lol gay

>>8108820
Thanks friend

>>8108802
Painfully dull and obvious.

>girlfriend

>>8108802
Incredibly Cliche.

>>8108802
its good, but holy shit thats cringy

>>8108802
do you write a poem about your girl and some chad whom you refer as 'he'

>>8108802
Awful.

how many people still enjoy poetry anyway? with whole internet shortening of attention span deal etc

among 'normies' that is

>>8108927
I like qt sentences in prose but never had an appreciation for poetry.

The fanbase is shit too with their berets and ashtray-scented turtlenecks.

Maybe I just never read the right stuff?

>>8108802
that's cute. i felt a cuddle by a kitten.

just saying, read some poem before writing one.

>Her love similarly so

This is probably your worst line. Improve the diction here and make it sound, you know, poetic.

Your commitment to duality is cute at first, but quickly becomes repetitive and boring. Make your poem stand on its own merits and not on a gimic

>>8108802
Did she like it?

>>8108802
Please actually read poetry before you try to write it.

>>8109717
she did, yes.

>>8108802
kys

I wrote my gf a poem too. I'm not going to show it to her because I'm too spooked.

You are the best thing to happen to me
Oh my God
did I just say that?
And I meant it when I said it.
Take a step back
I felt it when I said it
But do I mean it?
Do I mean it now?
I’m hesitant to feel it now
But I felt it when I said it
The word is our origin
What I wrote was not a reflection of my essence
What I wrote became what I am as I wrote it
Uncertain of interior meaning
All there is is the word
all the fleeting voices are unified
fragmented but linked together by the word
the word speaks, not me
Did I mean it?
I don’t know.
But I said it.
I wrote it.
It became me and me it.

there's no such thing as a long distance relationship

>>8110352
What do you mean?

>>8110268
Holy shit wtf
(You)

>>8110268
Hey Tao

>>8108802

>it doesn't even rhyme

ill yourself you fucking retarded sack of shit

i bet you also like "abstract art"