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>What is this thread about?
This thread is centered on stories about ponies being enslaved. Every kind of theme is welcome.
>I want to write my own story but I'm new to writing.
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Mare is for riding and you can't tell me otherwise.
>>27433819
So what would Rainbooner feel having the cigarette stuck out on her?
>>27433940
A warm, tingly sensation.
>>27434076
Like your partner taking a nice long marinating piss on your back?
>>27434117
SkittlesAnon plz
>>27434204
Bump
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>>27435393
The artist is russian, true?
>>27435724
What made you think that?
>>27434204
Who is that and why am I a trip?
>>27435848
Because before I saw his art, its style is particularly great, draws the most adorable, furry and cuddly ponies I've seen
>>27436023
Pastebin: http://pastebin.com/zGy7dNgp
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>Thirty five minutes.
>It was thirty five minutes before you heard the shower shut off and listened to the peppy clop-trot of the pony coming back to join the others.
>Your heart sank when you saw who it was—the one filly of the group.
>Anon stopped and turned toward the foal.
>His facade failed for a moment, and he stared at her with dread.
>A moment passed and he regained his hardened expression, just as the foal plopped herself down in line.
>”... Dinky.” Anon said, his voice hard, but underneath you could hear a tint of desperation.
>She jerked and looked up at him with a questioning gaze.
>>”You know my name?”
>He didn’t answer.
>”Dinky, how long were you in there?”
>The filly fidgeted in place, catching his tone.
>>”Uh, I don’t really know.”
>Anon’s eyes flicked toward the tool box and he tightened his fist.
>Maybe he’ll find an out for her…
>He would discipline foals if he had to.
>But he’d give them their best chance to avoid it.
>”The water ran for 37 minutes. How long did I ask you to limit yourself?”
>>”The limit…?”
>The filly’s inner eyebrows turned up at his tone and she took a slight step back.
>>”I-I forgot—I’m sorry. It just felt really good and I kinda got lost in just thinking about—m-my mom and—”
>”The rate of each shower is around 1.9 gallons per minute. You’ve used 70 gallons of heated freshwater. Each of you had a relative allowance of 10 minutes, or 19 gallons. You’ve used shower time for several others on the rig.”
>>”But it’s just water… I don’t…”
>Her eyes darted from one pony to the next, likely hoping for some support or explanation.
>The mares didn’t speak a word.
>Most knew what talking out of turn or arguing would get them, it seemed.
>”Dinky, look at me right now,” Anon said, taking a few steps toward her.
>>27436305
>Dinky looked up at him, pupils shrunken and her mouth trembling.
>She was folding to the pressure.
>Anon clasped his hands behind his back, his mouth a firm line.
>He waited for a few moments just watching her passively.
>Her eyes started to get misty.
>>”I… what do I say? I-I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to use up all the hot water.”
>Anon frowned and let out a sigh.
>”Walk forward. You’ll receive a punishment.”
>>>”No! She didn’t mean it,” Cheerilee said, leveling a look at Anon.
>Anon furrowed his brow.
>”Cheerilee? This isn’t something I expected out of you…”
>Cheerilee pursed her lips and stood still.
>>>”She’s just a foal, sir. She’s bound to make some mistakes the first time. Punishing her right out isn’t the way to help her.”
>Anon’s stern expression flickered again.
>For just a moment, you saw doubt flash across his face.
>”This isn’t something you have a say in.”
>He took another step towards Dinky.
>Cheerilee looked down at the floor, then toward the scared foal.
>She closed her eyes, shook her head.
>>>”No, it’s not right. I won’t let you.”
>She bounded across the distance and slid between Anon and the filly.
>The mare glared up at Anon, her stance spread and her muscles tensed.
>”You’re out of line, Cheerilee.”
>>>”I don’t care.”
>”It’s not your place to decide how I teach anyone here.”
>>>”Even if I’m right!?”
>...
>”Step aside.”
>>>”Punish me instead if you need to make an example.”
>”You don’t make that choice,” Anon said and started walking forward.
>Cherilee tensed her eyes widening.
>>>”D-Don’t come closer.”
>Anon ignored her and closed in on Dinky.
>Cherilee tried to muscle in between, but Anon simply held her to the side and picked up Dinky by the scruff.
>>>”N-No! Hey, leave her be!”
>Dinky started to kick and scream, saying she’d be a good filly.
>You watched, numbed to the process.
>>27436315
>After so many iterations, you’d eventually come to terms with it all.
>He’d not hurt her but they didn’t know that.
>Anon would just separate her for a few days and give her a firm talk right away.
>It still could be so much worse…
>Adults he had the stomach to be rougher with.
>They didn’t know that though.
>You also knew that he had to ignore any Martyr pleas.
>Ponies do not have control, even over their own punishments.
>Judging by the tears and yelling, Cheerilee felt awfully helpless.
>You nodded to yourself.
>That was really just the way it had to be.
>Anon wouldn’t punish her.
>And that would be her punishment.
>>>”No! Stop it! Stop it and put her down!” Cheerilee said, as she continually ran to try to be in between Anon and you at the tool cart.
>She started to cry and push against Anon, who kept ignoring her.
>>”Miss Cheerilee,” Dinky said, “What’s going on?”
>>>”Dinky… Dinky, you’re going to be fine, okay? Just…”
>She looked at the ground and and shut her eyes tight.
>>>“Whatever happens, just stay quiet and don’t show Mr. Anon any more disrespect, and listen to Rose or Lily, okay?”
>Cheerilee dashed forward, opened her mouth, and bit down hard on Anon’s leg.
>Anon gave a yell, stumbled for a few steps and dropped Dinky, who ran over to the flower sisters.
>Cheerilee kept her mouth clamped down while Anon simply tried to shake her off.
>A piece of fabric from Anon’s pants tore, sending Cheerilee tumbling to the floor.
>A small trickle of blood soaked into the pants leg and square teeth marks showed on his leg through the hole.
>Cheerilee spat out the fabric and rose to her feet.
>Anon bent down with a wince to check the wound.
>He sighed and turned back to Cheerilee.
>”You may be disappointed to hear this, Cheerilee, but it doesn’t look bad. You’re lucky. Still, injuring a staff member is a serious matter.”
>>27436326
>Anon rose to his feet and walked to her, his muscles tensed and ready this time.
>He loomed over the pony, but she returned his look with a glare of her own, and despite the height difference, she seemed to match him in some way.
>”Probably my fault for not being ready,” Anon said. “I should have known you’d go this far. In any case, if you want my attention so badly, you have it now,” he pressed a button on a remote and a line of rope lowered from the ceiling with a whirring sound.
>”Wait in that spot,” he said, and pointed where the rope touched down a few feet in front of the group.
>Cheerilee walked around him and took her place without a word.
>Anon tied her front hooves in the ropes with practiced ease, and raised the rope.
>Cheerilee gave a wince and soon she was forced up on her hindlegs.
>Anon headed to the chest, opened the top drawer, and picked up a long, jet-black whip.
>”The take away for today is simple,” he said, coming behind Cheerilee and addressing the group.
>”Dinky, the water use is bad, but I can cut it off if it gets to be a problem. Right now, all it means is that you and the rest of the trainees won’t be allowed hot showers for a while. The importance of today is to learn to follow directions, as well as to remember to always show respect to your masters.
>”Not once when I asked Dinky, did she think she’d done anything wrong until I told her. You’ll need to learn to anticipate your master's needs as well as take what they say seriously.
>”But that’s not the only important lesson today.”
>He turned to Cheerilee and her ears went back and she darted her gaze away.
>The mare was still mad but you could see her trembling from where you sat.
>>27436330
>”If any of you disobey or do something wrong, like attacking your master, the punishments can and will be severe. I assure you, that I will be one of the most severe masters, but know there are worse. Cherilee?”
>>>”...what?” she spat.
>”There will be thirty lashes.”
>Cheerilee paled and looked back at him with wide eyes.
>>>”Th-Thirty?”
>For attacking a master, that often meant a lot worse, you thought to yourself.
>At minimum other rig trainers would slap on a few for each time she had addressed him without calling him master.
>Anon looked down, his shoulders sagging just a smidge.
“Yes, Cheerilee. Keep count or we will start over.”
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>The screaming still rung in your ears when it was over.
>Cheerilee’s backside stood as a canvas of gashes, and several dripped thin red streaks down her hind legs.
>Her eyes stared lifelessly at the floor and the rope bit hard into her forelegs as she slumped forward.
>>>”Thir...ty.” Cheerilee said, nearly ten seconds after the last lash had hit.
>She sobbed quietly in the silent room, her tears having left stains across her cheeks and down her barrel.
>They and long since run out.
>A small trickle of blood leaked out of her mouth.
>She had bitten her tongue to try to hold back the screams, but that only worked for the first five lashes.
>Anon pressed a button and the rope holding Cheerilee lowered her to the floor with a whir.
>She collapsed to her side and curled her legs to her chest.
>He returned the whip to the drawer, alongside assortments of needles, pinwheels, high intensity cattle prods, and even metal tipped whips.
>All but the one whip were still covered in dust.
>”Give her some numbing ointment,” Anon said...
>You opened the chest where you kept your medical supplies and hurried to Cheerilee’s side.
>She flinched as you took a dab and pressed the cool cream to her backside.
>>27436343
”Shh, it’s okay,” you said. “This will make some of the pain go away.”
>You coated her backside and flanks as gently as you could, but she still tensed and whimpered whenever your hoof returned to her.
>She’d be out of training for a couple days by your recommendation to Anon at least.
>You sigh.
>First day was the hardest.
>You took a step back to examine her lacerations.
>Her coat and skin still featured angry criss crossed marks but she had a thin sheen of gel across them now.
>She should be feeling some numbing, you think as you screw the cap back on the container and head back to Anon’s side.
>Anon sat on his haunches and didn’t react when you came to his side.
>You looked to him for the signal to leave.
>”Cheerilee… are you going to be okay?” he said, low, almost afraid to be heard.
>You pause and turn to him with a look.
>Anon shouldn’t be asking that here, not in front of them…
>He had a job to do.
>Cheerilee curled up tightly and you saw her ears go back.
>There was only silence, not single trainee daring to speak after what they had seen.
>>>”I… I hate you,” she said.
>Anon didn’t react, instead staring blankly with tired eyes.
>Cheerilee started sobbing again.
>>>”I hate you humans so much. I hope… I hope Luna wipes every one of you out one day. And you are by far the worst of them. You’re evil, barbaric, and self righteous. When I leave this place, I never want to see you ever again. I’d rather die than come back!”
>Anon gave a slight nod and stood, motioning for you to follow to the exit.
>His lips moved, and had you not been looking at his face, you may have missed what he said.
>It was quiet, like a thought that happened to travel too far but not far enough to be said.
“I hope I never have to see you again either.”
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>>27436352
>Anon dropped into his chair like a lead weight and rolled his head to stare up at the ceiling.
>You moved in through the doorway and sat down at attention in front of his desk.
>Before dismissal, he’d decide where trainees would bed down, and which ones would get extra or less rations.
>You fidgeted in place, but didn’t speak.
>You wanted today to be over with so you could get past this.
>But at the same time… you couldn’t help but pause at how this particular day one had gone.
>Something was different with Anon this time.
>You’d been through countless first days, and Anon had made even more examples of ponies to keep them all in line.
>You never stopped hating it, but it was just part of your life.
>It didn’t get to you nowadays, and usually not him.
>Not to this extent.
>He opened a drawer and looked down, then blinked and furrowed his brow.
“Anon?”
>”...what?”
“You okay?”
>”Yep.”
“Why are you looking for your cigarettes then?”
>”Who said that’s what I was doing?”
“Oh, really now? Well I’ll let you just grab your pack of nothing then, because you don’t keep anything else there.”
>He pinched the bridge of his nose and leaned back.
>“Did you move them on me?”
”So you do want them then?”
>“I didn’t say that. I just want to know where they are.”
“I’m not giving you any.”
>He rolled his eyes.
>”You can’t just take my things. I’m technically your master until after hours. Give me my smokes please, Redheart.”
>You puffed out your chest and stuck your nose in the air.
“No.”
>”I could punish you for this, you know.”
“Yes, but I also know you won’t.”
>”You tempt fate.”
>You stuck your tongue out and gave him a wink.
“Oh, master, please don’t spank me for being such a bad pony.”
>He flashed a quick smile and you couldn’t help but grin.
>“That’s terribly inappropriate, considering things.”
“Maybe, but it got you to smile.”
>>27436359
>He nodded and the room fell quiet.
>Making him feel better felt really good sometimes.
>But there was something still eating at him.
>You had to get him to talk to you.
“Anon?” you said, coming around his desk and looking up at him earnestly this time.
“What was that back in the training room?”
>He clasped his hands and looked away from you.
>“Was thirty too much?”
“Maybe, but every other platform is worse. That’s not what I’m talking about.”
>He grumbled and leaned back in his chair.
>”Should I get out the therapy couch, doc?”
“That’s not funny, Anon—I’m trying to help you,” you said, getting up on his knees. “Something isn’t right lately. I can tell.”
>“Oh?”
“Yes. You’re irritable whenever I let you out of my sight for a while. And today just... The Anon I know is focused, strong, and unyielding, but also fair and understanding. Today? You just seemed hesitant and uncertain. It was like you were afraid.”
>He sat still, letting your words sink in, then sighed.
>“...Come here. I can’t stand it when you look up at me all worried like that.”
>Anon reached down and lifted you up.
>You suppressed a small squeal and wiggled your hind hooves as he moved you to his lap.
>Your back nestled into his broad chest, half to conceal the light blush growing on your muzzle and half because you knew he liked to pet your belly if you sat like this.
>A hand came around and combed through your tuft, and you suppressed a gasp.
>He had no idea how intimate this was for ponies, but you knew how calming it could be for humans.
>You’d do this for Anon if he wanted it, even if he didn’t know what it meant in your culture.
>No need to let on how much you loved the attention as an aside.
>This was about Anon right now.
>>27436367
>”You’re a good friend, Redheart. Better than I deserve,” he said.
>”Sometimes I just don’t know if I’m doing the right thing is all. I saw a lot of my old self in the way Cheerilee acted today. I used to think a lot like her… the job sometimes just wears on me I guess.”
“Because you’re the bad guy to them?”
>He chuckled. “Only to them, huh?”
>You flattened your ears and frowned.
“What’s that supposed to mean?”
>”I’m a slave trainer, Redheart. No matter how you look at it, I’m a bad guy.”
>You pursed your lips and you tail swished against him.
”Well… it may not be ideal but there are only so many chances for each pony. Most are lucky to get three returns before they get sent off to… those places. If things are bad for them in training, they’ll appreciate having a master who’s even half decent to them and try to stay with them.”
>You smiled and wiggled into him a bit more as you looked up at him.
“Besides you may not be a knight in shining armor, but you’re really nice deep down I think.
>He cleared his throat and you could feel him shift in the chair.
>Aw, hehe.
>Anon didn’t know how to take compliments like usual.
“Anon, do you like working here?” you said.
>He blinked at you.
>”It pays the bills. Why?”
“It just seems like you hate everything about this place some days. I mean, I don’t really want you to go, but you don’t seem happy. Do you... think about quitting ever?”
>He stopped petting you and looked up.
>”Maybe… but there’s more to it than that.”
“What? Why?”
>”Well,” he said giving a sheepish grin, “the pay is good and it’s hard to find a job right now. But I wouldn’t keep working here for that. You’re right in thinking I don’t always like it here… but if I wasn’t here, who would take my place?”
>You look up at him, eyes widened.
>>27436380
“Y-You’re not actually thinking about it, are you? They’ll put Kaine in charge while they look for a trainer from another base. They’re… really bad people, Anon.”
>He paused watching your face for a moment before putting an arm around you.
>“I’m not going anywhere. That’s my point though, Redheart. If I leave, someone just takes my place. At least as long as I’m here, I can make sure they all get some good food, and they’re not hurt too badly. I can control how much punishment they get, or how much reward they should have for being good. Besides the trainees though…”
>He hugged just a faint bit closer and your heart started to beat faster as you looked at him.
>“I have someone special I want to keep safe.”
>Your cheeks heated up and you darted your gaze to the floor.
>Anon, you big cheesy dummy.
>How the heck are you supposed to respond to that?
>An uncomfortable silence fell over the two of you.
>”Redheart? Are you blush—”
>A knock came at the door and you flew back down to the ground.
“I’ll get it!” you blurted out.
>Without turning around, you ran to the door and swung it open, opting to head out and slam it behind you.
“Hello, welcome to the trainer bay, how can I help you?” you said with a forced smile.
>A teal mare with a crescent moon cutie mark gave start and took a few steps back.
>She looked at you with a mixture of nervous apprehension and embarrassment.
>Her mane looked hand combed at best, her coat like a musty stuffed animals.
>Slightly damp marks ran from her eyes to her jaw and she darted her eyes up at you before planting them toward the floor.
>>“Good afternoon. Does Mr. Anon work here?” she said, wiping her snout and giving a sniffle.
>>27436409
That's the dump for now. I wanted to get something out before Overwatch drops, because I know I won't get anything done for a few days.
Anyhow, comments help me a lot and I hope you guys enjoyed. Up next is Moon Dust and more Redheart.
PS. For reference, the story isn't going to get less or more dark for anyone who's wondering.
Belated thanks to Rat for doodling Marble with Mayo all over her snout, though I think you took me more literal than I had anticipated.
>>27435848
Russians tend to be the best artists
Why not.
>>27436536
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>>27436556
Last dump.
>>27436460
Reading this story makes me feel like absolute trash, at least this isn't near as bad as some of the SiM stuff gets. On the other hand it is a really interesting story and I cannot help but wonder where it's all going; Is Anon going to just embrace his job and do it to help the ponies, will he become some revolutionary figure, will he become villain that he hates so much.Also thank you for going easy on Dinky, Fillies are for cuddling.
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>>27436556
>>27436569
Were there any writers behind this pony?
Cutiemark looks like I should know it.
>>27436718
Fallout Equestria?
>>27436718
Here's a hint.
>>27436409
>>27436460
Damn nigga this a good story.
>>27436305
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>>27436409
Good green....No It's a VERY good Green
>>27437128
There's a meme I haven't seen in a while.
>>27436756
That's pretty fast for a ponified version of Fallout 4.
What is the sort of slavery in it?
But why does she have a gameboy advance as her cutie mark?
>>27437390
ha fallout 4. the original fallout equestria was written in 2011 and is great. shes not a slave though.
>>27437390
>>27437454
if you want slavery to read FOE: murky number seven
>>27437482
Is it the sort of slavery that involves lots of whips, chains, pain, and living ashtrays?
Which view is it told from?
Does it alternate?
How much human versus pony is there?
>>27437810
Is it the sort of slavery that involves lots of whips, chains, pain, and living ashtrays?
yeah pretty much
Which view is it told from?
a born slave trying to survive/escape
Does it alternate?
sometimes to other ponies i guess, not a lot
How much human versus pony is there?
no humans
>>27437839
Got a link to the pastebin?
>>27437852
its not a green, its only on fimfic
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/47300/fallout-equestria---murky-number-seven
>>27437869
Isn't it also on fanfiction?
>>27437950
maybe, not that im aware of though. im pretty sure the original fallout equestria was but im not sure about murky number seven.
>>27436380
>“Besides you may not be a knight in shining armor, but you’re really nice deep down I think.
Even you can be Anon, just follow your heart
>>27434204
He's DEAD, Anon!
He's been dead for months and nothing will ever bring him back!
>mfw Skittles will never get expensive wing surgery to repair her broken psyche
>>27436460
Great work and return ephemeral, for a moment I thought you had abandoned your story
Have another tale of rebellious derring-do, Horse Disenfranchisement Thread.
>>27431250
>Be pony slave.
>"Hey, equine servant, I need a cup of coffee, stat."
"Of course, master, one sugar or two?"
>"One, I don't want to get too much sugar in my system this early in the morning."
>You trot off to the kitchen, putting on a happy, eager facade.
>In the face of all reason you are able to make and pour a cup of coffee for your master with no issue despite the fact that you are working with just your mouth and hooves.
>Now you just have to add the sugar.
>You put in one sugar.
>It is finished to his exact specifications, just as he would expect of a good pony.
>Now, you could just take it to your master, but instead you decide to pull off an act of extreme rebellion, one that you have been planning for weeks.
>Here it goes.
>You add an additional sugar to his coffee.
>The now improperly prepared coffee goes onto a small plate, and you pick up the plate with your mouth.
>You trot back to your master with coffee in tow, and place it down in front of him.
>"Thank you."
>His approval fills you with disgust, but you don't show it.
>You sit in front of him as he drinks the concoction, waiting like a good little pony.
>After an eternity, he finishes drinking and sets the mug pack down on the plate.
>Like a well trained mare, you pick up the mug and plate ensemble and head off for the kitchen once more.
>You spiked his drink and got away with it, Operation Freed Freedom is a rousing success, another victory for la revolucion!
>>27438688
>mfw that's the reason I'm all jittery
Welp, I'm gonna be up all night in that case. Brb fappingand making shitty green to post tonight, probably?.
>>27438124
>>27438688
>"Of course, master, one sugar or two?"
>>"One, I don't want to get too much sugar in my system this early in the morning."
>>You add an additional sugar to his coffee.
Y-Y-You..... MONSTER!!!!!!!!
Someone banned this thread!!!!!!!
>>27438688
These are somewhere between hilarious and adorable.
More please.
Getting le green done and le bump
>>27439601
How far along is it?About to launch green myself, just need to write a few more scenes and proofread before launchan.
>>27439621
You'll end up finishing first, I have a slow pace.
>>27439630
>Writeslut
>finishing ever
You expect too much of me.
>>27439666
>finishing a story
>not finishing an update
You understood too less of me. should I say? Also, checked.
>>27439666
Satan confirms Writefag is slow writefag
I would take a bunch of slave ponies just to keep them safe until inevitable legislation was passed to give them rights and a place in society as members instead of slaves.
>>27439601
ohshit idea dropped, gonna get back to the original writing planon SiM
Pretty much done with the first batch, just need to edit and we're golden. Pic related.
>>27439881
Fug.
Right, I think I promised proper responses to people and stuff.
>Fireking
>>27416201
It showed that you were having a bit of trouble with this section. I had some issues keep track of who was talking at times. That said, your style is always amusing to read. Fucking Ling, man - someone needs to get that bug laid. Somehow. Anyhow, seems like things are going to pick up now with all the information that was being traded back and forth.
>Rarifag21
>>27429827
Oooh, this. It's gonna be interesting have two humans in the lead for once. And hey, a resistant slave for once and not some beat-down poor thing. This is definitely going to be good. I love Claire and Myles' contrasting personalities already, and watching her butt heads with Gilda is gonna be good.
Tomorrow I'll do Ephemeral, because I can't handle the feels this close to bed.
>>27440054
Full disclosure: this first Chapter is going to heavily resemble the first part of Skittles, as Starlight is meant to be Skittles-tier broken, and as such I apologize in advance if it feels a little too unoriginal.
Also, as I started pre-planning this, I ended up coming with a full conclusion, but as of now I need figure out to get from point A (what I'm about to post) to point B, so that's going to take some time.
Anyways...
>Only humans do evil things to ponies, right? Ponies are too pure and cute to be bad guys...right?
>...
>Let's see...
>It is currently day...
>Uhhhh...
>You sighed as you put down your writing stick.
>You're not sure what day it is anymore.
>Being locked up and treated like a slave made it hard to remember.
>Also not being given pen or paper or being taught how to actually write made it hard to keep track.
>Let's be clear - you are a slave.
>Always have been.
>Just like the rest of the ponies who currently resided in the facility.
>Just like the ponies who lived elsewhere.
>Each and every day of your miserable life was meant to be in servitude of the humans who came, saw, and conquered your world so long ago, just like the rest of them.
>As far as you knew, you would always be a slave.
>But today...
>You forced yourself to smile, as you started putting a brush through your dark purple mane.
>Today would be different.
>Today would be the day some kind and caring Master would take you away from this wretched place, to a better land filled with peace and happiness.
>At the very least, he would take you away from the clutches of the crazy old man who kept you locked up here.
>"HAHA! HELLO MY FRIEND, YOU ARE LOOKING FOR CAMEL, YES?"
>"N-no, sir, I'm not. See, I'm looking for a pony, and I was told you-"
>"YES, SMALL, HUMPLESS CAMEL, ALL OF THE RAGE THESE DAYS!"
>Your eye twitched.
>Of all the used pony pawn shops your previous Master could have dropped you off at, he had to have left you at Crazy Hassan's Used Camel Emporium.
>>27440309
>Most ponies under Hassan were either sold at improbably low prices or were just given away, free of charge, without any training whatsoever.
>They were 'used', after all.
>Hell, he even threw in actual camels of various breeds in - it was a CAMEL emporium, after all.
>But you?
>Crazy Hassan saw to it you were the most expensive pony on the block, all because of some stupid, nasty rumor those other ponies spread about you.
>As far as you could remember, you were nothing.
>Nothing but a slave to these humans.
>All you had was a name, but you felt uncomfortable even using it.
>Not after your previous Master had...
>Well, let's not talk about that.
>But you would have been well worth it, though!
>You were very good at cleaning, at cooking, at o-organizing things...
>But no, no one ever thought to buy you.
>"Listen, Hassan, I don't want two of them, I-"
>"IT'S A DEAL! ENJOY YOUR SMALL CAMELS, MY FRIEND!"
>As you watched the human walk out of the Used Camel Emporium with his two 'camels' (really just two orange and yellow ponies), you sighed.
>Maybe another day.
What if Puppysmiles wound up in the slave auctions?
>>27440320
>A few minutes later, the store bell rang.
>Your eyes snapped to the door, and watched as a young person with a nice, casual shirt stepped through the gates.
>His hair was as gold as the finest jewelry, and his eyes were as blue as the streak in your mane.
>He was like heaven had come to life and looked suave as all hell.
>You became totally immersed in this god of a man.
>"HELLO FRIEND, YOU ARE HERE FOR CAMEL, YES?"
>Aaaaaand immersion ruined.
>The person paused, then nonchalantly smiled. "Kinda. What do you got in the way of ponies?"
>"AH, YOU ARE LOOKING FOR SMALL CAMELS TOO?"
>"Sure. I'm Incognito."
>Incognito...
>That is an oddly specific name.
>But the crazed salesman paid no heed, as led the guy around the bazaar, pointing to all the ponies up for sale.
>You watched intently as he observed each and every one of the ponies.
>All the while, the crazed Arab tried to advertise them with various skills you were certain they didn't have.
>Then again his camels could do some crazy shit, so who knows?
>Then, Incognito looked towards your cage, and noticed you were staring at him.
>You instinctively looked away.
>A good slave never stares.
>Never.
>"How much for that one?"
>>27440330
>Huh?
>You looked back over at Incognito, who was pointing at you questioningly.
>Hassan frowned.
>"FOR THAT ONE? 500 DOLLAR."
>The man grimaced. "Really, that expensive?"
>"YES, MAYBE 510 IF YOU ALSO TAKE GOOD CAMEL FOOD AS BONUS."
>Incognito sighed. "Hmmm..."
>Your ears drooped, and you lay down once again.
>It was too good to be true...
>You heard Incognito cough. "Well, I know she's expensive, but gosh, seeing her like that just...breaks my heart, y'know?"
>Wait, was he really-
>"I think I'll buy her."
>HE WAS!
>You were almost elated to hear this brave man take you in.
>But Hassan shook his head.
>"OH NONONONO," Hassan interrupted, waving his hands around defensively. "BREAKING OF THE HEART IS EXACTLY HER PLAN."
>Oh Gods no, not this spiel again.
>"HASSAN HAS HEARD TALES, TALES OF WOE AND SUFFERING ABOUT THIS CAMEL. THIS CAMEL YOU SEE IS EVIL. ONCE, SHE TOOK OVER TOWNS FROM OTHER CAMELS AND MADE THEM SUFFER IN TYRANNY, TYRANNY I WOULD NEVER WISH UPON MY CAMELS. CUNNING AND TRICKERY IS IN HER HEART, AND YOU MAKE A HUGE MISTAKE IF YOU PLAN ON FALLING FOR THIS CAMEL."
>Every time.
>Incognito grinned. "I still want to buy her. She doesn't seem *that* evil."
>Really??
>Crazy Hassan paused, for just a moment.
>Then, he sighed in defeat. "400 DOLLAR!"
>"I thought it was 500 dollars."
>"NO. IS 400, 300 GOLD WITH CAMEL FOOD, 500 WITH EXTRA WATER."
>"I'll take the second option, then...?"
>"DEAL!"
>>27440355
>With that, the crazed Arab took you out of your cage, placed a leash on your collar, and handed it, along with several supplies, to Incognito.
>"SHE IS YOURS..."
>Incognito, your new Master from now own, smiled. "Thank you kindly, sir."
>But just before the two of you left, Hassan placed his hand on the man's shoulder. "PROMISE ME, LAD."
>"Huh?"
>And, in a tone so uncharacteristically low, Hassan muttered, "NEVER FREE THIS CAMEL, OR HER CRUEL BEING WILL SMOTHER YOU IN DEATH, AS SURE AS WATER GLIMMERS IN THE SUN OR THE NIGHT ALIGHTS IN STARLIGHT."
>Incognito nodded. "Okay, then, I'm just...gonna head out."
>Finally, he took you out of the bazaar, presumably never to return.
>"THANK YOU, MY FRIEND," Crazy Hassan called out, "MAY ALLAH BLESS YOU WITH HIS HOLY CAMELS!"
>You hoped you never had to return at this rate.
>>27440365
>You walked slowly behind your Master, following him wherever he led you.
>It certainly wasn't towards any car of his.
>But as he walked, you noticed a bit of uncertainty in his grip.
>Something about him made you think he was reluctant to be your Master.
>But a good slave never questions, right?
>So you followed him unquestioningly.
>Like a good slave.
>Finally, the both of you found your final destination - a small, but very fancy-looking house at the center of a cul-de-sac.
>Well, THAT explains how he was able to pay for you.
>Your Master was apparently, among other things, reasonably wealthy.
>You're not complaining.
>He unlocked the door and started leading you inside.
>Once he was certain the both of you were in, he closed the door and started putting away his other groceries.
>As he did that, you sat down on your rump and waited patiently for his first command.
>Or his first punishment.
>Whichever came first.
>Then, after so long of a wait between purchase and homeward bound, he spoke.
>>27440380
>"So, er, miss pony...?"
>Your ears perked up.
"Y-Yes, Master?"
>He froze for a just a second, just long enough for you to reel back in fear.
"M-Master? Did I do something wrong?" you asked, fearful of what he might do.
>He shook his head. "No, of course not. Was a little surprised at how, well, how mature your voice was."
>Oh.
>Yeah, it had been a while since you last talked.
>"Anyway, I know Crazy Hassan was a bit, well, eccentric about you..."
>Oh, Master, you had no idea...
>"But in the heat of the moment, he never told me your name. What's your name?"
>You tilted your head, wondering why he'd ask you for your name.
"I-I don't have one, Master."
>His eyebrow lifted.
>"Is that true?"
>It wasn't.
>But you wouldn't dare use *that* name.
>"Y-Yes, Master. W-Would you like to give me a name?"
>He clenched his chin, presumably to think of a name for you.
>Then, he snapped his fingers.
>>27440391
>Instinctively, you bowed down in submission, which made him jump in surprise.
"O-Oh, I wasn't asking you to kneel, miss."
>Oh.
>Sheepishly, you got back up, and bowed your head down.
>Then, you turned away from him and waited to be punished.
>"Miss, what are you doing?"
"W-Waiting for you to punish me, Master," you stated, matter-of-factly.
>Master chuckled.
>"An eager little girl, are we?"
>Oh.
>You turned back around, and waited.
>"Well, er, I can't quite think of a good name, so bear with me here." he muttered. "How about...?"
>He surveyed your body, all battered and dirtied from your time at the emporium.
>"How about Ivory?"
>Ivory.
>The name made you smile.
>"You like it?" he asked.
"Thank you, Master. I-It's perfect!"
>It truly was.
>Though in honesty, any name would have worked just as well.
>But Ivory just stood out to you as being beautiful.
>He smiled. "That's good. I think you'll enjoy living here, Ivory."
>>27440404
>Then, he reached down to gently stroke your mane.
>You felt a wave of pleasure surge through your head as he petted you.
>Yes, you would enjoy living with Master Incognito.
>Then just as soon as the petting had begun, it stopped.
>"So, Ivory," he asked, "what do you like to do?"
>Well, you did like being petted.
>But you weren't there just to be petted and played with.
>Oh no.
>You had a job to do.
>And a good slave always makes a good first impression.
"Well, Master," you explained, "I can clean, I can cook, and in the bedroom-"
>Master shook his head. "No, Ivory, that falls under what you can do, what other, more cruel people would make you do."
>It was what you were good at, though!
>"What I want to know is, what do you LIKE to do? As in do you have any hobbies?"
>That was a very hard question to answer.
>Slaves don't have hobbies.
>They only have their orders.
>>27440412
"W-Well... uhhh.."
>"It's okay," he assured you, "don't be shy."
>You gulped.
"Well, uh, I-I usually just do whatever my Master wants me to do, and I usually just clean, cook, fuck, something like that. S-so I don't really have anything I l-like to do myself."
>He grumbled.
>Oh no.
"I-I've disappointed you, haven't I Master?"
>Master shook his head again.
>"No, but I'm a little surprised."
>Then, you noticed a slight bulge in his crotch, indicating that Master was getting horny.
"O-Oh, let me get that for you, Master!"
>You had it ingrained in your mind what you needed to do.
>So without even thinking, you used your mouth to unzip his pants and send them down.
>"I-Ivory-" he choked, presumably pleasantly surprised at how fast you responded.
"Shhhh.." you whispered, in a seductive tone, "just let me handle it, Master, and it'll all be fine..."
>Master would be so happy to see you suck him off so quickly.
>"Hnngggg..."
>Then you see it.
>Master's hardened cock.
>I-It's a lot smaller than you thought it was.
>But who are you to complain?
>You began sucking on it, as Master would want.
>>27440420
"Mmmmmmphh..." you moaned.
>Stroking the rock-solid phallus so gently with your tongue, as if it were a simple lollipop on a stick - that made Master feel good, and it made you feel good.
>It tasted good, too - though a slave never complains or compliments, she just does.
>That was not the purpose of doing that, though.
>Your Master needed release, a-and if you stroked his dick he'd be able to have it.
>And you bet he'd love to see your pretty face completely dirtied by his release.
>Eventually, you saw an unmistakable throbbing extruding from his dick.
>In response, you opened your mouth up and waited him to cum.
>"I-Ivory, no, please- Haaaaaaaaaaaah"
>And then, he came.
>That white, thick, liquid-y substance came flooding from his cock, spreading all throughout your face.
>And ever so eagerly you lapped up as much cum as you could.
>Like a good slave.
>Like a good cumslut.
>Master would be proud.
>Eventually, Master's wells turned dry, and you were left with the cum on your face, and the remainder on the floor beside you.
>"M-Master," you groaned, trying to catch your breath from drinking so much cum, "d-do you feel better? W-Was I good?"
>You looked up, expecting Master to be smiling.
>But he wasn't.
>Instead, he had a ghastly look upon his face - one filled with fear and dread.
>And that filled YOU with dread.
>So much for a good first impression.
>>27440429
"I-I'm sorry, Master," you stammered, in a state of panic from what he might do. "I-I'll try and drink your cum faster, Master! I-I promise I'll do better!"
>Master simply shook his head.
>"O-Oh, Ivory..."
>That was it.
>Not even 5 minutes in his home, and you had already soured your relations with Master Incognito.
>Y-You d-didn't deserve him.
>You didn't deserve such a kind and caring Master.
>You didn't even deserve that name he gave you.
"P-Please, Master, d-don't send me back!" you cried, tears now flowing from your eyes like a torrent.
>In response, Master knelt down once again, and reached out.
>You reeled back, instinctively, as he was only doing that to punish you.
>But when you saw that he wasn't trying to hurt you outright, you, ever so reluctantly, moved forward.
>"Ivory," he sighed, "I don't know what made y'all think sucking me off when I got hard was a good idea, but hear me out, okay? I don't want you doing that ever again. That disturbed the ever-living heavens out of me."
>Oh.
>S-So you weren't supposed to suck him off.
>I-It would have been helpful to know earlier.
>But you had fucked up.
>Badly.
>"Understand?"
"Y-Yes, Master."
>>27440434
>Then, you looked around and located the whipping crop Hassan had packed with your belongings, and levitated it into Master's hand.
"I-I've been a bad slave, Master. Bad slaves deserve to be whipped."
>Then, finally, you lay down on the floor, and waited for Master to whip you.
>He just stared down at the crop.
>"Why on God's Earth would I do that, Ivory?"
"B-Because I did something without your permission, because I violated you without asking, because-"
>"Ivory, Ivory, Ivory," he sighed, shaking his head. "I'm not gonna whip you."
>He then took the whip and tossed it aside.
>"Come here," Incognito beckoned.
>You didn't at first, in fear of what he might do otherwise.
>But, having disobeyed him, Master picked you off from the floor, and carried you over to a chair, which he then sat down in.
>Then he placed you onto his lap.
>It was actually pretty comfortable-
>No.
>A slave doesn't think those thoughts about her Master, not after being a bad slave like you had.
>"Ivory, look at me."
>You did as he asked, and you saw a look of concern, as if he himself had done something wrong.
>You trembled.
"M-Master? W-Why aren't y-you punishing me?"
>>27440446
>"Look," he explained, "I don't know what happened before I bought you, and I have a gut feeling that old coot might have been the reason..."
>He wasn't.
>But you could see why he'd think that.
>"But really, I just wanted someone who I could play with and have around. Like a companion, or a pet puppy, or something. Not someone I would rape, or abuse, or any of that."
>A-A Master who wouldn't abuse you?
>W-What?
"M-Master? Isn't that what I'm for, to be abused like some sort of nobody?"
>He sighed.
>"Ivory..."
>Oh no.
>You know where this would lead.
>He'd take you back, back to that wretched place.
"P-Please don't send me back there, Master! I-I can be a good slave! I c-can-"
>In desperation, you lunged forward to kiss him, before he pushed you back.
>"NO!"
>You winced.
>I-If he wasn't before, he surely would now.
>"Ivory, wha-"
"Master?" you asked. "I-I'm so sorry, I d-don't know what came over me. P-Please, I want to be a good slave, but I-I've been so bad, especially on my first day of being your t-to keep!"
>He shook his head again.
"W-Will you tell me, please, h-how to be a good slave?"
>"You can start," he responded, "by calming down stop beating yourself over messing up."
>It was very hard to calm down, at risk of being kicked out.
>But you started to calm your breath, even if just a tiny bit.
>He started to stroke your mane again, which helped relieve a fraction of your tension.
>But things were still very tense.
>>27440461
>"Ivory, I'll be honest. I'm not going to use you as an object, or treat you like a common whore. That isn't what I bought you for. Heck, you don't even need to call me Master in my house."
"B-But Master, what am I to call you? Owner? Supreme leader?"
>He smiled.
>"Just Incognito, or Incog, is fine."
>You nodded.
"Y-Yes, Incognito sir."
>He facepalmed. "Not Incognito, 'sir', Ivory, just Incog."
>Several questions were flurrying through your mind right now, with how confusing Incognito was acting right now.
>But a good slave should never question.
"Y-Yes s- ahhhh, Incog."
>To you, though, no matter what Incognito wished to be called, you would always know of him as Master.
>You SHOULD always know of him as Master.
>And you smiled at that fact.
>>27440470
>Master coughed.
>"Tell me, Ivory. What is life, to you? What was your previous Master like?"
>You gulped.
>There was no good answer to what Master asked.
>What you would want to answer was disrespectful, but what Master might expect is not the truth.
>So you didn't respond.
"Do you enjoy being a slave?"
"Y-Yes, Ma- er, Incognito. I-I do."
>"Do you, really?" he asked again, unconvinced of your answer.
"I-I do, really. But it doesn't matter. I've always been told that obeying Master comes first, that what I want is irrelevant to what my owner wants. If I can't obey, I'm to be punished, to be beaten or whipped, or worse - abandoned. My M-Master's will is superior, and that's my life."
>You trembled as you managed the words, for all the while, memories of your previous Master came pouring back.
>Memories of how he beat you, how he raped you, of how he treated you like you were a criminal being tortured in the name of justice.
>A slave does not deserve anything better.
>Only what her Master wished.
>But you smiled.
"B-But I enjoy it, really. It's n-not like I can't have fun while doing it, right?"
>"Miss, can you tell me your name?"
>Oh joy, an easy question.
>Real good change of pace.
"My name is Ivory."
>He shook his head.
>Wait, that wasn't your name?
>"Not that one. That was just a placeholder, and I'm pretty certain you had a name before coming here. Now what's your name?"
>>27440481
>You blinked.
"M-My previous owner called me cumbucket, bitch, cumslut, whore-"
>"No, that's not what I meant. I mean a real name, from before you were a slave."
>You could have sworn you saw a tear come from his eye.
>"From before humans came to Equestria."
>Memories - painful, PAINFUL memories came rushing back.
>Memories of when your old Master took you in.
>Of when he forcefully reminded you every single night that what you were in the previous life was that of a mare who needed severe punishment.
>Slaves don't deserve names.
>Especially not bad slaves like you.
"T-There wasn't anything before being a slave, honest, Incognito!"
>Master narrowed his eyebrows. "Sure there was. There had to have been."
>You felt tears come from your eyes again.
>It was painful to even think of your name.
>Without even realizing it, you mumbled something.
>"What was that?"
>Then, you took a deep breath, and repeated it.
"Starlight Glimmer. Starlight Glimmer was my name."
>There was a deep silence that entombed the room for what felt like forever.
>Then, Master smiled.
>"Then we'll go with Starlight Glimmer. It's a better name, I think."
>>27440490
>Oh.
>Oh no no no.
"Oh, no, you mustn't-"
>"But I will," he affirmed, a calm, caring smile on his face. "In my care, I'd rather you be yourself, rather than what stereotypical slave you think I expect you to be. And if that means using your own name, then that's fine."
>He... He expects you to be a free pony?
"Master, I don't understand."
>Master scowled. "What was that about calling me 'Master'?"
>Oh.
>Shit, right.
"S-Sorry, Ma- er, si- errrr, I mean, Incognito."
>He shook his head again.
>You'd think with how many times he shook his head, his brain got loose.
"B-But why?"
>"Why what?"
"Why are you treating me so...so nicely? I've done nothing to deserve it. A b-bad slave never deserves-"
>He chuckled. "That's the thing. I'm not treating you like a slave. Heck, I'm sorry I even bought ya."
>Oh no.
>He regrets owning me.
"Ma- Incognito, if y-you don't want me, I-I can-"
>"Oh no, I'm grateful I've gotten to meet you," Master admitted. "I'm just bummed that I wound up buying the life and well-being of some other borderline human being."
>Oh...
>"I just wanted someone to kinda be friends with, is all. Nothing more to it, Starlight."
>>27440500
>You mentally winced at Master's usage of your old name.
>You hated it when people spoke your name.
>It always brought back bad memories.
>But he *is* your Master.
>He then started to get up from the chair, prompting you to leap off to avoid getting pushed off.
>A good slave knows to get off Master's lap before he gets up.
>You learned that the hard way.
"Welp," he shrugged, "I'd better get ready for dinner. All that walking in the heat made me pretty hungry."
>You looked around to see what time it was-
>Oh, shit, he's right.
>It's 6:00!
>Usually you'd have Master's dinner ready by now.
"I-I'll go get dinner started, Ma- er, Incog-"
>"No go, Starlight," he interrupted, putting a finger to your mouth.
>You were almost tempted to lick it.
>But after what had just happened, it's...best not to pull any more shenanigans right now.
>"I'll go get dinner set up. Wait here, and I'll try and surprise you. I think you'll like what I'm making."
>And with that, he walked to the kitchen, leaving you behind to wait for his return...
>>27440514
"Wow..."
>About thirty minutes later, give or take, he came back, beckoning you to the kitchen table for dinner.
>And what a dinner it was - a roasted ham on a bed of lettuce, a beautiful garden salad, a set of mashed potatoes, a bunch of bananas, and a nice loaf of wheat bread.
>Master was going to enjoy his dinner so much.
>You were almost jealous at his cooking skills.
>However, you couldn't help but notice that there were two sets of silverware.
"Who's the other person you're cooking for, Incognito?" you asked Master, pointing to the plate. "Your wife?"
>In response, he pointed to you.
>You were a little taken aback from his statement.
"I-I'm not your wife, Master - you haven't put a ring on me."
>He just laughed.
>"No, no, I mean the dinner is also for you!"
>What.
"No. You're foaling me."
>"I'm not," he smiled.
>There was no way.
"Ma- I mean, Incognito! I don't deserve dinner at the table!"
>"You do in my house, Starlight," he explained.
>Wow.
>Incognito was so generous.
>Almost too generous...
>>27440527
>Master sat down at the table, and started serving himself a plate.
>With nothing else better to do, you sat down too, and looked for nearby food for *you* to eat.
>"What'cha looking for?"
"Dog food."
>He blinked. "Why?"
"It's my dinner, right?"
>He cleared his throat. "I guess I didn't make myself clear - this dinner, even the food I'm having, is ours to eat. Again, I'm not treating you like a slave in this household."
>You were blown away at how...nice, this man was.
>Your suspicions were correct - he didn't want you to be his slave.
>But that's what he bought you for, right?
>So you might as well just go along with it.
>You weren't complaining about delicious free food.
>So, with a nod, you thanked Master and started serving yourself something to eat.
>>27440543
>Obviously you didn't want ham.
>You decided to try the garden salad, and put seasoning on it.
>Then you got a bit of mashed potatoes, but put no gravy on it because it has meat in it and ponies don't eat meat.
>At least, you've never tried it, so who knows?
>Then you took a banana, and buttered a slice of bread.
>And with that, your dinner was complete, and it looked like Master had begun eating his dinner, so you started eating.
>It was delicious.
>How long had it been since you last ate a decent meal?
>For as long as you could remember, all you ate were dog food, piss or cum.
>Nothing like the meal Master was offering.
>"Enjoying yourself?"
>You looked up from your meal, to see that Master Incognito was smiling.
"Y-Yfff, NNNcgggnnnnt..." you mumbled.
>"Good," he stated. “Was worried the food didn't turn out well. I'm a terrible chef, y'know?”
>You felt a wave of peace inside you.
>This was the Master that had come to take you to a better place.
>"So, Starlight, tell me about your last owner."
>Your better place seemed to vanish.
>The wave of peace vanished along with it.
>It was too good to last.
>>27440553
"Mm..." you mumbled, trying to swallow your last bit of food before you answered.
>Once you swallowed your potatoes, you answered him. "What about him?"
>"What was he like?"
>Oh boy...
>How to answer him?
"Well..."
>You didn't want to lie about him.
>But you wanted Master to be happy.
>"Starlight?"
"Well...m-my old Master was..."
>Memories of how bad your old Master was kept flowing through your head, like a ghost that would haunt you forever.
"H-He was bad-" you blurted out, before covering your mouth as you realized what you said.
>"Uh-huh...?"
>After realizing Master wouldn't hurt you, you continued.
"I-I mean, he would, er, hurt me i-if I was bad, a-and would force me to suck h-him off every day, a-and w-when I was good, h-he'd-"
>You felt the waterworks fill up once again, but before you could become yet another tear-stained wreck in front of Master, he came up to your chair and started to pet you.
>"There, there..." he cooed, trying to soothe your mind. "It's going to be alright."
>You reluctantly looked up at your owner.
>"I don't know how long he's had to mess you up, but at my home, things will be better," he reassured you. "There won't be any talk of abuse or fear here."
>You almost wanted to believe him.
>But after the last Master...
"P-Promise...?"
>"Promise."
>Then, he took his plate, and your empty plate, and put it in the sink.
>You got up to go clean them, before Incognito stopped you. "Don't you worry your pretty little about that. I'll take care of it tomorrow."
>O-Oh.
>This Master wasn't going to let you do his chores?
>"Now, it's time to bed. We've both had a pretty long day."
>Oh.
>Yeah, no, that made sense - of course he'd have a strict curfew.
>>27440560
>He led you through the house to his bedroom, where he had two beds installed.
>To your left was a very neatly made bed, as if it were brand new.
>To your right, a bed that looked like a wreck - all the blankets were wrinkled, the pillows were scattered about, and even the sheets were starting to come undone.
>Yep, that was your bed, alright.
>But as you started walking to it, Master Incognito stopped you.
"M-Ma- I mean, I-Incognito?"
>"That's my bed, and as much as I like you so far, I'm not comfortable with you sleeping with me quiiiite yet."
>Oh?
"B-But I thought t-that was my bed, Incognito. I thought my owner's bed would be nicely kept."
>He snorted. "You should see the way I sleep sometimes." Then, he gestured to the neatly made bed. "That's where you're going to sleep tonight."
>Oh no.
>Oh no no no.
"Master, I-I shouldn't-"
>"What did I say about calling me Master?"
>You felt a twinge of pain at his words.
"S-Sorry, Incognito. B-But I don't deserve a good bed."
>"You do in my house," he explained once again.
>H-He was really going to give you a good bed?
>Never in your life did you think he was going to be this nice.
>You gave him the most genuine smile you've ever had.
"T-Thank you, Incognito.."
>"No problem, Starlight Glimmer."
>>27440568
>You slowly inched towards the bed, almost tempted to run from it.
>Eventually, you decided to jump onto it, and OH GODS ABOVE, IT FELT GOOD.
>This was the most comfortable you had ever been in your entire life...
>Looking to your left, you saw Incognito had followed suit.
>"Getting comfy there?"
>You nodded.
>"Good," he yawned. “Ma used to love that bed so much.”
>Yes.
>This was good.
>But something wasn't 'good'.
>Something was bugging you.
>But you wouldn't dare ask.
>...
>Would you?
"I-Incog, may I have permission to ask you something?"
>He yawned again. "Sure."
"W-Would you...would you please let me call you Master again? I feel so uncomfortable calling you just by your name."
>>27440580
>Master wrinkled his nose, confused by your question.
>"Oh? Why's that?"
"Well...I-It just feels wrong and disrespectful treating my owner as an...as an equal. I dunno how else to describe it."
>He chuckled. "Again, I'd rather you not, but...if it makes you feel better, then sure."
>You nodded. "T-Thank you, Master."
>Master shrugged, then turned away.
>H-He was being so nice.
>Y-You might almost dare to-
"M-Master, another question."
>"Shoot."
>You gulped.
>Moment of truth.
"C-Can you...c-can you please call me Ivory?"
>He turned back towards you, with his eyebrows raised.
>"I dunno, I kinda like Starlight Glimmer better."
"I don't."
>There was another silence that filled the room.
>Then Master broke the silence.
>>27440594
>"You don't?"
>You shook your head as he parroted your admission.
"I-I know it's not my position to complain about my name, Master, b-but I just feel bad about using my real name. It brings back bad memories."
>He paused, as if to ponder whether he should call you by your preferred name.
>Then, he smiled. "Alright, Ivory."
>You smiled in return. "Thank you, Master."
>"No problem."
>Then, he turned off the lamp at the side of his bed. "G'night, Ivory."
"G-Good night, Master."
>As you turned off your light, you smiled.
>Master Incognito was so generous, so kind and honest.
>And you saw no reason that would end anytime soon.
>So you lay on your bed, wondering what he would have you do the next day.
>You think you'll enjoy living here just as well...
And that's all for now. Pastebin in a little bit.Pic related, holy shit that turned out a lot denser than I expected
>>27440621
And here it is.
http://pastebin.com/uE5gYnTZ
I'm out for now. Night cucks.
>>27440322
i tried reading that story and couldn't get into it. main character just didnt appeal to me, does it get better?
We need writefags here >>27439967
>>27440355
>>27440330
>crazy hassan
they did it. the absolute madmare
>>27440933
Crazy Hassan runs a whole chain of second-hand ungulate dealerships across the multiverse.
>>27440697
It gets amazing, her blind innocence perfectly counters the world and situations around her.
>>27440874
You have two options to choose from
option:1
we don't have enough writefags to spare
option:2
your premise sucks, we don't want any.
>>27440970
Where do you think Ling comes from? No sane Hassan would sell a changeling.
>>27440970
>>27441061
>Crazy Hassan is actually a multidimensional entity hellbent on giving the deals, even if the deals include equine slave trading.
DEEPEST LORE
DEEPEST LORE
>>27441061
Negr would you write some green here? >>27439967
>>27440309
>heavily resemble the first part of Skittles
I've been craving this for months, Anon
>>27441155
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>>27441400
Shit man, I didn't even notice that! Also, checked.
>>27435284
Will we ever get a good pone-used-as-a-riding-slave story?
>>27441528
someone started one months back
It only lasted like 3 posts
>>27441593
Got a link to the archive?
>>27441655
'fraid not buddy
>>27440650
This is a really well written story, and your take on mind-broken ponies is great.
One thing though, I personally feel like the pace of the story is a bit fast, good, but a bit fast.
Please continue.
>>27435473
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>>27435393
>>27435381
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>>27433819
>Subjugation Sunday
Fuck sake, are we nailing ponies to crosses now?
>>27441976
Nah, not now.
It's Monday, senpai.
Someone needs to make a Fire Emblem Fates type story with this concept.
>>27442578
>>27442578
or Fire Emblem: Sacred Stones. Since this thread is dying, I'm wondering if anyone is interested in the slightest.
>>27442578
>>27442978
If its an idea you like, write it.
I promise an update soon guys, I'm just currently dealing with some grade A bullshit on the part of my family and it's becoming a real-ass problem for me.
>>27443227
Take care.
White Knight Bump
>>27433838
you cant possibly ride a pony without damaging them
the general rule of thumb is 20% of the horses weight
>>27444320
Cartoon equines laugh in the face of your mortal reasoning.
>>27444474
earth ponies doesn't count, they're superstrong or smth
>>27444489
Nah, all ponies are overpowered as fuck. Even Fluttershy can lift another pony.
>>27444320
>implying I wouldn't buy ponies for the sole purpose of sitting on them and riding them, bouncing up and down on their backs until their spines snap under my weight
>>27442999
Trips of truth.In the end I think the idea I had looks good. Might do it, No promises, tho.
>>27444573
>Nah, all ponies are overpowered as fuck.
Not really.
>Even Fluttershy can lift another pony.
And I can lift another human.
???
>>27444631
Got your point phamI'm kinda abusive too. But purposely breaking toys is kinda counter-productive.
>>27444631
Sir, please don't break the pones, it's scary for the other pones.
Continuing reviews...
>>27436460
Why the fuck do you play with my feels like this, you bastard? This hit basically all the things I love in a scene - characters walking into situations they could avoid if they knew the truth, but of course they don't - and characters who find themselves in a bad situation but still do the best they can because they sympathize with the devil.
And then of course poor Moon Dust. Poor fucking Moon Dust, setting things up to ramp up the feels all over again. All I know, is that you better not stop.
>>27440470
>Supreme leader
kek
>>27444972
>And I can lift another human.
how does it feel being ripped?
>>27445490
I'm not.
Literally anyone can do this.
>>27438688
Call me crazy, but if done in a serious tone and flushed out a bit more, this could actually be really damn good.
A slave purposefully pushing the bounds for some kind of weird thrill, the thoughts going through her head the whole time she sits there wondering if she got away with it, etc.
So, I finally graduated and I guess I can get back to posting. Not sure how quickly I'll get back into this, since it's been a long time, but I'll do my best.
Gonna continue from pastebin:
http://pastebin.com/DNvbjnQG
>>27445776
>by the end of the day, you're getting ready for your last ride
>gas tank full, everything in place, last will and goodbye letter on your desk and all the stuff you wanted to take with you is in your pockets
>you almost automaticaly lock the door as you leave, but then unlock them
>then lock it once again
>before you enter the car, you take your last look at your, now past, home
>you're both silent the whole time, just smiling faintly
>when you feel like you're ready, you put your hand on Sarah's head and scratch her a bit to get her attention
„Shall we?“
>she just hums agreeably
>things feel so serene, almost like it's some sort of ritual
>you start the car, leaving the radio off and slowly drive up to the hills where you had your first joint together
>there wasn't many words troughout the ride, no need for them
>you'd only occasionaly give her a smile, which she'd return
>when you're there, you stay in the car for few more minutes
>until silence is broken
>“So...what now?“
>>27445789
„I… don't know. We still have few more hours until midnight…“
>“How about we prepare the car, then have a beer and wait till the time for explosion comes?“
„The gas might evaporate in the meantime. We should pour that stuff on it just before we light it. But the beer idea isn't so bad...“
>you open two bottles out of 8 you brought along and hand one to her
„For Equestria?“
>“For Equestria.“ she lifts her bottle with two hooves to clink it onto yours and takes a sip
>you have a lot more than just sip, but no more than 1/3 of the bottle
>“To tell you the truth, I still haven't got completely used to the taste of beer.“ she takes another sip
„Why didn't you say so earlier?“ you laugh „I could have bought you cider instead.“
>“Well, it's not like I can't stand it, I don't like it, but kinda do as well.“
„Yeah, that's typical.“ you smirk „Too, can't say that I love it. You have a bottle, so you drink even though you're not enjoying it like lemonade or chocolate.“
>“Humans are strange...“
„We sure are.“
>>27445622
i'd read it.
>>27445776
huzzah he's back. Sir fluffy wings we welcome you.
>Your identity?
>Anon
>Your mission?
>Enter Red Victor's Games in order to proceed with whatever faggotry Moondancer kept going on about
>The problem?
>The store is filled to burst with sweaty neckbeards and black people
>The neckbeards aren't really too out of the ordinary for this place, there was always at least one or two of them around
>All you had to do was ignore them
>But this concentration was alarming
>And the blackuns?
>What the hell are they doing in the store?!
>Admittedly, you didn't spend a ton of time there, because you lived a good hour from it before Grandpa passed
>But every time you were with grandpa for any period of time, you'd spend a night there playing Magic and shit with him and Uncle Victor
>As you drew even closer, you saw the truth
>The disgusting, horrifying truth
>Two words leave your mouth with more disgust than you've felt since meeting Trevor
"Yu-Gi-Oh players."
>You stop and glare as hard as you can at the store's current patrons
>Cheerilee and Moondancer must have caught up with you because you hear Moondacer sigh before she speaks
>"It's pretty full, but we have procedures in place for this. Come on."
>Moondancer begins to advance with a very clearly hesitant Cheerilee
>No! That horse saved you once, you cannot allow her to fall victim to their unbearable faggotry!
>>27446631
"Stop! Girls, no!"
>They both stop and look at you
>Cheerilee with hope and a bit of confusion
>Moondancer with what can only be described as resigned frustration
>Moonie speaks
>"What is it now, Anon?"
"Moondancer, do you see what those are?!"
>You gesture to the... things in the store
>"Well, no matter how I answer that question, this is going to go somewhere idiotic. So why don't you just tell me so that we can move on?"
"Those are Yu-Gi-Oh players, Moonie! Did Grandpa never warn you about them?!"
>"That's what this is about?! Holy shit, what is it with you two and Yu-Gi-Oh?"
"They're the worst!"
>"For the love of- UGH- there is nothing wrong with people for liking Yu-Gi-Oh!"
"They aren't people, Moonie. They're close, but wrong. As if somebody tried to make a human but had only ever been told what humans are like."
>"Well Trevor plays Yu-Gi-Oh. He's not that bad!"
"Trevor is the worst!"
>"How is he the worst?!"
"Did you use your eyeballs and look at him?"
>"Just because he's a bit over weight doesn't make him the worst."
"He is a walking cringe, Moondancer!"
>"At least he's not a bad knock off of his Grandpa!"
>Shouts of 'dayum' and 'roasted' are heard from the undesirables nearby
"That was.. actually pretty hurtful. Huh..."
>>27446637
You are Moondancer and you cannot believe this shit
>He's actually hurt?!
>And now Cheerilee is looking at you like YOU'RE the one a fault!
>"Moondancer that was uncalled for. His Grandpa JUST died."
"What? How am I the villian here?"
>Anon pipes up
>"Yeah, Moondancer, the grieving process takes time!"
"Were you not just hearing him?"
>"Well..."
"What?"
>"Trevor was pretty bad..."
>"Thanks Cheerilee."
>Anon bends down to hug her and she turns around to return the hug
>While her back is to you he looks at you
>And he fucking winks at you
>>27446647
This cheeky motherfucker is glorious.
>>27446790
He's a real bastard and writing him is seriously a blast.
Hey all you writefags out there, we were talking shop in the IRC and a topic that I find really fascinating came up: the differences in your stories from initial versions to final versions.
For example: the original version of what would become OPFAG had no OPFAG, no grandpa Incog, and wasn't even a comedy. It was originally a fairly generic idea of some /tg/ nerd whose buddies bought him a pony as a birthday present because he was so lonely all the time. The only things that stuck from there to now are Red Victor's Games, Red Victor, and Anon and Moonie playing Magic: the Gathering. Anybody have similar experiences or no?
>>27445776
Holy shit I just graduation too.
>>27447011
>graduation
I'm such a fucking idiot.
>>27447064
Don't worry anon. We're all idiots here.
>>27447153
Thanks anon.
>>27447168
What did you graduate from? Grad School, undergrad?
>>27447202
High school....it sucks being the oldest kid there.
>>27447226
Awwwwwwwwww... that's adorable.
>>27446955
Had this happen a couple of times, both with LCD and another previous story.
http://pastebin.com/uqqrGCH2
http://pastebin.com/N1CstDGU
http://pastebin.com/keCuf87kThe Twilight Soul Spell greentext was originally going to have King Sombra involved as the original creator of the eponymous spell, but I decided to back out of that plot point because reviving him just for the sake of asking him how to undo it would both be another pain in the ass to deal with (i.e. he starts trying to take over Equestria, AGAIN), and would prove pointless (no hard cure) leading only for Sombra to rub it in Anon and Celestia's face. Furthermore, including him in the actual Luna flashback for the purpose of being the author would leave a plothole because he's busy being trapped in a block of ice. It also originally had a final effort for Anon to break Twilight free from the spell, only for her to succumb at the last minute.The ongoing LCD greentext was, as I already talked about, a reworking of the Collarblind greentext, the first major difference being the name and design the OC used (Biscuit, a unicorn with brown mane and blue eyes,[was a little too similar to Horse Wife, actually]as opposed to Liquid, a pegasus with silver mane, grey coat and blue eyes). Obviously the character hasn't quite changed. The original, which I'm not going to finish, was going to involve a subplot involving Applejack, a deed to a farm somewhere out of town, and some sort of sanity lapse from Biscuit, but the climax would have been pretty underwhelming, so I reworked it into what I unfortunately keep delaying for arbitrary reasons.Needless to say, that farm subplot won't be the ending of this green.
>>27447261
Cool! I'm glad I'm not the only one with substantial changes.
>>27446955
So, I had this issue with Skittlescake.Yep, I was gonna make something more connected to Skittles but shit, it went on like a long police movie. Skittles only appeared on like, uh, 10-15 lines or so, and it was just too focused on Garrett and John. Like, uh, downfall m8.
Mongol Warrior Bump
>>27447926
Hitler and Stolin Bump
>>27440621
Good and big work here Writeslut! good begin!
We will have more characters in the plot? we have a black Knight in this story?
>>27445776
You're live?????!!!!!!
>>27445776
>Klaifferon isn't kill
Does anyone have links to the past 4 threads?
>>27446955
>TFW when I can't decide whether to explain some of these things, or hide them because I might still use them and don't want to blow it all now.
>>27445776
holy crap finally
>tfw no slave mare to eagerly gulp down your piss and beg to fuck her
>>27446955
My biggest problem as a writefag is losing steam just when a story is getting good and just abandoning it because I don't know what else to do. Especially if it becomes one that's highly anticipated by a thread's reader's I feel under enormous pressure to continue to deliver a good story even when I can't.
About 50-60 fairly well-loved writefags from various threads and generals that have done a vanishing act over the last 2-3 years have actually all been me. People would probably be pissed if they knew it was a single person leaving about 100 different greens unfinished.
>>27448774Also I've personally started about 12 fics in this very general either as a named writefag or just as an anon that are all dead and will never be finished.
>>27446955
Quick shot with Ling and Anon riding off into the sunset after rescusing the princesses
Now I can't fucking leave the story
>>27446955
Apple Bloom gets raped, laugh at white knights, move on to next thread.
Yeah.
Now I'm putting in for vacation just so I can have time to make sense of my tangled-as-fuck outline and notes.
>>27448884
>spending vacation time just to be with us
Dude, I'm saying this with love:
Get help.
>>27448936
>>27448884
I'm saying this with extreme contempt.Kill yourself
How do you guys think a pone would feel about being made to give blowjobs and being fucked in the ass (with enemas and lube of course) and in the horsepussy on a very regular basis, but at the same time given the best food, drinks, constant hugs and being told shes a good girl, and even gets to fall asleep cudding in your bed?
I've always imagined they would overall love you and would just basically in their minds tolerate all the sexy time stuff as just a daily duty or whatever but wouldn't really hold it against you.
Also I need green of this in my life.
>>27449102
Probably would depend on how soon you introduce these "duties"
If you start right away, they'll probably resent you for a while.
Give it a week or so and they might be more accepting right away.
>>27448577
Bumping
>>27449123
So basically mild "ugh this again" but its drowned out by the basically luxurious and loving lifestyle you give them aside from it?
Also how much more accepting would they be if you waited a week?
Honestly I wouldn't mind waiting a while before going, but not too long, none of this "oh lol months" or some shit
Hell I might just go after the first day or two
>>27448808
>quick one shot
>>27448884
>Move on to next thread
>>27446955
Regard's Anon was written as ideas came to me, with me discarding the ones that I felt wouldn't work, so it's mostly the same in all its forms, except...
Octavia's death in Regard's Anon was originally going to be a bait and switch where it turns out that she was actually still alive and returns to Vinyl so that they could both get back to Equestria together.
The actual note that Vinyl's writes was supposed to be the end; although it was much different at that point. The final words of the story were supposed to be 'Regard's Anon,' because I like pottery. It basically explained the above, asked Anon not to bother looking for her and thanked him for the good memories and all he's done. The entire thing was supposed to be ambiguous as to whether Vinyl was telling the truth or made it all up to hide the fact that she killed herself and didn't want Anon to know. Ultimately, I changed it because I felt it didn't fit either of the characters. At that point, Vinyl was completely honest and trusting of Anon, and Anon would have searched for Vinyl regardless, quickly learning the truth. In retrospect, I could have simply ended it with Anon beginning his search, but the thought never occurred to me.
All in all, it ended the way it ended. Could have gone worse.
>>27449202
Forgot to add, this is the reason that Vinyl felt she was going to run into Octavia again, a couple of paragraphs before the letter.
>>27448936
What else am I going to spend my vacation time on? Painting my minis backlog?
Please, we all know that's not happening.
>>27449144
Depends on the horse.
The idea is to build some trust before you cum inside.
Bring her in the house and put her straight on your dick and it tells her that's her primary purpose. She might eventually learn to tolerate it, but it'll take longer.
The potential relationship would probably end up weaker overall as well.
>>27449102
Depends on what their history is.
If they're coming from a situation that was vastly worse than what they're being used for now, then it's a relief. Like, if they were purchased from an already abusive owner who raped them anyhow but also constantly punished them, or a slave labor facility where they were going to be just worked to death, I could see a pony going full Stockholm even if they're still being made to fuck constantly.
If they've only recently been captured, or you're their first owner, or their previous situation was relatively comfortable... yeah, that's probably going to be taken pretty hard.
Go find the "Sex agreement Twilight" story or whatever it was called. That one was a good example.
>>27449223
Regards, Anon is one of the main reasons I started writing in this thread. I'm not even a huge Vinyl fan, I just loved the sad ending. So thanks for that.
>>27449264
Maybe her first night I would eat her pussy or something. Make it clear to her that yes, she belongs to me, yes, we are having sex whenever I want, but at the same time she's more than a toy. I want her to get pleasure from it as well.
>>27449328
>>27449297 makes a good point too
Gotta have a good bit of context to decide how your horse is gonna react to this kind of treatment
>>27449406
Or you could just do whatever you want cuz you're the writer and fuck those other guys.But, then your green would be shit and you'd have to kill yourself.
>>27449202
IHLAOY is that really you? I haven't seen you around here in forever! Do you think you'll ever write another story here again?plz, I really liked your story and writing
>>27449523
The one and only.
You didn't think I'd ever leave, did you? Honestly, I'm not the biggest fan of generals. Things like IRC and previous threads and numbering the OP always sat wrong with me. Stories on 4chan should be written then fade away, which is why I didn't even bother making a pastebin until recently. Still, I'll pop in occasionally and see what's up; read a couple of stories even though they make me self conscious, the usual stuff. I do post, but since I don't have a trip it can be hard to spot me.
Trust me, I've tried writing some more stories for this place. Nothing really sticks though. I think I have the first four posts of a story with Octavia somewhere on my hard drive, and another one with Derpy being Anon'sdaughter'spet that might actually get written and I'm feeling confident about. Plus, when I was actually really inspired you guys were going through the whole 'oh no, what shall we call our new general now that we're getting banned?' which left a sour taste in my mouth; so I started writing porn for the Vinyl 'general' instead. Can't really fault anyone there, but it really should have gone by faster. So just keep your hopes up, it could happen.
>>27449765
link to the porn?
>>27449865
It's not that good and I never finished it, but it's in the pastebin now, friend.
http://pastebin.com/HDQbdRgy
>>27436305
This really is a shining star of White Knight General. You're doing too well for me to need to appraise it and tell you what you're doing right.
But for the sake of not being a cheap and lazy critic, this green has a flawless degree of white knight catering. Enough to satisfy, yet not so much that it gets repetitive and stale.
And on top of that, tasteful dark drama to catalyze the previous. I'm not just preoccupied with Marble and Anon. I'm constantly worried you're going to punch me in the emotional gut by making Anon walk by some random pony getting beaten senseless and have to look the other way.
I feel like I'm the one who has shit to worry about. I mean, suspenseful green can't really get better than this in concept.
9/10 because I'm not in tears, or even done reading it yet.
>>27450057
Congratulations. You got me to attempt reading that shit again.
All I got was more disappointment.
>>27446955
I haven't changed much from the original concept. Literally just was heading to bed one night and I thought... WHAT IF I WRITE ABOUT TRAINING PONIES AND HAVELOVE TRIANGLESAND SHIT!
And so it happened.
I mostly only change small details as I go, but Luna was originally just a bat pony OC.
>>27436656
>Also thank you for going easy on Dinky, Fillies are for cuddling.
I have a soft spot for certain characters (derpy) and fillies. I figured I'd be nice this time.
>>27436938
>>27438454
Thanks for the positive feedback, and I plan to finish this. I'm just slow and distracted all the time.
>>27445066
Thanks on behalf of all the writesla—writeFAGS for giving feedback.
>Why the fuck do you play with my feels like this, you bastard?
It's fun.
>>27450057
>This really is a shining star of White Knight General.
I find this amusing because it's one of the two active dark stories, and for the fact that I find the compliment undeserved when we have some serious contenders for that title. Thanks though, mate.
Also I'm glad the contrasting is really doing what I hoped. I really love comfy greens, but I feel like sometimes throwing in strife and uncertainty can really make the happier moments feel more rewarding. I hope to keep trying for that and eventually give people some really powerful moments.
>>27450443
If you enjoy the manipulative bits of life, it's good. Other than that, your opinion might not change. It's hard to explain. Take this with a grain of salt.
>>27450561
I wouldn't say this was the BEST I've read. But for me, it touches all the bases for the criteria of what kind of green should be here, and done well at that.
Fireking's story is a fun ride, to be sure.
Geologic Assistant was comfy as fuck.
I'd still rank 'A Deal is a Deal' above yours all things considered.
But your story is really bringing out the white knight instincts, which (and I know a lot of butthurt drama queens are gonna succumb to explosive clits over reading this)is the defining factor of this thread that gives it any excuse at all not to merge with SiM. Stories like yours are what keep us from being redundant. They're truly on topic to the true title of this general. We need more shit like this.
>>27450604
This comment made it sound like I was implying that Fireking and RM Writing AREN'T adding to keeping this general relevant. I meant no such thing. I just think Ephemeral's story is doing that PARTICULAR job better.
>>27433819
I coloured that ages ago, it isent the best but i was bored that time and had nothing better to do the next 20 minutes
the last time i've seen this was
16 october 2013
>>27450604
I pretty much agree on those particular greens. Deal is definitely a strong, well written story. Eventually I'll get better though.
>is the defining factor of this thread that gives it any excuse at all not to merge with SiM
Yeh, I love me some being nice to slave ponies.
>>27450443
*shrug* Tell me what you don't like, mate, idk. It can't appeal to everyone.
>>27440621
There's a lot I like about your stuff usually. Here I felt there were some significant issues.
Right off, the crazy Hassan meme is just not funny to me and only takes away from what could have been a really nice, cute buying scene. You can still see the glimmers of that in how Starlight reacts to him and the prospect of being bought, but then we have a goofy joke character.
The concept is great and I personally really love willing (or broken to a point of seeming willing, even to themselves) slaves. Using a non-OC this time I think helps too.
The story still falls into a lot of heavy pitfalls though. The white knight themes are too heavy handed for good suspension of disbelief, and while an all good anon is fine, something in this Anon felt too into the good guy camp to feel reasonable.
I feel like a person with actual interest in helping a slave would take things slow and not force the concept on them so soon. This got fixed at the end when he relented the name issues but it's still a bit bothersome to read the same old 'you get to sleep in my bed', 'you can't call me master'. It reads more like moral flagging than actually being nice. At least to me, all this would do is foster intense guilt in Starlight for getting things she thinks she doesn't deserve.
Having her like him a lot right off felt natural though, considering how badly she wanted to be owned and the contrast to past masters. She mostly submitted to his kind gestures in what felt like 'don't complain about anything a master gives' kind of way.
I'll read this but I think LCD handled willing slaves better.
>>27450712
>i mentioned the topic of an SiM merger
>a shitstorm didn't occur within 30 minutes
>>27450761
That shitstorm has passed thankfully. We can now mention SiM without being swarmed by assblasted SiMfags.
>>27450712
If I wanted to read about the heavy abuse of ponies and other SiM shit i would go to SiM.
It was with complete and utter sincerity that I just said to myself, "Man, my outlook on reality on Earth is so much less dark now that I've read this shit. It's not like innocent ponies are getting raped in every sense of the word. At least it's just people."
I need to stop thinking about things at 2:30am and just sleep.
>>27450850
thank sunbutt
>>27450931
Same, pretty much just skip that story without reading any now, I know I won't find anything nice there and that's why I filtered SiM in the first place.
Threadly reminder that stallion is for riding and mare is for whipping.
>>27450644
fucking noice
>>27449765
Fair enough. Things certainly have gotten... messy at times in here, so I understand the sentiment.
I'll still look forward to seeing you come back around if you choose to, though.
>>27450561
>I mostly only change small details as I go, but Luna was originally just a bat pony OC.
That... actually sounds pretty decent. It being Luna ramps up the stakes, but I think it actually might have been a good indication of Anon's character that he goes all-out to try and train/save even a random captured Night Guard.Plus I have a soft spot for bats, despite GRR EDGY AUTISM OC etc.
>I have a soft spot for certain characters (derpy) and fillies. I figured I'd be nice this time.
Good man. Derpy is for happiness, even in slavery.
>Thanks on behalf of all the writesla—writeFAGS for giving feedback.
Writefag myself, so I know how much meaningful feedback can help.
>>27450644
Dayum, that's good. Color in the cigarette burns and it'll be perfect.
>>27450644
You know, with the only thing restraining her being a collar and chain, I don't know why she'd be scared. I'd imagine she could still deliver a pretty nasty, if not lethal, series of kicks and bites to her abuser. I mean shit, she tore a fucking barn apart with just her teeth and hooves, imagine what they'd do to flesh. Makes me think this pic is just some kind of extremely kinky roleplay for her or something.
>>27453300
I always think that pones would lose all their strength while on earth, it makes 0 sense for them to be that strong in the first place and the only explanation is "magic" while on equestria
>but they aren't unicorns or alicorns and they are still so strong
All pones have some level of magic in them and I feel like its that magic that lets them do literally everything that's impossible in our world
Once you put them into our world and they are powerless
Rainbow wouldn't even be able to fly fast
>>27453351
Even so, she'd still be able to put up a fight. I don't see Dash as the type to let some faggot stick a cigarette out on her without putting up some kind of struggle.
>>27453368
Well yeah of course she would just like a dog would, and if the guys not careful he might get a few nasty cuts or bites or whatever, but it would still be a losing battle from the start that she'd be doomed to lose.
I would never put a cigarette out on her but I'd totally give her the D.
>>27449765
oh man!
I do hope that derpy story of yours can see the light
>>27446955
Huh, okay. Let's take a shot at this.
Spitfire was originally way more antagonistic for a far longer time. In the final version that came out she's angry, but she never openly acts against Anon.
She was supposed to get dragged into some pony resistance rings; that was where the whole letter-to-Las-Vegas thing came from - it wasn't even a real letter, but a coded message that she could be trusted.
That whole thing was supposed to culminate in a scene where she hides a dozen foals in the tail compartment to smuggle them away from some shithole, with Anonymous only noticing when he takes off and finds the plane unexpectedly tail-heavy. They'd have their big fight then, but I felt like that wasn't something Anonymous could seriously tolerate keeping her around after.
And of course the big one is thatAnonymous was going to die in the end in an accident that might have been Spitfire's fault, mirroring how his last copilot died, but not before writing into his will that anyone who buys the plane has to keep Spitfire too. The final scene was to be Spitfire finding a new copilot, and telling him she's accepted she will die one day too and the plane will be his then.
>>27454390
Proof?Your lack of tripfagging sure makes me disbelieve this.
WHEN?
>>27440874
People coming to SPG when they need writefags, this is ... flattering?
>>27448774
>>27448788
Funny, almost the same as me.
Along with some additional stuff.
>>27448884
OH LORD
>>27448936
No! That would delay the updates!
>>27449087
I'm saying this with utter disgust!
fuck off
>>27449202
>Could have gone worse.
Yes, since it was top-notch.
>>27450561
Keked at writesla
>>27454539
Sorry. Forgot to trip up, but it is me.
>>27453300
>>27453351
The common theme in some of the stories here is owners are issued magic suppressing pills they feed their ponies.
>>27449984
Ohh, idea for writer who can actually write.
Slave ponies forced to do porn, but they aren't totally against it.
>>27433819
bump
Gonna write a story for this thread
I'll check back in a while, so have a bump to keep the thread alive
>>27445622
I second that
ALSO:
the idea about the pony who likes to be whipped by her master (and thus missbehaves) sounds good too
>>27448774
If one of them is MrNameless, then I'll prepare my axe and kill you with it.
>>27440874
I'm not opposed to writing for other threads, but I've read the thread prompt the last four times this has been posted and I'm still not the slightest bit interested. I think it's safe to say others are in the same boat if you have to keep doing this.
i'll be back tomorrow, got a little busy
So, I got a question or you f4ms...
Do you know any pony who would be the most fitting for >>27449102's request? It hooked me and I've got some short stoof done by now, but the 'who is pone' part is yet to be planned.
>>27457492
Rarity.
She's already a whore anyway, so it wouldn't be a huge change in her lifestyle.
Fleur could work too. She's a trophy wife or something, isn't she? Professional escort maybe. You just know she enjoys the finer things in life and doesn't mind rolling over onto her back to get it.
>mfw its happening
Thats a good question, I think the more loyal the horse the more they would go along with it with no resentment or little resentment, the more independent they are the more they would hold it against you
I guess rainbow would be a top choice because of how loyal she is
Applejack would be pissed when its happening but wouldnt say anything about it
etc
Its all shades of emotional grey here but that's my best best
Also the more submissive they are the less they would hold it against you too
so fluttershy should be alright
If you somehow got sunhorse or moon ass as your servant I bet they would mega resent it even more than appleass but again, they'd overlook it because of everything else that you do for them
A lot of women ages ago used to have the same mentality about sex with their husbands, they called it their "wifely duty" and advised eachother to "lay back and think of Britain"
>>27449297
That could be the case
Again I think the pones personality and past life plays a big role in how they perceive it all
>>27449328
Oh fuck yeah you've got it down just right, perfect actually.
>eat her out till she is trembling
>m-master I-
>shut up I'm not done eating yet
>she cums
>bend her over the bed and fuck her
She learns to blow you at the snap of your fingers
Sometimes she is cooking and you just walk up behind her and start railing her her and depending on how hard you do it she can either keep cooking or loses her grip and has to just steady herself or go limp on the object (if its not the stove)
muh dick
See guys, I'm not looking for 2edgy4u abuse stories, but I've never bought this "oh lol who needs sex anyways" shit either
I would be overjoyed to have a pone in my life, and I would fuck them all the time
But I would still do all the other stuff said here and would mean it too >>27449102
Writeslut when?
>>27454390
Goddamn that's pretty substantial... wait... is fire and sky done?!
>>27457933
Writeslut never.
>>27458162
MOAR BROKEN GLIMGLAM
>>27457492
I second this anon >>27457587
somehow the idea of a pampered slave always evoke her in my mind
>>27458106
Oh hell no, not done yet.
A reminder of what could happen to the ponies if they were slaves of humans.
Formidable stories are written here, go ahead with your Greentexts!
>>27458584
>not letting your pet go to the park
>calling her stupid
>pushing her away when she trys to nuzzle you
giving her the D even when she doesn't feel like it is fine, this is unacceptable
>>27458519
I had a miniature panic attack at the idea of missing it.
>>27458584
pg 9
>>27445622
Do you think the pony would develop an addictive or sexual thrill from doing these subtle things to eventually small wrong doings aren't enough, and she slowly starts ramping up her behavior just to get off?
>>27453400
>>27453368
>>27453351
>>27453300
Ponies are animals just like us. they can be forced to obey. Dash is the most physically resiliant specimen in depicted canon mlp. she is stronger than most and more athletic than any. I doubt she would be able to fly without magic, but I don't think its unreasonable to suspect she might be capable of real harm without it. chimps weight about half of a grown male adult, yet they are 3 times as strong and can rip a human face off. in addition, most of our physical weakness is for two reasons, One, apes have a bite as their natural form of attack, and strong musscles that constrict the brain case. Ponies bite things but their main methods of attack are always going to be bucking. they also don't have hands, and don't benefit as much as we do from needing weaker muscle impulses to apply more manual dexterity. they just don't have that dexterity. controlling independantly 10 digits isn't necissary for them, they only need the ammount of weakness that affords them adroit use of very double jointed limbs with no further apendages except 4 hooves.
The doublejoinedness would make them more fragile than real horses, but because of their increase flexability, they are conversely less likely to experience the downside, since they can land to prevent damage. still, its very possible that while rainbow dash could remain lethal at her depicted size in that image, she could be far more voulernable than she is normally used to.
Once she hospitalizes a handler, she will be put through enough pain and misery that she will rethink her violent tendencies.
>>27458655
>rape is fine
>but how dare you not let her go to the park or nuzzle you
I'd make some joke about how it's good you like horsies cause you'll never get a girl but I would be lying if I pretended there aren't women who find that hot.
>>27459691
>>27459700
Nice thumbnail faggot.
>>27459713
>>27445799
I'm really glad people here still remember me, it's quite a time after all
>it took both of you quite a long time till you finished the first bottle
>you didn't want to end up too drunk before the explosion, so you were matching with Sarah's tempo
>but you knew, that at the time when you finally get ported to Equestria, you'll be far from sober anyway
>there's still that joint waiting for you and after those few beers, it will destroy you even more
„Guess it won't be the best first impression when I arrive drunk AND stoned, eh?“ you ask and put away the empty bottle, reaching for two more
>“I was thinking about that too… Guess we'll just have to say that we're like this because of the porting spell.“
„Does it work like that?“
>“I don't know. But I felt pretty dizzy when Discord used it on me... And tired as well. We'll just ask for some time to rest before any welcoming or whatever is going to happen.“
„Sounds good.“ you smile and hand her one of the bottles
>“For Earth?“ she lifts her bottle
„For Earth.“
>around 23:20, you both had finished your 3rd bottle
>the night isn't that dark and moon shines pretty bright so you can still see
„Guess it's time. Where have I left that canister?“
>“Over there.“
>it's lying few meters behind you, so you pick it up and start pouring it on the car
>Sarah is sitting on the same spot, waiting
>when done, you look in her direction
„Let's do it?“
>>27459773
>she nods, smiling from ear to ear from anticipation
>“But be careful!“
„Always.“
>so you flick the lighter and light the benzine soaked car on fire
>as it spreads pretty quickly, you start running to the safe distance
>Sarah is already there on the spot
>you sit just next to her and light up the joint
>the car is completely on fire, but that's all so far
>you put the joint into Sarah's mouth after taking few puffs, hold the smoke in your lungs and watch the car burning
>“When is it going to explode?“ she asks you with a mouthful of smoke
„I...don't know… I guess it should be doing something.“
>“Maybe we should wait a little more.“
„Yeah.“
>…
>…
>you puff some more
>stil nothing
>“At least the fire looks cool.“
„Yeah, haven't seen a fire this big in a while.“ you laugh as the THC starts kicking in
>suddenly a loud boom in front part of the car, but not big enough to do any significant damage
>still left both of you shocked though, as it was completely unexpected now
>Sarah even leaped few centimetres above the ground with a squeaky „Eeek!“
>after few seconds of silence, you burst out in uncontrollable laughter, followed by her's as well
„Jesus, this was perfect.“ you wheeze
>trying to calm down a bit, you check the watch
>it's almost midnight
>but almost can mean at least good 20 minutes
>so you spend upcoming time chatting and staring into the big, lonely fire until your watch shows exactly 0:00
>but nothing happens
>>27459782
Oh shit.
Hey guys, could the old pet Futashy tumblr be interpreted as being set in the slave pone universe?
