I don't have any constructive criticism, but the paragraph didn't grab me at all.

>>92752
OP here, sober now. You're right, it reads like a 12 year old trying to write Danielle Steele. Thanks for the reply either way lol

>>92741
Could be better. I'm not a writer, though, so I don't have any real advice.

>>92741
The biggest issue you have here is that there are 3-4 paragraphs present within what you wrote that could be expanded upon.

>The whole sordid saga began the day I met him. I walked very slowly down the sidewalk, trees brushing my hair as I passed below their hanging branches. This season, petals and leaves flew on tiny whirlwinds, passing ethereally through my life and into lands and adventures unknown. I couldn’t help but smile at the beauty of it all - it tickled my soul, if you catch my drift.

Right here is fine as-is, though I would definitely ease up on a lot of the giddy, flowery imagery. It's fine to include, but you're drowning out the reader's attention with your own affectations. I can clearly see the kind of character that's being presented here, but you can add more details to this (time? year? location? etc.) that will make your flowery words saturate the mechanical details of the story less, and make their happiness pop a little more.

>The thin red scarf that I wore mostly for looks trailed behind my long hair in the gusts. The scarf wound up betraying me, though - on my way to the community center, it caught on an errant tree branch and I felt a sudden tension on my neck. Two weeks of amateur-level Tai Chi lessons had taught me all I needed to know and instinct kicked in. I screamed, twisted and writhed, then collapsed in a tangled heap as I tried in vain to escape the demonic scarf’s clutches. In the interest of full disclosure, reader, I should note that my adversary, the scarf, only bested me after seven shots of tequila and a glass of scotch, as well as a rather large blunt, had all had their savage way with me. To say that I’m an addict would be… well, inaccurate, perhaps.

Here's another one. Characterization, an action, backstory, etc. This one is also fine, but do a little more detail work on it. This is significantly better than the first paragraph, but note that they don't have to be one single paragraph.

>>92921
> In any case, I felt strong hands lift me and unwrap my neck, freeing me from the evil scarf’s grasp. Rosy-cheeked and slightly less dressed, I turned to face my savior. By turned, of course, I mean I drunkenly stumbled into his arms like a college girl who was, by some miracle, still a virgin at the ripe old age of twenty and had just spotted a hot, clean or otherwise passable male through her drunken haze. I still remember those first words, his hot breath dancing on my lips. “Miss, are you okay? Do you need nine-one-one called?”

Lastly, here's this one. For the female lead, it should have its own emphasis that she is being picked up and carried away by whatever bear lumberjack you are trying to portray, not as an afterthought to the rest of the day. Fill this up with images based on what she's seeing beyond the fact that he's "hot, clean, or otherwise passable". What's this guy wearing? What's his hair look like? Is he wearing any notable accessories? Does he have tattoos or other markings? Just give us some details for this positively-minded woman.

Also, is this supposed to be literotica? Because unless this leads directly to sex, I'd advise you slow things down dramatically on the romantic elements here. I get that this character is flustered after having been picked up by a handsome man, but these details would be better reflected in a flashback rather than being directly in-the-moment feelings. For now, you should just focus on making sure this character is introduced to the reader properly and, assuming he's actually very relevant to the plot, is thoroughly detailed and crystal clear. We don't want some random faggot who has a vague image in our minds, we want to know exactly who it is we should be imagining.