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>>46913304
Reposting from last thread. Coming Soon.
(note: I am not Beri)
>>46913360
You got me all excited anon.
>>46913360
Quick swap on my blind picks:
>Xeno-chan
>Middle one on 4th row
>Wizard
>>46913483
A blank page.
>>46913483
Nonexistent.
>>46913483
One that covers every possible fetish.
>>46913499
>>46913504
The question wasn't addressed to you celibates.
>>46913483
Like the Autism Prison CYOA, except you get points for how freaky you are, and spend them on freaky powers. Or you get powers by bonding yourself to particular fetishes, which requires you to indulge in them.
>>46913543
Just saying, you won't be able to create the perfect fetish CYOA. You're going to piss someone off.
>>46913483
Something that could lend a story or at least the start of a story to it, there are a few cyoa out there that already fulfill the need to allow as many fetishes as possible but most of those don't have much going for them story wise or even enough in them to let you start your own.
>>46913483
It magically grants me powers to fulfil my fetishes in real life.
>>46913547
Tbisili
>>46913572
Hah, can't disagree with that one. That indeed would be the perfect CYOA.
>>46913483
It would a be a proper fantasy cyoa riddled with not so subtle and subtle fetishes. Ex. Furry races. Slavemaster class. Gluttonous giant lamia companion. Etc.
>>46913572
Just start hormones already.
>>46913571
>Something that could lend a story or at least the start of a story to it,
What story would would like to see in a fetish CYOA?
>>46913629
I don't wanna be a girl though, I just want all women to be taller than me and with huge breasts.
>>46913620
>Slavemaster class. Gluttonous giant lamia companion.
Anything can be made lewd. You can see a amazon being drowned by a kraken and its either tragic, a great fight, or your fetish because you watch tentacle porn.
So yeah, before you go around shitposting about CYOAs like that...
>>46913662
Hmm I'm a fan of near future sci-fi. Something in that setting would be nice. Something involving the Club scene in it would be cool.
>>46913566
Or maybe it'll piss someone on?
>>46913758
Easy enough to insert TG into that setting at least. Not sure about other fetishes.
>>46913833
Aliens. Wonderful source for all kinds of fetishes cause you can make them as anatomically diverse as you want and their methods for sexual reproduction are open for fetish fuel too.
>>46913483
Slave owner
>>46913883
This. Saw a comic the other day featuring an alien girl with an anemone-like vagina that put out mild electric shocks. You can be pretty creative with xenobiology.
>>46913833
Or genetic experiments and stuff. I can imagine that stuff and nanobots would be all the rage with party crazy college students.
>>46913883
Someday when I finish my current CYOA I want to make one like this.
>>46913304
>Abomination
>After the End
>Form: Teleport
>Form: Entropic
>Form: Technoform
>God Power: Fissure
>Empowerment: Knowledge
>Empowerment: Worship
>Prophet: Inventor
>Prophet: Traveller
>Prophet: Priest
>Divine Gift: Resilience
>Divine Gift: Restructure
>Dominion: Summoning Sites
>Minion: Lesser (Form: Insectoid, Affinity: Cyber, Skill: Lightning, Skill: Composite Body, Skill: Toughness, Skill: Speed)
>Minion: Humanoid (Form: Mammalian, Affinity: Cyber, Skill: Genius, Skill: Get Back Up, Skill: Smithing, Skill: Toughness)
>Underworld: Test of Worthiness (Mechanical, Manifest Deity, Steward, Realm Guardians, Caverns, Crystals, Dungeons, Restoration Cycle)
Mecha-Cthulhu time.
>>46914070
Get cracking then.
>>46913304
>Deathly (9,9)
World - Land of Fantasy
>Form
Shapeshifter (8,9)
Twin Threats (6,9)
Lord of Hosts (5,9)
>Powers
Change of Heart (3,9)
golemspark (2,9)
Worldgate (0,9)
>Empowerment
Monuments (0,8)
Underworld (free)
>Prophet
Hero
>Gifts
magecraft [0,7]
>Dominion
free avatar (0,5)
summoning sites (0,4)
hellgate (0,3)
centre of magic [0,2]
>Minions
Lesser[5]: (0,1)
form-undead [free]
affinity-death [free]
power-divine focus [3]
equip-mounts* [1]
skill- spawner [0]
Mount[5]:
power-divine focus [3]
skill- get back up [2]
skill -spawner [1]
affinity - death [0]
>underworld
Judgement [5 +5]
Manifest Deity [9]
Realm Guardians [8]
restoration cycle [6]
Forest [5]
Citadel [3]
Halls of the Gods [2]
Steward [0]
My territory has summoning sites constantly pushing out lesser minions. I also have two avatars active 24/7 pushing out lesser minions.
My lesser minions can summon two golems or convert an enemy when they die. They can also summon spawn with the same powers. They can also summon mounts with the same powers. The mounts can also summon spawn with the same powers. The lesser-spawn can also summon mounts with the same powers. The mounts summoned by lesser-spawn can also summon spawn with the same powers. All mounts listed above can actually do this twice each. Everything listed above can summon undead allies.
In other word, each lesser minion is really maybe 20 minions.
Facing 1 lesser minion who goes full-golem will also mean fighting ~60 golems. Plus your dead (and anything you kill) will be raised to fight against you.
Facing 1 lesser minion who goes full-corruption will convert maybe 40 of your numbers to my cause. Anyone so converted who dies will swell my underworld, making me more powerful.
In my Underworld, my Realm Guardians have the same abilities as my Lesser Minions.
>>46914206
Believe me anon, a lot of crack has gone into this.
shit, was the last thread only up for like five hours?
The fuck happened?
>>46914427
Another one of Beri's gallery, and another healthy does of arguing/shitposting.
weren't there two people waiting for the new thread to release OC, on top of Beri?
>>46914489
They probably decided to skip this one too in anticipation of the finished gallery.
>>46914514
But we need something while we wait.
I'd post one of mine that hasn't been posted in awhile, like the toy story one, but I'm still at school.
Also, for my waifu CYOA, what's your guys' preferred age? Obviously it'll be varied, but I'm thinking around the 20-30 range with 1 or 2 outside of those.
>>46914537
20-30 sounds good.
>>46914537
18-25 if you're not doing lolis. Teenagers a shit and 30+ is pretty much just the realm of milfs and cougars to me. Which aren't bad, but I wouldn't make it the median unless it's literally the milf and cougar CYOA.
>>46914537
20-30 is fine. As long as it's above 18, you won't see me completely voiding it from my options.
>>46914537
18-35 is pretty reasonable. Anything over that and you're just appealing to the MILF hunters, anything under that and Chris Hansen starts telling half the people in the thread to take a seat.
>>46914537
19-30 is good enough for me.
This is done. How'd those blind picks turn out?
I think I waited too long to start the gallery. I need to get to sleep soon. I'll stay up for a little bit though to answer any questions. I won't do a typo-fix until tomorrow. On that note, remember to please point out typos.
>>46913304
Alright lets give this a go. Taking warrior god start and "After the End" world.
Avatar: I get demonforged for free and I'll also take burning form, shapeshifter, flight, pillar of strength, pillar of hope, and lord of hosts.
Avatar is primarily a monster of battle whom will be capable of devastation on the field of battle and be able to lead my followers in battle.
Powers: Start with firestorm and I'll also buy Resurrect, Pacify, bolt, and mass reanimate.
Empowerment: My free start of battle and I'll buy worship.
Prophet: I'll take the hero.
Divine gifts: Resilience
Skipping domain due to lack of points.
Minions: Humanoid: Form reptilian, Affinity Fire, Skill healer, Skill toughness, Skill smithing, Skill armsmaster, Skill hypersenses, Equip armor.
In short they shall be my warriors to aid my followers who are in need, probably draconic in appearance.
Underworld: Test of worthiness: Mountainous, Forest, Manifest Deity, Legendary beasts, Servants, Gladiators, Citadel, and restoration cycle.
Afterlife is kind of sucky if you can still fall susceptible to permadeath.
This world may be cinders but it shall be reforged. To those whom come to me I shall protect you. With me your enemies shall be destroyed, and to those whom die and are worthy shall be granted eternity within my domain. I will aid you in the reconquest of your world from whatever monsters may besiege you or men attempt to doom you. The finest of your warriors will be reborn to continue this conquest.
Essentially I'm trying to do is be a deity in a dying world that's taken a liking to a group and wishes to see them succeed over their enemies and destroy all that would try to oppose them. If the world rebuilds I'll probably be something closer to Norse mythos.
>>46914650
My choices turned out pretty well.
Quest
Melancholic Joker
Ancient Sword
Ancient sword has a typo though
> The hero nevers needs
>>46914650
>Alien Homemaker
>Ancient Sword
>Prestidigitation
Best decisions ever.
>>46914537
College age is always my preference.
Wasn't there a cyoa about being the monster girl or something? I know we just ran through the choosing two to help you through the world but I could have sworn there was one about having to be the monster girl.
>>46914650
Quest, Ancient Sword and Demon Maid.
Get the Swordsman and the Demon to help me, easy money.
>>46914807
It this the one you are talking about?
>>46914650
Interesting. Dusk Metropolis didn't quite turn out how I thought it would... But maybe it's because of how I cropped it? In the full image you can tell that the pillar of light is a nuclear explosion.
Anyway, I'll take Apocalypse Me, Spacial Seer, and Light Adventure. Have some fun adventures in the apocalyptic far future, using my spacial powers to survive and thrive.
>>46914650
Apocalypse me, light adventure, suddenly breasts.
Always have a trump. Grow my breasts to get me out of any jam
>>46914650
I don't like that Apocalypse Me erases your memories.
>>46914905
Oh, does it sound that way? Maybe I should reword it. It only erases your memories of how you got into the situation. You remember everything else about your life.
>>46914650
Well my blind picks were Apocalypse Me, Demon Maid, and Suddenly Breasts. And it seems like my guesses were right on the money,
I am now a sexy girl in an apocalyptic future and have a demon maid to help me in all my endeavours though I'm not certain if I'd want to swap her out for the Lamia Sorceress so I could get my own telekinetic powers.
What I wasn't expecting though was to get magical boob growing (and shrinking back) powers that also make boobs become existences best shields, that is super useful in the future I find myself with my current lack of powers, well at least until my pet drone helps me hack and gain some future tech.
>>46914922
Yeah, the fuzzy memory bit sounds like it's for all your memories, not just the ones added by Apocalypse Me. I'd clear it up a little bit.
>>46914650
Apocalypse me
flying fish frier
melancholic joker
I guess I am the eternal flying fish flier sidekick with her mopey assassin and robotic side-sidekicks. Or something. At least I'm the cute girl.
>>46914650
>Apocalypse Me
>Under Arrest
>Spatial Seer
Sweet future adventures with a cool sidekick and cool powers. Also I'm a girl. I'd never get bored.
>>46914650
All right, definitely lamia choice then. Breakthrough is also very tempting.
So Suddenly breasts, alien homemaker, and lamia sorceress.
I'm absolutely using the manipulation of matter to capitalize on it so I can afford having a family with hundreds of kids, and I can probably just make our food/house bigger so I can buy less of that. I can probably capitalize on the breast enchantments too with permanent, real, augmentations.
Question time.
Does the alien housewife get jealous, or is she OK with sharing, because it sounds like lamia's gonna want me after the 11 years is up.
Is Lamia only upset at using her own taught spells on her, or any kind of spell at all, IE breast enchantment?
Breast enchantment is permanent, unless I say so, correct?
And of all people, why did alien single me out? Did I remind her of someone on a sitcom? I don't mind of course.
Another good one. Thanks again for still using my image.
>>46914950
Also, turning people into objects that can still see, hear, feel and speak would be a good crime deterrent really. Sentence criminals to 6 months as an anvil, or a couple years as a horseshoe or something. Death by being turned into a cigarette and smoked.
>>46914998
>Does the alien housewife get jealous...
The Alien Homemaker would get jealous, but in a get kinda depressed sort of way rather than a walk out on you sort of way. You could always find a replacement for the lamia, maybe throw one of the kids at her. She doesn't necessarily want to do lewd things.
>Is Lamia only upset...
She'd be upset at any spell, unless she gives you permission to use it.
>Breast enchantment is permanent...
Yes, they stay large indefinitely by default.
>And of all people, why did the alien single me out?
Love at first sight.
>Another good one...
thanks!
>>46914650
I'm going to interpret Breakthrough to grant immortality.
Breakthrough, Spacial Seer, Lamia Sorceress (matter manipulation first).
>>46915074
Yeah, they grant you infinite sexual stamina and immortality. I mean, if you died, the entire dimension of personalized yandere tentacle monsters would get lonely.
Anyone have the alien waifu cyoa? Can't find it in any of the archives.
>>46915098
On the, they are willing to share part, does that mean only with the other phantoms or with actually living folks? (or do I have to master them first before I let myself ever get close to anyone?)
>>46915102
Which one you looking for, there was a few, any description you can give of an option in it would work to help me find it for you.
>>46915117
Sounds to me like they're only willing to share amongst themselves.
>>46915117
Regular people are fine, too, as long as you don't start ignoring them.
>>46915142
Whelp, the lives and safety of everyone around me depends on my dick and my skill with it.
That is something I didn't think I would be saying today... or ever.
>>46915127
It's alright, I literally just found it. It was the one with the siren and the superhacker.
>>46915069
>You could always find a replacement for the lamia, maybe throw one of the kids at her. She doesn't necessarily want to do lewd things.
So wait, could I like, just invite her to live with us, just as like a friend to keep company? Or be neighbours or something? Would that be agreeable for both lamia and alien wife?
>>46913304
>>46913316
>Deathly
>City of Gods
>Face of Terror, Psychokinetic, Entropic, Wrathful Avatar, Unhinger
>World gate, Mass Reanimate, Area Banish, Fire Storm
>Underworld, Fear
>Traveller
>Magecraft, Resiliance, Strength
>Hellgate, Free Avatar
>Humanoid (Skill - Terror, Genius, Perpetual, Ghostly, Get Back Up; Affinity - Death, Fire; Form - Transformation Reptilian; Equip - Armor)
>Test of Worthiness
>Legendary Beasts, Realm Guardians, Forest, Manifest Deity, Floating Islands, Wetlands, Glacial, Organic, Hall of Gods, Gladiators, Dungeons, Weather Mastery, Changer of Forms, Steward.
I am Death and Fear, these other Gods have caused the world to stagnate and only allow it to develope when one of them has a tantrum. They have grown arrogant with their control and forgotten what Fear and Death mean. I will take their souls.
So my main aim to reintroduce death to a world that has forgotten it. Main way of fighting is to simply cause everything else to freeze in fear as we take them, or just out tank the enemy. Worst comes to worst I'll just cause a World Gate into my Underworld and have my Beasts of Fear and Realm Guardians help, or just Banish everything.
My underworld is knock off of the Tower from Tower of God, only if you clear the tower you have effectively conquered fear and death, and I will allow you to be truly immortal. Only one mortal has done so and She became my Prophet.
>>46914650
> Apocalypse Me
>Spatial Seer
>Discovered Nature
This seems like a decent set-up to go on glorious adventures, between all the tech around, the magic powers, and the plants. The plant option made me inordinately happy.
I thought about taking Cliffs of Life to kick start an attempt to rebuild civilization, but I was a bit scared that they would eventually eat the universe by continuing to grow. I guess it would solve the entropy issue, though.
>>46915171
Yeah, as long as she can keep toying with you, the lamia's fine. As for the alien, she'll see it as a platonic student-teacher relationship, unless you let things get out of hand.
>>46915193
The cliffs do not grow as fast as the universe expands. The cliffs are the opposite of entropy. They're the embodiment of energy and life, of mixing things up and seeing what happens. In fact, it would take years and years for them to fill in an ocean. And the planet isn't losing water, so it will just shift coastlines a bit.
>>46914650
So how full are the implications of fire and steel with "As long as the crystal remains in tact, you'll survive" Is it like a Phylactery?
So you're some kind of metal golem lich with it? I'm assuming you still take injury, sickness and aging with it so if you DON'T replace your parts with metal you'll eventually look like some kind of undead if you're using it for immortality.
I take it you can connect metal parts to the crystal with "wires" and make yourself into some sort of cyborg without replacing your entire body right away. Might even figure out how to incorporate electronics or mechanical machines for some actual cyborg like benefits.
If I combine that with Prestidigitation and the Lamia's mind magic I could illusion my own mind into getting my sense of touch back if I go full robot.
Even if I don't, I'd probably take those two for the abilities anyway.
It's a pretty decent wizard alchemist combo.
>>46915271
At first, you're just human with a rock in you. However, you can add robot arms and things as you see fit. The crystal doesn't mean human immortality. It means your soul and mind will live on without it. It can eventually age and die. Should your human body die in a sudden accident, you can trust the fairy to at least get you set up with the basics to continue living as a steel golem.
Yeah, you can be a cyborg. Actually as long as metal is touching your flesh, you can control it. To that extent, you can pick locks just by tapping them and operate heavy machinery like cranes and tanks by merely touching them.
Prestidigitation wouldn't help in the slightest in getting the sense of touch back as that's the main sense that prestidigitation does NOT fool. The mind magic could kinda rig up something, but it wouldn't respond well to stimulus. That is, a spell of "feel a feather tickling your nose" could be cast, for example, but it would make you feel that pre-defined feeling. Making a spell that detects what you're touching, determines what to make it feel like, and beam that sense into your mind would be too complex to do. You do still have a basic sense of touch through metal, though. There's no pain or pleasure, but you can feel basic pressure, heat, etc.
>>46914650
Well, this has been up for an hour. I need to get some sleep. I'll respond to any other questions & post a typo-foxed version tomorrow morning.
>>46914840
Yeah that's the one. Thanks anon
>>46915428
No problem, happy to help.
>>46913304
Quick Start
Earth
Technoform (9)
Psychokinetic (8)
Wrathful Avatar (7)
Pillar of Strength (6)
Firestorm (5)
Mass Reanimate (4)
Golemspark (3)
Bolt (2)
Worldgate (0)
Monuments (9)
Knowledge (8)
Souls (7)
Inventor (7)
Magecraft (6)
Immortality (5)
Summoning Sites (4)
Free Avatar (2)
Lesser (1)
Affinity-Cyber (4)
Skill-Genius (3)
Skill-Invisibility (2)
Skill-Speed (1)
Skill-Healer (0)
Judgement (0)
Manifest Deity (4)
Forest (3)
Mechanical (2)
Dungeons (1)
Servants (0)
I will use my power to provide vast wealth, powerful magics, and immortality to those who promise to worship me (or anyone who promises their soul). Should they chose to worship me, I will grant them access to my minions (great for cheap labor) in exchange for spreading my gospel (Knowledge) and constructing statues in my honor (Monuments) which many of my soul deals will be held at (Souls and Knowledge).
>>46913304
Methodology: Dominator
World: Galactic Federation.
Form:
Pillar of Strength
Pillar of Hope
Unearthly Charm
Lord of Hosts
Mindrobber
Illusionist
Two things here. Unearthly Charm and Mindrobber make me really good socially. The rest make me an unstoppable battlefield commander. Both are useful logistically.
God powers:
Aether Passage
Yes, there's FTL, but this is better. The other powers that cost just one aren't really useful, Worldgate, Resurrect, and Change of Heart are good but probably not worth two points.
Empowerment:
Monuments
Underworld.
The former because I like them, the latter because it allows me to build monuments where they can't be destroyed. Both are good for a slow strategy, which I expect to take.
My prophet shall be the leader. A planetary governor I suppose, his world shall be mine, the first of many and a holy capital.
Gifts: Magecraft. There's no other magic, so it will be a good gift.
Dominion:
Terrain warp
Hellgate
Summoning Sites
Whispers
Free Avatar
It's my dominion, so I want it to be mine. Terrain warp lets it reflect me, the whispers make sure immigrants are mine, the free avatar lets me inhabit my home properly. The summoning sites let my armies be built up rapidly and the Hellgate is mostly just a convenience for my people.
>>46915572
Minions:
I'll pick Humanoid, because intelligence is important and anyway it's what I have the right number of influence choices for.
Form:
Transformation: Great size.
Skill:
Speed
Toughness
Perpetual
Genius
Attraction
Smithing
Armsmaster
Hypersenses
Invisibility
Thanks to the Dominator bonus, my elites are not just unstoppable warriors, but also great builders and inventors. And I summon them from my body and mortals can summon them from the sites in my domain. Also they're beautiful and this good diplomats, plus waifus for my loyal servants.
Underworld: Test of Worthiness
Restoration Cycle and Citadel.
Manifest Deity
Forest, Ocean, Mountainous
Servants, Dungeons
My loyal people will come here and test themselves. When they die, which they likely will several times, they will respawn back at the beginning every seventh year. Those who reach my citadel in the center have the option to reincarnate. They also have the option to enjoy life as though they were kings within my citadel, adored by servants. The dungeons make up the route from the outskirts to my citadel, and are filled with treasures and boons, which I hope might entice even the living through my hell gate. The forest/mountain/ocean is just because I like that kind of thing.
>>46914650
>Light Adventure
>Prestidigitation
>Apocalypse Me
Welp.
>>46914650
Apocalypse Me, Quest, and (since I maintain a relatively lonely state) I'd end up tossing a coin to decide whether or not I take Ancient Sword or Melancholic Joker.
Everything looks grammatically good, too.
>>46913730
He means become a supervillain and unleash growth hormones around the world.
>>46913620
Do it. Only you know how to.
>>46913499
>>46913504
>>46913534
>>46913543
>>46913547
>>46913571
>>46913572
It looks like a question that asked "what would be your ideal fetish CYOA be?" was deleted. Was it because of the picture or are the mods tetchy tonight?
Well, let's test, I'll post my feedback for the enchante/d/ ring CYOA from the other page:
>>46906628
So much effort put into the structure for some spank fodder. It's actually quite well constructed.
So despite it being just for wanking, I want to edit and improve it. There's no contact information, but a lot of people and groups mentioned at the bottom. Anybody know how to reach out to them?
If not I may just take it on myself.
For organization and copy editing:
The writer misuses the word consequent a couple times.
It should really mention the numbers for "I'm Feeling Lucky" in the key for drawbacks.
All the names of abilities should probably be in full title case, instead of just one initial capitalization.
In fetishes, there's a certain obviousness to what the CYOA author enjoyed.
The biggest issue: you get to avoid incest for free (or get points to engage it), but pay points to avoid the much more ethically treacherous pregnancy fetish? That's nuts.
I really want an "anonymous" power that upgrades the "will not affect your life at large" aspect of drawbacks by making it so any kind of public lewdness is disassociated with your general reputation. Vanilla doesn't cover it, I don't care whether or not people think, eg, walking around in pet play bondage is normal; I want to be able to put on clothes afterward and walk around without random people going, "Hey, it's that bondage hermaphrodite!" Obviously it'd be incompatible with the various "public attention" drawbacks. It seems like the author just did not go in for anonymous humiliation. For now I suppose I'll have to be satisfied with masks.
>>46915998
I'm also almost surprised there's nothing like a combination of Attraction+refined and Metamorphosis and/or Magical Realm that transforms the people for the "involves people" drawbacks into your fetish (like futa, monster girls/boys, etc).
There are a few that feel like they're missing something.
It seems like there should be something inbetween Masochism and Painless where pain is felt as pleasure, but normal sexual pleasure is also still possible.
It feels like Receiving Position should allow pleasure from genitals, only preventing orgasm from them.
Really surprised there's no "higher frequency" level up from Glory Hole, or a Public Use step up involving being in stockades or some kind of machine.
Flabberghasted that the only serious S&M options are buried in the Bondage Capture complex. No daily spanking to put alongside daily glory hole or milking options. No "sex partners compelled to choke you", nor "partners gain an over-sized-penetration fetish and the ability to increase the size of their dicks and/or dildos at will while with you"; no breathplay, nipple clamps, electrostimulation, etc except the aforementioned Capture complex one.
Not even under punishments!
In rule ideas and clarifications:
Full Random looks like it was supposed to have more to it, or that "either" should've been dropped.
Occupation and Local Idol should probably say "require at least one job drawback".
Some of the drawbacks have inconsistent time frames and it might be a better idea to make them all, eg, in terms of weeks.
It's actually a little unclear whether or not the Neko-Chan ears need to be worn half of all times (possibly tabulated weekly) or literally at least 12 hours every day (or 8 sleeping hours and 8 waking ones, or a combination thereof).
It should also somewhere mention: for reference, a week is 168 hours, half of a week is 84 hours.
>>46915357
Oh, then the metal manipulation is a far bit more useful than I thought. I figured it needed to be touching the crystal itself. But it sounds like you can manipulate anything mechanical with a touch so long as you can directly touch one of it's metal components. If that negates a need for fuel for vehicles that'd be pretty awesome.
Between that and the Lamia's teachings, you basically have a mash-up of Edward Elric and Magneto with a bunch of other odd abilities.
>>46914537
>we need something
I'm waiting for your cyoa <3
Still am
seriously, post it soon
>>46916014
For Nightmare, it could easily be read as They Come overriding the real world assault for avoiding them in sleep; which also makes Always feel like free points. It's easy to guess the intention was that avoiding the nightmares stacks real world attacks with the ones from They Come/They're Here.
Cross Dressing is a bit confusing for anybody with blurred gender identity. (Isn't it a standard of /d/ that we like being guys, but want to be The Little Girl for sexual purposes?)
At the very least, there should be something about the Interaction between Physical Change and Metamorphosis/Shapechanging/Futanari.
I'd go with "You may be a hermaphrodite, but must have the genitals and secondary sex characteristics that make you uncomfortable to exibit." I think I would make it into a blanket rule that if a drawback can't apply to you, part of the ring's power fades.
Fully Equipped should probably say something about what happens with the buttplug if you're abused. If they take it out, does it still count for your time?
Urethra Play sounds like it should have a * for consequences.
Under Bondage Sleep it seems unfair that there's no advantage at all to taking multiple subparts. Besides, toys could stack with either of the others.
Permanency should probably require at least one other disadvantage.
I use this in my build to make a ring with Permanency and No Breaks and a couple minor ones to get Invulnerable and Welfare Leech.
Then I make a second ring with about 50 points worth of advantages, including Unaging. I set it to take me back to 18, and when I get there I can take it off to take a vacation from sexual torture for a while, then put it back on to go back. Half on half off till the end of time. Metamorphosis to change my shape completely, and sleepless so I net get more time even though I take the whole bondage capture complex and bondage equipment complex and have to waste time with that.
8/10, some neat ideas, would fap again.
>>46916064
Oh, and I might make several more rings with just unaging and pro-choice on them, and fully random for drawbacks. Pick to be relocated to the city I'm in, mail them around to old friends.
>>46916108
tl;dr, 'cause I'm not reading four posts about how you whacked it to some text.
There is a highly small chance you added something that could be useful to future cyoas, but it's hidden.
>>46914650
Fire and Steel and Lamia Sorceress (mental magic then physical magic). The third choice is hard.
Apocalypse Me to be an unaging scrap ranging magic slinging adventurer I think.
>>46914650
Blinds were Fire & Steel, Demon Maid, and Prestidigitation. Went for "safe" picks because most of the options looked like they could end up being pretty dangerous. Got pretty lucky with the fairy at least, immortality AND a neat companion.
I'd keep Fire & Steel and go for Apocalypse Me. I don't think a full-body replacement is very appealing with this option, but the crystal should work with "power" armor and some other accessories as long as they are touching.
Third pick is a tough call. I could keep the Demon Maid, she would probably be better at playing scavenger than cleaning house, its her job to "tend my every need" after all. I could also take one of the more powerful magic options (NOT prestidigitation). Lamia Sorceress and Spacial Seer both have their ups and downs.
Think I'll choose the Lamia. From a practical standpoint she's probably the worst of the three options, but I love my snek even in dom form.
>>46917448
Physical magic first btw. Telekinesis is always useful, and I can turn things to metal for my fairy to melt, even "upgrading" common metals to things more suitable for a given purpose. In the post-apocalypse tech-heavy world I sort of expect at least some dangers will be mechanical in nature, making mental magic less reliable.
I usually don't go for the more troublesome options like Apocalypse Me, but it offers eternal youth (assuming I don't want to be a hunk of metal anytime soon) and be-the-girl, so it's worth it.
>>46915998
It's an old, pretty much dead CYOA. If you wanted to make a remake/update of it on your own I don't think anyone is going to stop you. I'd appreciate it myself actually.
Just be careful adding too many "light" drawback options because those points can really add up if someone is serious about making a practical build. For example, "collar" is already a no-brainier choice in most builds because it doesn't actually hinder you.
Oh, and if you do go over it, re-write that bit about stacking rings in the instructions. I knew what it wanted to be intuitively (you can't use the same drawbacks to pay for different perks at the same time), but trying to figure out what it was actually saying took like 20 minutes it was so roundabout.
To the guy in the last thread who said his favorite waifu CYOAs were Harem Anon's: I'm sure this entire community appreciates you for having to suffer this again.
>>46917807
>>46915998
Like >>46917727 said, I'm pretty sure no one would mind if you rewrote the thing. Heck, if I recall correctly, the author pretty much said that anyone's free to do so.
Regarding the stacking of drawbacks, it would be nice if you could do that, or simply pick a drawback multiple times for increased duration and/or intensity, depending on what makes sense for each drawback.
Also, here's what I believe to be the latest version of the CYOA.
>>46917826
Anyone have the page full of errata and shit to explain how half this works, especially with freaky february?
Anyway I think combining that with meshara is the best option. I remember that the immortality goes with her soul, but I can't remember if the virgin stipulation applied to her in male form. Either way there's nothing really objectionable from my end.
>>46917807
>>46917826
>>46917940
>>46917940
>>46917951
>>46917909
>>46914650
I want to use Apocalypse Me as background for an RP.
>>46917807
>>46917826
>"Well the only one I'd really get along with is Cheryl, so I guess I'll pick her"
>Only her and Meshara have quirks that aren't immediate dealbreakers.
That's some kind of luck right there.
>>46918465
Someday you'll have to admit you prefer men.
Why is it so important your waifu is a virgin? Doesn't that just make her socially awkward and immature especially when nearing her late twenties?
>>46918577
This is bait.
>>46918577
Because waifufags are virgins themselves and have no concept of what sex and losing virginity are really like.
>>46918573
Don't project your issues onto me.
>>46918577
>anon wants me to waifu another man's used cumdump
Nope. I'm not gay. Sorry.
>>46918711
>>46918617
Hey, you were right.
If a cyoa had waifus with spirit animals which had some influence on their behaviour and in some cases could assume hybridized forms, would that be furry?I'm worried because of the last few threads.Ex. One of them is a young russian girl with a big Mother Bear spirit animal. It makes her extra caring and motherly amongst other things but when she needs to protect you or your cubs, she'll assume an 8' tall incredibly strong half-Grizzly form which shows no mercy. Otherwise she just has cute bear ears and a tiny puffy tail.Is this pic too loli? I'm never really sure.
>>46918936
I'd like a waifu with a cuckoo bird spirit animal please.
>>46918588
everything in cyoa threads is either bait, imaginary girlfriends and fetishes, or shitflinging about said fetishes or imaginary girlfriends.
I've finally come to agree with that one grognard - there's hardly reason to make anything but waifu/fetish cyoas, it's all that gets responses plus they're easy to make.
>>46918936
It depends on the hybrid form. If you go full monstrous werebear rather than anthropomorphic bear it could be fine, on the other end if they go monster girl where they just have some animal traits tacked on while keeping their face and such it could also be fine. Just be careful and expect to be called a furry either way anyway. As for your last question, probably.
>>46918936
>would that be furry?
I don't think so, but some autists are probably going to reee.
>last spoiler
It's ok, just don't go any younger.
>>46918936
Lolis cannot have breasts.
>>46919045
They can, it's a phenomenon called oppai loli
>>46918936
It depends on the hybrid. If she gets animal ears and tail it's not, if she grows a snout it is.
>>46918936
You'd need to be mind-bogglingly autistic to consider what you're describing to be furry. So in other words, expect to start a giant shitstorm.
>>46918977
If there's a serious spirit animal request for either yourself or your waifu/husbando/transhusbaifu(?) I'm 100% open to them. That's the downside of trying to be inclusive... I'm not creative enough for it.
If it interests you, spirit bonds come in 3 forms. The worldly bond where your spirit animal shares your body with you, like Anya has. The spiritual bond where your spirit animal functions like a stand/guardian angel/spooky ghost. The heavenly bond where your spirit animal provides guidance from the heavens and reaches out to you in dreams. Only the worldly bond receives physical animal traits.
But I should be working on it, not talking about it...
>>46918977
I hope you realize that this would just manifest as you and your waifu having children in your normal, monogamous relationship, then her leaving your child at some other couple's house where it proceeds to murder their baby and take its place. It's more like a changeling than anything.
>>46919158
He's not being serious, he's trying to make a cheating joke.
>>46919158
Fox, cat, snake, owl, toad, and rat are a must, those are all traditional familiar animals. Ravens and dogs would also be nice.
>>46918936
There's no such thing as too loli.
>>46919204
>cheating joke
I looked up cuckoos and I guess you learn something new every day. Nasty, nasty little birds it seems. I can't see one of them having accomplished a great deed for the heavens so he won't be seeing a cuckoo spirit animal from me.
>>46919244
Yeah, they're essentially a kind of parasite in bird form. Just explaining to him why his 'joke' doesn't work from a biological perspective.
>>46919158
I'd like to see a moose. Not sure how different it'll end up being from a bear, but I saw a picture of an albino moose the other day and they're sort of in my head as awesome right now.
>>46919223
>owl
Had that covered. Used her for the bookish waifu. She has a spiritual bond with a small Looking Owl who loves to gather knOWLedge and terrible pun aside I find her terribly boring. I know some people like quiet, nerdy girls though. Scratch that. I'm remaking her. She's going to be an Indiana Jones style treasure hunter using her newfound power to hunt down old and forgotten tomes, and stop being a book NEET. Gonna write that down.
>>46919309
Anon, sedentary people need waifus too. Not all of us want to go to Africa and catch loa loa filariasis, malaria, or ebola.
>>46919309
I love that take on an owl-girl, actually. Much more fun than the standard sleepy NEET archetype. Might work better with a raven, though.
>>46919329
How sedentary? Are we talking professional gamer sedentary, 50' housewife sedentary or trophy wife socialite sedentary?
>>46919380
We're talking "I want to spend most of my life living in one house and most of my free time playing videogames and reading."
>>46919389
Do you expect that waifu to actually have a job and/or do housework? If not, does that make you the househusband or should that stuff be taken care of by outside forces?
I did have an idea for a very simple girl with an Original Dragon heavenly bond. She'd mostly be blessed with stupendous wealth, fame and authority. But she doesn't really care about those things. She just wants to go knitting with her mom on sunday, cuddle with you while watching movies and maybe get a few cute cats with silly names. Meanwhile she's getting elected for Senator, getting massive royalties for a children's book she doodled when she was 5 and the President just befriended her on facebook. But she doesn't care.That's what makes her perfect to bond with the Original Dragon cause a more ambitious person could do serious damage with it.
>>46919539
It's up to you, really. Some people would prefer the sedentary waifu not work, some would prefer they do. I don't have an opinion.
Also those spoilers sound interesting. Does drawing too much power from the familiar damage them?
>>46919564
The worldly bond is all about connecting on the deepest physical level and is riddled with passive stat boosts. The spiritual bond is a balance between connecting with one another and providing guidance, and provides the more active, supernatural powers. The heavenly bond is all about the guidance, where your spirit animal functions as a powerful, benevolent heavenly presence, but is not a part of your daily life... it provides mostly powerful boosts to your daily life.
The strength of your bond is irrelevant to the worldly because you are as one, hence it's always at 100%. For the spiritual it is relevant in that your spirit animal is with you 24/7, fuels your powers and has its own values and opinions. The heavenly bond is theoretically the strongest since your spirit animal can affect reality most from within the heavens but you are 2 completely seperate beings and their opinion of you does affect how much they're willing to help.
In her case the Original Dragon is extremely self-centered and prideful and cares only for her in the sense that it would be shameful to be bonded to a weak, homeless human girl. That's why it showers her in gifts with zero regard for what she does. The Original Dragon is not the norm, it's the exception to the rule and far more powerful than any other spirit animal.
Does that make sense?
>>46919765
Yes, but what do you mean 'bonded at a physical level'? Are they always stuck in hybrid form?
>>46919882
Small physical traits mostly. Think ears, tails, etc. Hybrid form is turning that up to 11 and going all 8' tall momma werebear on some fella's sorry ass for example.Going to actually continue working on it now. I hope it'll all be clearer once it's finished.
>>46916016
Fuel isn't required, but it makes it much easier. You could cause gasoline to flow into a car's engine & make it drive at normal speeds or you could make the wheels rotate at a much slower rate to get it rolling. In the event that someone else is driving the car you try to control, you'll have mixed results in whether your power or their influence on the controls is more potent. In all likelihood, such would cause a crash.
>>46914650
How did you make those pretty boxes for your text, Beri?
I'm so very tired of seeing my text all sprawled out on the background with nothing between them, like some cheap prostitute without a bed who insists the floor is good enough. I guess that makes me the pimp.
>>46920129
These particular boxes were made as such:
1) Draw thin, black rectangle.
2) Fill it in with a beige sort of color
3) Throw in 2 (very light & not fully opaque) black gradients to make it less stagnant.
The key is throwing in minor gradients. Be careful, though. If it is too intense, it becomes hard to read. If it isn't intense enough, it will go unnoticed & accomplish nothing but a larger file size. I think the last time I used gradient-colored text boxes was Waifu Blues.
If you're using sophisticated enough software, you can also add a drop shadow or something to the text boxes to make them look nicer.
>>46919158
>husbando
>trans
dropped
>>46920435
added
Is there a way to turn around the whole waifu concept, meaning strong emphasis on the fact that you were picked as a girl's husbando, and make it work?
>>46920816
At Valentines, two people released their own take on the concept of becoming the waifu. Both were good CYOAs, so you might want to look at those starting off.
>>46920816
Nope. Waifus are supposed to be perfect. Anon is very far from perfect.
See >>46919389
Why in the world would any person, sane or no, want to date a fat NEET if they could get literally anyone? Even if, God forbid, she was attracted to NEETs, why wouldn't she want a hot, rich NEET?
>>46920862
>Anon chooses the post talking about wanting to live a normal life and have hobbies like reading to whine about.
I never mentioned being a NEET in those posts, and that post is meant to be to have a waifu appealing to sedentary people. Since when has it been a great sin for someone to have mundane hobbies that don't involve travel and parties (newsflash anon: Those dry up after college)? You'd think if you want to whine about your peers and fuel your own insecurity and superiority complex, you'd complain about virgins or something like you do most of the time.
In short: Liking to read and owning a house doesn't make you a NEET, what the fuck is wrong with you?
>>46920862
She's an extraterrestrial from a culture where what we consider ugly is considered attractive and vice-versa. So from her perspective, she's batting way out of her league.
>>46920913
Sounds like a funny concept. Still, as far as that anon's post goes, see >>46920900 . I think most people here are college students regardless, who can't be NEETs by definition.
>>46920913
That reminds me of an episode of pic related. There was a village of ugly people. In this village, there was one handsome guy who (due to the weird village) thought he was hideous. In the end, I think he fell down a cliff and got so disfigured that he was "beautiful".
>>46920816
You meet a disgruntled elderly woman who is literally pulling out her hair. You approach her, concerned she might be in trouble or something.
"Trouble? TROUBLE?! Oh no, everything is JUST FINE! I mean which fairy godmother doesn't have a pile of perfect men to hand out, HAHAHA? I sure do! HAHAHAHA, oh fuck me."
You get her to calm down and she explains that she is in fact a fairy godmother but that for some reason every request she gets from her godchildren involves a prince charming in some way. Obviously she's not made out of prince charmings but do they care? No.
She then gets a brilliant idea: you could be a prince charming! You just have to promise her to do your best and she'll give you a few small boons to help you in your chosen quest.
She proceeds to show you a list with pending requests from her godchildren. You are to pick one and do your best to solve whatever the fuck she needed you for, winning her heart in the process.
Something like that?So you still pick a waifu but you're supposed to improve her life and there is no instalove although odds are she will fall in love with you if you somehow become her prince charming. The boons would be small and helpful, and you'll have to rely on your own skills mostly.
>>46921101
>you'll have to rely on your own skills mostly
So everyone fails automatically.
>>46920913
that's just dumb, anon.
>>46921101
>You just have to promise her to do your best and she'll give you a few small boons to help you in your chosen quest.
see, how I read anon's request, it was "you are you, exactly as you are, nothing happens to you, but for [insert reason] these hot chicks all want to fuck you, and are fighting for your dick"
>>46921185
No worse than any other waifu premise.
>>46921253
It's exactly like every other waifu cyoa.
He wanted to do the opposite.
I don't see how it's feasible. He couldn't write why she was attracted to you, since anon isn't one person.
>>46914650
My blind picks were:
>Lamia Sorceress
Nice! Snake waifu and cool magic!
>Demon Maid
Aww. Cute, but I don't really have much of a sue for it...
>Light Adventure
I am 200% okay with this.
Non-blind picks:
>Apocalypse Me
With Light Adventure, it'll actually be fun! I've always wanted adventure without the whole starving-to-death-or-getting-shot thing. So basically, adventure without the hard work part.
>Lamia Sorceress
I mean, the magic is very useful, and she's really hot.
>Light Adventure
See "Apocalypse Me."
Huh. Two of my blind picks ended up being my non-blind picks as well. I don't think that's happened before.
>>46921298
The best thing I could come up with in three minutes is
>you're teleported to a different world
>in front of you are X giddy girls, jumping up and down in excitement screaming "the spell worked"
>they all want yo dick, pick one
Again, he can't say why they want yo dick, since we're not one person.
It's why harem animes / visual novels usually have the main character have zero personality beyond being nice and be totally unremarkable at anything else.
>>46921298
It's different in that they're going for you because they're intensely physically attracted to you. It's a silly premise, but they're still the ones going "hey, this is what I want!"
Anyway, the easiest way to do it is to make each kind of girl express an interest in a certain type of guy, and give anon some method of customizing himself. So, the other "be her husbando" CYOAs, but with less genderbending.
I have a few moments so I'm going to leave a poll here for you guys. The Traveller game is going to take a while, so we're going to do it in stages, first with a pre-game to establish systems and lay out an introductory story, then the initial layout for the Game, and from there the full game as monstrous as it may become.
So, what should be the first story? What should be the first goal?
> http://www.strawpoll.me/10054741
>>46921101
I like it, but I'd rather be her princess charming.
>>46913304
>Type: Manipulator
>World: Monster Apocalypse
>Form: Unearthly Charm, Pillar of Hope, Flight, Shapeshifter,
>God Powers: Mass Reanimate, Tentacles, Pacify, Golemspark
>Empowerment: Worship, Monuments, Underworld
>Prophets: Hero, Courtesan
>Divine Gifts: Beauty, Mutation, Resilience, Immortality
>Dominion: Domain Warp, Centre of Magic, Fauna Adaptation, Hellgate
>Minions: Succubi (Humanoid, Skill: Attraction, Skill: Flight, Skill: Spawner, Form: Transformation, Skill: Healer, Affinity: Death, Skill: Toughness, Skill: Perpetual)
>Underworld: Test of Worthiness
>Underworld Choices: Organic, Crystals, Floating Islands, Manifest Deity, Weather Mastery, Gladiatiors, Realm Guardians, Changer of Forms, Citadel
Time to go be the Monster Lord from Monstergirl Encyclopedia! Save the world by corrupting the monsters destroying society into qt3.14 mamono waifus for the humans, and then corrupt the human women into more manono waifus too, while I'm at it.
>>46921441
>they're intensely physically attracted to you.
I'm not fat, so saying "they're attracted to your belly!" would exclude me. If you make a waifu cyoa where half of them are attracted to fatties and half of them are attracted to normal people, you'll only cause a shitstorm when the "best waifu" isn't attracted to anon.
>customizing himself
He still asked if it was possible to make a waifu cyoa where they wanted you, not who you could be.
>>46921467
Giving up on giving people any choice I see.
>>46914650
So it didn't seem like there were many errors. Here's version 2.
>>46921476
you could take his idea and make it into a cyoa, and include a genderbend option?>telling anon to make a cyoa
kek I know.
>>46921554
No, this is just the Alpha, text is the optimal route for choice, I just need somewhere to begin and a slightly more 'traditional' story to begin work is ideal.
>>46921552
You just need to be vague about it. Explain the premise, then don't really say how anon is ugly, let them interpret it.
>>46921586
>spoiler
Maybe I should, don't expect it anytime soon though.
>>46921592
I'm predicting nothing else will manifest beyond this irrelevant railroad.
>>46918465
What's the problem with Heather? Why are you faggots so concerned about her?
>>46921688
>anon actually makes the cyoa he wants to see
I must be dead, but I'm seeing neither flames nor a heavenly gate.
>>46921780
Might be theexpensive treatments and greatly reduced lifespan.
>>46921757
> Railroad
Kek.
>>46921795
Do you have any suggestions for it? It seems like it would end up pretty similar to waifu blues, except with waifus instead of husbandos.
>>46921840
Change the premise of expecting us to accomplish anything with our 'skills'. Nobody here is a prince charming, even if they think they're better than the rest of us, and nobody cares how well you work as a cashier or how good you are at Dark Souls. Neither will make you anyone's 'prince charming'.
>>46921840
write what you imagine it'll be.
I want you to make the cyoa *you* want, not what *I* might want.
>>46917826
I don't know, I don't know.
[spoilers]
Okay, so Roberta's downside is vaguely bad. Beatrice sex addiction is troubling but she's superhuman, Dae Eung-Yeong is weird. I'd rather get raped than get Samatha. Tabitha becomes a monster. Heather Kisling has 3% reduced lifespan and a loving father. Meshara is actually troubling because, y'know, immortality and I don't want to leave someone alone like that, and Cheryl has a dick.
They're not good but they're not that bad either. Maybe ifpeople weren't such normalfags
>>46921903
How would you like it to be changed?
>>46921907
I have shit imagination, I need some inspiration develop ideas from.
>>46922024
You're going to have to let people buy skills of some stripe, else it's doomed.
>>46917826
I still want to choose Roberta, but I can't help but fell like I'd have my neck snapped within the first week.
>>46922024
I can't help you if you have zero ideas. I might as well do it myself if that's the case.
I dunno, you could have a shy waifu who needs help getting better at public speakingJust know that girl would cause a shitstorm, like that one girl from the halfdragon cyoa.
Anon's dick gets hard at frail girls, not frail girls who become confident
>>46922118
My dick gets hard at girls that become dominant, does that count?
>>46922118
You mean Ferrean's thing? I don't know what you mean, the only girl I know of that people were unhappy with there was the girl who started out as a nympho loli and got revealed to be mind controlled to be like that and people were upset that the only moral way to handle it was to let her become a chaste adult. Which isn't really the same thing. So who do you mean?
>>46922195
what I saw was a bunch of REEing over a girl who needed personal development.
That's what usually happens when you grow up.
>>46922044
Sure.
>>46922118
I do have some ideas, but it never hurts to have more, even if I might not use all of them.
>>46922237
Didn't have anything to do with confidence, the girl stayed confident throughout. The gist was, in the original version of the CYOA you just had a dragon who looked young and was a nympho. The update made it so an evil witch made her like that and she hated it and was mind controlled into being in this situation, and you have to help her become someone else completely different or you're horribly evil. She wasn't actually growing up or becoming more confident and she was never frail.
I'm still not sure why Ferrean thought people who liked the original Ira would be okay wit this.
>>46921565
So it was mentioned earlier that breakthrough is an immortality option? It actually didn't occur to me that the "Enhancements" would go that far just from reading this, I just thought they'd give you infinite sexual stamina and that's it.
So... how far do these "enhancements" actually go? If immortality is on the table, how powerful are they? I wonder/worry that they might start to change you to be more like them "Hey, if we add tentacles anon can screw more of us at once" sort of changes.
Either way, once you've tamed them, Prestidigitation seems like a pretty good choice, you can make the phantoms appear human, (And yourself if they CAN mutate you)
And Light Adventure might be a good limiting factor for breakthrough. That would keep them from going into full yandere territory (Like say... chaining you in a basement so you can't leave them or murdering your boss so you have more time for them kind of shit) and probably making them bursting out of mirrors more of an "slightly inconvenient event, frequently with comedic timing" sort of deal.
So at that point, the combined usefulness of that combo is pretty much dependent on how powerful the phantoms are and just what they're capable of when you get to the point where they "do your bidding" I'd imagine if nothing else, it's probably about on par with the Demon Maid for sheer utility, but in elderich yandere flavor instead of demonic tsundere flavor.
>>46922024
>How would you like it to be changed?
I urge you not to do this. If your final product doesn't include their 'suggestion', or you changed their 'suggestion' in any way, you're in for some whining.
>>46922364
What a vague suggestion to complain about.
Mild updates from last night. Tried to clarify Fran's story a little. Small misc updates to a few of the other descriptions. I know I need to work on my writing. May eventually get to it.
>>46922270
>you're horribly evil
you are if you could cure a legitimately nymphomaniac girl of her life wrecking mental/physical disease
>>46922486
Yes, congratulations. That's the point. Originally there was nothing suggested you could cure her, and that was just how she is. Now that you can, you have to cure her, you have to - and lose the original character you picked in the first place.
>>46918936
Will there be a girl with a spiritcock?
>>46922486
That, and because she plain does not want it. The update made it so everything about who she is, is a horrible curse that she does not want and is actively seeking to undo. The whole thing is basically telling you to change Ira into someone completely different or you're a monster.
It's especially dumb when the person who sets you up with her wants you to date her, but if you're dating Ira, you're basically asked to make her another person. That you don't know or have any interest in. So it's something of a false choice and a guilt trip and it seems like Ferrean had no idea that people would dislike the choice.
>>46922486
I guess that means I should avoid psychological work, then. If I ever learned how to cure a nymph, I'd be horribly evil.Back to 1st grade english classes with you
>>46922442
Why is genetically modifying a clone supposed to be a benefit? Why is a clone a benefit?
Any news on this one? The setup looks well done and I love cyoas with stats, so here is hoping the author hasn't fallen off the face of the earth.
>>46922520
you picked an underaged girl with a brain defect.
You are a monster.
>>46922442
>He tried to make Betty more likeable.
Her crime is a dealbreaker, straight up. You can't do anything to her as a person to make anyone pick her who wasn't already because of how disgusting what she did is.
>>46922628
Some people want that, as a kind of "immortality" thing? I mean, in the same way that having kids and passing on your genes is a immortality thing.
Theres the whole scientific progress thing. Its good for humanity as a whole if you dont think its amoral.
Or maybe youre a weird fuck and want to fuck yourself (in 18 years). I aint judging.
>>46922677
Someone said she didn't really have any benefits last thread. So I just threw it in. If any of the crimes are a dealbreaker I dont expect any benefits to override that. Its cool.
You know someone in their hearts picked her. Most people who frequent 4chan picks up a few weird fetishes.
>>46922691
It's not immortality, though. Look, even the people who don't care about continuity aren't going to consider a clone without memories to be them. And if it's like having kids, why not just have a kid? Why a clone?
Scientific progress that doesn't benefit you at all.
>>46922676
No, I picked a dragon with a voracious sexual appetite. Big difference.
>>46922725
I didn't see anyone pick her. Her fetish isn't 'weird'. It's morally repulsive. You should learn your lesson from Betty and Ella, the fact that nobody liked them and they got shit on the most should show you that sex crimes do not work, nor do zoophiles and child rapists.
>>46922728
No, I agree with you. But you know the moment real cloning comes out irl, there are going to be people who are like look I just want to be cloned and raise myself instead of having a kid. Thats for them.
Plus technically having clone technology advances a lot of medical and scientific research. It'll be a good boost. Maybe you'll get a organ or something out of it.
>>46922676
She was always an adult. In the original version, she was an adult that happened to look small. That's all. In the new version she is STILL an adult, just one cursed to look small.
>>46922661
It was posted a day ago. Give the author time before pecking at them like a ravenous mallard.
>>46922661
>Posted literally two days ago
>Why isn't it done yet?!
>>46922757
Her being the only girl with remotely nerdy interests doesn't help if her benefit is meant to be that niche, especially when her conditions are the most severe for you.
Can you guys read this?
I'd rather not have to start all over midway when it turns out you can't.
>>46922804
I can read it, but it's a bit cramped in the intro.
>>46922804
Needs a bit more contrast
>>46922796
Really? I didnt think her conditions were that severe. I mean, having a kid in the house sure. But she makes enough money to provide for all of the kids needs. Plus you get to date someone who's going to be super famous and considered a genius in like a decade.
I mean none of the benefits are really that great. They weren't meant to be great. They're meant to be like normalish benefits you could get irl from dating someone.
>>46922804
If you have to even ask, that alone is a signal for an immediate redo,
I CAN read it, without too much difficulty, but it's rather uncomfortable to look at. Desaturating and darkening those boxes would probably help. It's not like you have a background that needs to be seen well.
>>46922842
Raising a child is hell. She's skipping out on diapers, but it's still pure suffering. It's a lot harder on you than anyone else is.
Also do you really expect us to derive pleasure from dating someone just because they're 'rich and famous'?
>>46921806
This so delightfully autistic.
>What's the problem with Heather? What do you mean, what's the problem with Heather? Being her boyfriend costs a lot of money! What's that about her being mentally a traumatized little kid? Who gives a shit about that, it's my money, man!
>>46921949
>I'd rather get raped than get Samatha
You guys do understand that Samantha is basically a female Yourselves, just with the willpower to keep clean, right?
>>46922862
She can probably hire a full time help or something. But I do see the point you're making. I mean, you don't have to choose her or anything. To each their own. I thought she was pretty nifty personally.
As far as dating someone because they're rich and famous, its more of a perk. Granted, there are plenty of people who would totally date someone for being rich and famous.
>>46922904
Less to do with not caring about that, more to do with not remembering the details and not noticing them with the cursory glance I took to jog my memory.
>>46922842
I'd date her. She sounds pretty fantastic to me, and I'd love to have a genetically modified wunderkind daughteru.
>>46922804
excited for this
>>46922947
Why?
>>46922904
To be fair, her dad won't let you do anything to her until she's grown up mentally, so it's more of a waiting game there and shell eventually think like an adult.
>>46922944
>Clone
>Daughter
Not unless you're already a woman.
>>46922804
>posting a wip
Have you learned nothing?
>>46922804
Kinda hurts my eyes
>>46922973
As if an overprotective dad's ever stopped someone. Especially when the daughter in question is horny, stupid and naive.
>>46922984
Other anon probably ment the one that already exists in the CYOA's setting.
>>46922968
looks cool and I like animals :)
>>46922973
I'd be more concerned about possible agents of the Human Ranch coming over to shoot you in the head for exposing their operation than about Dr. Kisling telling you not to milk his daughter.
>>46922804
>nicely cropped image
>squished
why
for fucks sake
its like putting in a ton of effort into making a meal and then smearing it with shit before serving
>>46917807
>>46917826
>cyoa in a magical setting
>you remain human
Hahaha, into the trash it goes!You expect me to live a normal life while knowing with 100% certainty that the supernatural exists, I am not a part of it and I might as well be getting mindraped daily because I'm ultimately a worthless meatbag in a setting where others have magic? That's like getting cucked by the universe.
>>46922984
Did you miss the part where it said genetic modification? His clone can be a woman if he wants it to.
>>46922804
Yes, but not easily
>>46923018
You know you have to be 18 to browse 4chan, right?
>>46923037
You try finding decent cropped images of animal art. I'm pretty sure that alone took 80% of the time it took to do this tiny thing and they're not even all that good.
>>46923047
All of the waifus are humans.
>>46923102
>finding
>>>>>>>>>>finding
what the fuck
>>46923047
You expect any author to care for your opinion?
No genuinely, what do you think you're gaining from being a little bitch?
>>46923047
Well, that's a new type of pathetic attitude towards CYOAs. I'd place it somewhere above "I'm not playing unless I can be the little girl", but below "I'm not playing if there are hard parts".
>>46923119
Have you ever read Don Quixote?
There's this part where he tries help a servant by giving his boss an earful, making him promise to better the living situation of his servants, etc. Then he rides away on his trusty horse, leaving the servant alone with his humiliated and insulted boss. What do you think happens next? ...
That's how I experience that kind of cyoa. Some witch or god might have given me a waifu or even transported me to some great setting but at the cost of being exposed to a world in which I'm just an ordinary human. What happens after she leaves? What assures me I won't just get beaten up by the next witch or monster that comes along?
She's throwing me before the wolves or at the very least telling my poor, ignorant, defenseless self all about them. That is worthy of an existential crisis. The waifu is sweet though.
>>46921565
Fire & Steel
Spacial Seer
Prestidigitation
Prestidigitation can cover for all of Fire and Steel's downsides, and Spacial Seer is just a great power which makes any sudden death extremely unlikely.
>>46923149
I stupidly assumed looking for precropped images would be easier. Now I'm just being stubborn about it.
Thanks for reminding me that it's not that hard though. I used to do it myself, no idea what possessed me today.
>>46923102
>>46923278
here, because you apparently don't understand a concept as mind numbingly simple as this without a visual aid
>Now I'm just being stubborn about it.
and nothing of value was lost i guess
>>46923227
>I'm not playing unless I can be the little girl
Fucking hell, you just had to remind me of those freaks.
>>46923097
>liking animals means you're a kid
Everyone likes animals you fucking autist.
>>46923322
I like them medium rare.
>>46923290
You want her to have a horse chin?
>>46923357
i want you to fuck of with image squishing
>>46923264
I tried that myself, Beri Said the one sense the illusions can't trick is touch, so you can't use Prestidigitation to get that back. Though if you want it to hide your metal body and look like a normal human it does cover that drawback.
If the loss of pleasure/pain is what's getting you down, the Lamia might actually cover that one. Beri said she's got a spell that can mimic a sensation, the example was "a feather tickling your nose" but that somewhat implies you can magic yourself an orgasm, a dunk/high state or the sensations of pain if you just wanted to feel things.
>>46923394
>Beri Said
Then why didn't he put it into the CYOA?
>>46923394
Why do you lose physical sensation with Fire & Steel anyway? Properly advanced technology can fully emulate physical sensations. Is it just a downside for the sake of having a downside?
