>She wasn’t doing a thing that I could see, except standing

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2016-01-21 16:31:38 Post No. 7609096
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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:31:38 Post No. 7609096 [Report]

>She wasn’t doing a thing that I could see, except standing there leaning on the balcony railing, holding the universe together.

Do you think this is a good line?

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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:33:36 Post No.7609101
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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:33:36 Post No.7609101 [Report]

The last few words turns it young adult tier imo

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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:34:36 Post No.7609103
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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:34:36 Post No.7609103 [Report]

uhhh, I'm mixed on this.

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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:35:04 Post No.7609104
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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:35:04 Post No.7609104 [Report]

>>7609096
I think it's pretty good.
>>7609101
Maybe a bit, but I still think it's good.

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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:41:01 Post No.7609120
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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:41:01 Post No.7609120 [Report]

>>7609096
The implication that a woman could hold anything together is very amusing...but the universe, kek.
Very good OP thanks for the laugh.

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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:50:52 Post No.7609160
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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:50:52 Post No.7609160 [Report]

It could be good in the right context but seems a bit corny.

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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:52:36 Post No.7609167
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Anonymous 2016-01-21 16:52:36 Post No.7609167 [Report]

>>7609096
Out of context, it's pretty poor.