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Rate my poim "I am a human" That's what I told
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"I am a human"
That's what I told my teachers
On my first day of school
"No, that's simply not possible.
Humans bleed, humans bruise.
Humans make mistakes, humans are flawed.
And we'll have none of that here."
So they corrected me

"I love nature"
That's what I told my doctor
On my first checkup visit
"Oh, that simply wont do.
The sun sears skins
And ground gives grass.
The Rose is far too red
And the sky far too blue.
Nature is slow and unproductive.
Only the unnatural can thrive."
So he corrected me

"I don't need to rhyme"
That's what I told my teacher
In high school, learning of poets and poetry
"What a silly thing to say!
All good poets rhyme!
Shakespeare would laugh,
Wordsworth would cry!
Just think of what Emerson would say,
If you didn't do it my way!"
So she corrected me

"I don't think it's funny"
That's what I told my friend
About the comedian obsessed with money
"Ah, your humanness has no end!
You see, it's so hilarious
Because everyone else loves it.
The jokes are lame enough to be nefarious!
Free yourself of reason and wit,
And it will become as funny as can be!"
So he corrected me

"I love you"
That's what I told her
The girl with eyes shining blue
She short circuited my heart for sure
"I cannot fathom the words you speak,
I do know of love
But it is fickle and weak.
Strange things, your gears consist of
But I do not love like you.
A machine like me hates.
Hate makes me stronger than you
I live behind the metal, unnatural gates."
So she corrected me
And so she crushed me

"I am free"
That's what I sang
As I bled my rose red blood
My soul flew free,
Free from my machine body
Free from my steel bones
Free from my copper veins
I flew toward the clouds
I flew toward nature
Away from the metal city
Away from my rusty rhymes
Away from my android friends
My body is mechanical
But I am a human
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>>7830562
Not a poem shit and you should feel bad/10
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didn't read, but good job you write, keep on, pal
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I read it in a Hank Hill voice/10
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I liked it
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the last two lines are actually poignant. good work.
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"I like how the last line... harkens back to the first line"
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protip:make your poems smaller so theres less to be criticized
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Very long but I actually thought that was great.
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Kind of shit but kind of not shit
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I want this no rhyming meme to die.
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>>7830787
rate my poem:

sans
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