old thread >>47729443
bumping
>>47739082
>>47739091
>>47739103
>>47739082
-Factory Cruiser
-Male
-Fit
-Durable
-Strong
-Light Feet
-Sharpshooter
-Melee Mastery
-Helldiver Suit
-Annihilator (MOTHERFUCKER)
-High Tech Assault Rifle
-Double Disposable Automatic Pistol
-Force Field Projector Greanade
-Maria The Plague Doctor
-Wind Goddess Hopea
-Demon Hunter Kaori
-Hover Jeep T-32
Wind Goddess will give me immortality
And then hunt that bitch ass demon, After that.....imma rekt shit up while this song plays
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b7greBFoIds
>>47739110
>>47739117
>>47739068
I'd love to see the reverse of this: fantasy hero party teleported to a sci fi setting.
>>47739147
Talking about this >>47739082
NOT the OP
>>47739068
Pastebin: http://pastebin.com/vrqYhnpu
>>47739124
Dunno if it's just me but the dark red text is almost unreadable on that background.
>>47739147
I'd love to see you make it :D!
>>47739270
I'm not as funny as Hibiki though.
>>47739249
yea, I noticed that, i'll do a fix tomorrow
>>47739275
aww that sucks so bad!! Guess we'll never see it
>>47739422
>>47739270
> :D!
> !!!
I can't believe it's summer again. The year goes by so fast.
>>47739503
>he doesn't post smileys and exclamation points to be equally obnoxious as those who post >pls makeing of this cyoa 4me!!!
step it the fuck up
Did you girls read about the Rat Meat Scandal in the Noble Weekly? It seemed the St Flares administration ran out of funds because none of their peasant students could pay tuition, so they ended up serving them rat meat for a whole month. Hilarious, right? The best part was that it got discovered by a visiting Lunestier student. It seems NONE of their own students could taste anything wrong with the meals. They must have thought it was a delicacy! Ohoho!
You girls know any more juicy St Flares gossip?
>>47739615
St. Flares is 86% male. The males think it's 50:50.
>>47739629
You can't really blame them when the average St Flares girl looks like this though. I mean, could you imagine if this thing was allowed to walk on Lunestier? Daddy would sue the school for traumatizing me.
>>47739615
Rumor has it that because of st. Flares financial troubles they can no longer afford housing and Lunestier has offered to assign them Lunestier roommates.
The richer the Lunestier student the poorer the st. Flares student they'll be coupled with.
>>47739652
You have good taste in anime.
>>47739678I mainly watch it for the clown x shota though.
>>47739697
Then I have a spoiler for you,Clown died in the manga last chapter.
>>47739615
I only enjoy stuck-up bitches like you because I want tobreak your spirit and use you while you cry for daddy.
Just a bit.
>>47739724
Huh, is that confirmed? Last chapter I read ended with him saying something about a special technique before being gangblasted.
>>47739759
Actually people were complaining about what exactly happened,he did die, then he brought himself back to life and is apparently stronger than ever.
>>47739652
>>47739615
so it's the same person posting this?
Your meme is growing stale, friend.God, the threads are slow as shit when the Americans are asleep, and much too fast when they're up.
I hate waking up to a thread that's passed the bump limit and on page 9
>>47739724
>>47739759
He's alive and going on an edgy killing spree. Pulled some bullshit to resurrect himself though.
>>47739615
Why do you keep posting that picture? Are you implying that Hime is a trap?
>>47739772
Just need to keep the meme alive until the expansion, then it'll truly pierce the heavens.
Is it less edgy or extra edgy to make a non-edgy build in Ej Hal?
>>47739652
>>47739664
>>47739615
Just a reminder that Lunestier is literally named after a failure.
>tfw really want to make a certain genre of cyoa
>tfw it's been done to death
I just want to makeBleu 2, a good, classical one, but it would almost be a straight ripoff.
>>47739664
I heard the St. Flares druids are shapeshifting into manhorses and fucking the Lunestier sluts with their gigantic cocks.
>>47739805
Extra edgy because you just want to be a special snowflake.
Could i get someone to post the most recent Stardust? I've not seen it in a long old time.
>>47739818
Blue is pretty close to perfect though. It would be hard to improve on it. Why not make your own fantasy cyoa?
>>47739805
Edgy != Snowflakey
And no it's not snowflakey to make a non-edgy Ej Har build. Ej Har aren't really misanthrope material, they're probably more the investment banker/clickbait journalist type of sociopath, the ones that didn't just choose the school because it's closer to their parents' house that is.
>>47739818
>it would almost be a straight ripoff.As long as you actually have boons for more exotic eyes/hair/skin/bodyshape, like promised in the Gender options, yours will be infinitely better than the original Bleu v2.
>>47739818
Sometimes I feel like taking Blue, erasing those 25 points and making it so the cyoa gives you 40 points. It would be super disrespectful but 25 points is not enough to make a decent build if you want companions.
>>47739833
>Why not make your own fantasy cyoa?
that's what I'm saying, anon. I want to do just that, but what I would end up with would be dangerously close to a ripoff
>>47739875
yeah, I never took companions unless I took the last class.
>>47739897
That sounds like nonsense. If you make your own cyoa and it happens to resemble an old cyoa, then that's just how it is. You're not going out of your way to copy it so it shouldn't be a problem.
And if you want to make it different, be sure to add lamias. We need more lamias.
>>47739915
lame-ias
>>47739915
This is the best CYOA since, as far as I know, it's the only one that contains Llamas.
>>47739922
>he doesn't want to playfully squish cute girls with his tail
I'd call you a faggot but even they want to squish boys.
tfw you realize that since you live in a materialistic universe, most of the options laid out before you in CYOA's have "your death" as a prerequisite.
Have fun with all those cool powers, me v2, because I sure won't.
>>47739915
>it happens to resemble an old cyoa
well, they'll both be
>transported to low fantasy
well, technically Bleu has more settings, but that's not the feel I got from all of the cyoa save the bottom part
>pick a class
>pick a race
>pick boons / powers
Maybe I could make itKonosuba? Have a few worlds to pick from, a special snowflake item etc.?
>>47739615
The Great Tournament is so predictable. You can always easily predict which school wins which championship.
Battle Royal: Lunestier
Sports: Uzuza
Great Hunt: St. Flares
>>47740037
I like reincarnation/death transportation cyoas as long as I get to keep my memory. There's also nothing wrong with a good old classic cyoa: not every cyoa needs to be some unique, groundbreaking experience.
>>47740070
Not every Lunestier student takes Dueling, not every St. Flares student takes Monster Hunting, and the tournament also has 2 vs 2 and up brackets where Dueling would be useless.
>>47739804
I really really like this CYOA but there's really no reason to make another build. My first one was pretty perfect. Not sure what's stopping it from being finished, though. Seems to have a good level of polish and mechanical detail. I might recommend putting the powers on equal rows, though that'd lead to quite a bit of whitespace.
>>47740075
>classic cyoa
> I want to do just that, but what I would end up with would be dangerously close to a ripoff
Rolled 53, 4 = 57 (2d100)
>>47739964
Expedition:
>Tomb of Qin
Contact:
>Lady Trevalyn
Companions:
>Winnie Yau (+25/+25)
>Ming-Na Wu (+30/+0)
>Don Cephal (+5/+25)
>Jack Faulds (+15/+0)
Challenges/Rewards
>Treasure Thief 1
>Icebreakers (+0/+10)
Final Stats:
>Success Rate: 75%
>Survival Rate: 60%
>>47740176
I honestly don't think anyone will care. If you're really worried just add some/plenty of lore and it'll be allright.
>>47739818
Bleu is so boring and plain though,why would you want to copy it?
>>47740070
You're underestimating how useful Ej Hal classes are in PvP. Their "forbidden" magic would be hard to counter since other schools are not allowed to study them, and exposure to them would be limited.
>>47740070
>Battle Royal: Lunestier
why?
Why would a Lunestier student be better than a 1v1 against a mage/berserker/other warrior? Why would they be better at 2v2, 3v3 or 4v4 than St. Flare, who go on fieldtrips constantly and so they have far more experience fighting in groups than any other school.
Blood Magic probably rapes in a 1v1
>>47740169
No but the students have taken Dueling are all from Lunestier, and Monster Hunting from St. Flares.
I think Dueling would be helpful in a small team vs a small team if you've also taken teamwork.
>>47740243
>Why would a Lunestier student be better than a 1v1
They have classes specifically built up around destroying people in 1vs1
>>47740249
I doubt it, the CYOA makes it sound like Dueling is inferior to all other combat training in anything but one on one. Pretty much only better than nothing.
>>47740243
Fighting in an arena is totally different from chasing each other in the woods.
>>47740070
Ej Hal
Blood magic x3
Martial combat x3
Physical training x2
Maneuvers x2
That's my PvP/ Battle Royale build. I honestly think it's pretty great and I don't see myself automatically losing to a Lunestier bitch.
>>47740249
>>47740255
There's a big leap from "They have skills and a background giving them an added edge." to "They win every time without challenged."
People seem to want to distill the schools down into very simple, very exaggerated traits and rank them as either good or bad but that's just a stupid way to think about things, especially when we have zero evidence to base any of these claims on.
>>47740275
All the schools do have specialties though, anon. Sure there are retarded, no brains pugilists in Lunestier, but the school is still most known for quick-casting, wyvern riding, and dueling.
>>47740266
All you have to do is make sure there aren't multiple people focusing on a single enemy, as long as everybody chooses a single target and forces them to focus on them only they'll always be in a 1 on 1.
Can't be hard with a little coordination.
>>47740226
that's not what I said though.
>>47740037
>>47740293
>>47740310
>>47740272
Can't wait for drawbacks.
Gonna get some spell refinement + blood magic.
>>47740321
>>47740331
>>47740344
>>47740267
And fighting in an arena with three teammates and three extra opponents is totally different from facing a single opponent with the same training as you, with the same skillset and same rules
>>47740358
Also, does anyone have a good body font for a fantasy setting?
>>47740369
Comic sans.
>>47740298
If anyone knows that someone's from Lunestier, they'll gang the fuck out of them regardless of coordination.
>>47740384
All four are from Lunestier. That's basically asking to be flanked.
>>47740323
I don't think I'd do that. My autistically imagined fighting style is based on constantly reshaping blood weapons for which I'll use the same blood. Like a blood sword that stretches out midstrike to unbalance enemies.
I would pick Dueling I think (with drawbacks) for that added bonus to 1v1.
I just finished an update. This thread is still pretty fresh, so I'll go ahead & post it.
UPDATE - Two new girls
(1/18)
(4/18) - >>47710904 → Fei La & Mishe
(5/18) - >>47710938 → Twile & Harmony
(6/18) - >>47710983 → Omne & Pan
(7/18) - >>47711012 → Alice & Andrea
(8/18) - >>47711031 → Kaila & Jeanne
>>47740405
(2/18)
(9/18) - >>47711047 → Kataline & Floof
(10/18) - >>47711064 → Saki & Oki
(11/18) - >>47711085 → Chere & Yin
(12/18) - >>47713393 → Lillan & Bloom
(13/18) - >>47713427 → #056 "Bunny" & Medi
I forgot to delete the right arrows when I copy-pasted. Oh well.
>>47740418
This time, it's the song and the sword.
(3/18)
>>47740369
As far as fonts go I'm partial to Tahoma and Vani, but I think Tahoma probably has the better spacing of the two. Still, I don't know what you'd be looking for in a "fantasy font".
>>47740429
you're not posting them all, right?
>>47740429
(14/18) - Flo & Beyn
There was a typo in this page. This new version has it fixed.
>>47740429
Holy shit I love Muse waifus. I'm praying for her to give me artistic skills. Don't let me down, Beri!
>>47740070
>Battle Royal: Lunestier
Anti-mages would wreck them.
>>47740441
(15/18) NEW PAGE
>>47740436
You saw the links, didn't you?
>>47740442
A very specific subset of art, but yes.
>>47740448
(16/18) - Library 1
>>47740461
(17/18) - Library 2
>>47740448
I forgot to mention this, but on Yin's page
>look upon morality
I think that should be mortality?
>>47740469
(18/18) - Miya
>>47740470
So, that's correct as is. You can tell how objectively good / bad someone is by looking. It helps ensure she doesn't kill good people.
>>47738395
The funniest thing about this post is still >>47738290
>>47740448
Not bad mechanically, but they don't see very affectionate.
>>47740448
>Not choosing Falchion
I AM AWAITED IN VALHALLA, SHINY AND CHROME
>>47740492
>18 pages long waifu CYOA
Someone stop this absolute madman
This is getting out of control
>>47740519
I hate whiners.
Anyone have a Quietcyoa?
>>47740492
Oh, I misread it a bit. The third one was sort of misleading, I guess. It seemed more like "they're supposed to die anyway, so it's fine."
>>47740444
Can't anti-mage yourself out of a rapier.
>>47740545
Rapiers are sissy swords for girls.
>>47740532
HAHAHAHAHAH.
FUNNY YOU SHOULD ASK.
>>47740441
(14/18) - Flo & Beyn
Scratch that, there was another error.
>>47740505
Just because they're not lustful doesn't mean you can't form relationships with them. But, yes, I wanted to make these two a bit more work-oriented than normal.
>>47740513
I'm glad you like her.
>>47740519
Is it out of control?
>>47740551
what makes them sissy swords?
>>47740567
>Thin little needles
>Prancy
>Associated with France
>>47740561
>Just because they're not lustful doesn't mean you can't form relationships with them
Yeah but you're not given any ques as to them being interested, let alone what they'd be like. So they just feel cold and distant.
>I wanted to make these two a bit more work-oriented than normal.
I think it hurts the quality, especially considering the whole genre of the CYOA. I doubt they're going to be all that popular.
>>47740561
Hey, do you happen to know the maximum file size allowed?
>>47740561
I think they're great. Unfortunately, the Orb of Life doesn't fix my horrible mutant brain or unlock the latent psychic abilities that surely cause such problems, so getting trained and worked over by Falchion is totally out of the question. Melody is tight competition, though.
>>47740585
8mb
>>47740561
>Is it out of control?
no
>>47740448
THESE ARE GLORIOUS!
>Melody
>Lessons
Teach me how to become a brilliant musician.
>Video
I'll do my own effects and produce high quality music videos.
>Voice Mic
I wish she could just change my voice instead of giving me a fake item, but this will do.
>BONUS ACTIVATED
I don't actually want more items or anything but this bonus is just pretty cool.
>Instrumental Suit... if I have to pick
Rating: 4/5
Very good, but I feel like Lessons doesn't teach me rather than give me a special skill for a day. The Mic is a bit of a downer too.
--------------------------------
>Falchion
>Whip Into Shape
Make a man out of me!
>Spirit Warrior
I can't not pick this. It's too much fun. Too bad there's no randomizer so we could see what we get.
>Coat of Arms
Infinite guns!
>BONUS ACTIVATED
I'd love to join the tournament!
>Lock On
This should be pretty epic with infinite guns.
Rating: 5/5
Finally a waifu that focuses on giving me personal power.
---------------------
Both library pages are toptier too.
Rolled 1 (1d20)
>>47740405
orb of life, library, employment.
Falchion
Reward
spirit warrior, Valkyrie wings
Falchion Armor
rolling for the quality of my spirit animal.
>>47740617
mouse of uselessness it is ;_;
>>47740172
Not if more powers were added
>>47740614
>waifu
>Girl doesn't give a fuck about you and just wants to use you as a pit fighter
>>47740448
Both girls seem pretty boring compared to some of the others. Just not really monstergirl enough for my tastes.
Beri, I don't know if you're just racist against people with scales or what, but we need more reptilian girl representation. Maybe a lizard girl that tried and failed to integrate into society or something.
>>47740638
Think up one that's a monstergirl and not a standard one and suggest it.
>>47740561
(14/18)
Actually, I just got asked about Summoning Scrolls again. I slightly tweaked the wording to make it more clear that they're just items used to obtain the gifts. Hopefully I can be done with this page, now. Just a moment & I'll delete the other posted ones.
>>47740584
I can understand that view. Don't worry, the others will be more to your tastes.
>>47740585
8MB
>>47740591
Glad you like them!
>>47740614
The lessons allow for long-term improvement independent of the temporary mastery.
Glad you like them both so much!
>>47740617
That's... a very sad spirit animal you got there...
>>47740638
The next pair are going to be more monster-y.
>>47740614
That's not how I read Lesson. The enchantment persists for a day, and has the effect of mastering all instruments you touch. After the day is over, you stop mastering instruments, but I didn't think your skills were supposed to vanish.
>>47740492
I'm not really sure I should even bring this up again, but thank you for bringing it back and even adding new options. Sorry I was such an asshole about it.
>>47740617
Congratulations, you've got the Suspicious Hamster of Obesity... I'm sorry for you.
Guess who is (still not) dead but still insomniac!
So, long time no see people. Been working on Urban Fantasy for the last year or so, and I think it's more or less ready. I think that it should be out in a week maximum. Here's a quick preview of the first page. Total, it's around 15 pages. For those of you who remember A QuietCYOA, I've taken your complaints and fucking removed them. No more people crying about Amnesia so there's that.
Let me know what you think of the first page. I tried to keep it as simple as possible and retain the same art style of A QuietCYOA (which is to say no art style).
>>47740655
>I can understand that view.
Then take it to heart. You can make girls who are more formal without making it seem like they don't even like you, as it is with these two.
>>47740672
HOLY SHIT HOLY SHIT HOLY SHIT
>>47740655
The ones complaining about the new girls just want a fetish waifu to cater their every whim. These self-improvement waifu are too good taste for them. You did great.
>>47740392
That's assuming a whole team of utter duelists, and assuming that another school doesn't have something that is rather effective in terms of CC.
Like explosions.
![2a5f1f3db2afd0f4f82e56a01fe237db[1].jpg](https://i.imgur.com/kPhA3lK.jpg "2a5f1f3db2afd0f4f82e56a01fe237db[1].jpg")
>>47740638
>>47740655
Lizard girl that gives you political power and connections.
>>47740672
>become 100
No thanks, I'm fine at my current age.
>>47740713
>>47740700
Not at all. I don't mind their themes or abilities. They're just, as people, completely lacking in feeling or affection. They're not waifus. They're associates, and ones that don't seem to like you at all.
>>47740672
I actually reached out to her, and my hopes were crushed when nothing happened... but good job.
>>47740712
Does she shapeshift to look like a human and infiltrate the government?
>>47740689
>>47740709
>That's assuming a whole team of utter duelists
Who else would enter the competition.
Entrants from other schools would also be the ones specializing in dueling, just by proxy from learning other types of combat and without having followed a specialized course for just that.
>>47740672
I like it so far: mysterious enough to draw attention.
Good to see you back, Quiet. How was being dead after your magnum opus?
>>47740726
>No net for a while due to people with guns. my bad bruh
>her (?)
>>47740740
![cbea9d9060604ca1bbc594cbfe24f1dc[1].jpg](https://i.imgur.com/Q0IMZR8.jpg "cbea9d9060604ca1bbc594cbfe24f1dc[1].jpg")
>>47740728
She and her people.
>>47740712
>Lizard girl with a suspiciously Hebrew name that helps you advance in society and politics through her connections and mind control powers
Oy, this is my type of waifu.
>>47740757
I got shot! So, there's something. Never run from a dude with a gun let me tell ya.
>>47740761
Pick a side,Troll or Hunter.
>>47740502
None of those people were actually me.
>>47740777
No thanks, autistic guy who spams old CYOAs.
>>47740776
>>47740777
>>47740672
It's been a year now, do you think it's finally time to post those Quiet CYOA notes and unveil the mysteries?
>>47740793
>>47740751
>Who else would enter the competition
Fighters. The brackets go from the ideal duelist 1v1 to the ideal fire squad 5v5. Dueling is really only efficient in 1v1 situations and, while some skills from it are useful in other brackets, it gets tossed to the wayside over other classes like tactics and teamwork.
>Entrants from other schools would also be the ones specializing in dueling
Maybe if they jump into 1v1, but read the first part.
>>47740797
>>47740760
>her (?)
You called the narrator "The Great Mother."
>>47740819Update never.
>>47740672
Oh right, forgot details.
>So, so many companions.
>Fifteen cities from around the world.
>Grimdark af ofc
>Magic!
>Guns!
>Even more guns!
>You get a spear!
>Nigga knight makes a appearance!
>Sexy Waifus! (Although I can't compete with >>47740655)
>THERE'S A PUZZLE ALREADY IN THE FIRST PAGE I'M SO HAPPY AND EXCITED
>There's an old friend in the first page! First person to solve it get's a prize.
>>47740828
>>47740726
I-I swear it'll be good anon! Just wait for the entire thing.
>>47740630
>tfw work hard in college
>tfw finally summoned
>tfw gonna work hard!
>tfw my master thinks I'm useless
>>47740821
Tactics is for armies and skirmishes, 4 on 4 is much more like a duel than anything you'd encounter in the wild and would think to train for.
>>47740818
Lost the computer with everything on it mate.
>>47740822
>>47740492
>You can tell how objectively good / bad someone is by looking
Is this based on a Christian moral system?
>>47740872
>>47740846
Will there be sexy husbandos too?
>>47740887
>>47740893
Ofc. I don't discriminate. Since I'm a dude, I made more waifu's than husbandos, but there are a shitload of them still.
>>47740860
>4 on 4 is much more like a duel
You (or at least one other person) keeps saying this, which makes me think you (and/or they) is retarded. The only thing even remotely like a duel is 1v1. Tactics do very much apply to 4v4, and they don't really apply to armies at all. The Teamwork skill is the most relevant, however.
You simply cannot split a 4v4 into a series of 4 1v1 duels against a remotely competent group of enemies. I hate to simplify it down to very video gamey terms but they'll just out-micro you and turn it into a series of 4 4v1s. Unless the duelists have an incredible amount of CC type abilities they just do not stand a chance against a group of people who actually know how to work together as a team. Having a plan and the skills to enact it (Tactics) means they have a much better chance of winning.
>>47740884
Not too tightly, but stealing and killing being bad is a good starting point.
>>47740672
OH SHIT
GET HYPEOnly downside is I have OC nearly ready. God dammit, why do you other authors love cucking me so much?
>>47740846
Ehh... Very cautiously optimistic. It would be a nice change of pace from the recent OC in the thread, but I have a distinct feeling in my gut that it won't be for me, and when that happens it's effectively inevitable.
Regardless, my time would probably be better spent attempting to work on my project.
>>47740939
He said 'out in a week'
has anyone ever done a command and conquer type CYOA?
>>47740908
That's awesome. I'm glad you're back.
>>47740958
Yeah, I do that in every waify cyoa.
>>47740958
What do you mean, and how would that even work?
Unless Girl Military counts as one, that is.
>>47740946
>Very cautiously optimistic
Ok, so, I have bad history with gut feelings so just tell me what you think will be wrong with it and I can delay it to try and fix it if it becomes a problem. The one issue I can see is that it's slightly too long...
>>47740960
>Blushes menacingly.
>>47740937
How does she feel about software piracy?
>>47741010
... That's not something anyone would be getting killed over. I mean, unless the software contains nuclear launch codes or something.
>>47740448
What happens if I tell Falchion for Whip into Shape "Emphasis; my dick." Will hilarity ensue?
>>47740405
>Orb of Life
>Library
>Surveillance
Library for that sweet Limit Break.
I don't really mind that someone is observing me, and I don't plan to spend much time home after my initial training is done.
>>47740448
>Falchion
>Took her offer
>Whip Into Shape
She is going to Stave Death when I really need it anyway, and Rewards will had after I have earned them.
>Spirit Warrior
>Valkyrie Wings
>Coat of Arms
>Falchion Armor
I would like to fight close and personal if I'm literally impossible to kill.
Going to go all Deus Vult on terrorist with my new powers. There is a limit to how many I can kill as a single man, but the psychological impact of knowing that an immortal man with angel wings is coming for you, should make most people consider their choices in life.
>>47740982
No no no no no. Christ. I'm just a very stubborn and petty person, I guess. When I see something and think "I'm not going to enjoy this", it's astronomically rare that my opinion will change. I can only think of a single time where that has happened, and only because it was like two days ago.
You do what you think is best for the CYOA. Don't change for me, because honestly it probably won't change the outcome. Even if I don't enjoy it, I'm sure someone else will. I'm just... never wrong with this feeling, really. It's like hype backlash, except there's rarely any hype involved from anyone.
>>47740672
The return of a hero? Welcome home Senpai.
>>47740846
>>47740982
>So, so many companions.
As long as there is plenty of variety.
>Fifteen cities from around the world.
Sounds great.
>Grimdark af ofc
So it'll be shit af ofc
>Magic!
>Guns!
>Even more guns!
>You get a spear!
Could be cool.
>Nigga knight makes a appearance!
Could be good or bad, anons will probably reee about Chad.
>Sexy Waifus! (Although I can't compete with >>47740655)
Cool.
>THERE'S A PUZZLE ALREADY IN THE FIRST PAGE I'M SO HAPPY AND EXCITED
>There's an old friend in the first page! First person to solve it get's a prize.
Fuck off.
>The one issue I can see is that it's slightly too long...
>implying CYOAs can be too long
It sounds like a solid concept ruined by some of your persistent shitty ideas.
>>47741064
Well, first she'd be disappointed. That's not a competition in Valhalla. Then, she'd realize the grave mistake you made and accept that task anyway. Yes, hilarity would ensure, but only if you find BDSM hilarious. I mean, she partake in a more normal relationship. After all, she's supposed to lovingly tend to bruised warriors. But if you're asking like that, you shouldn't have expected any other result.
>>47741100
Using her training for actual war instead of just a tournament is a good idea.
>>47741163
>I mean, she partake in a more normal relationship.
But what does she like in a relationship other than murder?
>>47739615
>>47739652
>>47739664
Official St. Flares requisitions catalog for new students. Please select one option before submitting your voucher to the schools quartermaster.
Note: Plate armor and all courses related to the Department of Chivalry are no longer available due to budget cuts. All enrolled squires should report to their career councilers immediately.
>>47740448
Ok, wow, Melody is perfect, instantly my new favorite.
Quick question, is the "instant mastery" from Lessons permanent? I mean it's not too hard to just do the lessons again if I have to but I thought I'd ask before I make my build.
>>47740948
>nearly ready
You think mine will be done tomorrow?
I know what happened last year with Quiet.
>>47741230
Your dedication to music is noble anon, especially the way you're choosing to room with someone you can't touch.
>>47741182
>other than murder
You can have combat without murder. Even just professional fighting is acceptable. In fact, she'd be fine just training you to be a master of self-defense, even if you had no intent to ever hurt anyone. But aside from her obvious interests in fighting, war, weapons, training, and mead, there's she still likes to cuddle on a couch with her wings around you.
>>47741230
The "instant mastery" only lasts for as long as you touch the instrument. The moment you let you / the daily enchantment wears off, you're back to whatever your default skill level was.
Glad you like her.
>>47740672
that intro picture alone is great, the smoke effect and all, how the picture is distorted and becomes smoke. Sheeet.
>>47741278
Didn't get the feeling at all she'd like cuddling. Pretty one dimensional from the write up and what you're telling me here.
>>47741278
Do we at least learn to play faster because an actual Muse is teaching?
You can't expect me to spend 10.000 hours playing Violin to master it. There'd be barely any longterm benefit to learning from her instead of any other teacher otherwise.
>>47739804
Big
Passives:
Relaxing area and charm
Actives:
Induce arousal and lewd area
Seductress:
Ambrosia and round two
Misc:
Weirdness factor, metabolism, and increased production
Roommates:
Keki and Pinya (or Arel, can't decide)
>>really wish I could have gotten shapeshift and tail control too. Still, should have lots of fun with this.
>>47740672
> *Conditions Apply
Ay, glad to see your alive m8.
>>47741289
Well, as much as she likes fighting, the Reward option is also something she enjoys doing. Pouring your alcohol, snuggling up against you, treating your wounds, etc. Those are all things she's happy to do. Did you not think that such would be covered under "Reward" or did you not think that she should enjoy what she does for "Reward?" I might change it to be a tad more clear.
>>47741332
Yeah, her muse teaching is a lot better than normal, too. The magical boost is just for instant gratification.
>>47741354
Reward just says she's going to give you alcohol and treat wounds. Sounds like a job more than anything.
>>47740946
>It would be a nice change of pace from the recent OC in the thread
what's that supposed to mean?
>>47741371
Anon wants miserable CYOAs that dick you over.
>>47741368
Hmm... I might reword it a bit, then. I thought the seductive image would have sufficed to add romantic connotations.
>>47739804
This could really use information on what being a succubus is like. Like how often do I need to feed or how lewd my body is (I would like options for always clean and self-lubricating anus or erogenous mouth, but for all I know, that's the default for a succubus).
Speaking of things I want, this CYOA needs a tail pussy option. It would also be great to have a power, that let's us feel the lust and physical pleasure, that we're causing.
>>47740818
There aren't any notes. It was just bullshit he pulled out his ass. Doubt this one will be any different.
>>47741371
Dark fantasy, whether I end up liking it or not, is somewhat rare I think. The closest thing I can think of lately is the Jumpchain-esque Cross...worlds I think it is? I could go back in the last thread and check but I'm close enough. Unless you count Oridon's works but they're all much more general medieval fantasy rather than strictly dark I would say. So dark fantasy is fresh.
And I'll freely admit I haven't enjoyed a lot of the recent work seen in the threads, but you know, that's on me and no one else. People should make what they want.
>>47739818
Male
Bard
Kitsune
Might
Toughness
Pleasing Voice
Bag of Coin
Faceless Soldier
Random
>>47741414
>Snuff
How shitty.
>>47741389
Valkyries are mostly known as a flying Norse messengers of the Gods, who kick some serious ass. People tend to forget that they were also the lovers, wives and "maids" of heroes.
>>47740679
The picture/text in falchion's reward is probably a hint, and duet shows Melody at least wants to spend time with you. As for the others use your imagination for a minute, all because they aren't all lovey dovey now doesn't mean you won't get close over time.
>>47740448
>No matter what I'll alwats stave death before a fight.
Doesn't that make stave death a useless choice as she'll do it anyway? The library also seems to assume it's on. That whole row seems poorly thought out as her entire concept is based on training (unless you're already combat capable) so not training defeats the purpose, but not having stave death on in lethal combat (which is also core to the concept) is a deathwish. It might be best to make that row select the type of training or a specialty and either make stave death free or slot it into the deal. It does pideonhole her lifestyle but as her power load-out and persanality are she already is. If you want to avoid that top row could become a choice of lifestyle (tournament fighter/military/something?).
Also, the waifu train has no breaks, and that's a good thing. It's not too big until you can't post it all.
>>47740646
Like this cyoa isn't full of "standard" monstergirls. Don't be a hypocrite.
Succubus, Slime Girl, Alien Girl, Robot Girl, Djinn, Kitsune, Moth Girl, Giant girl, Micro girl, Plant girl, Octopus/Squid Girls.....and typical tropes. Magic girl, Minor Goddess, Yandere, Valkyere.
There are very few unique monster girls in this cyoa.
>>47739615
>>47734524
Smug Hime
>Ej Har
The only reason smughime was accepted into Lunestier in the first place was as a favor to her father, who was desperate for someone to help turn his spoiled daughter into a proper lady. After her abhorrent behavior she was expelled from Lunestier, and desperate to avoid looking like a failure joined Ej Har on the condition that they would forge her reports to look like she still attend Lunestier. In exchange she was tasked to make Lunestier look like an elitist finishing school for royal brats, basically by acting like herself.
>Potion Mixing x 3
>Illusions x 3
>Assassination x 3
>Knowledge Etiquette x 1
Assassination teaches trickery, deception, and the closest thing SmugHime has to diplomacy, seduction. Illusion magic is useful in helping to her vanity making her appear more attractive than she actual is, and is helpful in her schemes in the court. Power potions and poisons allow her to mind control powerful people. poison rivals, and attract wealth suitors, with assassination and illusion offering the chance to slip this into food, drinks, and other venues.
>>47740910
Read the description for tactics again.
Those skills wouldn't apply for so few people.
The only difference 4v4 makes with 1v1 is the possibility to get flanked, which is exactly the type of thing teamwork is good for preventing.
>>47741494
>Imagination
If you have to completely invent other facets of personality, and an interest in you, and the way they'd act in a relationship, why are you bothering to use a CYOA? These girls don't have any of that.
>>47741494
>Doesn't that make stave death a useless choice as she'll do it anyway?
The actual thing she's offering with the option is the passive effect, I'm pretty sure.
>>47741211
It wasn't funny the first time. It's not funny now.
>>47741485
Yeah, I think I'll reword some parts of that page a tad.
>>47741494
Picking Stave Death as an option means you won't die in a car accident or anything of that nature. She'll apply it before a battle no matter what, but it's a full-time job to keep it active all the time.
>>47741386
oh good, I thought he was saying I'm shit.
That would make me sad.
>>47741417
c'mon m8, it's been a year, dump that salt in the river.
>>47741596
>dump that salt in the river.
He needs it for trading purposes in the wasteland that Earth has become.
>>47741414
tail pussy is kind of superfluous, you already have a pussy and most men only have the one dick. The tail normally functions as a penis substitute for you, and its especially effective for pegging men while you ride them.
>>47741567
>>47741539
Ah, on a reread that made sense, I just saw that box and assumed the standard "this box only applies when picked" context and that "passive" meant "does not need activating" not "always active". My bad
>>47741641
Pegging is literally the worst.
>>47741282
Thanks!
>>47741336
Highlander bruh, what's up? Got a puzzle for ya, there's a thing in the first page preview I posted. Give it a looksie.
>>47741655
>>47741641
I lets you be a 1 woman reverse spitroast, and has uses in gangbangs. Not completely redundent.
>>47741641
Do you think that one man is enough for a succubus?
I reworded some parts. Namely, the changes are in Falchion's Reward, service intro blurb, and item intro blurb.
Also, since I was rewording parts of the page anyway, I went ahead and tweaked Melody's service intro blurb, Duet, and item intro blurb to be mildly more suggestive.
>>47741714
Yes. Monogamy is the best, even if you're dealing with succubi.
>>47741714
>>47741735
Even so you still have the two other holes. Not saying anything against the erogenous mouth/ass ideas.
>>47741523
It says both small and large scale but since the example is an actual field battle I can buy that small skill means a few dozen skirmishers.
Tactics are all about things like highground and numbers so maybe a it wouldn't be of use in a colosseum but 'arena' can mean many things. Highground may apply.
>>47741211
Kek
>>47741735
That can't healthy for the poor guy.
>>47741754
Need more holes. Tail and nipple pussies are needed.
>>47741664
Just working on the next update for Traveller, it's slow but getting there and I'm doing an assload of lore bashing tonight.
As for your bit, I'm pretty sure I found it. But a recommendation? When I was checking around the preview I inverted the color scheme, and I think it actually looks pretty neat.
>>47741847
My eyes are burning
>>47740672
>But not alone
oh no.
Quiet, this isn't fair. I can't already start being scared / thinking about your cyoa when I only have one of 15 pages, and this has only one choice on it.
>>47740492
What's the sauce on Miya anyway?
I mean, what is the character from?
>>47741910
Her name is Miyaura Sanshio.
She isn't from anything. She's just a character.
>>47741910
Is this a new meme?
>>47741847
Wtf is traveller. At first I though it was basically highlander immortals but then it started getting into 40k and a bunch of stuff with aliens.
>>47741847
looks like someone came all over the buildings. do you work in a spoogescraper?
>>47741910
http://danbooru.donmai.us/posts?tags=miyaura_sanshio
Some artist's OC.
>>47741733
If muse and her friends want to start a band, I'm curious what instrument she favors herself.
>>47741858
> Eh, I guess I just have odd aesthetics.
>>47741937
You know the multiverse? You know the Grey Wardens? It goes something like that. You've got a seemingly infinite reality to safeguard from an unstoppable opponent, that hasn't been seen in 900[ish] years. Xenos, Spirits, Black-magic and the elderitch are all just things on the table.
>>47741953
No, but I wish I did. It would be cleaner.
>>47739068
Is the anon that wanted to play PACYOA here? I'm late due to IRL issues, but I was wondering how many people wanted to play. I can still run the game an hour from now if people want.
>>47741996
They're all equally skilled at all instruments so they'll likely shuffle around.
>>47741847
I liked this one better.
>>47742131
>ETHER REX
Whisper thine secrets in mine ear, o glorious shrimp of yonder void.
>>47742131
> Donny "The Dome" Richardson
HE CAN'T BE BROKEN- HE CAN'T BE STOPPED.
>>47742131
Now post the second page, revealing their true forms and blessings.
>>47742131
Will we be fighting other shrimp monsters?
If so, would a high speed help in hit-and-run tactics or can they orientate themselves too fast to attack without getting counter attacked?
>>47742131
>Bumpsy
I UNLEASH YE, SPEEDY BUMPER-CART. GO, BE USELESS AND FAST
>>47742131
>One Shot Johnny
All or nothing. Victory or death! One strike is all I need.
>>47742131
Gonna go with Big Crimson
>>47742186
Which one's a futa and which one cucks you?
>>47742131
Zippy Smalls' got big heart, I can feel it, but I just can't not take the waifu option.
Especially not when Samantha looks so much like Tsumugi.
>>47739804
"Fuck you, mom" edition
Loli Body Type
Flight
Tail Control
Ambrosia
Metabolism
Lust Eyes
Seductress
Shapeshifting (-3)
Own Production
Remme + Alli
Took everything possible that didn't influence anyone else's mind/body. With this, I can live as perfectly chaste succubus. Stick that in your tailpussy and suck it.
>>47742281
That manga ended up on a happy note didn't it?
>>47742131
>Zippy Smalls
This is the cute trap option, right?
>>47740448
Has valkyrie serviced other warriors before me? This is a make or break type of thing
