfect that I'll no longer need criticism.
But this is 4chan, and I've come to accept it. You'll have your moments of praise but they'll be as short as they are sweet. A thread like this survives more on bumps than it does on actual story discussion, as much as I hate it, and I try to provoke it where I can. I try and keep in mind that there are always plenty of lurkers and those who read the story without commenting on it, even though we'll never know how many or how they feel about it. Because the nature of this place, the nature of the internet is that once you've consumed something, you just move on and consume something else. If the thread doesn't have content, nothing to consume, it dies.
But this IS a different kind of case, because I started the first thread and the first green was mine, and it's been my story that's helped keep the thread alive and it's why I've sometimes felt stressed about my obligation to the story and the readers/fans, is that without my story, the thread died once before and when I no longer update, will anyone else? Maybe, maybe not. When I didn't, the thread died, and that made me feel badly for the others like you whose work now goes unread and unsung. Sometimes I read your work and comment on it, as an anon. I don't always, though.
I'm sorry that your work seems like it falls by the wayside.
>>27697456
I just realized I was looking at the wrong image I saw the thumbnail and thought Droid was looking at the ships, not the tank. Well i got my answer anyways.
>>27697482
You two can hug it out now.
>>27697572
no u
>>27697596
What the fuck is that shit Jesus Christ
>>27697596
>>27697596
This is so great
>>27697596
words fail me
>>27697789
I know.
>>27697596
>>27697876
What the fuck is that
>>27697876
Someone drew that. Someone actually sat down and fucking drew that abomination, and then said to themselves "This is good, I'm proud of this" and then proceeded to knowingly post it. ON PURPOSE!
>>27697927
Hey man don't be an asshole. I for one find it inspiring that someone overcame their debilitating blindness and double amputation.
>>27697949
Ok I'll give you that. It is somewhat impressive that he was to draw with only his erect penis.
>>27697992
>>27697949
>>27697927
>>27697914
More for your suffering.
>>27698112
forgot pic.
>>27698121
>>27698121
>>27698121
This has to be sexual. I don't know how it is sexual, but it's the only reason I can find for someone continuing to do this.
>>27690356
>>As she walks away, you recall that bright-eyed, smiling, beautiful young girl you met on Ord Mantell.
>>She was bright, and clever, and creative with the scrap she could find, and hopeful that she would one day get off that accursed planet.
>>That sweet girl?
>>You’ve taken her from the galaxy.
>>With your treachery and lies, you stole her smile, the light in her eyes, the hope from her heart, and now the mandalorian warrior walking away from you is all that remains.
>>A strong warrior, but one who hates herself.
>>You did this---it wasn’t Scorpan or any other Sith, they merely helped her along, but the one who set her on this painful path?
>>It was you.
Pic related is how deeply you just cut me
>>27698276
Link to the guy's page. I found it like twenty minutes before I posted the first one. His older images are the most hysterical. http://ryanthegreat777.deviantart.com/
>>27698347
>that guy that loses his hand
>that other guy that gets it in the face
Fucking brutal
More green incoming.
>It’s been two standard days.
>And Anonymous, you’re 99% sure that’s his name, hasn’t said a word since the last time.
>The few times you’ve been able to muster up the courage needed to speak without being spoken to in front of the terrifying Kel Dor, he hasn’t even looked at you.
>The nights have been somehow even lonelier than before. At least when you were tailing Nyx you could be sure that you were in the presence of a person. But him?
>He acts almost like a droid.
>He didn’t want to eat, he refused the extra coat you offered and the past two nights he hasn’t even visibly sleept.
>All he does is sit down cross legged and not move throughout the night, eyes open.
>Your rational side says that Anonymous is a living, breathing, sentient lifeform, yet your instincts say that he might just be a very good droid replica.
>Lets hope he warms up to you.
>Or kills you.
>You’re not sure which is preferable.
>Day 6
>You almost fell down a cliff today.
>Well you say almost.
>You *fell* off a cliff today but Anonymous saved you.
>It felt as if you were still falling but nothing was moving around you, except for Anonymous’ gaze which followed you all the way back to safety.
>Once you were once again on the ground the feeling ceased and the snow began falling again.
>Then his eyes left you and he continued walking as if nothing happened.
>When you said thank you there was no reaction, except you think you may have seen the slightest ascent of his breath-mask but you are in no way sure.
>You’re quite close to the imperial base now.
>Only about a day and a halfs worth of travel.
>When you mentioned this to Anonymous-
>Drum roll please
>There was no reaction. Just like normal.
>It only now occurs to you: what’s Anonymous is going to do once you reach the base?
>There are no Kel Dor allied to the Empire. Not after the Dorin wars.
>After a few minutes of psyching yourself up you ask.
“So, uh, what will you do once we reach the base? It’s Imperial and they don’t much like the Kel Dor. They’ll probably shoot you on sight.”
>”I shall ask them if I may have the ship.”
“And if they don’t let you?”
>”I will ask firmly.”
>You are walking towards the base.
>It’s easily visible now. You can even see some soldiers patrolling outside.
>The base itself is relatively small but still manages to have 5 metre high walls surrounding it and a slightly taller tower on each corner.
>Anonymous looks quite calm but you are starting to get very nervous.
>One of the soldiers spots you and you can hear yelling.
>There is someone standing atop one of the towers holding what look like binoculars.
>Once you get moderately close to the gate one of the more important looking soldiers yells-
>>”STOP! State your business Kel Dor!”
>”I am here to acquire a ship capable of interstellar travel. Are you in possession of one?”
>>”And why would we lend a ship to you?”
>The soldier says derisively.
>”Because if you don’t, I will kill you all.”
>>>”HAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHA!”
>The laughing comes from inside as well as from the important looking soldier.
>>”FIRE!”
>Suddenly a dozen heavily armed imperial soldiers pop up from behind the wall and fire some very dangerous looking DC-15A blaster rifles at you.
>The reason you are able to describe them is because all the bolts stopped in mid air.
>The one on the tower has a look of utter terror and disbelief on his face and mouths the word “jedi”.
>”No. I am no jedi.”
>The “not jedi” says calmly.
>”I’m my own thing.”
>Just as he says this the bolts fly back towards the imperials, hitting every single one directly in the head.
>All except the mouthy one. Who promptly falls off the tower.
>Anonymous, still calm, walks up to the gate and it opens for him.
>As you step inside the base you notice that the rude one was floating in midair, much like you had a day ago.
>He looks terrified as Anonymous walks up to him now looking far more menacing as he says in the same deep tone he had used on you.
>”Where is your emergency escape ship. I know you have one.”
>>”I don’t know! Only the CO kn-
*CRACK*
>>”AAAAARGHGGGGAARRRGH”
>His chest now looks like a pasta bowl and he coughs up blood as his eyes run with blood.
>You vomit.
>”You are the commanding officer here. Do *NOT* lie to me, I will know and you will only make this more painful for yourself.”
>>”It’s in the hangar. On the left. The code is 800835. Please don’t-”
*SLICE*
>He’s cut off as his head is cleanly severed and blood sprays out of both body and torso.
>You dry heave, having no more vomit to give, having made the mistake of looking up again.
>Not wanting to see anything more horrific you decide to curl up in a ball and close your eyes.
>You hear footsteps walking away from you.
>Then hangar doors opening and finally the sound of engines fading.
>You’re never going on another scout mission again.
I think I'll slow down now. I need to plan more.
>>27698845
I like how the story is progressing. You display the pain and suffering brutally and the fear with detail.
I have a hard time distinguishing some of your "He"s and "Him"s from other people. It takes me a couple read throughs of a line to figure out who is who sometimes. Though this could just be me misreading.
8/10 Definitely want more.
>>27698703
Interesting. Is Anonymous supposed to be a dark, Sith lord type character? Another thing I thought interesting was that the Imperials wielded DC-15 rifles. Does that mean that this takes place during the Dark Times after the Jedi Purge?
As for your writing, it was good for the most part, although I noticed a couple grammatical errors here and there. Not much else to complain about really. Looking forward to your next dump.
>>27699002
You have no idea how happy I am to hear someone say that about literally the first story I've ever written in any kind of serious manner.Humble brag
>>27699034
I know the feel bro. Keep up the good work!
>>27699034
>>27689455
>>27689367
Yes, there is I believe.
>>27689437 is right, I think it was a comic, but the story most certainly is a part of the eu.
>>27699616
Found it.
http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Lone_battle_droid
>>27699034
I understood that reference.
>>27696550
Thanks to that picture, I'm going to read every one of your posts in Carl's voice now.
Thanks.
I finished this earlier but I was busy with a game of Star Wars miniatures.I lost hard and was super salty
Here's an update for you.
>>27690356
>As she leaves, you sense another approaching, a darker aura but one just as emotionally turbulent.
>Scorpan.
>You turn around and look as he storms across the hanger towards you, with two black-robed attendants behind him.
>The bothan’s eyes are flaring red, a crimson to match the color of his skin.
>When he stops, though he is composed, he is positively fuming beneath and struggling to keep it from exploding outwards.
>The veins on his neck and forehead have never been thicker.
>"Nito," he growls through tightly-clenched teeth. "Kneel."
>You face him fully, approach him, and promptly get on one knee, bowing your head.
"I have retuned, my master."
>"And who gave you permission to leave?"
"I left of my own will, Lord Scorpan."
>He takes out the remote and presses a button, activating the disorienting HUD in your eyes.
>"Your own will? Your OWN will? You HAVE no will!"
>He lifts up a hand and you with it, choking you through the Force.
>"You are nothing! You are my creation, my tool! When you left, you disobeyed me!"
>He swings his arm to one side, hurling you against a wall.
>Maud watches as Scorpan storms over, grabs you by the top of your head and forces your face to look up into his own.
>Through the flashing screens and menus that assault your mind, you see him staring down at you with utter contempt.
>"You are going to tell me where you were, and what you did!"
"Master..." you say, tasting a bit of blood in your mouth before swallowing it. "I went to Mestare."
>>27700867
>His eyes narrow. "And?"
"And I brought Maud with me, when she threatened to turn me over to you."
>He looks back at the umbaran and lets go of you.
>There is a suspicion in his eyes, but even he is not sure what Maud's involvement in your leaving could mean.
>"And just why did you do this?" he asks, accusingly pointing a finger at her.
>You stare at her as well as you stand back up; if ever there was a chance for her to betray you to gain favor with Scorpan, now is the time.
>But you don't think she will.
>Maud stares back at him, assuming her monotone voice and stone-like personality.
>"I went with him to ensure that he did not betray the Sith. He didn't."
>Scorpan looks between her and you, before asking both, "And what did you find on Mestare, exactly?"
"I discovered the camp you left there," you answer first. "Captain Oriel and his men are on schedule. I brought the first shipment of completed crystals for you, master."
>Once more, the Sith Lord looks at you both, discerning if there is some underlying lie behind it all.
>"That is not what I wanted to know," he says, approaching you and standing tall as he looks down. "What did you find on Mestare, Nito?"
"I went there to find if you were right, my lord. You were. There was nothing. No temple, no spirit."
>He straightens a bit; he seems to be calmed by this news.
>You need to play this up to him.
"I found nothing, and now I know you were always correct. I was fooled by the Dark Side. Now, there is nothing left of what was before; there is only Nito."
>Slowly, but surely, one of his brows rises as he parts his lips.
>>27700875
>"And whom do you serve, Nito?"
>Again, you kneel before him.
"Only you, my master. Only Lord Scorpan."
>He is silent for a moment before clearing this throat.
>"You will never disobey me again, Nito. From this point forward, you will forever belong to the Sith."
"Forever."
>"Good," he says, and his usual voice returns.
>He takes out the remote and deactivates the HUD, and the headache leaves with it.
>"I knew, of course, that you would return," he says as he puts away the remote. "Just as I knew that you would find nothing on Mestare. Going there was useless, but I am pleased by your delivery of the crystals."
"Would you like them taken to the armory, my master?"
>"No, we have more pressing concerns," Scorpan waves away the notion. "Rise and walk with me."
>As he turns, he pauses to reflect on Maud.
>"And as for you, young one, you are to be commended for your work as well. I appreciate you keeping an eye on my property."
>As you look at her, you see her blink when he uses the word 'property.'
>To him, with his inflated ego, it meant nothing---but you saw, in the fraction of a second that it was there, her true reaction to it.
>"I live to serve the Sith, my lord."
>"Come along as well."
>He walks, but once more stops and turns around, his eyes scanning the hanger for the first time since entering it.
>Being so preoccupied with you, he failed to notice your proximity to Coco, but now he does.
>A smile comes to his face as he leers at you.
>>27700884
>"Did you enjoy your reunion, Nito?" He leans slightly closer. "She cried, you know. She shook with rage. I think she'll be a much better warrior for the Sith now that you have given her this gift."
>He waits for your response, and a number of violent things go through your mind.
>In the end, you settle on playing your part, like he wants you to.
"Yes, master. She will."
>"And how does this make you feel?"
"I feel nothing, my master."
>He chuckles. "Good. Good."
>Even with important business going on, he doesn't miss an opportunity to laugh at your plight, and he does so as he walks, cackling to himself with every step.
>"A tragic tale if ever there were... It could bring a tear to my eye if it were a poem."
>You imagine thrusting your saber into his back, severing his spine, and cutting that laugh short.
>But you keep walking, for this is not the time nor place.
>He leads you into the large war room, with people bustling about, carrying reports to their superior officers.
>Sith soldiers and lieutenants in service to the Empire are running to and fro, but they make way to part for Scorpan as he approaches the holographic table in the room's center.
>Several other high-ranking lords, including Ahuizotl, are around the table as he approaches it.
>"The time has come," Scorpan declares, as much to them as to the two of you. "Our Emperor, in his infinite wisdom and knowledge of the Dark Side, has foreseen our imminent attack upon the Republic."
>As you take your place at his side, Ahuizotl sneers and rubs the nose at the end of his muzzle.
>>27700902
>"What is our target?" another asks.
>Scorpan waves his hand over the table, and a building appears.
>It is large and somewhat pyramid-like, with four massive towers each corner surrounding a central and even larger tower in the middle.
>You know this building well, and though your emotions are controlled and concealed, a shiver runs up your spine.
>The Jedi Temple of Coruscant.
>"You cannot mean it," Ahuizotl scoffs. "We do not have the means to mount an assault against Coruscant."
>"We need only strike two targets," Scorpan says, again waving his hand as another building appears, this one more curved and smooth. "The Senate Rotunda will be in the midst of vital talks. The senators of the Republic will be gathered and unprepared for our strike."
>Another speaks up. "The Coruscant defensive fleet matches our own. We haven't the numbers since our last major invasion of Republic space."
>"I am disturbed by your lack of faith," Scorpan says with a smile. "Our Emperor has a plan. We will not only be striking from without, but from within. For the last few years, Darth Irrstra has been maneuvering her changelings into positions within both the Senate and the Republic Navy."
'Darth Irrtra... Chrysalis.'
>You recall well her attack on the conference you and your fellow Jedi were attending, and the scar left upon your face from a changeling's talons.
>Now only one of many, but you remember it well all the same.
>"And what of the Jedi Temple? Do we still have our agents in position there as well?"
'The Dazzlings...' you recall.
>>27700912
>"Indeed. Their work has been done as effectively as can be done---when we attack the Jedi Temple, half of their new generation of students will rise up against the Jedi Council. The Jedi have sown the seeds of their own destruction, and the time for reaping is nigh."
>You begin to think about what this information means for you and your friends.
>A direct attack on the Jedi Temple by the Sith means they will be in terrible peril.
>What's more, some of the other students have been swayed by the Dazzlings into fighting for the Sith when the attack happens.
>They will be caught completely unprepared...
>"Lord Tirek and I will lead the attack upon the Jedi. You will all accompany us. Our Emperor has graciously offered a reward and personal favor to those who kill the most Jedi, but Lord Tirek has set forth another condition: none are to harm Grand Master Celestia. He desires to claim her life for himself."
>"Will the Emperor not be joining this attack?" Ahuizotl asks.
>"He has other matters to attend to."
>Though incredulous, none of the Sith speak up about their Dark Lord's orders.
>As curious as you are about the Emperor and what his involvement, or lack thereof, in the battle could imply, you are worrying about your friends.
>You only recently found hope once more even after all light seemed extinguished, but now what will happen?
>Scorpan startles you out of your thoughts, but you do not outwardly react, as he places a hand on your shoulder.
>"Nito knows well the intricacies of the Jedi Temple. That is why he will lead the attack on the Jedi Archives."
>>27700921
>You look up at him as he adds, "And he also knows well the price of failure."
After a moment of silence, you ask, "What is my mission, my master?"
>"The Jedi Archives contain a number of potentially useful Sith Holocrons locked away. Our agents have ensured that one of the students closely associated with the archives will be in a position to open the way and allow you to claim the artifacts." He smiles as his grip on your shoulder tightens. "You are, after all, one of the best fetchers of Sith artifacts among our academy."
>Who, you wonder, could they have corrupted?
>It couldn't be Twilight, so you hope.
>Trixie, perhaps?
"It will be done, my master," you reply, realizing you had not yet responded.
>Satisfied with your answer, Scorpan turns back to continue planning the assault on the temple, assigning tasks to specific Sith Lords, which gives you a chance to break away and step back.
>Maud sees you do this, but does not risk being seen speaking to you.
>Still, her eyes tell you much---she doesn't like this situation any more than you.
>But on the other hand, this attack will be a critical and crucial moment, and the slightest of changes in the plan could result in a wildly different outcome.
>Could this battle be the Shatterpoint you have been foretold of?
>You will more than likely encounter the Jedi you left behind at the temple, including and especially your friends.
>Will you be forced to kill them?
>When last you clashed with the Jedi, it was on Manaan, and you had treated it like a game.
>This won't be anything like that---lives will be on the line.
>Not just theirs, but the Republic's as well.
>>27700927
>While you've never had any love or hatred for the Republic, the attack on the senate building alone will likely take a heavy toll on the politicians.
>And how deeply infiltrated could the Republic Navy be?
>Almost immediately, you start thinking of ways you could warn your friends.
>You don't want to see them harmed---that was never what you set out to do, even if the very act of you leaving hurt them.
>But, it will likely be a large battle, and there may be opportunity to help them.
>If you are caught doing so, however...
>You see Scorpan turning back towards you and quickly clear your mind.
>As he walks away from the table, he bids you and Maud to follow once more.
>"You will accompany Nito on his assignment, Maud. Like you graciously did during his unwelcome absence, keep an eye on him. Perform well, and I may have need of you for more critical tasks in the future."
>"Yes, Lord Scorpan."
>"And as for you, Nito, make no mistake: you'll be punished more severely for this insubordination when we return from our attack. But do well on your assignment, and we will see about lessoning the torture... I'm thinking, at a minimum, your right arm's replacement. I'm a fan of symmetry, aren't you?"
"Yes, Lord Scorpan."
>"Excellent. Perhaps your legs as well, if we can find suitable parts enough. In time, you'll be as much a machine on the outside as you are on the inside, hmm? Hehehe."
"It would be my pleasure, Lord Scorpan, to become a more effective killing machine."
>"Oh, I know. But before then..." He holds out his hand. "Your weapon."
>Maud watches as you stop and look at his red palm.
>>27700937
>"Your weapon," he quickly repeats himself, clearly losing his patience.
>You take out the Vehement and hand it over.
>His fingers close around it and he walks off.
>"This little journey of yours showed me that you're not yet fully under my control yet---you still have an idea of independence. The timing of this damned invasion is inconvenient, so you get to keep your limbs for a while longer yet."
>He stops in front of a door and opens it, revealing a dark room beyond.
>"You recognize this chamber, yet?" Scorpan says with a smile. "You'll be staying in here until we leave."
'Damn,' you think, as the creeping despair that is associated with this room slowly manifests. 'I can't do anything from in there. I can't warn them...'
>Does he suspect you want to?
>"Your home awaits," Scorpan says. "Go."
>Slowly, you walk into the dark, cold chamber.
>"I'll come for you when we are ready to depart. Until then..."
>He laughs softly as he seals the door, and the last glimpse of the outside light you get is Maud.
>She seems to mouth something, speaking without words, but you cannot see what she is attempting to say in time.
>The door shuts, trapping you once more in the darkness.
>>27700949
That's all for now.
More coming soon.
>>27698392
Why do you fuel my addiction of shitty deviantart content?
>>27701402
>>27701429
Ew.
>>27701429
>Literally no teeth whatsoever
>210 posts
>32 posters
Your general is dead, just let it go already.
>>27701802
I lurk this general for a year or two now.
>>27701802
I have been here from the beginning, I intend to see it through to the end.
>>27699024
To be honest with you I know little about the extended SW history so I just decided to make it up as I go along and leave it, as well as Anons character and motivations up to debate.
However if you could direct me to a resource that list all the important events dates I would be happy to choose a time period that would best suit what I want to happen
>>27702426
Broad Summary of Legends (Old EU) events in galactic history:
http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Timeline_of_galactic_history/Legends
More specific Eras with a small summary of primary conflicts:
http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/List_of_publishing_eras
>>27701926
Is that how long it's been?
>>27701802
The Star Wars fandom goes inactive easily, but they'll be back. And in greater numbers.
Haven't seen you guys in a long time. I kinda thought you'd gotten bannedbut I'm glad to be wrong.
Have any of you guys been to Disneyland lately? I went in May, and there is Star Wars stuff absolutely everywhere. Tomorrowland is now the temporary Star Wars Land until the real one is built. With the neon and the music, it and feels exactly like Coruscant during the nighttime.
You can get these cool nametags and have your name written in Aurebesh. I bought one with my real name and one with this name, among a plethora of other souvenirs.
>>27702859
cool
>>27702758
Adigo confirmed for manlet
Thoughts on Rrogue one?
>>27701504
Those deathsticks can really fuck up a dude.
Go home and rethink your lives kids.
>>27702859
That's pretty sick.
>>27702758
That picture is the fucking shit.
>>27702859
Have you been there? Any pics?
Also, I want to apologize for my absence. Classes and work have kept me from the proper motivation to write anything. I also plan on going on a vacation in August on top of moving into a new apartment, so my thoughts have been elsewhere. I swear I will write something for this weekend. I SWEAR IT!
Forgot to mention. If there are any pastebins that need updating or posting please do so now.
>>27703638
Erm, well, in your absence I remade the paste with updates, but if you'd rather keep it under your bin look right here for the changes I made >>27689691
>>27703767
I did do that thanks.
>>27703610
Yeah, I went in May. They have changed so much since I last went. Space Mountain has been totally redone to a Star Wars theme, they replaced that God awful Michael Jackson movie with a little 10-minute Star Wars one, and music from the movies plays all the time through the park.
>>27703825
"Season of The Force" is what this little setup was called.
>>27702859
>>27703825
>>27703849
Need. So bad.
>>27703825
>>27703849
>>27703910
Must agree. Do need.
I remember going on Space Mountain, and imagining it as Star Wars themed is making me lose my mind.
>>27703910
>>27703922
Oh, the Force was felt greatly that day. I thought I'd die.
These stormtroopers were just walking around the park like it was normal.
>>27703957
"Move along citizen."
>>27703957
I still hate the new stormtrooper helmets.
>>27704067
Both variations of clone troopers are and always will be my favorite troopers.
>>27703809
Just checked it out. Looks good, but I need the link to my story changed to this
http://pastebin.com/hW4xfmkF
>>27703788
source?
>>27704229
I found it on /his/, oddly enough.
>>27703825
>>27703849
>>27703957
Stop you're making me jealous.
>>27702758
>Inquisitor adagio
i dont know why why but this fuels my dick
requesting adagio doing unf worthy poses in inquistor outfit
>>27702758
>Qt inquisitor adagio
I need more of this
Update incoming.
>>27700949
>Now alone, you slowly sit in the corner, thinking about what you are going to do.
>You don’t like this, being alone again in this room.
>It raises bad memories and has you on edge.
>You try to calm down to avoid getting too upset or lost within yourself.
>Taking a few deep breaths, you focus on what is to come.
>You'll be returning to the Jedi Temple and you'll be facing your friends on the opposite side of a conflict that is older than any of you, a feud thousands of years old.
>There will never be any chance of peace between the Jedi and the Sith, only between individuals.
'I'm going to help them,' you resolve. 'If I cannot warn them about the attack, then the least I can do is help them.'
>But if Scorpan catches wind of your scheme, how long will you last?
>He never mentioned accompanying you to the Jedi Archives, so you and Maud may be alone.
>With any luck, it will stay that way, and the two of you can make your move.
>But without any way to know how the battle will actually progress, you don't know what your move will be.
>So long as Scorpan holds the remote detonator, your life will be in jeopardy.
>Will there be an opportunity during the battle to steal it away from him?
>Perhaps while he is distracted, but he keeps it on him very closely---it would be too dangerous to take it while it was inside his cloak.
>The only chance to grab it would be while he has it out, in his hand.
>But whenever he has the remote out, it's because he's threatening to use it, which means all of his attention is focused solely on you.
>Perhaps a diversion would work, or if you had someone attack him while his attention was squarely upon you.
>>27705986
>But, with your deception about Mestare, you also know that you can lie to and manipulate your master, if only slightly.
>Therein lies the question: how to get that remote out of his hands?
>Could you use the Force to yank it out, sever his hand at the wrist, or perhaps stab him in the back?
>If the slightest mistake were made, the briefest of hesitation, it would give him all the time he needed to kill you.
>As you think about what failure could bring, you find yourself fixating upon death.
>What will happen to you when you die?
>Will you cease to be, utterly vanished?
>Or will your spirit live on, in the Force?
>You doubt that you have lived virtuously enough for that.
>The notion that your disbelief of you living on after your death because of the things you have done is what will actually keep you from doing so is quickly shot down as well, likely because of the same doubt.
>Doubt has always plagued you, always held you back.
>There have been moments where you have triumphed, but what are they in the face of your failures, your shortcomings?
>You once fooled yourself into thinking you could hide amongst the Sith, learn their ways and then simply leave with the knowledge.
>Are you just as much a fool for thinking that balance is still attainable?
>Here, in the darkness of the room, it seems as out of your reach as a peaceful eternity in whatever comes after death.
>Again, you doubt, and you slam your hand against your forehead in frustration.
>>27705994
>Your recent brush with Coco still has you emotionally turbulent, and this news of the impending attack on the Jedi Temple is only making things worse as you worry what may come.
>What if your friends all die, and you cannot help them?
>Cannot protect them?
>What will you do when all of the hope you have gained since seeing Master Luna and Sunset is crushed once more by the Dark Side?
>Is this what will happen?
>A never-ending cycle of crushing despair, followed by rising hope, only for it to be snuffed out again as quickly as one blows out a candle?
'Stop!' you think as you shake your head. 'Stop all of this! You're going to destroy yourself!'
>You stand up and feel the walls, pushing against them.
>Breathing harder and pacing around the room, you groan and lament the thoughts attacking your brain.
>Frustration mounts as the skin around your mask becomes agitated even more.
>You think you begin to hear voices in your head, faraway ones that blend into a confusing background noise of judgment and condemnation.
>They are of your former friends, losing their hope in you, judging what you have become.
>Fearing you, hating you, forgetting you.
'Stop...' you tell yourself. 'Stop it...'
>Is it the room that is doing this?
>It’s just the room, it’s making you nervous because of the time you spent here.
>Or is it all in your mind?
>Soon enough you're back on the floor, huddled in the corner, feeling vulnerable and afraid.
>>27706004
>What if you can't save them?
>What if everything goes wrong?
>What if you'll fail again?
"What if what if WHAT IF!" you shout, standing back up and pounding on the wall. "I just want to know! I just want to know!"
>You shout through your mask and your filtered voice is like sandpaper to your ears.
>Grabbing your mask, you tear at it, trying to pull it off.
>This thing you have become, Nito, you don't want it anymore.
>The game is ended, the ruse is forfeit.
>You hate it and want it to end.
>As you pull, your skin is pulled with it and your nerves cry in protest; stinging pain floods your senses.
>This serves to drown out the voices in your mind, a welcome reprieve despite the terrible pain.
>Try as you might, though, you cannot tear it off.
>In the darkness, you wail and headbutt the stone wall, bringing a bit of blood to your forehead.
>You slump down to the ground, breathing heavily, your head aching and sore.
>The bruise on your forehead throbs in tune with your rapidly beating heart.
>Eventually, after laying for a length of time you cannot be certain of, you pull yourself back up to a sitting position with your back to the wall.
>Things grow quiet and the voices cease.
>You're taken back to another darkness, one from long ago, but forever burnt into your memory.
>The mines of Kessel.
>Down there, in that abyssal dark, through the caverns of stone and cold, you fumble and fall.
>You no longer hear voices, but you do hear something else.
>>27706008
>The creatures are somewhere behind you, growing nearer and nearer with each second.
>You can hear their legs scraping against the stone, their mandibles clicking in excitement.
>As you struggle to escape, you wonder where Hero is.
>This is the part where he saves you by giving up his own life.
>But he's not here, and you're all alone.
'He's not here because he's dead,' you think.
>You stop and stand still.
"Just take me and end it," you whisper to yourself. "Just end this nightmare."
>The sounds of the energy spiders are growing louder with their increasing proximity.
>As you prepare to just let them take you, you feel a weight in your hand.
>Looking down, you see the Vehement.
>Turning it on, you are surprised to find the blade that forms to not be the fiery orange, but instead a brilliant red.
>It turns the walls around you to crimson, and like a torch in the darkness, it keeps the large creatures at bay.
>They hesitate beyond the threshold of the light, their many black, beady eyes reflecting the red light like rows of glossy crystals.
>Gripping the blade, you hold it in front of you, letting out a deep breath.
>"You needn't be afraid," you hear a voice whisper in your ear.
"No, I don't."
>"You are strong. You are stronger than you think. Use your power to conquer your fear. Do not shun it, deny it---conquer it!"
>>27706021
>Your fingers tighten around the hilt as you shout and charge at the spiders, swinging the brilliant crimson blade at them and chopping them down.
>Their semi-luminescent forms fall before you as you chop, hack, slash and slice them into charred pieces of carapace.
>And as they flee before you, as elation and satisfaction surge through your veins, the voice speaks again.
>"You have forgotten what it means to be powerful. You have forgotten what the embrace of the Dark Side can mean. No more fear. No doubt. Only certainty, only power to make what you want right be right."
>As you hold the blade and stare into its red light, you find a strange solace in those words.
>"No judgment, no masters, no chains... only the Dark Side."
>From where the spiders fled, you suddenly see a light and hear the snap of a lightsaber.
>This one is bright blue, cutting through the darkness just as terrifically as your own.
>Its owner, shrouded in shadow, charges towards you.
>"You know what you must do."
>Weapon in hand, you shout a mighty cry as you rush forward to meet him in battle.
>Just before your weapons clash against each other, you wake up with a startle.
>That was a dream, but it felt so real that you are shivering, but not because of the dream itself.
>You push yourself up from the ground and realize how cold you are, how chilling the room is.
>Looking around in the darkness, you spy nothing, even when you turn the lights on your mask back on.
>The room is empty, and yet... you feel an odd presence within this chamber, something unlike any you've ever felt before.
>You can sense it---there is life in this room other than yourself, but not life as you know it.
>It is like a shadow, dancing away from the lights of your mask wherever you cast them.
>>27706026
>Standing up, you feel around the room, but again discover no trace.
>But there is someone---something---here.
"Who's there?" you speak out loud.
>There is something, a whisper, but it is too quiet to hear.
"I know someone is there," you say again, turning slowly around.
>Your light reveals nothing.
>Slowly, you reach up and turn it off, and instead rely on the Force.
>As you attempt to discern its location, you feel the aura of it in front of you, beneath you, behind you---all around you.
"What are you?"
>There is no response, but you know you detect a mind, dark and twisted though it may be.
>Like a fog slipping away in the wind, the presence begins to leave.
>You desperately attempt to search for it, sense it, but it seems to escape through the crack in the door, the vent near the ceiling---any opening wide enough for air to reach.
>As the aura of darkness leaves you, you detect something else---something approaching the room from the outside.
>The door opens, and Scorpan is there.
>”It is time.”
“Master… How long was I…?”
>”Only a mere several hours.”
>Your eyes widen in surprise.
>How could this be?
>You don’t even remember the exact moment you slipped into unconsciousness.
>”Come along now, Nito. Your old friends are waiting.”
>He smiles and holds out his hand, displaying your lightsaber.
>After a moment of hesitation, you reach out and take it.
“I… am ready, my master.”
>”I should certainly hope so,” he smiles. “Because if you fail this mission, and if you don’t return with at least one kill to your name…”
>He pats the remote in his cloak.
>”Don’t disappoint me.”
>You stare back into his red-yellow eyes, those sallow, sunken, bloodshot orbs.
“I won’t disappoint, master.”
>>27706034
More coming soon!
Pastebin's been updated.Jedi Temple time next update
>>27706042
Here's the pastebin link to part 2 so far, not sure if I was posted in this thread yet.
http://pastebin.com/c4yYUP6S
Anon, Dark Jedi just hit about 200 pages of content. That's a lot! But we're not done yet.
See you soon.
>>27706042
>>27706042
All i can think when Scorpan is around is stab him stab him stab him stab him stab him.
