Was this movie a first draft? It's a fucking mess.
> The "Resistance" is now the "Galactic Army" and are just that, an army.
> The old man Kylo Ren kills at the Jakku base is Poe's father
> Ren can freeze blaster shots with a lot of concentration but cannot freeze people
> BB-8 has the full map to Luke all in one piece, as the fragmented mad idea really makes no sense
> Snoke is removed entirely and General Hux fills that position as the one who started the First Order. Hux greatly respects the dark side of the force and the “glorious” empire but he and Kylo Ren still clash. An obvious power struggle between the two
>The First Order are more like the Rebels in the OT as they are way weaker than the New Republic, There is no death star 3.0 or Emperor 2.0. Less rehashing. The Army has been looking for the Order’s main base for years as they are slowly getting more powerful and they can no longer shrug them off as a non threat.
> Fin has killed good guys before, and kills on Jakku before stopping and thinking about what he's done, where he is later berated in front of other stormtroopers by Captain Phasma and they all call him a pussy for having emotions
> Rey can't fly at all and hasn't ever used a blaster
> When Fin meets Rey he is discovering his free range of emotions for the first time, a running theme of the film would be Fin realising what certain emotions are
> When Fin and Rey are escaping, BB-8 see’s Poe who has been captured by the Scrapyard owner (who want’s to trade him to the First Order for a cash reward), a fist fight breaks out to save him, Fin just gets in the way while Rey holds her own
> They escape in a clunky Scrapheap Collector Ship instead of the Falcon. With Poe flying, Fin shooting and Rey trying to remove the hyperdrive limiter (That's there to prevent ships from being stolen)
> Fin has inner conflict about killing other Stormtroopers
> After escaping they all congratulate each other and see their friendships strengthen, Poe shamelessly hits on Rey, but she's a stronk women and blows him off
> We get down time on the ship and the three mains discuss stuff.
> Rey talks about her depressing past and how she's always wanted to be part of the Army, thrilled to hear that she's with two members of the army at which point Rey finds out about Fin being an ex-trooper. She’s mad and feels lied too.
> Fin talks about being raised to do nothing but kill and how he couldn’t help but feel different from the others. It’s also established that Fin has no idea what parents are.
> Poe talks about his family's long history with the rebellion and the Army and how he can't let them down.
> We get glimpses of Kylo Ren talking to some off screen object like a madman and only towards the end of the film is it revealed to be the mask of Darth Vader
> Poe says that due to him being stationed on Jakku he has no idea where the secret base is but thinks he might know where to find someone who does know.
> They go to that forrest bar place and find Han who looks pretty washed up sitting in a booth with Chewy drinking.
> Han’s still married to Leia but tired of being tied to the rebellion and the Army and has secretly gone back into smuggling on the side, much to Leia's dismay. Their relationship is rocky but still operational
> Chewie actually looks older and rougher. A budding friendship is implied between Chewie and Fin
> Han blows them off before they bring up Luke’s map and he takes them to the Falcon. As they leave the bar they are watched by a suspicious alien
>>64059036
> Han show’s them Luke’s lightsaber and says how Lando found it on Cloud City. Brings up that Lando (who became a well known war hero and political figure) was assassinated a few years back
> When Han finds out Fin was a Stormtrooper he puts a gun to Fin’s head, saying if he fucks up even in just a small way he will personally kill him… slowly.
> Fin show’s Rey how to use a blaster while apologising for having to lie to her, he asks her to come with him to the outer rim saying that they don’t belong with the Army as they will be hunted down by the First Order. She declines trying to get Fin to do what’s right but Fin admits that he’s always been a coward. Fin leaves to find someone who can take him to the outer rim
> That suspicious alien and a rival smuggling gang show up and say they are tired of not getting their money and spotted Han with the fugitives so they want him to turn them over so they can take them to the first order
> First Order arrives and we get a fun three way battle between our main characters and the backup X-Wings, the First Order and the rival smugglers
> Fin changes his mind and trys to go back, finding the Saber on a dead smuggler who had disarmed Han and the gang
> Fin subdues a fellow stormtrooper in the midst of the battle to try and let him see he doesn't have to be a mindless soldier, the trooper doesn't give a fuck and keeps trying to kill him “Traitor!’. Showing Fin that other stormtroopers are too brainwashed and are lost causes
> Rey gets captured with BB-8 but using her technical know how puts BB into a coma like state before being captured. Fin, Han and Poe see this.
>>64059071
> With Fin giving the Army the location of the First Order base, Leia suggest they simply bomb it to stop them from getting to Luke, stating that its worth not finding Luke than letting Ren find Luke.
> Fin says he won't let Rey die for the greater good and promises he can get into the base, lower the radars so their ships can get close enough without getting fucked up and save Rey in the process.
> Han convinces Leia that it’s the right thing to do and elects to go with Fin. This is where we find out that Han is Kylo Ren’s dad for the first time.
> Poe gives Fin a GPS like device so he and his squad will know where he is and won’t blow him to shit
> Rey doesn't break out using the force nor use the force at all, Ren simply senses it while interrogating her and leaves without a word.
> Fin, Han and Chewy find BB-8 just as some technicians fix him. They lower the shields and then release Rey from a control tower where she promptly runs off before they can get down to her cell
> We find out Fin is force sensitive (like Leia) as he senses Rey and goes after her
> Han confronts his son and in their conversation we find out that Han knew Ren had killed Lando in a vain attempt to show the First Order means business to the New Republic
> This is also the first time we see Ren without his mask
> Han’s death is largely the same but he doesn't fall into oblivion and Chewy goes full rage to recover his body and bring it back
>>64059121
> Fin alerts Poe to his position and lets him know they're in danger as soon as they come across Kylo Ren
> Fin and Rey fight Kylo Ren at the same time (Fin with the Saber and Rey with a blaster) he still fucks Fin up
> Rey is subdued and is about to get finished off when she manages to force the saber just a few feet closer in order to block his blow and kick him away, running to Fin’s aid.
> Poe and his squad start blasting at Ren who runs away in defeat
> When they arrive the whole Army is cheering as Leia waits for Han to emerge from the Falcon, Chewie walks up to her as she begins to silently cry. Placing his forehead on hers in weird sign of respect and sympathy for each other
> In the medical bay Fin is alive and Rey comes to thank him for coming back for her as people have only ever left her, after embracing (Fin’s first hug ever) she grabs him and kisses him very briefly (also something Fin has never experienced)
> There's an award ceremony, with Fin, Rey, Poe and Chewie all standing with medals but as it pans out it's revealed to be Hans funeral
> Leia decides to let Rey and Fin go find Luke. Poe declines as he has been promoted and has new responsibilities so Chewie must fly the ship
> Chewie sits alone in the cockpit staring at the empty pilots chair
> The end scene now takes place at night as Rey and Fin approach a black figure sitting in a meditation like position, silhouetted against a small fire. R2-D2 is there with him. The final shot is simply Luke half looking around to see who is there
Was that so fucking hard? Inb4 I'm an autist for writing this out. It took less than ten minutes
>>64059171
I like it. Chewy ending scene in cockpit is golden.
I ain't memeing when I say tl:dr
>>64059526
tl:dr it just works better
>>64059013
>>64059036
>>64059071
>>64059121
>>64059171
> Ren was unintentionally lead to the dark side by Luke who began to toy with it. Realising his mistake and being unable to face Han and Leia knowing what he did to their son. He exiled himself, trying to reconnect with the light side. It’s implied Luke was training other Jedi’s and they were slaughtered by Kylo Ren
>>64059013
Also:
>Hux isn't 14 years old
>>64059013
>>64059036
>>64059071
>>64059121
>>64059171
>>64059607
I dig it, no stupid tentacle aliens or shitty cg motion capture characters is a big plus
>>64059013
Don't try to fix what isn't broken.
TFA is absolutely perfect in every way.
>>64059013
I'm not gonna read your fan fiction familia
>>64061518
pleb detected
sweet fucking jesus, saged
>>64059013
>>64059036
>>64059071
>>64059121
>>64059171
I'm not saying the movie was perfect, but jesus fuck, don't consider going into writing.
Much better actually
>>64059013
cringe ass fanfiction
>>64059171
>> There's an award ceremony, with Fin, Rey, Poe and Chewie all standing with medals but as it pans out it's revealed to be Hans funeral
That's pretty good t b h f a m, Chewy finally gets the medal he deserved too
>>64061748
>>64061982
>>64060095
>>64059505
ty family
>>64061769
ok c:
>>64059013
it's a bit cringey you wrote this but to be fair it's much better than the film we got
>>64059013
Not bad but
>Not having a scene where Luke feels Han Solo die through the force
>Not having Luke head to the planet immediately and surprisingly save Rey's cunt ass from Kylo, forcing his retreat and escape
>Map was a red herring
>>64061518
get a load of THIS guy
>>64062535
I think I like the reveal at the end to have this happen. Although if the second film opened with a flashback to Luke feeling Han's death happen it'd be pretty stellar.
>cuck shit
Dropped
>no finn
>Poe escaped the attack, is being hinted by first order, fills the finn role
>fo is a conglomerate of imperial remnants, run by Thrawn, the only one old enough to have personally known Vader and sheev
>kylo Ren is the same
>Han left to find Luke, not to avoid his problems
>Luke left to protect something (le mysterious macguffin) not because he's a bitch
>space battle is between new republic and first orders first attack on their home world, no superweapon
>>64062839
Why no Fin?
>>64062887
Please tell me what purpose he served
Having Poe be the #2 to Rey is more interesting. He's already a man on a mission. You don't need bb8.
>>64062952
I liked the fish out of water aspect. I liked that he was a bad guy that didn't turn good but just wanted out and got wrapped up with the good guys. He's definitely more interesting than Poe (who works better as a side character than the lead)
>>64063000
Poe was uninteresting because they gave him nada. He'd be absolutely based if he was the Finn + bb8 role.
Holy shit, Star Wars was the most "LE OMG XD" film I have ever seen in my entire life.
>LE PILOT MAN GETS CAPTURED BUT HE IS CHEEKY TO STORMTROOPERS WHEN HE SHOULD BE SCARED OMG XD
>LE INSUBORDINATE BLACK STORMSTROOPER OMG XD
>LE GIRL WITH BASIC MECHANICAL SKILLS CAN SOMEHOW FLY ANY PIECE OF HARDWARE OMG XD what a WOMAN
>LE DROID SHOT OUT LE LITTLE ROPEY ROPES TO NOT ROLL AROUND OMG XD
>LE *ANOTHER* DEATH STAR?!? OMG XD
>LE HAN SHOOTS LE STURMTRUP WITHOUT LOOKING?!? OMG XD
>LE GOOFY DROID SIDEKICK! HAHA HIS REACTIONS TO THE SITUATION ;) OMG XD
>LE CHEWIE IS DANGEROUS HAHA BE GENTILE OR HE'LL BITE CHYA ;) OMG XD
>LE GIRL CAN GET LE LEGHTSABER BECAUSE SHE IS BETTER WITH LE FORCE?! OMG XD
every fucking character, every fucking scene, every fucking little goof and gaffe and laugh they try to shoehorn into this piece of shit caused my eyes to roll up to the heavens
the entire plot is so goddamn stupid and its all so fucking shitty, it makes me so mad. why is it that every good character punches so far above their weight? fucking dumbass bitch from the sticks can somehow fly and fix the millenium falcon better than its owner and pilot of decades?! BECAUSE SHE IS SUCH A CLEVER LITTLE GIRL HAHA ;) OMG. Every time they get in a firefight the stormtroopers just miss and melt. THE TIE-FIGHTER TO X-WING RATIO WAS LIKE 10:1 HOW COME THESE FUCKING REBS SOMEHOW BEAT BORN, BRED, AND TRAINED SOLDIERS
I FUCKING HATE THIS PANDERING BULLSHIT
ITS JUST LETS JUST MAKE SHIT UP, WHAT IS SUSPENSION OF DISBELIEF, HAHA MEMES GOOD GUYS ALWAYS WIN :):):):):)
>>64059013
You made Han's role in the film way better, props for that man
>>64063180
As uncontrollably spergy as this is I agree, I was yelling out who cares at half the shit presented in screen. Storm troopers were badly shot too, I could see right under the helmet all the time, made them look so cheap.
>finn doesn't act like an american suburban black dude dropped into star wars
>the movie and characters aren't a self aware memefest
>the movie actually takes a second to fucking breathe instead of being a nonstop ADD capeshit actionfest
seriously, the characterization of this movie is just fucking wrong, it doesn't feel like it believes itself, it doesn't feel like star wars
>>64063180
yeah it had wayyy too many winks and nods to the audience, they should have cut out about half of the 'funny' moments. it was just too saturated.
>>64059013
Movie ending in a Han funeral would have given way more closure than Luke just staring at the ocean.
>>64063180
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