Anything But Star Wars edition.
Post your work, pitch your ideas, and pretend any of us are gonna make it.
I'm currently cutting a video likes these:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3UxZLCtatAo
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RhO1QTGeu3Q
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ukwdKX5Cmas
That's it so far. I hope I'll finish it before 2016.
>Me writing
>>63968202
There's a screenwriter skype group.but it's shit.
>>63968422
Everytime I start an /swg/, some asshole comes in saying "JOIN THE FUCKING SKYPE GROUP" which is all well and good but I'm not deluding myself into thinking I can do anything real.
>>63968509
most of the people in that group don't either.
I'll be monitoring and putting any sexist pitches and comments on their place.
>>63968551
I am writing a script about you at this very moment, you ugly fucking cunt.
It will be snuff porn. It's a metaphor about feminism.
>>63968541
Eh, fair enough.
I'm just itching to shoot something, but my tripod's broken.
>>63968551
The definition of a bad feminist.
>>63968551
I want to piss in her face so badly.
>>63968749
What's broken on it?
https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B6uwaxNQt5HRaGVheWhXYUpTYk0
And now, the same script I've posted in the last few threads.
>>63968862
The head, it won't stay upright. I've taken it off, and I'm gonna replace it at some point.
Question: Working to become an actor
How much do you need a degree from a uni? I presume none.
Is it worth taking the risk going to California trying to become an actor? Can you make a living even if you're just kind of a background actor?
>>63968920
You don't NEED any degrees, you just gotta have a lot of connections/suck a lot of Jew cock.
>>63968920
>How much do you need a degree from a uni? I presume none.
As with nearly all the jobs in the movie industrie: Shit does not give you a garanty for anything. 80% of all studied movie directors never make a second movie after graduation.
As an actor, you need a reel. Thats the thing that will get you jobs and more and better stuff for your reel. Once you get payed for your work, hire an agent. If you can not pay your rent nor have an agent, stay the fuck away from from moving to Hollywood.
Old Short Slasher Film - http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=Te1Rl2oVwME
Punk Rock video - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TPe3orZukyQ
Suburban Rock video - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tGTHzS9fuRw
Working on a new short about a whore, a cop, and a spree killer.
>>63969105
If you get land job in Hollywood and they really want you there, for an actual role and not Cop #3, they will pay for a motel and a flight then.
>>63969112
Watched the first few minutes of the Slasher film. Not bad. Acting was a bit fucky, felt like the chick should have been sweatier and more panicked when she gets to the cliff, really sell the idea someone's about to stab the living fuck out of her.
I made a short film recently. Spent just over $40 on festival entries. Waiting to hear back.
>tfw you have no idea if it's gonna make it into any
Welp
>>63969311
Post it on here? Let's see it.
>>63969344
Can't
Festival rules don't let the video exist online prior to the festival
>>63969406
Damn.
Well, good luck to ya.
>>63969308
Thanks! The critique about the sweating I haven't heard before. Definitely should have made her sweaty...
>>63969459
She just didn't seem particularly exhausted, like she seemed as though she just missed the bus and was running to catch up with it.
Just learned a friend of mine who actually makes films instead of talking about it blocked me on Facebook.
Sucks, but I probably deserved it for being an annoying cunt.
>>63968884
>SIMON (20's, nervous)
don't put apostrophes on ages
>Simon gets up, dusts himself off, and walks into the alley.
no hint or mention of an alley previously, which "the" alley implies in its specificity
>LEON
>Alright, alright. Why didn't Manny come up here himself?
the name Manny hasn't been spoken or presented in the story so it might be unclear who he's referring to. for the same reason and lack of other indication, it's also unclear that the Manny we meet in the car is anything more than another musclehead henchman pushing Simon to do his task, rather than the master manipulator of the situation.
As for the story,
1) complete tonal shift. starts off crime/noir, feels a bit like the opening to a detective story (first 3 minute with some guy having a bad run-in with the villain, cuts to next day at the precinct, main characters quipping over coffee before someone runs in with a new case) - then it suddenly turns into typical unbelievable one man army action. it's jarring
2) the pill barely registers as something noteworthy, so it felt out of the blue when it kicked in, or rather that it was going to kick in at all. what registers on the first page is that this guy is a hostage or an underling being forced into a situation. the pill and the sandwich seemed like two parts of the same thing, taking care of this guy same way you feed a prisoner, just a detail for the main point: "he's being forced to do their bidding".
3) this creates three points to one scene: a) Simon is being pushed into this confrontation b) the pill gives him powers and he's supposed to fight c) this was all Manny's ploy to demonstrate/sell his product. the first turn feels like veering off and because of that the third is a twist that wasn't really set up, since the story hadn't settled into the first point at all. you need to have some indication of point c in point a
>bump
>>63969443
cheers man
>>63970178
>the first turn feels like veering off and because of that the third is a twist that wasn't really set up, since the story hadn't settled into the first point at all. you need to have some indication of point c in point a
This is true. I wanted to put a scene in where you see Manny "activating" the pill, but you don't see that it's him until he walks into the alley.
What do I do after finishing a script?
How do I get my movie made?
>>63970796
post in on /tv/, Max Landis will steal it eventually, no matter how bad it is.
>>63970796
Make it yourself. No way to trust studios to make it.
>>63968390
Same
>>63972262
It's a big budget movie.
Ideally, I'd want to direct it, but I need a studio backing me.
>>63972971
Good luck with that! You can be happy if someone even buys it. Let alone prouce it. And unless you allready have a really good vita, they will not let you even near a camera or an actual movie set.
Get an agent, if it is good, sell it. be happy.
>>63973101
Vita? I was thinking submitting it to Amazon might help it gain recognition.
>>63973367
Try here first
https://blcklst.com
>>63973426
Oh, wow. Thank you.
I didn't know how the blacklist worked, I didn't know you could submit.
I was talking to my Acting teacher about it yesterday, I never thought to just Google it.
>>63973932
I haven't written anything good enough for me to actually submit anything, but I figure others might be able to benefit.
>>63974079
I literally have only written one script before, for a fake commercial in my Freshman year of high school, we never even shot it.
But I'm confident in my idea and some of the scenes I have planned out. And from the looks of it, if you submit here you can get ratings from professionals.
What I'm saying is, don't be afraid, anon. Pan made it onto the blacklist, and that movie was complete shit outside of Hugh Jackman. And not even shit in the fun way like Oz, The Great and Powerful.
I'm stumped on one part of my film that I just can't figure out how to do perfectly, can I get some help? What is a good way to do Man vs Nature in the desert with Man being violent towards nature. My first idea was killing some type of animal there but that may be hard to do as a student. Any ideas, I'd really appreciate anything.
>>63974251
I literally only have like two scenes written, and I'm trying to make it as silent as I can so I can focus on actually shooting it.
Second scene's up here: >>63968884
>>63968202
Short skit: https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=XBwkHzlf1cI
>>63974348
Why is it Man that must be antagonistic? And why a desert?
>>63974383
>I literally only have like two scenes written
Oh, my bad.
I'll read your scene after I finish this episode of One Punch Man.
>>63974471
WAN PAAAAAAAAAAANCH
Cool shit, man.
>>63974348
Not sure what the scenaria / era is in your script, but maybe show some flowers or even an oase growing there, and he is just trambling on it or destroying it.
the desert is complicated, because there is pretty much nothing to destroy. and the desert will also probably destroy most humans.
>>63974471
Man isn't the only one that's antagonistic in it, I just can't think of the man part. I'm going to characterize nature so that both man and nature are conflicting entities, then they go through some sort of transformation and finally coalesce. So the desert acts as a way of being an unforgiving and intense expression of nature as a reaction to the man
>>63974547
>and the desert will also probably destroy most humans.
yeah that's why I think it works well in Nature's violence against man but the lack of life is hard to work with Man's violence against Nature. That's a good idea, it's only one person lost in the desert and pretty much entirely thematic, but having him ravage what little life is left there, like maybe trying to eat some plants in desperation and ripping them out or maybe getting frustrated and having him take it out on any of the plant life might be a good idea too. Thanks a lot!
Working on a new screenplay. Learning a lot from my university lecturer about screenwriting; real stuff that helps to sit down and work out the story.
Here's the synopsis:
>A band of untested young soldiers must fight against towering mythic beasts and dangerous forces lurking in the shadows to defend the last remnants of mankind.
Currently 4/5 done with my first short film. HOLY SHIT I had no idea how tough this would be. It's undeniably a lot of fun to do, but so many things can go wrong that I hadn't even thought of.
I'll post it here when it's all done. Been editing it as I go, and planning on shooting the last part this weekend.
>>63975356
Good luck with that, senpai
>>63974383
>>63974510
>>63968884
I gotta agree with a lot of what this guy: >>63970178 said.
Except it's fine that the name Manny hasn't been spoken aloud.
"Alright, alright. Why didn't Manny come up here himself?" followed by Simon pulling out the note and saying "He, uh, told me to read this to you." is enough to indicate the man in the car is Manny, since he gave Simon the note.
You need to describe your characters with more than just their age and an accompanying verb, otherwise whoever is reading it is going to assign their preconceived mental images to your characters.
I see "Simon", maybe the first thing I imagine is a nerdy chipmunk. Manny? Manny Pardo. Leon? A French assassin, but by his dialogue it seems he's Latino, you need to make that clear from the start.
The verbs shouldn't even be part of the description
>SIMON (20's, nervous) nibbles on a half eaten Panera sandwich. On either side of him are two imposing GUARDS in suits.
should instead be
>SIMON (20s) nervously nibbles on a half eaten Panera sandwich. On either side of him are two imposing GUARDS in suits.
Also, I may be wrong but I think you're supposed to describe actions in brackets instead of parentheses.
And again, be more descriptive.
Instead of
>LEON
>(disbelief)
>You're Simon?
Try
>LEON
>[eyes widening in disbelief, a smirk creeping onto his face]
>You're Simon?
>>63977002
(cont.)
Lastly, make sure your characters have distinct voices. Know their history, background, and speech patterns even if they're minor.
Leon seems like he had a poor upbringing, reflect that in that in the way he speaks. More cursing and more slang.
"Okay, okay. Sorry, that was fuckin' rich." really stood out to me, it doesn't seem correct. Is Leon the type to sarcastically call something "rich"? Do people even do that anymore? And if he is, the "fuckin'" shouldn't be there. It ruins the flow of the sentence.
>Anyway, we're gonna have to send him a message back, so...
What's the thought process of this? Why is Leon going to beat up Simon? He seems to know him or have at least heard of him in some capacity based off the "You're Simon?" line from earlier.
Is Leon offended that Manny sent some scrawny fuck instead of showing up in person? If so, make that clear. Make Leon be angry.
How many thugs are there? Don't have them just stand around, have at least one thug talk.
Maybe the "Can you believe this shit?" can be said by Leon's second in command.
>>63977002
>by his dialogue it seems he's Latino, you need to make that clear from the start.
That was what I was going for originally, so I'm glad I got that across.
I'll definitely work on fixing up the descriptions.
>>63977086
>so I'm glad I got that across.
I was only able to catch it because of the "ese".
>>63977043
>Is Leon offended that Manny sent some scrawny fuck instead of showing up in person? If so, make that clear. Make Leon be angry.
This is extremely helpful, thanks.
>>63977242
You're welcome, I'm glad I could help.
