Here's a story for you guys.
/sci/ liked it overall... I don't know if that's good or bad...
http://pastebin.com/EE3iJjFa
Hot. There needs to be more maths
>>8180566
I can feel my brain cells individually committing suicide while reading this.
>>8181930
Thanks. This makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.
>>8180566
On a sentence-by-sentence level, things aren't really very interesting.
it's too boring for me to bring myself to read it, tbqh. Work on your prose OP.