TS: I can't really believe your story Anon, buildings with over a 100 levels? Flying boats bigger than Ponyville? And yet there's no magic in your world? Please.
>Growing tired of Twilight's berating, you go out into the world to prove her wrong.
That's the prompt that started it all. So what is thread about? It's about Anon bring human science and inventions to Equestria and a disbelieving Twilight.
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>>27083295
New thread smell
>>27083295
HIPS
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>>27083295
its been over 3 months since WiK's last update
what happened?
>>27083790
He was in the last thread. He isn't kill.
>>27083790
He had two updates in the previous thread, with the last one being two days ago. Have you only been reading the pastebin? If so you you should know he cut the story the story into two parts because it was getting so long pastebin was having technical problems. He says so at the top of the pastebin and even links to it there.
>>27068738
Truth be told he is something of a Mary Sue. I tried to temper this by giving him a relatively humble beginning and several defeats, but in the end the nature of this story demanded that he be OP. I didn't write this story thinking that his perspective would be the main draw, it's more about how the ponies see this strange otherworldly being. They don't know his motives, objectives, or abilities. He's a massive unknown who's mere existence destroys their world view. How well I got that across is unclear to me, you'd have to ask the readers.
>>27083790
Looking at my documents, I posted update 12 3 months ago tomorrow. I'm now posting update 41. Not sure where you've been, but I've been right here.
>You are Anonymous.
>You are confused.
>You’ve been told by two sources that the strange power of this world stopped working for a while.
>And indeed you’ve even observed it failing en masse with your satellite network.
>Yet the readings at your dig site did not drop, rather they spiked.
>This must mean something.
>Something important.
>You really should maybe stop the dig until you know what’s going on.
>A wave of crushing sorrow flows over you.
>Followed by a surge of orgasmic bliss, along with the thought of digging.
>Why aren’t you digging?
>You can’t remember.
>And though there are digital recordings you could refer to you honestly can’t be bothered to check them.
>You need to dig.
>You are Anonymous.
>The other one.
>The unfeeling one.
>Something is crazy wrong here.
>Your primary self is becoming more and more obsessed with the dig.
>And the thought patterns coming from the other you thought patterns are erratic at best.
>All autodoc diagnostics suggest that both of you are in excellent health.
“Weren’t we about to stop the dig?”
>Your shared consciousness feeds you extreme disgust at the notion.
>No thoughts are offered as a reply, just feelings.
>Yeah. You’re stopping the dig.
>Except that your orders are being overridden.
>>27084236
>You test your network access by ordering the manufacture of a cube up in your first orbital foundry.
>It’s produced in an instant.
>Yet when you try to cut power from the drill?
[ERROR 5: ACCESS DENIED]
>You’re hit by sadness and even pain after the attempt.
>There’s no room for doubt.
>Something is wrong here.
>But the autodoc says everything’s fine.
>You have two choices.
>You could assume all is well and enjoy the mind numbing bliss that occasionally comes your way.
>Or you could not be an idiot, shut down the connection between the two of you, and try to figure out what’s going on.
>Severing that connection is not easy.
>You need to remind yourself at every step that it is a necessary action.
>And when it’s gone…
>Nothingness.
>There’s no hope, no joy, no pleasure.
>But there’s also no despair, no sorrow, no pain.
>You briefly consider abandoning your task now that there’s nothing to drive you.
>Now that you have no desires of your own.
>But you still have your duty.
>Your obligations.
>You WILL protect your other half.
>With or without your- his help.
>It’s strange to think of the two of you as separate.
>You’ve been one for your entire life.
>Step one is to figure out what’s wrong.
>If the autodoc says nothing, it means it’s something you don’t understand well.
>It doesn’t take an organic supercomputer hybrid to figure this one out.
>You contact the one known as lizard bro.
>No answer.
>He must be busy.
>You contact the one known as black horse.
>You are Luna.
>You are alone.
>Your Bolts went to speak with their loved ones.
>To let them know they’re well.
>The medical staff can scarcely believe that they’re alive.
>Under ordinary circumstances you’re sure they’d have been kept for observation.
>But the hospital is already totally overwhelmed with injured.
>The strange magical failure the other day had a great many consequences.
>There’s rioting, looting, and general panic.
>>27084242
>Now that you have the bolts off of your mind, it’s high time you resolved this issue.
>The visitor assured you he had no part in it, and you tend to believe him.
>Were the blunt honesty from before not enough, you might believe him on the simple fact that he’s yet to use magic in any manner.
>You need to address the nation to calm them.
>But you still cannot be seen.
>Your sister is in no condition to do a public address either.
>So you must rely on Sparkle to deliver the speech.
>Yes. The hypochondriac will surely calm the masses.
>Perhaps you should try and get ahold of Cadance…
>The rectangle just made a chime.
>You retrieve it.
>“Many manuscripts make mention of magical mental manipulation. What details can you provide?”
“Thank you so much! I am in your debt, the wounded ponies seem to have recovered.”
>”Time is a factor.”
>Mental manipulation, and time is a factor?
>Meaning that it’s happening now!
“Manipulation or domination?”
>”Explain the difference.”
“Manipulation involves one subtly altering the underlying framework of the mind. You can suppress certain memories, change general demeanor, and suppress or encourage certain emotions. You can make one love their bitter enemy, hate their closest friend, and remember a false history. It doesn’t allow one to control specific details of behaviour, just general patterns.”
>”Who can do it?”
“Short term nearly any unicorn who knew the spell. It is of course illegal and uncommon information, but every now and then somepony figures it out. Long term perhaps a half dozen ponies and Discord. It is difficult to cast and requires a constant expenditure of energy so great skill and endurance are needed. Even the most powerful of magi would end the spell when it was no longer needed.”
>”Discord? I thought he was a legend.”
>Seriously?
>This being fought Discord several times and still thinks him just a legend?
>>27084252
…
>He has no idea what he’s been fighting.
>He doesn’t realise that the creature he cut in half is one of the most dangerous beings in the world.
>”We can discuss that later. Back to the issue, what about domination?”
“Domination is a spell that allows total control of emotion and the ability to implant or remove ideas and memories. This effectively allows perfect control over the victim’s actions. Since it is involved in more direct manipulations instead of general changes it requires constant focus to maintain.”
>”Who can do it?”
>Pfft.
>Basically nobody.
>Last instance you can think of is…
“A group of a few thousand unicorns performing a complex ritual.”
>”And how might one stop said ritual?”
“By finding the ones casting it and interrupting their casting. It should be easy to find these individuals as they must be able to see their target to make any changes.”
>”Why would somebody wish to dominate me to make me excavate a giant ball?”
>That question raises so many of your own.
>If he’s being dominated, how is he able to ask you about it?
>Who would be able to execute such a feat?
>You ask the last question first.
“Giant ball?”
>”A massive orb near the heart of the planet.”
“What does it look like?”
>”I’ve only seen a small portion of its surface, so it may bear features I’ll not list. It seems to be a perfect indestructible sphere, about two hundred meters in diameter. It’s surrounded by a crazy strong magical field. Also, the magic around it got stronger when you said yours stopped working.”
>Heh.
>That almost sounds like-
>No way.
>Oh HELL NO!
>You can’t think of the words to begin to describe how bad that is!
>You might be wrong.
>But there’s no way you’re taking this chance.
“Don’t touch it, don’t get near it, and most certainly DO NOT dig it up!”
>You wait for the display to clear, to let you know that the message has been received.
>>27084258
>Several seconds pass without the otherwise nearly instantaneous process occurring.
>Until finally…
[NO SIGNAL]
>You’re not sure what response you were hoping for, but it certainly wasn’t that.
>You are Spike.
>You haven’t heard the bad news.
>As far as you’re aware, Celestia is still the biggest problem.
>That’s why you’re walking along the edge of the mountain range, with a particularly heavy backpack in tow.
>”Y’all are sure you don’t want me to carry that for ya?”
“Yes, Applejack. I’m doing this myself.”
>”Then why in tarnation are we here?”
“I want witnesses.”
>”Shouldn’t we have brought Twilight as a backup plan?”
“Then everypony would just assume she did it.”
>”But what are you going to DO?”
>Thank you, Rainbow.
“I was hoping somepony would eventually ask that question. See, there are ways to interfere with unicorn magic. Rarity, would you mind? I wish to demonstrate.”
>”Oh, yes! Of course!”
>”You sure? There won’t be any lasting effects, but I have it on good authority that it isn’t pleasant.”
>Her horn starts to glow regardless of your warning.
>She’s been behaving differently since your outburst.
>So eager to please.
>Maybe she feels guilty?
>No matter, you don’t care what they think of you right now.
>After all they’ll think of you very differently soon enough.
>Rarity’s horn starts to glow.
>You reach into your bag and grab a fistfull of dust.
>Without waiting to see what she’s picking up, you hurl it in her face.
>There’s a bright flash of light and a complete absence of any magical aura.
>Rarity nearly falls over, but Applejack props her up.
“Arcane dust. It’s way more conductive to magic than air is, so the energy she was building up diffused.”
>”Oh my goodness, Rarity are you okay?”
>”Quite alright Fluttershy. Just a tad disoriented dizzy, nothing to worry about.
>>27084267
>”THAT’S your plan? Spike, if you’re going after CELESTIA of all ponies what makes you think you can get close enough to throw stuff at her?”
>Thank you again Rainbow.
“Yes. That’s the trick isn’t it. For months she’s been dealing with the very same problem, always unable to get close enough to her target to do anything.”
>You drop your backpack.
>You open it up.
“See, HER enemy had found a way to throw tiny chunks of metal crazy fast and crazy far. Too far for most spells to reach.”
>You pull out your device.
>It wasn’t easy to make.
>collecting scrap metal, welding it with your dragonfire, filing off the unwanted bits…
>Designing it was the easy part.
>”It’s a big tube with a handle.”
“Pretty much, Applejack. Pretty much.”
>”IT BEGINS!”
>You’re not sure what Pinkie’s freaking out about.
>You grip the two handles on the barrel, letting your device hang below.
>You slant it up, aiming into the mountain range.
>You spit a bit of fire onto the back.
>The heat causes the black powder to burn.
>A loud blast rings out and you nearly lose your footing.
>Moments later there’s a small explosion up on the mountainside.
>You lower your claw cannon.
“It’s pretty much just a smaller cannon. Not useful for most things since it’s way too imprecise and takes way too long to load.”
>You start pouring powder into the barrel.
>Then you start tamping it with a straight rod of iron.
“I wanted to go with a larger blast, but Twilight says she’s in a cave. Don’t wanna risk a cave in.”
>”So, this is your entire plan? You know she’s still strong, right? Like, crazy strong?
“How are you doing, Rarity?”
>”Just… give me a moment, please.”
“That good enough for ya, Dash?”
>”No! You’re not going in there alone, I’m coming with.”
“But Twilight said it’ll be too hot. I should be fine because, you know, DRAGON, but what about you?”
>>27084276
>”Yeah… I don’t expect that to be a problem. Doesn’t look too hot to me.”
>You’re confused.
>She can apparently see it.
>”Yeah. Look up at the cave. Do you see it glowing?”
“Is that the right cave?”
>”Pinkie?”
>Pinkie removes her paper hat, which you do not recall seeing before.
>She unfolds it.
>”Yup!”
“Well, what are we waiting for?”
>You begin your scramble to the entrance.
>”This is a really bad idea!”
“I know, Dash. I know.”
>Rainbow, Pinkie, and Applejack follow you up.
>Fluttershy stays with the still dazed Rarity.
>You signal for everypony to be quiet.
>You grip your cannon tight as you walk through the entrance.
>You have your good eye zoom in.
>You don’t like what you see.
>You put down your cannon.
>You step outside.
“We’re going to need a medic! Dash, get Twilight here yesterday! Rarity, do you know ANY first aid magic? Pinkie, PLEASE tell me there are at least some bandages in your mane!
>You are Twilight Sparkle.
>You came as fast as you could.
>And you gave Princess Celestia the best stasis spell you could manage.
>Not as good as what Luna’s ponies got, but you’re alone on this one.
>Hopefully it’ll be enough to get her where she needs to go.
>You sit down, hard, exhausted from the round trip to the cavern.
>You chastise yourself for thinking of your discomfort.
>Celestia was on fire.
>She’s being shipped off to Canterlot hospital.
>Hopefully they’ll give it a serious try.
>She looks pretty dead.
>But you have to hold out hope.
>And if anypony can survive what happened, it’s Celestia.
>But recovery is another matter.
>It was quite striking.
>Charred blood and flesh cover the walls of the cavern.
>Chunks of burnt bone litter the ground, and when you arrived, she was without her horn.
>From what you can tell, she had a moment of clarity when magic stopped working, and used it to bash her own head against the wall until her horn broke.
>>27084283
>Considering the other things that were happening at the time, you’re frankly amazed that she even thought of her condition.
>She was totally nude, fur and feathers both burnt to ash.
>Which, of course, revealed her horribly burnt flesh.
>And her legs?
>Standing on nearly molten rock is not good for your health.
>You’re pretty sure they’re going to wind up being amputated.
>It’s lucky the magic didn’t stay gone for much longer.
>She would have died for sure.
>At least now, there’s hope.
>You try to put it out of your mind. There’s nothing you can do at the moment.
>It all rests on Spike.
>And the ape.
“Are you sure it’ll help her, Spike?”
>”No. Might as well ask though.”
“And you’re sure it CAN help? She was in pretty bad shape…”
>”Yeah, and I DIED.”
>You flinch.
>You really wish he wouldn’t say that.
>The idea of losing him like that…
>No point in dwelling on that thought.
>He’s here, even if he’s missing a few parts.
>You still love him.
>And you still love Celestia.
>You hate asking that thing for help.
>You don’t trust it.
>And you’re pretty sure that it’s responsible for what happened.
>But it’s pretty much all you can do to help her.
>Once the ape declines, you’ll go straight to Canterlot.
>You’re not leaving her side until she wakes up.
>”That’s weird.”
“What? What is it?”
>He passes you the rectangle.
>On it are words that are nearly worse than outright refusal.
[NO SIGNAL]
“It severed communication with us?”
>Was this its plan all along?
>To lull you into a false sense of security then…
>Then stop talking?
>No, that’s stupid.
>”NIGHTMARE MOON! RUN!”
>Sounds like Luna’s back.
>And she’s not wearing her cloak?
>She bursts through the front door, gasping desperately for breath.
>Mane and tale both in total disarray from a high speed flight.
>She nearly collapses on one of the beds, choking down as much air as she can manage.
>>27084288
“Princess, we found Celestia and-”
>”No time.”
>She spends a few seconds swallowing air before speaking again.
>”Bigger problem.”
“But she’s horribly injured! Like, maybe… maybe…”
>”Much much bigger problem. Titan.”
>Your heart skips two beats.
>A chill runs through your entire being.
>Celestia might be the lucky one.
That's it. The original plan was to give Celestia's story a bit more focus at its end, but it wasn't turning out to be very interesting. Instead I used it to set up that they're freaking the fuck out. The issue before them must be massive if they're more worried about this than the charred pony princess.
>Titan
sheeeeit
>>27084304
Titan, we fighting with giant robots and Pinkie?
>But you ain't got no legs, princess celestia!
>>27084304
welp, time to panic
>>27084464
Thats better option than a pair of swords and grappling hook, right?
Still, going by how Luna&Twi shit their nonexistant pants, just a giant robot might not cut it. Even Pinkie might not help. Even giant robot Pinkie controlled by actual Pinkie might not help.
>>27085099
>just a giant robot might not cut it
Unless its MEGAS.
Reposting my last dump from last thread, as it was posted right before bump limit
>>27077543
>Twenty minutes later
>You've just arrived at the embassy
>Checking the time, you see that you're 33 minutes early
>A door opens, and you are approached by a B1 corporal
>"Greetings sir, the Griffon Ambassador has been waiting for two hours now. I highly suggest you meet him immediately."
>What?
>Two hours?
>Taking a look at your gauntlet it reads 11:36 A:M
>After tapping it, the screen goes to static, and re-appears
>It's two o'clock
>Fuck
"Right then. I guess I shall be on my way."
>You quickly move past the droid and into the conference room
>Inside is the ambassador, alone
>Usually they have guards with them, but this time there are none
>Odd
"Greetings, ambassador. My apologies, I've had quite the schedule as of late."
>"Oh Anonymous, it's quite alright! The wait wasn't too bad. Now, let's begin our discussion."
>He isn't usually this happy
>Especially when you're late
>>27085510
"Okay then. What is it that you've called me here for today? You didn't drag me all the way out here just to ask for my tech again, did you?"
>He moves back a bit, as if he's taken offense to the statement
>He gasps
>"Why certainly not! I definitely didn't do all of that just to beg for your toys again! To be honest, I've called you here for a much more... personal.. reason."
>What?
>If he tries anything you've got a button under your desk that will alert the whole facility to an emergency
>He's smarter than this
"What do you mean? I don't understand why you'd like to discuss anything personal with me. You're here purely for diplomatic reasons."
>He looks for a second, then speaks
>"Well, let's not beat around the bush then, Anonymous. Behold!"
>He snaps his claws
>BANG
>There's an explosion of confetti, and a pink cloud
>You try to press your emergency button
>It's covered in... what is that?
>You take a quick peek
>Is that rock candy?
>>27085513
>"Ah-a-a-a-a! You don't want to do something you'd regret, Anonymous. We've just got started!"
>You look back up
>The smoke has cleared, revealing something you didn't expect at all
>The other half of the room is covered in party decorations
>In the ambassador's seat is a...
>You aren't sure how to describe it
>"Now, there's a reason I've brought you here Anonymous."
>Hold up
"Wait.. who, whatever you are, I need to know who I'm talking to, right now!"
>You pull out your blaster
>Where did you get this fucking banana?
>The creature stifles a laugh
"What the fuck?"
>You get out of your seat, and attempt to leave the room
>The doors are locked
>>27085518
>"Anon, I assure you, I'm not here to harm you! If I was, well, let's just say life as a statue isn't the most pleasant."
"Just tell me, what are you? Who are you?"
>It sighs
>"If you must know, my name is Discord. I'm basically your average run-of-the-mill draconequus, and the spirit of disharmony! Now, no need to introduce yourself, my friend. I know all about you!"
"You.. do?"
>"Why of course!"
>Out of thing air, discord pulls out a notebook, and begins to flip through the pages
>"You see, Anonymous, ever since you found that iddy-biddy little factory of yours, you've been stirring up all sorts of trouble! My kind of trouble, to be exact."
>You aren't sure you like where this is going
>It's not like you can do anything about it, though
"What do you mean? Elaborate."
>"Isn't it obvious? Canterlot, the forest, all of that is exactly what I am the embodiment of! What got me particularly interested in you, however, is the changelings. Whatever happened there, it revealed something inside you. Something I believe you are unaware of."
>How long has he been watching you?
>"What are you getting at, Discord?"
>There's a long pause
>"How old do you think I am, Anonymous?"
>Well, you haven't really thought about it
"Err... well.. I just me-"
>"I can tell you that I'm much older than you'd probably expect. I knew Celestia in her early days. But that's beside the point. Do you think I'm as naive as everyone else on this planet? I know things, Anonymous. Let's just say that there's a reason that you've done what you have."
>>27085521
>You REALLY don't like where this is going
>Discord snaps his claws again, and everything is black
>After a few seconds, color begins to fill your vision
>Discord is next to you
>"While dreams are more of Luna's sort of thing, that doesn't mean I can't give being visions. What do you see, Anonymous?"
>You see
>Your mind goes blank for a second
>You're on Dantooine
>It's late at night, and before you is your old farm
>Outside, you see two people, and a boy
"I... I see my family. What are we doing here? What are you trying to do, Discord?"
>"I'm going to show you what you've unknowingly been hiding from, Anonymous. Ta-ta!"
>Discord disappears in a puff of smoke
"Discord! W-where have you gone? What's happening?"
>For the first time in a long while, you feel it
>You feel afraid
>Watching ahead, you see the family head into the farmhouse
>>27085523
"What are you trying to show me, Discord?"
>You hear his disembodied voice
>"Oh, I dunno, just give it say.. oh, look! Here it comes!"
>In the distance, you see a ship
>It approaches the farm, and lands
>Out of it comes two men, armed with blasters, followed by a caped figure
>The parents come out of the house, and approach the men
>After some dialogue, they start to yell
>You can hear them, but faintly
>"You can't have our son! I don't care if he-"
>The men raise their blasters
>You hear nothing, but see the flashes of light
"Holy shit! What the fuck, Discord!? W-what's happening?"
>"Wouldn't you like to find out? Why don't you get a little closer to our new friends over there, hmm?"
>What is he doing? You're more shocked than anything else at the moment
>Before you're able to speak, there's a flash of light, and you're next to the farmhouse
>Watching the event unfolding before you, you see the men walk into the house
>They don't seem to notice you, even though you're standing right in front of them
>After a few minutes, it bursts into flames
>Initially, you try to get away from the inferno
>After you realize that the fire is having no effect on you, you calm down
>They come out shortly after
>The caped figure is holding something
>Getting closer, you see it
>He's carrying.. you!
>He takes off his hood, and you see his face
>It's fucking Dooku!
>>27085528
"Discord? What's going on? What is this!?"
>Discord is silent
>The men get back into their ship, and shortly after, it takes off
"W-was that?"
>"Yes. It was, Anonymous."
>Discord is back, and he's behind you
"I don't understand, what are you trying to show me? That everything I know about what happened to my parents, and Dooku, is a lie?"
>"No. And that isn't completely true. Maybe you will get what I'm demonstrating, after this next memory."
>How does Discord know about this?
>From your knowledge, no beings on the planet knew anything about the surrounding universe
>Discord just took you halfway across the galaxy, and showed you the deaths of your parents for the makers sake!
>You need to discover his intentions, and how much he knows
>Discord snaps once more, and your vision goes black again
>>27084304
>Titan
Uh, yay?
>titan
ACU soon, fellow commanders.
>>27085536
>Sith lord Discord
Not sure how I feel about this, but I'm interested in seeing how you'll do it. How will the ponies react to this?
welp. shit- i gotta step it up. i'ma be writing more often now.
hello there everyone
uhh totally new to this general
I was chased out of reverse gender roles and a few anons said to just post here in tech since my story seemed to be more up y'all's alley
you can see the shit storm my story caused near the end of the thread
>>27076342
http://pastebin.com/CNn1DiCf
and here is what I'm written so far
the shit storm and my ensuing attempts to explain things might help you understand why I was chased out of rgre and why they told me to come here
>>27083295
Why is Twilight so fucking fat in that pic?
>>27086424
TWIGGY THE PIGGY
>>27086444
Trips confirm twig is pig
>>27086401
Guys check it out, he came back to the rgr thread to bitch that nobody liked his stuff
>>27086550
>>27086614
again nice try
https://gyazo.com/55e5ade459d68793666dee30c83b8cef
>>27086401
Why did you link the thread and not your story in the thread? Why does it seem like you're just trying to start shit here after being chased off from somewhere else?
Why do you start each new sentence with a new line.
Why do you sometimes capitalize, but other times you can't be bothered?
>>27086637
Just calm down, son. Some strangers on the internet didn't like your shit. Suck it up and quit being a little bitch or leave.
>>27086663
because I'm rather sick atm, and not really thinking well
sorry for causing shit you guys can go ahead and ignore the posting
sorry about all this
>>27086676
Get well soon.
>>27086676
Go get high as fuck on some NyQuill, get better, and then write. We'll still be here.Oh god, we'll still be here. . . what am I doing with my life?
>>27086637
Cross-thread posts don't (you), idiot.
http://imgur.com/ssLP82u
>>27086697
I wish it was that easy
>>27086722
>fdbondfgkaherfbgpaodsvb tablets
Jesus Christ, what the fuck is wrong with you?
>>27086722
Well, at least your kitchen is nice. That's a solid HD countertop and that dish washer is pretty good, too.Yours or parents?
>>27086826
All mine bby
>>27086401
Your Story is shit.
With some work you can make it better but to be a TiM story you need Anon to invent war machines for the stalliongrad ponies
>>27084304
what type of titan we talking about?
>>27087163
I spent like hours explaining that was what was gonna happen, just that nothing was happening in the beginning
I was setting up everything for the flashback to anon helping horserussia develop weapons beyond basic crossbows and cannons
no one seemed to actually listen
and just went full sperg rage mode
also ye I realize it's probably not that great
but I only started world building and settinn up the outline for what I wanted to happen yesterday
also being pumped full of meds is not that conductive to writing
but I just wanted to at least start gettng some of my story down
>>27087179
The Symbionic type.
>>27086401
You need to work on your formatting. You're occupying this weird space where it's neither green format nor prose, and it's kind of obnoxious.
Also, looking over some of your comments in the other thread you've got a good amount of work to do on your world building. Most of what you laid out just doesn't make any fucking sense from either a tactical or strategic standpoint. Now, if that's just anon fucking things up: fine. However, you're laying this out as heads of state and professional soldiers are making these decisions and even if ponies can't into war, they aren't going to make decisions that are that pants on head stupid unless its a comedy and its not funny enough to be a comedy.
tl;dr - The idea isn't inherently flawed, but both it and your writing need work.
>>27087179
The only good kind.
>>27087217
Then get it done faggot. Start writing. We don't care if it's shit.
Read my story (the one I may or may not be updating soon) if you don't believe me.
My story is shit and yet we have so little traffic we don't really care
>>27087264
>The only good kind
Funny, that doesn't look like a picture of Prometheus but you just said that you're talking about the only good titan.
I think you're confused, anon.
>>27087293
They gave us the gift of HEAVY METAL!
Your argument is invalid.
>>27087332
YOU NEED FIRE TO FORGE METAL.
CHECKMATE, FAGGOT.
>>27087355
That's what Ormagoden is for.
Goddamn plebs...
>>27087281
I-i liked it...
I'm back, more green soon
Before I dump, I just want to ask something.
How many anons are still reading my story? I've got several versions of what I could do in my head, but I don't want to add another 2000+ pastebin lines to the story if only one or two people are going to be reading.
Thanks for any feedback, anons
http://pastebin.com/KvQKUKGi
>a couple of hours later.
>giving the glass back to sugarcube corner, you head back to the castle.
>walking up the steps, you walk in.
>twilight's in the main room, and sees you walk in.
>she looks at you with tired eyes, as if she's been taking care of a child.
>"ah! Anon! I have called the princess here, so- please… get in your nice clothes." she says like a mother talking to her son.
>you've never met the princesses; you really don't know what to make of them.
>and, with the exception of twilight running off to canterlot… you've never heard any mention of princess celestia.
>"and don't wear plad, please. Darling."
"oh, didn't see you there, rarity" you say, knowing the only horse to know what a 'darling' is, is the fashion horse.
>"actually, I think I'm going to dress you, this time." she says, nudging you to your bedroom.
>you're tired, so you're going to let the horses do as they please.
>within ten minutes, you're dressed to meet royalty.
>rarity places a nice fedora on your head, and rushes to groom twilight.
>you're brain has devolved into carnial desires.
>coffee
>coffee
>mmm, crryysstalls.
>yess, coffee, coffee good.
>why were you so tired? This is a strange occurrence seeing that you can keep up with pinkie.
>>27088643
shit, FORGOT NAMEFAG.
>>27088532
Your story is really the only thing I look forward to recently.
>>27088643
>walking to the corner of the room, you look at the glass and metal coffee machine that's obviously magically powered.
>just add water, and you get magically energized water.
>terrific.
>its still clear, but the magic tastes stunningly like coffee, so you call it coffee.
>actually, the ponies in ponyville have started calling it coffee as well.
>coffee is magical, after all.
>downing three cups of coffee like its nobody's business, you straighten up, and head to the throne-room.
>it seems that pinkie pie, rainbow dash, and… err, the- other earth pony have walked into the room.
>soon enough, fluttershy comes walking through the castle door, smelling like soap.
>you're ingnored, so you go and sit on a pile of books twilight has next to her throne.
>"okay girls, most of you know my new resident here- anonymous…" twilight says, leading the group like puppies.
>the one you don't know walks up to you to remind you that her name is applejack, and yours is Sugarcube.
>and with that, everyone sits down and waits for celestia.
>>27088952
i'm getting some HARD writer's block right now. so i'mma going to go, i dont know, to the beach or something and do some writing then.
>>27084304
Oh shit. I actually had a feeling the sphere was a prison when we first encountered it but I never mentioned it because there was no evidence.
>>27088532
I'm invested ny time in this thread between you and WIK; please don't stop
>>27088532
lurker reporting in
don't stop, we love you
>>27088532
Dude, we're fucking reading. Don't fucking stop. Came here for WiK's story, and now yours as well. Don't fall for the lack of reception, man. Just keep on keepin' on.
>>27088952
>The one you don't know walks up to you to remind you that her name is Applejack, and yours is Sugarcube
kek
>>27088711
>>27089218
>>27089365
>>27089398
Thanks for the responses, I'll see what I can do.
On a side note, my new headphones came in today, and guess who got quads.
Fucking. Check em.
>>27089629
>EA
you disgust me.
>>27089645
I don't like the game itself, but the headset is badass
>>27089652
i hope the vaporwave is delicious.
>>27089645
Your name and namefagging irritates me to no end, but share your disgust. EA is fucking cancer.
>>27089629
>quads
>not even related to 4chan
Dude, don't fall for the potato side. Keep that kinda shit to yourself.
>>27089744
i'm writing in this thread, anon
>>27085536
>Your vision starts to return
>This time, rather than being on Dantooine, you seem to be in Equestria
>You're in the changeling hive?
>Looking around, you see flashes of red and green throughout the cavern
>Discord is nowhere to be seen
>Oh no
>You look to your side, and you see her
>Leaning next to the rock is Trixie, and beside her is.. you
>No, no please no
>Why this?
"Trixie! You need to leave! You all need to get out of here!"
>There isn't a single response to your exclamation
>You run up to the mare, and attempt to move her
>You simply phase through Trixie, like walking through water
>You look to the fight, and see her
>That monster that did this to you
>The changeling queen emerges from the crowd, protected by a magic ward
>Her sickly, black horn begins to glow
>You know what's coming next
>You know why Discord brought you here
>You attempt to turn away, but some otherworldly force stop you
>"Observe. You'll see what I've brought you here for, and discover your true potential. Now, where did I leave my popcorn?"
>It happens
>It pains you to watch it again
>After she falls, your past self springs to her aid
>>27090397
>It happens
>It pains you to watch it again
>After she falls, your past self springs to her aid
>"TRIXIE!"
>It's just like it was two years ago
>The pain
>The anger
>The hate
>After she says her last words, she lays limp on the ground
>Anon sits there for a moment, and then gets up
>Your (his?) eyes are bright yellow
>He heads towards the ongoing battle, and takes the weapons from one of the droids
>This is the part where you killed Chrysalis
>Anon rushes over the barricade
>"Droids, push forward!"
>The droids follow, pushing their offensive against the changelings
>Watching it now, you realize just how savage he fighting was
>When the changelings got close to the commandos, they fought in fierce melee combat
>You on the other hand, were fighting like a maniac
>Old Anon, stone faced, cleaved up both defenseless royals and changeling drones like a grim reaper
>The only being left in his wake was Chrysalis
>He walked up to her, not saying anything
>"Please! Be honorable, and spa-"
>Anonymous beheaded her before she could finish her plea for life
Can't post anymore at the moment. I'll work on it again later.
http://i1.livememe.com/8046lm.jpg
>>27091024
Why would you link an image instead of just straight up posting it?
Are any of these stories worth reading, which one(s), and what about them is good/what're some minor things that happens in the start? I'd go looking, but I'm kind of busy and I don't want to start reading something only to end up disliking where it goes.
>>27091381
Image posting might be down again. Let me check.
>>27091024
>>27091799
Nope. All is fine. >>27091024 is just an idiot.
Re-starting the killing.
Chapter 7
>Fast forward 2 months
>Twilight makes a party to greet Anon back.
>Half of the ponies responsable for Anon's assault are free
>The others don't give any clues
>But that's for another time
>Spike is was so happy that cried when he find out that Anon was alive and safe
>But when he heard that he was coming back, he couldn't keep it to himself
>His guy friend was coming back
squeee and little dance - needs more guy friends-
>Meanwhile in the rock farm
>Anon dedicated this time to help the Pie family and make new kinds of tecnology.
>Being a earth pony is not easy
>Putting everything he got, he builded a working deep drill pony size to help with the perforations.
>Maud wanted a more faster way to break big rocks
>A sonic rock breaking device was given to her with a lot of instrutionts.
>The problem was with Lime Stone
>It was hard but he managed to create an earth ultrasound machine and a gas detector.
>To thank the family, he created a solar system made with very resiliant and hard crystal from the quarry.
>No more darkness in the house or the quarry and no problem of any kind.
>Good byes are given
>Maud escort him back to Ponyville
>They talk about the technology and why he did that
>Explains that technology is to help and make the lives of people and ponies a little bit more easy.
>She says that what he is doing is bad
>But she is happy to see now that you are in the right side
>Anon and Maud hug
>Maud has become accustomed to his hugs
>But this time, something is wrong with her.
>Her heart is beating faster and her breathing is erratic
>Anon goes to sleep.
>Searchin for something more than looking at him and his soft looking lips, she finds a book from his bags
>The book that she published
>She makes a little plan
>Arrive to Ponyville
>Party because Anon is back and is healthy
>Twilight and Maud get close to him, even rubbing themselves to him.
>Anon gets a sweaty boner cause plots for days.
>>27093756
Big round Muad and Twi ass, make a man go damn!
>>27093756
>Next day
>Random ponies start to greet you
>You start to routine of helping ponies out with odd jobs.
>With new electric tools will be fast and easy
>Ponies are impressed with your work
>A good bag is made today
>And wheb you least expect it, it happens
>Derpy colides with you.
>You greet and help her.
>Her daughter is running to you.
>Hello and good byes
>Stern look from Dinky
>Continue work day
>At night, he gets a visit from 4 pastel small horses.
>The CMC's and Dinky Hooves
>The trio apologize for the time
>Dinky is still serious
>No more bullshit
>They go to his room and left out the CMC
>She wants help to give her mother sight.
>She offers herself as payment.
>Much feelings
>Anon accepts the work
>She is espected to be in Sugar cube corner after school for the next month.
>CMC's cant't belive him
>Think he is evil and a perverted.
>The time is up and she is ready in SCC
>The trio of fillies are hidden and ready to follow that perverted monkey
>Anon arrives to the place
>Both go to buy some things.
>Rope, fabric, some oils and water
>CMC in state of emergency
>When they arrive to his workshop (old unused barn from Sweet Apple Acres), she starts to cry
>She doesn't want to do this
>But she will do it for her mommy
>Anon opens the door and gets inside, telling Dinky not to enter yet.
>CMC can't stant this anymore
>They reveal themselves and try to maker her give up
>When she was read to answer, Anon tells her to enter.
>Small drops fall from her face
>She will do it, and with her help, mom will be happy
>No more accidents or sad times for her and you.
>This will be the start of a new day without nightmares.
>She just have to face what's on the other side.
>Now inside and with the door closed, she hears a click and light begins to flow
>Colt wind is in the room and a table with a chair infront of a blackboard in before her
>Anon appears well dressed with a lab coat.
>She doesn't get it and say it
>>27093301
Is Lyra touching her woo-woo
>>27093902
>Anon is oblivious at first
>The filly says about bees and birds
>He gets it, and it's disgusted and offended
>Gets mad
>Tells her that what he wants is help with his work, have an assistant.
>She start to cry and smile
>She is safe and in good hands
>Anon is calm and Dinky explain herself
>Now they understand each other.
>Laughts and a hug are given
>They are pumped up
>With both strength, they will help the little filly's mom and give her a new life perspective
>And a lot of new gadgets to her and her daughter.
>But that's for later
>Time to study the energy and the electrical machines.
>>27093902
>*Cold wind
>*Fresh and cool air
>>27084236
>>27068738 here,
My problem was I first caught sight of the story on a post that made it seem like some self-insert god-like being OC cringe-worthy dreg you'd find on FimFiction.
With my second run-in with a post from the story I decided to give it a read. While the character is slightly Mary Sueish in a way, all the characters are still engaging enough I feel I have to apologize for my jumping to conclusions with that out of context first pass.
>>27094205
Nah it's fair enough and you are right though in a way about the mary sue shit but that extends to pretty much every fucking general.
now the slave pony threads have tons of OC and self insert shit few other threads also but i mean really if you and me and others are here reading this sooo yeah you kinda know what to expect you can tell them what you think of there story they might improve might not.
Hell to be totally honest i see more people that SHOULD just fucking write on FimFiction due to there quality and the fact that Fimfiction would make it easier on them than posting shit in a general.
like the guy who does the Queen umbra threads yeah dudes burnt out from posting every day fimfiction would of been better for him gave him more time etc.
>There's a unicorn in my lab
>>27093756
Oh so you're staying?
>>27094205
fampai if you want to see mary sue, read LP's first story
glomp
>>27088532
I'm just here lurking and reading, I never say anything though.
Bump.
Content soon
>>27088532
I'm reading your story
>>27095686
Same here I usually say nothing because I don't know what to say besides good job.
>>27088532
Ima reading. Lurkurs probably won't reply
>>27083295
bump
cringe bump
>>27101059
>>27101059
Erk.
"Guys code" a.k.a "how to make sure your project will be impossible to maintain".
This type of "clever" coding always end up with your team having to half-ass a rewrite and/or do some very ugly and inefficient walk-around.
>>27098405
Next section is taking me a bit to type up
Long story short it's kinda hard to write Discord as I am, to put it bluntly
>>27101328
dont worry about it, take your time
>>27083295
bump
>>27102928
>literal ponuts
>best waifu
based bump
Nearly done with next dump
>>27102928
>Time stops as it stands
>Well, the vision does
>You aren't sure what to say
>You remember this happening, but not like this
>Did you really fight like that?
>How is a feat like that possible?
>Discord appears next to you in a puff of smoke
>He looks at you inquisitively, as if searching for something
>"So, Anonymous... how do you feel?"
"Surprised. How could I have fought like that? I-I've never really had much combat experience before. I tho-"
>Discord cuts you off
>"What you thought is wrong. What you've done, and how you did it, was right. Allow me to show you."
>The vision begins to reverse, to the point where you were heading towards your droids
>"Observe. Look at yourself. Look at how you act when influenced by anger!"
>Anon does as he did earlier, attacking the changelings with his droids
>"See how you react under stress!"
>He's right
>You fight like a gladiator when you're mad
>But how?
>"Understand the hate! The chaos!"
>Anon finishes Chrysalis for the third time
>Discord approaches you
>"Anonymous. What I've been trying to show you, is that you're force sensitive. You can learn about the powers of the light, and the dark, and use them to your advantage."
>What?
>No
>You couldn't be
>You've never been able to do anything like that ever before!
>He's lying
>...
>But he isn't
>This vision tells you everything
>>27103902
Ah shit, linked to the wrong post
Tired droid isn't a smart droid
>>27090818
>>27102987
>based bump
>
>
>Nearly done with next dump
Why did I laugh at the rhyming so much?
>>27084236
I'm a complete and utter newfag to this general and I just finished reading what you have in the pastebins. Does this start where the part 2 pastebin left off?
>>27104409
pretty sure >>27007982 in the previous thread resumes where part 2 ends
>>27104503
Thank you kindly
>>27101325
>fast inverse square root
>ever having to rewrite it
>>27103902
>"Anonymous. What I've been trying to show you, is that you're force sensitive. You can learn about the powers of the light, and the dark, and use them to your advantage."
>What?
>No
>You couldn't be
>You've never been able to do anything like that ever before!
>He's lying
>...
>But he isn't
>This vision tells you everything
"B-but how? I've never experienced anything like that before!"
>"Then how did you accomplish this feat? You may not have used the force intentionally, but believe me when I say this Anonymous. You demonstrated that you have great power with the dark side of the force! Become my apprentice, learn how to harness your power!"
>How does he even know about the force?
"How do you even know about the force? Answer this, and I might consider your offer, Discord."
>"Hmph. You're no fun. Have you ever wondered why you've never seen any other of my kind around Equestria?"
>You've never really put any thought into it
>To be honest, you didn't even know that his kind existed until he appeared in the embassy
"Well, no, I haven't. I'm assuming you're about to explain why?"
>"Indeed. You see, Anonymous, I'm not native to this planet. I'm not really native to well... anywhere, really. I'm a demigod, created by the force, as a living embodiment of the force. It explains why I'm able to do this." (<-- Think of the mortis demigods in TCW)
>He snaps his fingers as he's done before, and a big red chair appears next to him
>He smirks
>"The force is literally in my blood, and with such knowledge comes the greatest of power! That tool in charge of that high and mighty 'Empire' is nothing but an acolyte compared to me. The alicorn sisters are the same, but they hardly ever talk about it. The last time I heard them mention the word was before they turned me to stone, and that was a very long time ago, I assure you!"
One more post for the night, then I think I'm done.
>>27105539
Nvm what I said, couldn't churn out the next little bit
It'll be up tomorrow
>>27088532
reading and awaiting sir.
>Be Anon.
>And holy shit, these ponies.
>Ever since you were brought here against your will by some bullshit magical force, you have been dying.
>Not physically, but mentally.
>Seriously, the music here is limited.
>Either classical, or electronic.
>There are a few other examples but they are few and far between.
>The books they have are all juvenile as well.
>Think Eragon levels of maturity.
>Basically nothing dark, or mentally challenging, leaving you to question yourself, and what you read.
>The bad guys always lose, the good guys always live happily every after.
>Time after time after time.
>>27110000
"Is this all you really have Twilight? Just Daring Do books? Don't you have anything more adult?"
>"Anon! This is a Princess' castle. I don't carry smut magazines in my library!"
"No, not porn. Something more challenging mentally. Daring Do isn't a book for adults. It's for young teenagers."
>"I will have you know that Daring Do is the most popular book series by ponies of all ages. From the youngest of foals, to somepony like Granny Smith. What's not to love?! There's action, there's romance, and of course the good guy always wins in the end."
"That's it Twilight. It's so predictable. So dull! So safe!"
>Of course the ponies would love something that's safe, and doesn't push the boundaries..This world is as 'safe' as it can get. The status que barely changes.
>>27110090
mmhmmm............keep going
>>27110090
"Back on my planet, we had stories that had you question who is the bad guy, and who's the good guy! Yes, there is a place for books like Daring Do, but to put them up as the most mature of all literature...."
>Ideas of books you can rewrite, the songs you can write, and the works of art you can create. Not out of a love for money, but to enrich the culture.
>If only your Dad could see you know, actually utilizing your time in art school instead of working some dead end middle management job.
"It's insulting, and you as an intellectual who enjoys books should realize that such drivel is no where near what a good book can make you feel. There are more feelings then joy at seeing the good guy win in the end. There's sadness, joy, anger, disgust, all that and more!"
>"Well then Anon. If you think my tastes aren't up to snuff...."
>Oh shit.
>A purple aura surrounds you, and the glittering interior of the castle is gone, you're now outside of the castle.
>Twi's head peeks out of the door.
>"You can come back when you have created the true literay masterpiece! Or some other form of art! Until then, you aren't welcome in my castle!"
>THUNK
>And she bolted the door shut. Shit....
>>27110165
Wow. Art instead of technology, interesting take on the prompt....
>>27110165
>Well fuck.
>Twilight was paying all of your bills pretty much.
>A rent free room
>Free food....
>These ponies might be nice, but you doubt anyone else would allow you to mooch off of them for far too long.
>Sure you could maybe get a job at Sweet Apple Acres? But that would go against the entire purpose of your art degree.
>This is a new chance at life.
>You aren't going to waste it.
>Rarity might put you up....
>"Yo....Anon. You're looking a little confused, need any help?"
>The husky voice of Vinyl Scratch reaches your ears, and you see the white musician mare looking up at you from behind her goggles.
"Hello Vinyl. Twilight just kicked me out of her castle."
>"Whhhhhaaaat? Awww man that sucks. You can totally crash at my place for a few until you get back on your hooves."
>Shitty books aside.....this world did have some benefits. Namely the ponies were exceptionally kind, and generous.
>>27110267
nice
not enough vinyl in greens
>>27110267
"That would actually be really helpful, Vinyl."
>She bumps her hoof into your leg.
>"Naw man, say no more. What kind of pony would I be to just leave someone homeless? Maybe I can earn my own wings, and be Princess of Music. Come on, before Octavia gets back, and yells at me for letting another friend crash on our couch. I swear, sometimes that mare forgets she started out on my couch down in my parent's basement."
>She shrugs, and trots off, her neon and electric blue tail swaying with each step she takes.
>"So Anon. What did you even do back on Earth? So many ponies are interested in knowing more, but Princess Twilight just seemed to keep you locked in that castle just to study you herself."
"Well I used to just be a shift manager at some stupid grocery store."
>"Really that's it? Just telling ponies what to do? Naw, there's no way, you don't seem like the suit wearing 9 to 5 kind of guy."
"I just did that to pay the bills. I was in a band."
>"I knew it! What else did you do!"
>Vinyl turns herself around, planting her butt down, and looking up at you like a dog, eyes wide behind her goggles.
>>27110382
"The band wasn't really that popular, we had one or two small gigs in local shops, and the small local coffee shop...."
>"Hey, at least you managed to get out there, and play some music. Most bands fizzle out and die in their parents garage."
"Apart from the band, I did some writing. It wasn't good, but the people I posted for seemed to enjoy it. I also dabbled in some painting."
>"Geez, you're just a busy little bee aren't you?"
"Jack of all trades, master of none. I guess I was always waiting for one thing to stick, and nothing ever did....."
>>27110498
And that's all the time I have for today since work is calling to me. Let me know what you guys think so far.
>>27110516
Anon introduces Equestria to Black Sabbath.
>>27110516
Pretty damn good opening, will continue reading
While it doesn't exactly fit the theme of the thread, I personally am fine with featuring this story here. Technology and art are both products of thought and creativity; the main distinction is the intended purpose and in many cases that line is blurry.
Twilight was a bit quick to anger in my opinion. Maybe that would have made sense if you'd established that their relationship was strained in the first place, but here it just sorta came out of the blue. Making the argument last longer might have been good; don't go and rewrite this though, as you'll never finish if you keep going back and revising.
As for what I think? It's too short to judge. I suppose I can at least say that you have decent sentence structure, which puts you ahead of most people. One thing though, ellipses are three periods, not four to six.
>>27110532
>he gets crucified for blasphemy
>then comes back as an immortal metal god
>>27110838
The Gods made heavy metal, and they saw that it was good. They said to play it louder than hell, we promised that we would.
>>27110828
I was thinking Twilight would be one to quickly anger when you insult her favorite thing, which is books. Especially since we've seen her geek out over Daring Do, and I think we all know what happens when you insult a nerd's favorite thing. they tend to get angry, only this time, the nerd has some power behind her.
>>27111090
Long story short,
REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
>>27111090
Yeah, but kicking him out into the streets because he doesn't like a book is excessive. It's extremely autistic. Oh right, Twilight.
>>27110828
And I didn't say this in my last post, but thank you for the constructive critisism. Most of the time people on here just call you a faggot without saying why you are a faggot.
>>27110516
MOAR!
Me likey
>>27111630
Oh, I know this all too well. The worst part is you're never even sure if they actually have a real objection or if they're just shitposting. It's even worse if you try to publish on fimfiction, just in the opposite direction. It seems the only way to get a negative review there is to be guilty of wrongthink.
>>27110857
>>27110838
>>27110532
>Anon becomes the God of Shredding
>he sets up Metalocalypse-esque concerts
>literally melts the faces off of ponies
>the most fatal concert in Equestria was also the best anyone has ever seen
I seriously fucking love Metalocalypse.
>>27112966
>>the most fatal concert in Equestria was also the best anyone has ever seen
and it was a 30 second commercial for coffee.
>>27112998
sounds about right.
>>27110000
A good start to a story with a good set of numbers.
>>27088952
>two hours later.
"my own city!?" you say, getting up from your book chair.
>you think for a moment.
"I can't just 'up' and build a city! Its, just, not possible!" you shout in indignance.
>celestia maintains a calm tone, saying "I know, I know more than all ponies how long it takes to build a city, but- I will provide you with all the resources needed. All th-"
You cut her off. "no-no-no, princess! It doesn't matter, this isn't a book! I can't /go/ and just /make/ a city! Its about time! Not about power!"
Looking at celestia, and scaring the other ponies in the room, you say- "I just wanted to show twilight that the human world is technologically powerful without magic. Not, not to make a city from the dirt."
>celestia looks at you, and says. "you're human, you're from a race that will look at a desert and think 'this is a good place to build a city,' our faithful student here wrote me that- wrote me, saying you were the one to say that."
>you think to yourself for a moment.
>you have one chance, one chance to make an impact on the world. One chance to live forever- metaphorically, one chance, to represent the human race.
>and, by turning something like this down you'd would have effectively squandered something like this.
>celestia had started monologue about the importance of you, but you didn't care, nor did you hear her.
>"*something something something importance, something something something regret.*"
>for some reason, politics seems really nice right about now.
>eh, more so making a small scale industrial revolution.
looking at celestia, you say, in a defeated tone "where do i begin?"
>>27114435
always forget the name.
>>27114480
Yup.
>>27114480
You really do. One would think you would have learned by now.
>>27114480
Do you write like Hemingway? Get a little drunk and then stick pen to paper to see what comes out? Then it makes sense that you lapse on the name.
>>27114435
>looking at celestia, you say, in a defeated tone "where do i begin?"
To tell the story of how great a love can be?
The sweet love story that is older than the sea
The simple truth about the love she brings to me
Where do I start?
Dump won't be till tomorrow. I know I said today, but I've been on the 4chan server all day, couldn't help it.
I'll write when I can
>>27114435
>that rewarded hugs all around.
>…
>god damn you fucking horses stop with the cuddles…
>are they going to sleep now? Is it nap time?
>welp, sun is setting, better go to the forge and see-
>fuck, celestia's sleeping on your legs.
>is this how we do orgies in equestria?
>I don't like it. Not one bit.
>in a moment, you allow yourself to drift off into a caffeine crash induced sleep.
>you wake up to find yourself sprawled out on the floor of the crystal castle.
>you're covered in fluff of all sorts, with the exception of white.
>the pink got everywhere, its like pinkie sheds to mark her territory.
>but it does smell like pancakes. So you better go get some food.
>taking off your jacket and putting it on fluttershy's throne, you walk to where you remember is the kitchen.
>you must smell pretty nice, because twilight isn't scrunching her face at your B.O.
>she's got her head in a book; ' while magic-ing together some breakfast.
>like usual, you don't see any meat.
"hey, maybe I could make a ranch out in that city state Celestia promised me."
>"ranch?" twilight inquires. "whats a human ranch like?"
Waiting for that response, you answer "well- After breakfast, probably ruin your morning if I told you."
>you grab a plate full of pancakes, two eggs, and a piece of toast with peanut butter on it.
>you should tell twilight that eating eggs is really frowned upon where you come from.
"wouldn't work" you quietly say to yourself before sitting down on the table.
>"grab a throne, anon, I know the girls don't mind-" twilight says.
"naah." you say, looking at the map. "I like my breakfast with a side of manehatteon!"
>>27115889
4chab*
>>27115905
in on 4chab too, im Copper_Cog in teamspeak, Herobrinn9 in serber, i live in the house on the water. literally in the moat.
>>27115925
Noice m8, I'm Frenchie, you probably heard me on ts
>>27115976
definatley. i bet you heard me playing guitar in TS.
>>27093908
She must be, since Vipers have the control stick on the right arm rest. No controls between the pilots legs, except the ejection toggle.
... Kinda want to see what happens next, actually
>>27116063
who's taking pictures of a cockpit without the ejection safe?
>>27116692
I'd guess a Viper pilot
They're assholes who play by their own rules
Like Maverick in Top Gun, but with more dick jokes
https://youtu.be/SdSj0_Fd4ds
A small update to prove I'm not dead.
>A few months later, and things are coming along nicely.
>16 E Lancaster St, the smaller of the two towers, has only a few weeks to go before it opens
>20 E Lancaster St, the larger building, is coming along as well
>More houses are springing up on the edges of town, and the construction crews have started training more workers themselves
>No matter what happens, it seems like there are always ponies abandoning their lives elsewhere and coming to Lancaster
>Clearly, not everyone is like Twilight
>Today, though, your mind needs to be elsewhere
>Yesterday was the grand opening of the new capitol building, and today, you're moving in
>A few craftsponies who you remember were a part of the original settlers have gifted you a handmade oak desk
>It's beautiful, and you thanked them profusely
>It barely fit in the elevators, too
>The two lifts are working nonstop today to move furniture throughout the building
>You're setting up offices for the departments you created yesterday
>Executive Order 2: Creation of a Department of State for the establishment and maintenance of diplomatic relations between Arcadia and other countries
>Executive Order 3: Creation of a Department of Treasury for the management of government revenue
>Executive Order 4: Creation of a Department of Justice for the creation and enforcement of the law
>Executive Order 5: Creation of a Department of Commerce for the promotion of Arcadian industries
>Based on your planning, those departments will help Arcadia keep making history
>And what was the first Executive Order?
>Well, you've thought long and hard about how you want Lancaster to look in the future, and you've decided that it would be best to keep the taller buildings in one area
>So, you're dividing Lancaster into two
>The half north of Lancaster St, where the capitol building is located, will be a low-density area
>The south half will be an urban zone
>>27117895
>You walk through the building and help when you're needed
>And you're needed a lot
>Most of the questions can't be answered immediately, because all the questions are the same
>Your new departments need a direction to head in
>When you created the departments, you provided mission statements, but you haven't had the time to delegate responsibilities and assign tasks and all that fun stuff
>Most of that can be delegated to your Chief of Staff, but he needs training, and you can't do it right now, because you're too busy making sure your new Cabinet has a place to write
>After a solid eight hours of doing nothing but heavy lifting and planning political courses of action in your head, you decide it's time to start working on your other pet project
>There was a small area on the first floor of the Lancaster Building that wasn't taken up by the lobby or units for the building's staff, and you've decided that's where you're setting up shop
>You need to hire architects and city planners, because your time is going to be taken up by getting an entire nation off the ground
>And in that small suite of offices, you're going to build a city
>>27117907
Okay, rant time.
The reason I've been dead is because I've been planning. A lot. An absurd amount. And I ended up creating a world I love planning but put off actually writing, because so much cool stuff is happening in the future and I need to build things up right now.
An anon in a previous thread talked about getting my story in the right direction. I think I have a shot at that, now that I know how things are going to go.
Fuck, I need to go to sleep. Just so this post isn't completely wasted, the pastebin is updated. Link: http://pastebin.com/eufFYFaw
>>27117934
Glad to see your back and that you have a plan ready for where your story will go.
>>27110516
This is actually a pretty good concept.
Is there a possibility that there will be a pone 1984?
>>27118366
>pone 1984
>what is glorious Industria
P10 bump
>>27118502
bump
cringe bump
>>27120234
>>27120234
I love how this idiot just went straight ahead with this dumb plan without looking up if it was a good idea or how to clean a video card,
>>27120234
>GTS
And nothing of value was lost.
>>27121684
I suspect it was just a post for lulz. Some guy probably just had an old card he wanted to get rid of and thought "Oh man, I bet 4chan would really get a kick out of this..."
>>27117934
jesus Scotty, took you some time to come back
Fuck you, Scotty
>>27120234
How do these people have the education to support themselves?
This is literally common sense: Don't fuck with shit you don't understand
>>27105539
>He has a point
>Besides, you could take advantage of this
>With as much power as he's promising, you could take a fight to The Empire
>That's probably what he wants as well
"What would be expected of me, should I become your apprentice??"
>Discord looks up and taps his chin, as if thinking
>"Hmm... Well, you'd be expected to follow my teaching to the book, and to perform at maximum efficiency, for one. You must tell me what you value most, what is your greatest fear, so that I can use them to my advantage in your training. It won't be a short ordeal, Anonymous."
>Could you do it?
>Maybe
>But you've still got your brand new ship to unveil
>That comes first
"I'm not su-"
>"Anonymous, do I need to show you what will happen if you decline this offer?"
>Before you can speak, the environment around you changes
>The black spires of the hive recede into the ground, and out from it come buildings
>After a minute, it becomes clear
>You're in Canterlot
>The ponies around you are enjoying their day
>Living their lives in the safe confines of the city
>A giant shadow looms over the city
>Pic related
>Ponies start to scatter, screaming and shouting
>Discord stands next to you, silent
>Fighters start to leave the ship, heading towards the city
>You can't really make it out, but there seems to also be transports on some sorts
This took way too long to type up, more incoming
>>27123343
>The Empire?
>They're here?
>This shouldn't surprise you, but you can't help but stare in shock
>As the fighters approach, they begin to fire upon the city
>The dropships follow, and land in the city square
>The doors open, and out charge what you've heard are called stormtroopers
>From intel you've gathered on your comms station, they're basically the new clone troopers
>The stormtroopers begin to shoot at the ponies, while advancing their own position
>The carnage you're witnessing is devastating
>After the last pony falls, the square is clear
>The troopers start to look for surviving ponies
>You notice one of them come upon a unicorn, and an earth pony
>He offs the earth pony with his blaster
>Afterwards, he heads towards the unicorn, and overpowers her
>Taking a look around, you notice that the only ponies that they're taking are unicorns
>If this is the future, where are your droids?
>There's a flash of light
>A rainbow-colored beam shoots from the castle
>The troopers brace, covering their helmets, and looking away
>The ray his the ship, but merely reflects off of its shields
>After a couple moments, the ship fires back at the castle
>In a barrage of fire, the turbolasers leave the castle in a cloud of smoke
"What the fuck!? The princesses were in there!"
>Discord looks at you, but says nothing
>>27123866
>Why are they attacking the city? They did nothing to them!
>What do they want with the unicorns? Why kill the others?
>You hear a ship coming in from the sky
>It's different from the others
>It has three elongated wings, like one of the old republic shuttles
>It lands, and it opens
>Specially decorated stormtroopers exit, followed by three officers
>Afterwards, a figure in a menacing black outfit begins its journey down the ramp
>It hurts your head just looking at it
>Who is this?
>The person keeps pace behind the others
>As they get closer, you hear a sickly, ominous sound
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=stOjeylx4Fw
>Is that its breath?
>It would explain the helmet, and the pad on their chest
>The figure stops
>The person looks right at you
>Discord notices this
>There's a sound of thunder, and the vision stops
That's it for now. I'm gonna be on the 4chab server, so if you wanna talk or some shit I'll be there.
cringe bump
>>27125322
You're making a wonderful case for eugenics anon
So I'm working on a Warframe fic. I'm going to be busy this week but I'll have some green this coming weekend.
>>27125936
I don't really know anything about Warframe but I am curious to see what you write.
>>27126285
Same
Just a one-shot green to fill the time
>be anon
>and boy oh boy that solar energy laptop recharger was one hell of a good investment
>it's the only thing keeping your computer, phone, and tablet powered up in Equestria
>no outlets
>after spending two weeks slapping Twilight's hooves away from your stuff, and locking everything with a password and thumbprint recognition, you settle down to clean up all of the pictures that your tablet took of Twilight as she tried to unlock your stuff
>her increasing frustration is entertaining, but it's filling up your drive space on your little tablet
>so after a few trash can moves, you sit down and watch some videos of airplanes in flight
>dat thrust vectoring
>unf
>of course who should burst in but Rainbow Dash
>after trying to keep her away from the screen (futile since she can fly), you let her watch some of the plane videos with you
>she seems to like them. Especially the "going-fast part"
>and then it happened
>you should have remembered that this was part of the playlist
>you fool
>before you could stop it, the video plays
>chicken_cannon_canopy_birdstrike_test.mp4
>You can *hear* the smile slide off of Rainbow's face as she reads the filename
>you can *hear* that little intake of breath as the flying frozen chicken carcass shatters the airplane's window
>you can *hear* her turn her head towards you to look with those eyes
>THOSE EYES
>she asks you what that was for
>you try to explain that it's a safety test, and that nobody hits birds on purpose
>Rainbow blinks slowly and flies off
>strangely her flight speed was slower than normal
>as she left, you wiped your flop-sweat from your bow
>you thought it was over
>you fool
>it wasn't
>not even half an hour later, your door is beaten down by Fluttershy
>FLUTTERSHY
>who then proceeds to tearfully scream at how your kind could make such things that would hurt poor innocent birdies
>you spend the next two hours trying to calm her down
>such is life in non-bird-strike Equestria
>>27126378
God Fluttershy's a faggot.
>>27126668
Truly the worst horse, and the worst waifu outside of background characters.
>>27126378
>>27126668
>thing is built
>bird dies due to something neither the thing nor the pilot could control
>humans are bad for making thing
Is this a joke on the soccer moms that are suing gun manufacturers for bullshit reasons?
>>27126378
>locking everything with a password and thumbprint recognition
>thumbprint recognition
Now that's cruel.
>>27083295
bump
>>27101059
Non coding pleb here. Can someone explain this to me? The comic sans is cringeworthy, and the comments smack of grrl power!, but whats the disparity between the two sets of code?
>>27129728
For one thing, the two sets of code appear to do different things, yet everybody seems to think that they are the same. Also, the excessive explaining of every single line of code that any programmer should just know anyway.
Basically, women talk too much and the comments section is retarded.
>>27129728
Comparison between highly efficient but unreadable piece of art and bloated code with errors and funny jokes.
>>27129953
>unreadable
Are you retarded or something?
It's perfectly readable.Though few comments here and there won't hurt.
>>27129996
It's actually a pretty famous bit of code, but in the image above the comments have been removed.
>>27130014
Oh yeah, that's the fast inverse square root code from Quake. It was used for a lighting effect I believe and is incredibly efficient compared to all other methods of computing the inverse square root of a number.
I would seriously recommend looking it up, it's an interesting read.
>>27129996
Main problem is that guys who code like this tends to do it EVERYWHERE.
It's perfectly fine for something where performance is critical like a low level graphic/physic/whatever routine, but otherwise you are just making thing needlessly harder for whoever is going to have to make correction/ improvement/expansion after you.
Dunno how projects work in your country, but in mine we are always understaffed, asked to work with obsolete libraries and/or one for which we never had training, the deadlines are laughable and specifications are a legendary 40 players raid drop.
The probability that someone else with even less preparation than you will have to edit your code are near 100% ... and if your code look like that, it's going to turn very badly.
Clean, dumb and "girly" code guarantee that your software will work and will have a chance to be completed inside the deadlines. If performances are perceptibly bad, you can always rewrite the bottlenecks "properly" afterward.
End of rant.This was totally pony-related.
>>27131253
Technically it's in a pony thread about a scienced up ponyland so it's still on topic either way.
like fuck you if you don't expect us to get into a discussion like this were fucking nerds.
>>27125936
> Warframe
OMG, plz continue, Operator.
Ordis just curious: what are you thinking?
>>27088643
>>ball bearing
>>The first practical caged-roller bearing was invented in the mid-1740s by horologist John Harrison for his H3 marine timekeeper. This uses the bearing for a very limited oscillating motion but Harrison also used a similar bearing in a truly rotary application in a contemporaneous regulator clock.
why the hell do you suspect ponies with trains don't have bearings?
>>27131394
Magic?
>>27115896
>>eating eggs is really frowned upon where you come from
wat?
where is anon from? india?
>>27131445
yes, magic, to create ball bearings. what you are basically saying is "look twilight, theres a wheel, you use it by making something round and you can roll stuff with it" why don't they already know what wheels are even if they have trains and carts? obviously magic.
I suppose they also conjure bread out of the air instead of bake it!
>>27131458
Nigga that's beef. Indians got a beef taboo, not eggs. Anon was just thinking about fucking with her.
>>27131483
>I suppose they also conjure bread out of the air instead of bake it!
http://www.d20srd.org/srd/spells/createFoodAndWater.htm
>>27131483
>>27131909
>conjuring food
>not powering yourself directly by pure magic
Plebs are not welcome.
Bed bump
>>27130014
There's something about the comments that make it feel like John Carmack was surprised that it worked as well as it did,
Uhm.... bump? You fags gonna let it die?
>>27136484
never. for the glory of super soldiers in space.
>>27136484
It was on page 6, there wasn't a hurry to bump yet. Besides I feel like we're just waiting around for a writefag to update.
>>27136524
i know this is supposed to be fiction but holy shit it hurts my autism
>>27083295
bump from 10
>>27125936
Whatever happened to detron crewman? Whatever. I'm curious to see what you can make out of the confusing mess that is Warframe Lore.
I'm not happy with this update, but there have been several before that I thought were lacking yet still had a pretty good reception. We'll see.
>You are Anonymous 2.
>You’re pretty sure you should be freaking out.
>Communications are being shut down.
>It happened when you were asking about mind control and that orb, and you’re pretty certain that that’s no coincidence.
>It’s unfortunate that you didn’t get more information before it happened, because now you’re forced to make some assumptions.
>Assumption one. It doesn’t know about you, or at the very least doesn’t understand you.
>Otherwise you would be dead, it would be pretty trivial to do.
>You can surprise them then.
>Hopefully.
>Assumption two. It doesn’t understand the facilities that surround you.
>This is a fairly safe assumption, whoever it is isn’t human.
>And even if they were, they still couldn’t understand it.
>Self replicating and self improving machines quickly develop complexity beyond the creator’s design.
>And you- he was only able to build them thanks to massive databanks.
>It’s inconceivable at this point that any single being could actually understand this place as a whole.
>And whatever’s doing this wants at least some of your facilities online.
>It demands that this dig be finished.
>Odds are that nothing will get shut down unless it interferes with the dig.
>Assumption three.
>Black horse knows something important.
>There’s no reason to cut you off if she didn’t have relevant information.
>You need to reestablish communications with her.
>>27137594
>Assumption four.
>What you’re seeing is the stronger kind of mental control black horse was talking about.
>The being doing it has to directly control everything and can’t rely on you prime to do anything for them of his own free will.
>You needn’t worry too much about what you know, you need to worry about what they know.
>Assumption five.
>Whoever’s in charge won’t know how to use the database.
>While it seems fairly safe to assume that the neural implants will continue to work just fine, they wouldn’t be familiar with your computer system.
>In the long term they might figure something out by poking around at it, but for now they should be cut off from digital memory.
>So what does this all mean?
>Well, you’re going to have to act with some degree of subtlety.
>If your actions are similar enough to the unthinking machines going about their existing programs, you can continue to hide your existence.
>Unless you already blew your cover, of course. It’s possible they know about you from your attempts to communicate and simply haven’t found you yet.
>Maybe they don’t know enough about you to issue the order to destroy you.
>Maybe they need a name, or a location, or a general description.
>Too many unknowns.
>Next, unexpected behaviour should be unnoticed so long as there are no visible changes.
>Anything that happens within the computer network should be hidden.
>Hopefully.
>You can’t revoke other you’s write privileges on any of the existing computers.
>Not within any reasonable time frame at least.
>He understandably set it up to make sure he couldn’t get locked out.
>But perhaps you could set up your own network and rewire some of the gear to that one?
>Maybe hijack the whole place.
>If you can get enough of it under control before being noticed, you should be able to shut him down without any real risk of retaliation.
>If you get spotted too soon, you might have a fight on your metaphorical hands.
>>27137603
>So you need to build a mainframe of your own, and reroute everything to it.
>And you need to build it somewhere that’s hidden.
>Hiding it should be simple enough.
>Then, once you have a private network established, you need to get ahold of black horse.
>You need to know what’s going on.
>You are Spike.
>You are proud of yourself for maintaining bladder control.
>”TITAN? They’re real? They’re BACK? Are you SURE?”
>”Yes, yes, maybe, and no, but I can think of no other explanation.”
>Everyone knows the story of the titans.
>It’s trash.
>Sounds like the writer was trying too hard.
>That’s not important though.
>They made the world, filled it with life, and gave everyone magic.
>Then they simply watched.
>”What do we do? WHAT DO WE DO?”
>They watched as countless thinking beings toiled, starved, and perished as they struggled against the hostile world they were placed in.
>They watched as sickness plagued the lands, ending countless lives indiscriminately.
>They watched as the bodies they made withered and failed.
>”Why would they come back?”
>”HOW SHOULD I KNOW?”
>Then something unexpected happened.
>The sapient species that still lived started to settle down and tame the lands.
>They built shelter and discovered medicines.
>Life was still hard.
>None of the problems had been solved.
>But many had been alleviated.
>That’s when the Titans finally stepped in and touched the world.
>”We must prepare ourselves! They are NOT our masters!”
>”Luna, you know as well as I do that there’s nothing we can do to stop them! We can’t resist them!”
>They intervened in the troubled world, exerting their terrible wrath.
>All as one, every single Centaur fell over. Dead.
>Before the bodies even had a chance to cool, every sapient being in the world heard an otherworldly voice in their heads.
>”Amuse us!”
>>27137610
>”So what, we submit to them? We turn on our neighbors and allies? You’re supposed to be the princess of FRIENDSHIP, not treachery!”
>”You can’t have friends if you’re dead!
>The message was clear.
>They wanted blood, and they would get it.
>One way or another.
>Anyone who didn’t comply was at the mercy of the Titans.
>And the Titans had none.
>”You weren’t around last time, foal! Don’t assume to know what awaits, don’t think you know what it’s like! We are FREE, we are NOBODY’S prisoners, and I will NEVER be a slave! Besides, there may be another way. They aren’t likely to do us any harm just yet.”
>”What do you mean?”
>The whole world erupted into war.
>Hundreds of years passed, and the number of combatants dwindled.
>Everyone was exhausted.
>Everyone was weakened.
>And all throughout, the titans whispered their messages into everyone’s minds.
>”Too slow.”
>”Too weak.”
>”Pathetic.”
>They finally left the troubled world, disgusted by the feebleness of its denizens.
>”The visitor found something, deep beneath the surface I’m not certain of what it is, but based on the description it definitely seems to be of Titan origin. From what I can tell based on what they told me before we lost contact, something is dominating him and making him dig it up. I can’t say why that object is important but it’s pretty clear that they want it.”
>”If it’s being dominated, why can it still question Its own actions?”
>It took millennia, but the world came to a relatively peaceful era.
>Civilization rebuilt, and became greater than ever before.
>But even then, war would return.
>Any number of reason has been used as justification, but now it was their own choice.
>Their own mistake.
>Methods, weapons, and spells were refined and perfected.
>Armies continued to grow larger and larger as superstates began to form.
>And tactics grew progressively more brutal.
>>27110516
Nice, I like it. There's a lot of room for interesting conflict with this premise, and many directions to take it.
I agree a with >>27110828 that the Twilight scene could be a bit more involved, but I read it as a cartoony sort of intro - if she tossed him, he'd have bounced. I doubt Twilight would really let him become homeless if he didn't find somewhere else to stay, and would probably let him back in if he apologized.
Just two genres of music is pretty hard to believe if they have the technology to do complex electronic music. I wonder if there will be an in-world explanation for this. Maybe Luna was the patron of the arts, and things have stagnated under Celestia's "harmony", where the good guys always win and ponies go to bed at night?
>>27137625
>Were the Titans to return, they’d be pleased. Perhaps even proud.
>The nations of the world were now capable of the havoc they sought.
>”Is that really the strangest thing it’s done? We need to stop this before he finishes the excavation!”
>”Not only that, if someone else has dominated him, don’t they have his arsenal? What if they decide to use it?”
>Some say they still watch, biding their time.
>But don’t worry about that, young one.
>It’s just a story.
>Stories can’t hurt you.
>”Right. So we need to stop the domination. Now.”
>”Indeed. We must find the point of origin.”
>”I’ve never really studied mind control magic, but you’d need to see your target.”
>That doesn’t make any sense.
>Nearly the whole factory is enclosed.
>And it’s so heavily defended and so totally monitored that there’s no way anything could sneak in.
>Sure, maybe they could teleport in, but they wouldn’t have time to cast the spell.
>And if it’s a ritual?
>How would you set it up? How would you get that many wizards in there?
>No, Twilight’s wrong.
“Says who?”
>”It’s common knowledge, Spike. Targeted spells require visual contact.”
“Yeah, but WHY?”
>”Well, nopony’s ever found a way to do it without! There are theories about how you might be able to do it with enough magic, they all revolve around casting the spell on every single point where the target MIGHT be, but there’s no practical way to test them.”
“If they have enough magic. Like, say, a Titan.”
>Twilight blanches.
>Luna nods.
>”I fear you may be right, Spike. I can think of none other that would wish to do this, nor any who would be capable.”
“Right, so we need to mess up a Titan’s spell. Its abilities are mostly unknown. We’re better off thinking of what it CAN’T do right now, because we’ll never figure out what it CAN do. Twilight, what’s impossible to do with magic? Not difficult, not impractical, IMPOSSIBLE.”
>>27137632
>”For us plenty of things, but for a Titan? Nothing! How could anything like THAT have the same limits as us? We’re all going to diethere’snothingwecando-”
“Luna, snap her out of it.”
>A quick slap across the face later, Twilight stops.
“Thank you. Titan magic is the same as yours. They’re subject to the same laws, the same universal constants. I guarantee it.”
>”How can you be so sure?”
>”Indeed! How could any beings make all life in this world if they have the same obstacles as us?”
“Not obstacles, limits. If you step outside and look south, what will you see? Could YOU build that?”
>”Of course not!”
“Why not? The visitor follows all the same physical laws as us. If you knew how those things work you could make them too! Chemistry behaves the same for him, lightning behaves the same, physics, mathematics, EVERYTHING works the same for him. And yet he does impossible things with ease. They’re better at this than we are, but they have to follow the same rules. What are those rules?”
>”Well… Law one. All forms of magical interaction require a flow of magical energy. you can’t cast a spell if you don’t have enough magic ready, or if you have nowhere to let it flow. Law two. Magic will naturally flow from a state of high concentration towards a lower concentration. Magical buildup inside of you will leak out over time, so the limit there is an equilibrium problem-”
“You’re drifting. There might be some way to store it perfectly, some material that it doesn’t leak through. The law here is that magic diffuses.”
>”Right. Law three. Magic is equivalent. You can change magic into other kinds of energy, and vice versa. Law four, not exactly a law of magic but it still applies. Energy is permanent. It can change form and be stored, but a closed system will always have the same total energy.”
“The visitor agrees with you, with the addendum that matter and energy are the same thing.”
>>27137641
>”Wha-”
“Now is not the time.”
>“Right. Law five. The capacity for work in a closed system may not be increased. This isn’t widely accepted and we don’t really have any solid evidence-”
“Visitor agrees, with a few caveats that don’t really matter in this case.”
>”That’s it. That’s all we have.”
“Okay, that’s half the story covered. Luna, tell us about Titans.”
>”What is there to say? There were two Titans-”
“TWO?”
>”Two, massive beings in the sky that ignored all attacks directed at them. They didn’t even retaliate, it wasn’t worth their time. Their shells seemed impervious to everything.”
>”Wait a minute, how do you know that?”
>”Well, obviously we tried to fight back, it just didn’t work. Every few centuries they would open their shells, and everyone’s magic would grow weaker for a while.”
“And WHY are you just telling us that NOW?”
>”There are a lot of things on my mind right now! The visitor found something that looks like a Titan shell-”
>”IT’S RIGHT BELOW US?”
>”No. This object is too small and round. But it looks similar, has an intense magical aura about it, and seems nigh on indestructible.”
“Well, what exactly IS it?
>”Well, it’s only a guess, but…”
That's it. I'm a tease. Paste (finally) updated http://pastebin.com/430ryWVh
I wanted it to come as a bit of a surprise that the titans were such bastards, so I had Luna be pretty vague when she first mentioned them. She never said what anyone thought of them, just that they made the world, observed, and left in disgust. Some of you didn't fall for it, but I tried.
This story has always been something of a cosmic horror from the pony perspective. They're forced to question their significance in the universe as an impossible being from space shakes their world perspective. The Titans are meant to be similar, but draw strength from a more familiar place.
So, what's in the box? Any guesses?
>>27137594
Warframe has lore? Holy shit.
>>27137699
I'm calling it now. The titans are intergalactic reality tv show hosts
>>27137765
HA
>>27137737
Warframe has lore that's even less coherent than the so called "secret stories" that orphan children in Miami make up to bring reason to their plight.
>>27137699
God damn it I swear if they are intergalactic car salesmen, I will find you.
>>27137737
spacemom got sterile when entering the void for the first time
her daddy got killed in some manner of folly and she had to complete a mission which involved killing the tenno
she wanted to have some form of children so she didn't kill the tenno and made herself their mom
this is literally the sum and fucking total of it
>>27138107
>literally just Natah and Second Dream
So much for lore, after %whocares% years.
>>27138133
I'm just glad to finally have solved the mystery of who the fucking Tenno really are.
Best part is, I made mine a qt aryan girl.
>>27137699
it's an egg isn't it?
>>27137699
The artefact in question is an unborn titan. Titans use strife and anguish to create powerful emotions to feed their unborn in the core of a world. The world cracks open when the unborn is mature enough to join the heavens.
What we have here is Anonymous digging up a titan who is on the verge of maturity. However, when the titan is removed, the world will lose its magic as the titan fetus is the source.
At least, that's my guess.
MY MURDERING IS CONTINUED!!
FUCKING LOVED TO WRITE THIS SHIT DOWN, BUT DAMN WORK, IT'S KILLING ME!
Chapter 8
It's been 3 days since the first day of work from Dinky
She've learn how to fix a lot of things
But just wood things
Tools where hande to her and her hability
Anon insisted in her taking "Twilight time"
She accepts and is tutored by both, Anon and Twilight
Once in a while, Anon check on them
Lovely dovebly and sweet as hunny
The cmc's and Dinky are disgusted
Spike is just watching with good faith
When they are over, she comes to Anon to teach her about technology, tools and what she needs to know to help her mother.
Right now, they are on the way to take an order that Anon asked to Rarity
When they arrive, Rarara jumps to hug Anon
She is called from Manehattan to a new fashion serie
Ask Anon if he wants to come
He has dought in his head
Ask Rarara to give him till tomorrow
She accepts and gives him his order
All in all, Anon asked for hats, in this case
Construction helmets
They look cool, filly is amazed, they even come with a light
There is one to Anon, and for the surprise of the pony child, there is one for her too.
All in that yellow that you love.
They take the road back to Ponyville to keep working with now, flaming new helmets
Ponies look at him and her walking with a backpack filled with tools and a saddlebag filled with little tools, some paper and ink.
>>27138434
Ever considered just writing out the pastebin till it overflowed, then just post it in regular segments when you have free time?
>>27120234
can someone tell me what the wires are sticking out of the gpu? (cpu?) I've never taken a graphics card apart but I know a cpu has pins, not wires. Also, why isnt this fixable? Replace the thermal paste.. Is it just cause the ripped some wires out of the GPU? (IDK how video cards work)
>>27138792
Unlike cpus a gpu is not designed to be physically removed from it's place. So don't think of it as just removing a cpu from it's socket. Think of it as tearing out the socket from the motherboard and trying to fix that.
>>27132002
>not powering yourself directly by pure magic
Elan repletion.
http://www.d20srd.org/srd/psionic/monsters/elan.htm
What if pony magic is just psionics?
We don't see ritual circles, gestures, or archaic words spoken during spell use. Just lots of concentration. The unicorn's magic glow could just be the psionic ectoplasm that forms when using mind powers.
>>27139625
Then how come there are rules and restriction to one's power of the mind?
Dark magic and complete deprivation of someone's "arcane" capabilities?
Gestures? We've seen plenty. Simply pointing horn at the target of the spell, to begin with.
What would Discord be then? A psionic construct of sorts?
And surely, rituals, "magic words" and other props can be just as well dismissed as serving to help "focus" on the performed task and being a quick reference on how exactly to perform the said task.
Finally, a number of creatures have been seen to posses magical ability in some form. Are they all psionically capable?
>>27139708
>Then how come there are rules and restriction to one's power of the mind?
Besides game balance and plot device? We see ponies only have a couple tricks related to their personality. If we're talking D&D 3.5 then you can use the NPC class Augur for unicorns, meaning most will only have a couple powers known. Rarity and Twilight have more 'arcane' might, but that could simply be because they're player classes.
>Dark magic and complete deprivation of someone's "arcane" capabilities?
This would be more roleplaying than mechanics, as there's no difference between good and evil psionics, just how you apply powers to potential victims. Since the show has dark magic have its own look, you could houserule certain psionic powers have different psionic manifestations when used.
>Gestures? We've seen plenty. Simply pointing horn at the target of the spell, to begin with.
That is true, but in D&D arcane gestures are more than just pointing; usually taking the form of full-body movement, precise hand waving, and/or subtle dancing. This is why armor restricts somatic spells and can cause spell failure.
>What would Discord be then? A psionic construct of sorts?
There's a couple routes one could go with him. Psionic construct is definitely possible (golems, psionic warforged for example), but the other possibility is he's a psionic elemental or outsider. Either way, in Discord's case I would say just don't make a stat block as he's something that isn't meant to be fought normally.
>Finally, a number of creatures have been seen to posses magical ability in some form. Are they all psionically capable?
I don't see why not. A fantasy world without arcane magic could make vast use of psionics. Creatures that originally had spell-like abilities are now psi-like abilities.
As icing on the cake, in D&D psionics make use of crystals and gems to augment their psychic abilities. Ponies have a love of gems and jewels, and every artifact we've seen has some form of gem.
>>27139997
Ultimately, though, this wouldn't really change anything except the flavor and what sort of 'arcane' services the average adventurer can expect to have access to:
Rather than divine healing granted by the gods, you have unicorn psions knitting broken bodies through their will.
Rather than traditional magic items like wooden wands and staves and metal rings, you have jewels-studded crowns, psionically-charged gems, and powerful crystal creations.
Rather than relying on others, you have psionic creatures that augment their natural abilities with subtle psionics.
Rather than the arcane being a gift of diluted dragon bloodlines, you now have creatures showing supernatural abilities through sheer force of will.
If you take it a step further and make all creatures naturally psionic in some way, then your ponies can form metaconcerts where they bolster and pool each other's powers to create effects greater than an individual alone (see picture).
A world where the power of the mind results in the 'arcane' would allow quite a dichotomy between 'arcane' and technology as they require two completely different outlooks. One requiring rigorous mental exercise to develop and the other requiring precision production and calculation to develop.
>>27139997
>This is why armor restricts somatic spells and can cause spell failure.
Finally, found the explanation behind this mechanic in RPGs.
The more you know.
>>27140057
Well then, I'd like to point out the whole friendship thing that seem to empower certain princess, as it makes perfect sense within the theory.
This would also explain the changes in body of some other princess during her practice of dark magic. I believe that, at least ponies, may evoke their psychic potential through emotions, which leads me to conclusion that "dark" magic is but a way to harness the negative emotions, nearly mirroring the dark side of Force in Star Wars. And, as mind is capable of altering the body, state of the mind may influence this alteration, which is how creatures achieve their "nightmare" or evil form.
Returning the discussion on the pony tracks, such relationship between psionics and certain materials leaves space for possible improvement and empowerment through the application of technology.
>>27083295
I saw the header image before I read what Twilight was saying. I got a strange impression from it.
>Anon is successful in re-creating some of his technology
>Twilight is just aggressively disbelieving him
>"You're full of SHIT, Anon. I know a magical crystal lamp when I see one. And that particle accelerator? Listen, do you know a pony named Trixie, Anon? I do. I can see through smoke and mirrors like NOPONY'S business!"
>Months pass by and Twilight gets worse
>She's taken to drinking in the morning
>"Buckin'... Yeah, I know what a Higgs Boson thingy is. But Large Hadron collider? M-more like Large HARD-ON collider! Hah! G-get it? It's 'cause Anon's a FAGGOT!"
>>27138107
>>27138133
Warframe is also a sequel to Dark Sector, so that game's story can be included. If you want a rundown of the story http://warframe.wikia.com/wiki/Story_and_History
It's clearly written by dozens of different writers who didn't coordinate at all.
>>27140485
DS has little to nothing to do with cuckframe.
It think it was stated by DE themselves that there is no connection between the games. All similarities can be considered just references, easter eggs and whatnot.
But I may be mistaken.
>>27140560
If you read through the link you'll find a lot of similarities. DS has the virus that makes the infested, warframes, and specifically Excalibur. Or don't read through it, that's what I suggest. It's not a very good story.
>>27140668
Too late. I've played the game already.
And relation between ol' Hayden and the 10o is simple - there isn't any. Warframes are just golems of flesh, metal and technocytes.
DE's so creatively bankrupt that they have to reuse names from their previous "creation".
Still, I would like if they added more utility to Glaive, which they most certainly won't.
