>>47608798
Old one
>>47615714
>>47615714
don't do that, don't you know it's dangerous to link to the Old Ones?
>>47615739
So anyone got any other fantasy CYOAs?
>>47615714
Wait, the separate images one?
Isn't that the old version? The newest version is in a pdf.
>>47615714
Anyone interested in seeing an update to SpessRefuge now that Lurl has left it open?
I'm considering trying my hand at an update and i'm looking for suggestions
>>47615771
Man PDF's annoy me, also I don't have a PDF, I only have the images saved on my computer. And I did not know it was updated. If you want to post the updated one go ahead.
So, we have two magic-users, now. Plus, I added a "drawback" to the general gifts. You can get Welfare for free... if you show up and do work for 25 hours per week. This arrangement is called a job.
(1/7)
>>47615763
yes
>>47615783
yes
>>47615783
>>47615763
Wizards are fantasy, right?
>>47615800
The job covers the roommate expenses, too. And I guess they're not taxing that paycheck, so there's that. And no, you can't take the job AND Welfare.
>>47615829
Oh, whoops. I forgot to number the previous one.
Moving on...
(3/7)
>>47615852
It takes so long to catch up and get to the new page.
(4/7)
>>47615750
>>47615878
>>47615875
Almost there...
(5/7)
>>47615800
> I added a "drawback" to the general gifts. You can get Welfare for free... if you show up and do work for 25 hours per week. This arrangement is called a job.
Fuck this shit.
>>47615800
>mfw I've been gone for a while and have a bunch of new stuff to go through
>No pastebin link
http://pastebin.com/vrqYhnpu
>>47615800
>added a drawback
hahaha...haha...ha......no.
>>47615921
>>47615921
System is the only good faction. Literally. Why pick any other faction to fight for?
>>47615800
I NEED TO WORK? WTF MAN
>>47615898
New page!
(6/7)
>>47615912
It's called a "drawback," anon. Talking to all the other cool creatures isn't supposed to be fun.
>>47615913
I hope you like it!
>>47615927
That's why it's optional.
Well I guess it's time to post Ver. 1.0 of the finished product.
I have this weird feeling that it won't live up to expectations but I've honestly learned a lot about making cyoas from making this and Ill probably post updates in the future so yeah.
Also fun fact god has a special place in heaven for proofreaders so do what you will with that information
1/5
>>47615800
>Job
Depends what it is.
>Have to talk to people
No. Why are you picking on us and being a huge jerk?
>>47615816
Eye candy(7)
Cosplay(9)
Sexual harassment(13)
Experimentation(17)
Transform human(15)
Heal(12)
Necromancy(8)
Golem(6)
Flight(4)
Grow & Shrink(0)
If anyone wants to come at me, I'll just kick them with the force of a nuclear warhead.
>>47615963
Literally optional. They are willing to supply you with paid work if you request it. It's actually a very kind option, even with the generous arrangement offered originally, as some of us are essentially unemployable otherwise.
>>47615967
Beri this is bulllshit. These two are terrible. And you added a drawback? What the hell were you thinking?Just kidding, I'm going to read it a get back to you. Thanks for the OC.
>>47615974
I posted WIP of both of these pages so I'm more confident in them then the other 3 but yea
as always I would love for you to tell me where I could improve and what kind of classes or schools you would like to see in a future update
2/5
>>47615989
Those of us who are unemployable can't do this job either. Most people who are, have weird ass neet anxiety issues and can't interact or talk with real people without freaking out. This is a fucking customer service job, it'd be like cruel torture.
>>47615967
(7/7) Done.
>>47615963
>>47615979
... I'm sorry. I didn't think an optional addition like that would be so disliked. I just thought some people might want to meet more / unlisted creatures, even if only as friends.
>>47615995
You made my heart skip a beat...
Tell me. What makes a good waifu cyoa?
>>47615974
Fuck you, Box. You couldn't wait for Beri to finish so that the filenames wouldn't get all out of order? I'm going to have manually rename them or wait for somebody to repost yours in a later thread.
>>47616010
Admittedly true. My biggest issue is mostly to do with chronic pain, and I doubt being just "given" a job will make it easier to actually do it.
>>47616003
I had a little help with choosing images on these next two. Turns out it's really hard to make 40 different companions and make them all appealing but yeah
If you guys want I can pull a highlander and throw your OCs in future updates as companions
>>47616011
Don't worry, unlike >>47615979 I've worked tech support and have some experience dealing with angry people in person and over the phone.
It is hilarious how mad some people get when you tell them they fucked themselves by leaving their power cable in another state while they're desperately trying to work at the airport.
>>47616011
don't worry man, maybe you should put it like "This is all OPTIONAL YOU DON'T REALLY HAVE TO DO THIS" or something like that, cause most of us here are neet with anxiety problem. (like me)
>>47616028
Adventure, my man. I want to kill beasties and explore dungeons with my waifu supporting me.
>>47616003
>Druidism
>Patchouli
>Not "alchemy"
>Not "elementalism"
>in [current year]
>>47615967
Oh wow. This genie is...perfect-ish. Don't know if she'd let me live the NEET lyfe desu.
Tome & Home + Job
Genie
Interior designer
Immortality (/ss/)
Attract Others
Her
+ her 'drawback'
>>47616033
shit man I didn't even realize Beri was posting, I'm really faded right now and probably shouldn't be drunk posting like this Sorry to you and Beri
>>47616003
I always considered waifus to be my area of expertise but I really tried to avoid writing characters as explicit waifus in this one but a few slipped through anyway
4/5
>>47615898
I see nothing wrong with doing work and getting paid. Hell 400 dollars for only working 25 hours a week is great if I worked full time it would be almost 800.
Anyway Beri I was wondering what do magical girls fight? Do they ally with demon hunters?
>>47615800
i hate working, butt fuck it,
Orb of Life
Welfare (Free)
Encyclopedia.
Fei La
Lovemaking (Free)
Homemaking
Sex Drive
Demon Sight
Love Potion #14
>>47616100
>Inas
>Known of this is true.
>>47616100
>>47616050
fuckin shit i replied to the wrong image
>>47616100
I've always considered quests to be more of a jumping off point for write fagging or a way to flesh out the world so you can consider this page optional if you want
I also ended up cutting out school clubs, I wrote up a couple of drafts and was never satisfied with what I came up with but I'll try to get them in a later update.
5/5
>>47615816
Base (+2)
Accomplice (+3)
Master's Will (+2)
Dance Magic (-3)
Charm (-4)
I can convince anyone of anything, as long as the argument is made in musical-dance-number form.... ANYTHING!
>>47616122
fucking kill my drunk dyslexic ass
thanks for pointing it out
>>47615967
Gosh, what manner of enchantment could require her to sneak her into your bed?
Also what kind of creatures would you get with sealing?
>>47616028
Cute waifus, mostly
>>47616011
I have that effect on people.
>>47615967
Kaila
--------
Local Idol
Coincidence
Magic Tome
Bonus: Sure.
or
Jeanne
--------
Fashion Designer
Attract Others
Me
Bonus: Nope.
For my final choice I think I'll keep Andrea. I was originally conflicted between Twile and her, but then I realizedI can play games on my laptop, making them EVEN MORE IMMERSIVE.
>>47616028
If the waifu has a fetish or is designed to fit one, they'd better be able to make it work.
Like if they're into excessive sex, they'd better be able to make it so you can too. Or for there to be a perk that otherwise helps.
>>47616011
Could Jeanne make it so people don't hate you for being a trap?
Rolled 4, 2 = 6 (2d4)
>>47615974
Ej Har
Arcane Magic * 3
Potion Mixing *3
Smithing * 2
Knowledge(Magic Theory)
Blood magic
Blood magic
>Companions
Luvyna
Malyvin
Nashwa
Cassiopeia
Eloise
>Events:
>Battles
Battle
Hunt
>Harvest
Basilisk Den
>Summit
Research
>Life
Bodyguard
Blind date
Thus the legend of the greatest raw-mana wielder begins!
>>47615800
I rewrote the job offer to be more encompassing. Sorry for assuming everyone could handle listening to waifus vent.
>>47616060
For some reason I had thought that using the same text box style as the optional drawbacks in the later pages make it clear enough. That doesn't work at all for the first page, though. Is it better, now?
>>47616093
Glad you like her. Yeah, she wouldn't mind if you stayed at home. Especially if your body isn't adult.
>>47616108
I'm happy someone liked it. Magical girls fight weird shadow monsters, evil demons, and various other objectively evil threats that face the city.
>>47616116
There's a slightly more different job now, if you prefer it.
>>47616100
There's no need to apologize to me.
>>47616167
She just doesn't want to wake you up when she sees you sleeping so peacefully.
>>47616213
Yeah, nanobots are more effective that the Rift or Vive.
>>47616292
Well, if you're taking the optional bonus, you you'll have a high-specialized but still cosmically powerful genie standing behind you to prevent any bullying. She could just turn anyone that gives you a hard time into a little girl. Speaking of which, since you have endless wishes, you could just wish to be a girl, if you find that preferable to trap. But, no, she can't really do anything that effective to alter unwilling minds.
>>47616139
What happens if one is not gay but rolls a same-sex partner for the ball?
>>47616346
I've never been in this situation. It seems like the people are explicitly expecting something romantic, and y'know..
>>47616400
you would just hang out then. as long as you two are seen enjoying yourself no one's gonna care if you two aren't into each other romantically just that two popular students can form a strong friendship with each other.
>>47615804
Muscle
Immolation
Immortality
Mind
Ideal Form (Noctis ff xv)
Monastic
Abjuration
Lightning
Charisma
Armor
Katana
Waifu (Lightning from FF XIII)
Fresh Water 4pts
Plains 6 Square Miles
Village : 100
Cult : a single female prophet
Small House
Walls
>>47616361
thank you man, it's better now, god bless , keep up the good work
>>47616505
Thanks.
>>47616003
For clarity, can you only ever take one instance of one unique class offered by your school? Or could you, say, take Airship Training 3 times as an Odesium student?
>>47616361
Orb Of life
Welfare desk job (hopefully i don't have to talk to people)
Dream home
Encyclopedia
Fei La
Lovemaking (Free)
Homemaking
Sex Drive
Demon Sight
Love Potion #14
>>47616514
you can take airship training 3 if you want, there's no restriction on school specific classes except for the whole school specific part
>>47616563
>hopefully i don't have to talk to people
It's mainly just data entry. At most, you'll have to talk to the office lady that gave you the job.
>>47615800
What's Fei La's type, anyway? Like, if you let her demonify you into a body she likes, what would she go with?
What happens if you wear the slime gown yourself? Could you share it with Mishe?
What's the upper limit for macaron effects?Also I don't understand why the peaceful bread spirit is the one who offers to turn you into a magical supersoldier. Little odd desu senpai.
>both of those new waifus
Naisu naisu.
>>47615714
>>47615739
>>47615763
>magical realm
blast from the fucking past desu
too bad it went down in flames
>>47615974
Battlemage
Acadamy
>Lunestier
Classes
>Magic refinement x2
>Arcane magic x2
>Elemental Magic x2
>Maneuvers x2
>Tactics x2
Will eventually reach level three in the field.
Companions
>Suzette Highking (a fellow mage of a similar specialty should be useful)
>Evergreen (more magic)
>Luvyna
>Trap catcher
>Crale Edwards
Events (did not totally understand the rule so bear with me)
>Bodyguard (Suzette will want to hang with her sisters no doubt)
>Escort (sounds fun and mysterious)
>Security
>Battle Royal x3
>Great hunt x2
Rolled 3, 3, 3 = 9 (3d4)
>>47615974
Gonna try to go in blind, not going back and re-building as I read and I didn't check out the WIPs either. This is the "what I might choose if I were actually in this situation" build, I suppose.
>School
Odesium
[Typo is Uzuza description. "calming their views are outdated" should be "claiming their views are outdated".]
>Classes
Ranged Combat x2
Tactics x2
Smithing x2
Knowledge (Military Engineering) x2
Explosives x2
Really hard to get everything I wanted, so I guess I have to settle for not reaching the level of an unparalleled master. Going for a Jean Baptiste Eugene Estienne inspired General of Artillery build.
[Smithing "no sound more wonderful then the sound of a hammer" -> "than"]
>Companions
Malyvin
Valerie Bluewood
Znanje
Bathsheba
Tash
["Some may teach you there skills" -> "their skills"]
[Malyvin: "Luvyna and Valeria you were the terror" -> "Luvyna and Valeria; you were the terror"]
>Events
Research Proposal x5
Basilisk Den x2
Blind Date
["Battle Royal ever year" -> "Battle Royale every year"]
[Harvest Festival "let their hair done" -> "let their hair down"]
[Research Proposal "there" -> "their"]
Really liked this, lots of options! Current build is based around advancing the science of magically-supported artillery in large-scale conflict. Invention, production, logistics, tactics, and strategy are all important factors here. Not much use at all in a stand-up fight but I've got some skill in leadership and planning. Estienne basically invented both tanks and military aviation, and so I hope that my character here could live up to that legacy.
>>47616618
Mystery Box
>>47615974
>98 years ago
So I've got two years to become a hero in time for the next demon invasion?
I hope this world has some good heroes, cause it ain't gonna be me.
Odesium
3*Potion Mixing
3*Smithing
3*Knowledge
1*Explosives
Luvyna, Hana, Chandara, Eloise, and Tash
Research Proposal, Fund Raising, and a Blind Date
I think I'll just open an item shop while the world is ending.
>>47616100
The Paladin girl Crayle is a waifu she is a paladin. My type, I'd want to smite evil together with her.
>>47616361
Just to make sure, using Demon Sight while working is allowed? I won't get in trouble if I incite lust in a qt monster girl I meet while working?
>>47616627
yeah i think i need to rewrite the rules on events, ideally there should be no confusion when reading it, ill go over it again when I've sobered up
>>47616637
Thanks a ton for pointing out proof reading stuff
>>47616637
Check out those dice trips. Let's see, my blind date is... Chuuni girl. All right, no big problem here. A bit silly but hey, I'm pretending to be a 19th century Frenchman so who's really in the wrong here. Pretty cool to meet up with and spend some time with someone way outside of my wheelhouse, both in terms of personality and skills.
["it's best to just role with it" -> "it's best to just roll with it"]
Might make a very research focused spellcraft build too, then a muscle wizard. The latter in part because I saw that Korra was awaifucompanion option.
>>47615714
Still one of the funnest cyoas ever.
https://1d4chan.org/wiki/Magical_Realm_Cyoa/Sapphoshire
>>47615800
>Light Elf
18
>Intriguing
17
>Well-Endowed
15
>Lifetime (I ain't dying yet!)
9
>Sweet
8
>Yan
7
>General Magic
5
>Weaponmaster
3
>Wells
0
Just adventure with my brave hero succubus and do everything I can to help with her quests, protect her when I can, and attend to her special needs as a succubus.
>>47616361
>She just doesn't want to wake you up when she sees you sleeping so peacefully.
You'd think she'd just say bedroom then, unless the enchanting method requires something lewd likeholding your handor cuddling up next to you
>>47616609
>Fei La's type
Clean, handsome, but not too hairy. Stubble is okay. Slightly toned. Well equipped for her favorite activity. But that's just the slightest of preference. Her loyalty is above running out on you for someone better in the case that you're not transformed.
>slime gown
It has no effect on humans. If you're a slime then you'd be able to both squeeze in it at once, but are either of you really going to accomplish anything like that?
>upper limit for macaron
Well, the weapon is going to end up being something that ought to be mounted but that you can somehow carry with ease. The upper limit in the other effect is... uh... "very cute."
>Why Pan makes supersoldiers
Even if the it is enchanted food, taste is important. The taste of the combat enchantment really brings out the taste of the cute part, thus the joint recipe. It isn't that she wants to make soldiers. It's that she wants to make the tastiest treats she can.
>Naisu naisu
Thanks!
>>47616713
Your boss is not the sort to be strict with formalities. Besides, if she tattled, they might investigate her (mis)use of the ability, too.
>>47616734
I think you linked wrong.
>>47616780
>or cuddling up next to you
Well...
>>47616814
Giving her a type is a poor move desu. Now people will feel inadequate no matter what you say.
Anyone remember Archmage CYOA?
The guy posted a wip but never delivered. Can someone post that wip? I need it for research.
Thanks in advance, going to bed so I won't reply.
>>47616011
Don't apologize. Seeing all these NEETS freak out over the concept of a job is funniest thing I've read all day
>>47615974
Shit forgot to mention I purposely left out race, appearance, and gender stuff because I think limiting that kinda shit puts unnecessary restrictions on the player. If you want to be a little girl then go for it man as long as you're happy and having fun I don't care if you wanna be a lobster or sentient shrub just do you
>>47616835
It's the idle thoughts of a virgin succubus. She'll be much more into whatever her first experience is. Unless capitalized upon, it will be a fleeting interest. Don't underestimate how impressionable she is in her current state.
>>47616846
If you say so...
>>47616100
I feel like I'm being railroaded into choosing St. Flares, because it has Kit.
>>47616919
>If you say so...
Nah, being polite is better. Don't worry about that guy, just has a superiority complex.
>>47615974
Lunestier
Arcane Magic x3
Elemental Magic x3
Magic Refinement x3
Magical theory
Suzette Highking
Nashwa
Evergreen
Chandara
Luvyna
Battle Royale
Great Hunt
Escort
Basilisk Den
Security
Research Proposal
Battle of the Arts
Bodyguard
Full power magic build. Bathsheba would probably have been more valuable (as a research assistant) than Chandara, but she's an obvious plot hook. I also refused to repeat any particular event, in order to open up as many quest chains as possible for later in the story.
>>47616814
>Her loyalty is above running out on you for someone better in the case that you're not transformed.
Just curious what a sex demon's idea of the Ultimate Waifuform would be. I was kind of expecting something turbolewd.
>gown
I was thinking of taking turns, actually.
>>47616963
it would make you the first person to take st flares
>>47617001
I haven't made a build yet, but I'm torn between St. Flares and Lunestier. I blame it mostly on wanting Druidism.
>>47616967
Maybe so, but all the same, that was pretty pathetic.
>>47616361
Do they ally with demon hunters or are the demon hunters to extreme for them?
>>47617033
>It's pretty pathetic that people with extreme social anxiety couldn't handle a job that involves interacting and talking with a lot of strangers.
Really? I guess it's pathetic a paraplegic can't be a marathon runner, right?
>>47616011
I like the new options, but none of them super stick out to me. Don't know why though. I think I still like Mishe and Harmony the best, though Alice and Andrea are pretty good.Maybe it's because they don't specifically cater to my fetishes enough
Some sort of tall mini giantess/amazon or shapeshifter when?
Also: "Basically, you'll talk to you people like yourself..."
>>47616990
Probably either like her big sister Not-Morrigan Aensland or whatever makes her husbando deliver maximum spooge.
>>47615771
>>47615792
I don't know what images are the newest, but the builder should be up to date.
https://63afd638575e0a2fbdda19bd44f65d165d6ed49c.googledrive.com/host/0B3kTDrvhIDLzay1iUmV1UmVKcmM/index.html
>>47616734
>>47616814
Aren't all the realms still on that google doc?
>>47615967
What is Kaila's magical girl theme?
>>47616967
>>47617033
>this is what neets tell themselves
>>47616641
Man this is a sad one. You know this CYOA should let you be able to take more boons at least 2 the knight and the mountain that way you can fight the endbringer.
>>47617129
I think post people consider politeness a good thing, anon-kun.
>>47616967
Yeah, no, all that whining about getting a job is just pitiful.
>>47617073
>It's pretty pathetic that people with extreme social anxiety couldn't handle an imaginary job that involves interacting and talking with a lot of imaginary strangers.
>I guess it's pathetic a paraplegic can't be a marathon runner, right?
In reality - don't know, probably not. But when you're afraid to something in wish-fulfilling scenario because you can't do that in real life, you're either pathetic, or went beyond pathetic into a realm of "living satire".
>>47617174
Or maybe since the premise is that it's YOU getting involved in this situation, people are going to assume it's still them and not that they've been magically turned into someone else when the CYOA doesn't present that at all?
>>47617188
Ok dude don't embarras yourself bitching about getting a job because your social anxiety prevents you from interacting with people and you have to stay in your moms basement is pretty sad and pathetic. Here is a social tip, don't point out your short comings to others.
>>47616814
Since everyone's got crippling social anxiety and can't talk to people, rather than just going "oh, I've also got a desk job I guess", how about offering another drawback option of letting you use the library for free if you spend x hours a day helping organize and catalog it? I'm sure even social cripples can deal with that(and I imagine the library is probably the second most popular option after NEETing it with welfare)
>Well...
Haha that's pretty cute. I guess I'll take her then.
>Life Orb
>Free House
>A job playing mediator
>Kaila
>They all sound kind of silly, Babysitter I guess?
>Coincidence, or Sealing if the sealed monsters can do anything interesting
>Magic Wand
>And she can have her massages
Playing mediator shouldn't be too hard, just a matter of getting people to communicate. And if one party is being too unreasonable, just zap em with the magical wand to get them to stop being so selfish. The power of love, man.
>>47617216
Oh hey, it's the guy who cannot into English and spent days whining about minutiae to Beri because he can't make any decisions himself. Hello.
You'll also notice that he didn't get any complaining once he changed it to allow a desk job. People were not worried about getting a job, they were worried about having to get a customer service job.
>>47615974
Since you asked for proofing let me put what I noticed.
>PG 5 under bodyguard the word "choose" is used when it is past tense so it should be "chose".
>PG 5 under escort the first sentance is missing the word "a" between "of" and "mystery".
>PG 4 Inas descrpition says "known of this is true yet" I think you meant none, but it could bet this is unknown or something.
>PG 4 Sanyo was "too" young not "to" young, and she "adopted" her attitude not "adepted".
>>47617246
Very cute annon. Beri simply made a great CYOA with godlike world building and amazing lore. I was just more interested in learning more about it.
Also the job kinda is customer service you are doing what that first lady did and helping set people up with supernatural roommates. Also here is the thing, it's a drawback a choice. If you don't want it then don't take it. But seriously a CYOA doesen't have to give you everything there can be sacrafice and it can be hard to win at the end as long as it isn't impossible. Sitting and getting everything is easy.
>>47617188
This does nothing to disprove my point.
It's not like they're actually getting involved in such situation. They are given an imaginary premise. If you can't even let your imagination go and imagine yourself not being troubled with things that burden you in reality, then you're in pretty sad. But actually fraking out and shouting at people over the internet is what makes you pathetic.
If these people really are so integral about importing themselves "as is" in this scenarion, I'm surprised that they did not extrapolate it to it's actual fullest and assume that they wouldn't get this position in the first place. Because it's wasted on them anyway.
Whome is best anglefu?
>>47617291
>He can't even spell.
Poor you, airing your shortcomings for all to see. Should've taken your own advice.
>>47617303
It does. Because you are meant to imagine yourself in this situation. If you cannot handle talking to people in customer service job, then that doesn't change. Just because it is in your imagination doesn't mean you need to ignore your flaws and become an almighty Gary Stu.
>If you can't imagine yourself not being trouble with things that burden you in reality...
Most of us can. We can play characters that are not us. However, the point here is that it IS us. It's our imaginary version of us as we are, it's not meant, by default, to be you imagining that you are Harry Everyman, middle manager for Tech Incorporated.
Also, the only reason there is any shouting or arguing is because of you being offended. He's already changed it. There's no need or gain for this.
>>47616990
The older succubi would be more into something like that, but, due to the strict hierarchy, the younger ones glorify monogamous relationships as a guarantee that they'll always have at least one person (one being more than their current record of zero) and end up favoring some general idea of a human male.
Yeah, sharing the gown is fine.
>>47617034
They don't ally in the sense of getting organized, but they if an evil demon is attacking a city, they'll work together in the fight or something. A magical girl's attacks destroy evil. A demon that is pure evil is thus completely destroyed rather than purified by her attacks. So in that case, she'd be doing exactly what demon hunters do.
>>47617074
Technically, Jeanne can do quite a bit in the way of shapeshifting herself. You could get her to tower over you a bit like you want, too.
And thanks for pointing out the typo, but it is already removed.
>>47617093
The link in your post that was to >>47615800 is what was wrong.
>>47617119
I can parse this in two ways.
THEME SONG:
It would be some sort of song born form her heart, not composed by any musician. It would be weird if some song from some anime just started to play as she transformed. That would be weird product placement. In the meantime, have this:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=J__Ymza6z1E
ELEMENT THEME:
Rather than fire or water or electricity or something, she's the generic LOVE type. She can purify evil things with her magic wand.
>>47617229
My original plan was to optionally offer a discount version of all non-life orb options like that. Of these three, you could pick one. However, I hit the height cap on the page, so I had to go with a single long option.
Nah, the only thing sealed monsters can do is escape and wreak havoc again. You're better off with Coincidence.
>>47617342
Esme, because I didn't know I was into that until I read this CYOA.
>>47617342
Ithuriel pretty much a best. Only one that matches the Archdemon choices.
>>47617342
>>47616814
Oops. Meant to link to oc in last thread. My bad.
>>47617093
Yeah. All the tealms are there.
>>47617001
>>47617021
Yea Druidism is the only of the St. Flares specialties that appeals too me as well, I like the others but they don't have that "this is my characters defining skill set feel".
>>47617392
*all the realms
>>47615800
>all these people complaining about being a romance counselor
>if I made a cyoa about it, they'd jump at the chance
>they'd love to do that rather than their actual job, most likely.
silly anons.
also, beri, holy shit man, are you just gonna keep adding women to this? ...would men be a hard thing to add?
>>47617382
>>47615974
>Academy
Odesium
>Classes
Ranged Combat x1
Tactics x1
Arcane Magic x1
Knowledge (Engineering) x3
Explosives x1
Airship Training x3
>Companions
Chandara
Bathsheba
Znanje
Jiel
Liene
>Events
The Great Tournament - Sports: Unmounted Marksmanship x1
The Grand Summit: Research Proposal x5
The Gathering of Life: Blind Date with {Uzuza} {Helena}
>Good gracious, hopefully she's not feeling as punchy as usual
>So, I spend my time learning how to build crazy airships with bomb- and grenade-launchers with Jiel, Znanje tries to learn the secrets of AI construction from Bathsheba, and glorious hanging out occurs. Eventually we'll take our newly-christened Airship to find that location on the map that Chandara has, and hopefully Liene is able to figure out who she truly is with a group of friends that encourage her.
>I'll probably do poorly at the Marksmanship competition, but whatever, they forced me into it. Don't really care.
>Jiel and I will make presentations on our Airship research yearly, along with whatever time I can spare to help Znanje with her AI research.
>The Blind Date might kill me, since I have zero melee ability other than perhaps the tactical skill to be able to escape an angry Helena. HELP ME, <A friend of mine that's actually here instead of skipping out>!
>>47617435
At first I was gonna go off on you and tell you to stop bringing it up. But after thinking about it, you are right, there should be some male options for the supernatural roommate.
>>47617382
Felira for best demon waifu. Prove me wrong.
>>47617435
If I made a cyoa about it, they'd jump at the chance
Kek. This so much
>>47617342
Azriel. I'd still shadow Michelle, though.
>>47617382
Felira, every time.
>>47616011
I really liked the drawback. I'm thankful you put it.
I really wanted the library option before, but I didn't have means to finnancially care for another person. The drawback was really useful.
>>47615974
Ah Lunestier. Home for the rich and powerful, and those with the skills to get in.
Archery 3
Tactics 2
Stealth 2
Potions 1
Aerial combat 2
>Beware the ThunderBird!
>>47616050
Tarkun Ironstout
Farhat
Crale Edwards
Yung Tashi
Suzette Highking
>>47616139
Take the first year off, maybe just visit some events instead of taking part.
Year 2
Basilisk den
Year 3
Escort
The Great Hunt
Year 4
Bodyguard
Basilisk Den
Year 5
Basilisk Den
Blind Date 1,1 Sorte
The great hunt
>>47617382
I absolutely cannot decide between Lynneth and Daeliph. I think Lynneth's power I think is ever so slightly better than Daeliph's but I really do want to take advantage of a drunk and horny demoness.
>>47615967
beri, you literally put my girlfriend into this cyoa. just about. (jeanne, same personality)
>>47617347
>It does.
Not, not really. Let me clarify my point.
My point is not that if you can't handle working with people then you should imagine yourself as being capable so as not to ruin your enjoyment of the CYOA. Which you totally should - you're never obligated to follow the rules of a fictional scenario, because, being fiction, it holds no real substance, therefore it can be changed at will . We call it "homebrewing" in other threads.
My point is that if you're not only that fucked in the head that you can't even imagine yourself a little better than you currently are (if it's only that, you would be just a very sad being, and would deserve some sympathy and comfort), AND put up such a racket to the point that it seems like you're flaunting your disability and inability to fit into a tailor-made wish-fulfillment scenario, then no matter how you spin it, you're pathetic.
>Also, the only reason there is any shouting or arguing is because of you being offended.
What? I'm not offended. It's you/people you're trying to advocate for who are offended, I'm frustrated at your/their ineptness. And there is gain - I'll vent and possibly teach you slimes a thing or two. But mainly vent.
>>47615974
>>47616003
>>47616050
>>47616100
>>47616139
Aw yiss, finally.
Spelling errors:
Uzuza" "and their refuel to use magic"
Yung Tashi: "go too bookie", "consent act"
Sorte: "to enrol her"
Izuki: "unrelanting assulut"
Event intro: "to instil a sense of unity"
There's probably more, but those are just the ones I noticed.
>St Flares
>Martial combat (X2)
>Tactics
>Teamwork
>Maneuvers
>Physical training
>Survival
>Dungeoneering
>Druidism
>Monster hunting
>Duxix
>Silene
>Hana
>Bathsheba
>Evergreen
Humans are overrated.
Events confuse me a little.
>The great hunt
>Fund raising
>Escort
>Bodyguard
Great CYOA man. Thanks again for the kobold bro and lamia. Hana is literally perfect.
I'm a little upset I can't take beast taming at my school though.
>>47615714
Personal :
-Immortality
-Peak Condition
-Superhuman Body
-Blessing
-Tongues
-Shape Shift 1
-Memory
-Inspiration
Powers :
Levitation
Time Manipulation
Geas
Nullification
Elementalism 1
Elementalism 2
Elementalism 3
Healing
Biomancy
Psychoactive Awakening
Machina Mind
Energy Manipulation
Alchemy
Conjuration
Area Increase 5
Insertion (new planet)
Population Increase 1
Attitude Adjustment : They are kind, calm, friendly, and loyal (the women and the men) and really hate the idea of "cheating" but it's alright if the men ask the women first. They women and men tend to stay with 1 lover. And if the people have someone they love but the women/men they loved already married/have somebody else, they will instantly not loving them (and find another) unless the man they love has a harem then they will not instantly not loving him instead they will join his harem. (But if a women have a harem men just forget them and find another female). and once they do find another one who is still single they will stay with them forever even after death they will not find another lover (that's how loyal they are).
Culture and Customs : Women should serve men. And men must work to feed his family and also men must protect their family and their king. Women take care of children and clean the house. Naturally. Feminism is forbidden. Everyone is unconditionally loyal to their ruler (me) They even willing to kill their own family for me. They put me on top of everything else. And the women will be glad to be a part of my harem. And the men will take that as an honor for their wife and daugthers to be a sex slave for me to use. And it would be the greatest honor if a woman marries a king. It'll be like going to heaven.
Pretty Population
Population Demograhics ( Women is 69% Men is 31%)
Extrahuman Population = Elves And Dwarves And Girls with cat ears and tails (but the rest of their bodies is human) And Girls with bunny ears (Rest of their bodies is human)
Cont....
>>47617688
Your point is that if you are asked to imagine yourself in a situation, you should ignore your own flaws and imagine you are someone else. That is plainly idiotic to anyone with an ounce of sense.
>>47617735
...Cont
-Technology Upgrade 1
-Aesthetics
-Public Education
-Diplomatic
-Mercantile
-Wealthy
-Indtusrial
-Healthy
-Secure
-Sanitation
-Infrastructure
-Music Affinity
-Theatre Affinity
-Festival Affinity
-Gaming Affinity
-Sport Affinity
-Animation Affinity
-Mechanical Affinity
-Fertile
-Rich
-Lifestyle Upgrade
-Influence
>>47617710
thanks man. I actually have a drawbacks section partially done that will allow for people to take classes from other schools so maybe you can get it in later builds
>>47617744
shhh anon shhh, we have a beri cyoa with new content and a new 5 page cyoa, let bygones be bygones right now.
>>47615974
In the intro to the section on classes, "divne arts" should be "divine arts", and in the description of divine arts itself, "conmen" should be "common".
>>47617744
You're bad at reading comprehension, aren't you? Come back when you manage at least that.
>>47617435
Well, I'm not sure if I can add many more. There's only room for two more before the height limit on the intro page. There's no room. I mean, I could make a second intro page, but that would also mean I need a second library page & that would be a jump from 8 to 11 pages right there. I could add men, but there's several issues involved. For instance, what if an option was perfect for someone in every single way but sex. They'd be let down. Plus, men are harder to write. That was even some of the criticism I got in Royal Revival, that the male suitors weren't as enticing. I have to get in the right frame of mind to write the options first-person & "man trying to make himself an appealing choice" (& most variants of) is just too far out from what I'm used to. Some anons say they just want male options in CYOAs written exact as the female ones, except male, but that doesn't work well with my process. I mean, I could try, but I don't think it would turn out very well.
Oh my... I rambled.
>>47617643
She sounds like a lovely person.
>>47617772
I definitely should, but it's hard not to argue against the self-righteous.
>>47617813
>I don't have an argument.
If you say so anon.
>>47617825
Is there like a veil on the supernatural where nobody is allowed to find out?
>>47617342
Azriel Cause angel powers
-Countryside Castle
-Seraphim
-Army of Heaven
>>47617924
>sides with angel
>posts chaos champion art
He who fights Limbo...?
>>47617967
Does the limbo with their husbando
>>47617967
Damn. This was meant to reference >>47617959.
>>47615974
Ej Har
Tactics
Unarmed Combat
Ki Attunement
Illusion Magic
Bardic Arts - Spoken Word
Teamwork
Physical Training
Maneuvers
Stealth
>>47616003
Blood Magic
>>47616050
Luvyna
Kengen
Chandara
Silene
Crale Edwards
>>47616139
Battle Royale x5
Security
Bodyguard
Nice work, Boxy
>>47617382
Lynneth
-Pool-side villa
-Succubi
-Styx HQ
>>47615878
>>47615895
Will there be more of this? I really like the premise.
>>47617959
so? it's just an armor dude. I used that to fight in limbo.
>>47617893
No, people are allowed to find out. Think of it like this: You see a UFO above the city. If you worked for the newspaper and wrote an article about aliens, you might get fired. So you don't write it. Basically, no one wants to be the crazy person believing in all the nonsense. This mindset isn't universal (I mean, there are people that summon succubi and whatnot), but it limits the spread of information about them. Plus, supernatural entities are very rare population-wise. They're often very isolated too, as can be seen in that slimes are shunned into living in caves. So basically, there's nothing stopping the world from adapting more to these creatures. In fact, adapting more to them is entirely what the Office of ... Integration wants. Magical girls are most likely the most well known supernatural creature of current.
>>47617342
Azriel: good personality, good looks, good fetish, you get to battle monsters and she went kinda yandere on that tutorial SDA made a while ago, I'll keep that as oficial in my mind.
As for archdemon choice: no fucking idea, this one's too hard. Probably Erelyra or Lyleth, but I'm considering at least three other choices too. God bless SDA.
>>47618046
You deserve a hug for all the work you do.
>>47616050
Hey man I don't know the etiquette on stuff this but where did you get the art for kengen? I really like that picture.
>>47617825
If you want to write more girls, write more girls. 11 pages isn't anywhere near terrible when the worst you have to reference is 4 pages(Both intro pages, designated waifu page and maybe the relevant library entry). Even then, two of those aren't even that big(said waifu 1/2 page and single library entry).
>>47617853
I said nothing of a sort. I gave you my argument, you put it inside out.
>>47617359
>However, I hit the height cap on the page
You can probably buy another 80 pixels horizontally without upsetting anyone running old ass monitors(720 monitors would be 1280x720, and anyone still using an ancient crt probably has atleast 1280x960). Might be enough to fit some stuff in with a bit of rearranging.
>>47618078
like most of the art it was pulled from danbooru
the artist's name is daystar here's his stuff on danbooru
https://danbooru.donmai.us/posts?tags=daystar
I did a fairly good job documenting pics so if you got any other requests I'd be happy to help
>>47618068
Thanks!
>>47618084
I mean, I just want to write what people want. I'm just not sure if I can write well enough from a male pov. And it isn't that I'm concerned about reading length. It's just that posting it is quite a bit of effort. So far, I've been the only one to repost the thing (for updates), but I feel like if it gets too long, it will never see the light of day because no one wants to bother.
>>47618126
At best, that would get me 2 more options. If I add more than 2 more, I think I'll just make a separate page.
>writefaggotry inc.
>>47617825
>>47617602
So I slowly Learn to not only to become a master archer, but also how to do so while flying. A birds eye view is always a good way to get a handle on the situation, and a decent plan to pick off important combatants. The hope with potions is to learn some low level poisons to lace my arrows with, for increased lethality.
A dwarf, a bard, a paladin, an adventurer, and a noble. Practically a fellowship, though we are missing a elf.
The second years break, I happen to be riffling through Suzette's mail one day, and see a curious invitation, containing only an obsidian coin, an address, and the words "the den awaits".
Naturally I cant let Suzette go to what ever this is, it could be a trap! So I steal it from the mail, and head off to the festival.
>quick note: it says no stakes gambling, but i can only assume it means high stakes
As for what exactly I would do, it quite heavily relies on how slavery works in this reality. Same goes for the return trips.
I had planed to return to the den the next year, but A mysterious ghost turned up.
>hijinks ensue
We also join the great hunt this year, to see what we can really do.
Party = Me, Suzette and Crale
Then I start my returns to the basilisk den, and get enlisted as a bodyguard, Likely because of my "relation" to Suzette. Perhaps Cynthia wants to test my abilities?
Year 5 we return to the basilisk den and the great hunt. The purpose of rejoining the great hunt is to see how far we've Truly progressed, if at all. The blind date is because we can assume some relationship fell through. they almost always do, after-all.
Sorte seems like an interesting companion for the blind date. Two Master archers, thrust together, almost as if by fate? what could go wrong?
>>47617755
That's great (please finish =P), I have a blacksmith build in my head but wanted both enhancement and imbuement for magical/ki enchantment.
>>47615974
Head pats boxy.
>>47618260
part of the problem is that I would need something else to fill out the page, that was originally going to be school clubs but that idea couldn't pan out into something I was happy with so yeah
>>47618027
Um, I didn't really have any more than that, sorry... Glad you liked it though.
>>47618315
oh gosh
>>47615714
It's gone /cyoag/, it's all gone.
My many-thousand-files heavy CYOA folder is gone, along with the rest of my 800+ GB of data.
Hold me, hold me in my despair. What CYOA would bring me comfort in this time of such great distress?
>>47618256
oh boy my first writefagging
>>47618405
Did it get deleted?
>>47618256
high stakes =/= no stakes
usually when referring to gambling the "stakes" represent the upper limit of whats allowed to be bet. Thus No stakes gambling means anything and everything can be wagered
>>47618520
Hard drive got rekt.
I got another one but I kinda divide shit between the two, so it's more like I lost 40% of the stuff I have.
>I also lost all my work stuff
>first thing I despair about are cyoas and reaction images
>>47618241
You might be able to buy a lot more depending on what most people are using these days. I can't guarantee people'll vote, but I just created a strawpoll for you
http://www.strawpoll.me/10401428
>>47618588
>vertical
well that's embarassing
>>47618588
>adds a joke option
>expects no one to for it
I mean, no one has so far, but really you should know how 4chan deals with online polls by now.
just putting it here so someone could point out the mistake
>>47615974
I'm not getting a scope for what arcane magic really does. Would you mind giving me a few examples?
>>47618837
Magic Missile.
>>47618735
Very first sentence "thing" should be plural.
Here's a proof-reading, open up Word and copy down what you've already written. Word for word, every single sentence. That's how I proof-read my stuff, you'd be surprised how well it works. If you only have one screen, put them in smaller windows.
>>47618837
Think blasts of pure magic energy, beams of magic, potentially even pure magic constructs.
>>47618588
1600x900 (I don't know how many ps) and vertical scrolling is no problem at all. Prefer no horizontal scrolling because you have to open it in a new tab and all that moving around makes it easier to lose your place.
>>47618735
>>47618991
I meant to say "proof-reading tip"
>>47618837
So I wanted arcane magic to be the purest and most dangerous form of magic.
Think about it like this. Magic is like a flashlight, by itself it produces a strong beam of light, however one can place different colored filters over this light along with shapes meant to cast shadows. These ultimately change the way the light ends up looking when you turn on the flashlight. while cool and useful the light dims the more filters you but over it. Arcane magic is not only the flashlight without those filters, but constantly trying to figure out how to make the light bigger and brighter.
As for magic in a more traditional sense try to think of anything that has a neutral sort of element like 'force' or 'blast' or your traditional magic missles.
Hope that helps
>>47615974
>>47616914
off topic, genuinely laughed at this.
some typo's as well.
The Ej Har Institute
unarmed combat x3
Physical training x3
ki attunment x3
blood magic x1
duxix
tarkun ironstout
scal
dax
hana
4 great events, 1 held per year
3 each
must take a total of 3 unique indivudal (ie, great tournament, harvest festival, etc)
fuck it, i don't get it.
year 1: bodyguard
Year 2: blind date
year 3: the great hunt
year 4: basilisk den
year 5: battle royal
got damia as my blind date...fun.
>>47619036
And it is almost certainly blue colored
>>47619049
That's 900p and also pretty damn rare
>>47619036
>>47618861
>>47618837
>>47619076
No, I get that sort of thing but throws in the line about it being limited only by it's useres immigration (though I assume it meant imagination). Could I use it to say... teleport? Fly? Stop time? Drain another's magic? Or is it just raw force?
I'm almost done a quick overwatch roommate CYOA.
How many roommates should you get out of the 21 characters? Was originally planning two, but now I'm maybe considering 3.
I don't care if you can have teams of 6 in game, I think that's too many for this.
>>47619168
Stop time is probably a no go (at least in my opinion but this is ultimately your story I just set the framework) but with enough training everything else is possible
And yea it was supposed to be imigiantion
I'll post an updated version tomorrow after I sober up
>>47619238
I think 3 is good.
>>47619238
We gonna get choices based on maps?
>>47618762
Ok the general trenchcoat looks awsome. Is that the Nazi guy from Hellboy?
>>47619265
>imigiantion
Do you mean imagination?I love you boxy.
>>47619287
Yeah, that's him.
>>47619347
Man, and those bonuses. LOL at those greedy and manipulative being scared of you. Hell that is what I'd probably get.
>>47619265
>>47619265
So real question, how is slavery supposed to work in this? Is it traditional slavery, where they are are simply forced to do what you say under threat of violence? Or is there some kind of magical component to it a la "rise of the shield hero"?
>>47616914
Just a question Box, why are there no tank stats or particularly tanky seeming companions?
>>47619423
Slavery? Where did you get slavery from?
>>47619301
Yea yea I do...love you too
>>47619444
Basilisk den.
>>47619444
5th page, harvest festival, basilisk den.
>>47619433
Tanks are boring senpai
>Stand in one place and get him constantly
>>47619448
Oh yeah the Basilisk den. Say Box can we destroy that place and free the slaves? I mean we are heroes and there are paladins around.
>>47619496
I understand that, but when trying to make a balanced character, I try to have some defensive stats or take an ally that can help in the defensive front if I decide to take a more offensive one.
>>47619528
It's offered as one of the solutions in the CYOA itself...
>>47619433
It's kind of hard for me to write tank options, like how would I sell that?
COME ONE COME ALL learn a myriad of techniques to help you become a better hero! Learn how to turn your body into a weapon through constant training, bury your head in a book and learn the secrets of magic, or let our instructors beat the ever loving shit out of you until you can be considered an expert on the subject!
Doesn't seem super appealing, I was hoping that a lot of the more martial foucesed classes and companions would have some implied tankness about them but I'm sorry if that was unclear I'll try working on it
>>47619423
Slavery doesn't have any special mechanics like they do in stuff like shield hero (I actually really dislike the way they do slavery) so I guess it's normal. Of course more powerful slaves might have like dampening collers or something like that
>>47616003
Can you give us some examples of Dark Gods for use with Unholy Arts
>>47619576
It does seem like something you can easily work on, rather than specializing in. Through barters, mantling, Barrier Jackets, experimentation, divine blessings, force of will, or just the old fashioned way of physical training. Hell, even Stealth could give you some DR methods. I mean, if you're going adventuring, the art of not dying is one of the basic ones that everyone appreciates.
>>47618735
ok so far so good, but tue-rtle sts is confusing
>need frequent maintenace
so what if i can't fix it?
>extra room for a companion
does that mean i get 1 free companion? or it's just an empty room?
>>47619637
Oh, also forgot the really obvious one of just wearing some armor. It is, in fact, the easiest option.
>>47619628
Dark Gods themselves? Probably not since I didn't really take the time to create a pantheon (though I would love to make one for a latter expansion that foucesed purely on lore)
As for unholy arts themselves think traditional negtive elements like darkness, rot, demonology, etc.
Any wip have a lot of potential?
>>47619788
Yes.Yours.
>>47615974
>>47616003
>>47616050
>>47616100
>The Ej Har Institute
>Summoning 3
>Necromancy 3
>Unholy Arts 3
>Blood Magic 1
>Bathsheba
>Scal
>Cassiopeia
>Inas
>Sanyo
>Escort
>Security
>Party Planner
>Research Proposal x5
>>47615974
I don't know if it's too late, but I liked this CYOA a lot and the author asked for proofreading, and I just wanted to help out.
Mostly focused on spelling and word choice, less so on punctuation and phrasing since I just wanted to do a quick pass. I can do the other pages if you'd like or if you think it'd be helpful.
>>47619840
D-do you really think so Anon?
>>47619942
Marry me
>>47619942
Good thinking on using the image itself instead of writing it in here.
>>47618991
Thanks for the tip
>>47618762
I'll work on that detail
If you can't fix it it will be vulnurable and maintenance eat resource
And you get an extra companion
Hey guys, I am looking for a CYOA for some inspiration for a homebrew. I was a dumbass and didn't save anything, but it had to do with spaceship building and similar shit. its not >>47615812. It was focused much more on the ship building aspect. I would be greatful for any help you guys can give.
>>47619942
don't stop anon, come on, senpai is noticing you.
>>47620105
god damn man, there's a shit ton. there's that one, it was really popular and started its fair share of shit storms. something star something. stardust maybe?
>>47620136
Rumor has it if you go into a bathroom, turnoff the lights, and say stardust three times a smug anime girl will appear and distill upon you great autism
>>47620000
I-I feel noticed...
>>47620042
Thanks, I started a notepad but noticed pretty early on that it was getting clumsy and unclear. I kept having to include more and more snippets to provide context as to what the lines were referring to on the image, and realized it be even worse for the person trying to fix it after.
Already noticing some stuff I missed, noticeably in the first one, "last few adventurer's academies" should be that possessive form, instead of just plural.
If you think it's helpful I'll keep poking away at the 2nd one.
>>47617073
Yes, cripples are pathetic.
>>47616814
>Clean, handsome, but not too hairy. Stubble is okay. Slightly toned. Well equipped for her favorite activity.
So she doesn't actually turn you into a girl?
>>47620212
He said what her sexual preferences are, not the extend of what she can do if you're the one deciding.
So guys, I'm not the richest motherfucker around (yet, working on that) but I have a fun idea.
What about a realistic/real cyoa? You're legitimately given choices, certain wish fullfillment with a theme, but at a price of course. Whether that price be money, information, art, etc, would be dependent on the theme.
Of course, the creator in this case would either have to A. have money in order to do the choices or B. have something else specific. Example:
A improved living cyoa.
"The powers that be (anon) have decided that you may trade creativity for prize's. You may take any option below but in return you must first generate something original. Whether that be a game, art, or a good story, is up to you."
Money Money Money: Get 5 dollars right now by paypal.
Game Delivery: Get a random game (may be rom, new or old) delivered to an email of your choice every 1 week for 4 weeks
Tv time: Get an entirely downloaded HD collection of any show you desire
Porn collection: Similiar to Game Delivery, but you may specify the theme.
I think it could be fun.
>>47620272
The full question
>What's Fei La's type, anyway? Like, if you let her demonify you into a body she likes, what would she go with
And Beri said her ideal type is a twink guy, so clearly she'd be unhappy with a girl
>>47620304
See >>47616919
Anything beyond this is just being salty for its own sake.
>>47619942
>>47620192
>>47620000
Added a few minor corrections for your pleasure. Keep up the good work!
>>47620339
Do you want me to legitimately fall in love with you because I'm starting to feel feelings over here
>>47620367
But Box, what about Kit?
>>47620382
we all know about kit and his poly ways. and...alcohol... but the point is, he'd be fine with his box lover finding another lover.
>>47620339
can you just become "The Editor" For cyoa's?
>>47620367
>>47620403
For the sake of clarification, there are multiple proofreaders posting in this thread.
>>47620425
i didn't know box had a harem. cool.
>>47620425
I legitimately love all proofreaders. Not only do they take the time to view our works they take it a step further and help us turn our works and ourselves into the best versions possible. I just hate how thankless their job truly is, I wish I could make a holiday for them and bake them the all a cake.
Did not see any for a while with all this talk bout proofreading
1/3
>>47616003
>>47620339
>>47620425
And I super appreciate it. I know I'm missing stuff, and I'm leaving some frustrating grammatical stuff behind, just focusing on the more egregious bits or easy-to-fix "theirs."
I'm thrilled to have any extra pair of eyes and hands take a look, you're my hero.
>>47620647
2/3
>>47620664
3/3
>>47620649
>>47620339
Also I straight missed a bunch of the stuff you caught. I'm getting tired and sloppy but you're a champ.
>>47620647
Shiiit, sorry mate, didn't mean to interrupt your chain that's actually content proper. I need to refresh before posting...
>>47620699
Dont worry
I aint mad bout combo breakers
>>47620834
is this OC?
berri
hunter gal
pallas
sweet sweet goodness, another author cyoa.
What has pallas done?
>>47620577
The appreciation is mutual. I’m not exactly given to creativity, and appreciate the wonderful fantasies you content creators share with us on a regular basis. Each of us have a place in the divine economy of CYOA threads, I think.
>>47620699
Don’t worry, you’re doing a good job.
I’ve skipped ahead to page 4 to avoid duplicate work.
>>47620954
Bells and Twin.
Twin CYOA is fucking choice, btw, and Bells did mystery boxes right.
>>47620834
Not OC got posted like a week and a half ago
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>>47620954
Meant to reply here
>>47616050
Ya know, reading through this cyoa I'm loving it more and more. Some fun characters and antics here.
>>47620993
Still the champest of champs. I'm wiped, you did perfect and I don't think I had the energy to do another page anyways. And you're doing what I wish I had been with tighter control on phrasing, punctuation, and hyphens. Hopefully my little mark-ups still help.
Awesome CYOA, awesome touch-ups. Have a lovely night anons and friends.
>>47619576
You could make tank techniques with magic or ki, or part of physical training.
>>47621147
That's what he was saying, that you can learn to defend in all your fighting classes anyway. He just didn't get the intent across like he wanted.
>>47615974
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>>47616050
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>>47616139
Lots of spelling/grammar errors to look over but the CYOA itself is really good!
>Harvar- I mean Lunestier University
>Martial x2
>Arcane x3
>Ki attunement x3
>Tactics x1
>Magic Refinement
I will be a spellsword of daring-do whilst maintaining a perfect blend of magical might and physical prowess.
>Malyvin
>Luvyna
>Valerie Bluewood
>Suzette Highking
>Tennie Northbreed
My three quintessential childhood friends will remain with me until the end while Suzette's magic and Tennie's physicals (and wyvern!) should get us through most of the challenges we face.
>Battle Royale x5
>Blind date (1st year)
>Bodygaurd (5th year)
>Research Proposal (5th year)
Every year I will test myself against whomever shows up at the battle royale in glorious 1v1 combat (and maybe team battles if they allow that in tandem with 1v1).
The blind date should help build bonds with people in other schools so I can have allies later on.
Bodygaurd to allow me to achieve closer connections with the royal family and research proposal to get me 'ins' with the higher-ups of the academic world.
If only there were more to this CYOA so you could dream up adventures post-degree...
Thanks for the CYOA!
>>47620286
I'm not joking when I say that's one of the stupidest ideas I've ever heard.
>>47617073
>NEETs who have shit-tier social skills having to work are the same as people who literally lack legs having to run
Fuck off with that. You can learn social skills just by being around other people/not being lazy/being a useful member of society.
A person without legs is literally incapable of running.
Like you know those are different right? Like you get that those aren't in any way comparable because one is a sack of shit that chose to be shit at life and the other is someone who is physically incapable of doing something.
t. cripple with a good job
>>47621269
>having to work
See:
>>47617246
>You'll also notice that he didn't get any complaining once he changed it to allow a desk job. People were not worried about getting a job, they were worried about having to get a customer service job.
>>47621269
Oh, and it's a mental illness. You wouldn't trust someone with suicidal depression to work in a gun store, as another example. Or a schizophrenic anywhere. That it's a relatively mild mental disorder doesn't mean it's not a condition.
