My kid brother (he's 12) decided that he wants to write something that's good enough to get published. I asked him write me a page so I could see where he is and give him some pointers/motivation, because I know how much that would've helped me when I tried things like this.
I was hoping you guys could take a look and toss some thoughts, too. Here's his thing. http://pastebin.com/XXs2n2br
>>7829557
I'll only read when you admit it was you whom wrote it.
>>7829569
It's not, but I'll post some of my own writing in the thread once it gets going.
>>7829557
>Learn the difference between story and plot
>subject matter is dull; think about what makes a book you enjoy reading enjoyable---replicate that
>read widely so as to improve vocabulary
>avoid repetition
>cut out all cliches unless you can justify their inclusion
>syntax is okay
When I was twelve I wrote like this
>HehEHhE ThATs sure funne xDDDDD
>>7829591
At least you didn't talk..... like..... this...? o.0
Thank fuck all of the stuff I wrote got trashed when the shitty website i used went down
>>7829557
the formatting is shit and the whole thing is wordy. Tell him to read an article on wordiness and copy paste straight to pastebin instead of wasting his time double spacing the lines manually and making it look presentable.
