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ITT: MLP:FiM fanfictions, on-topic discussions, off-topic discussions, replacing commas with semicolons, voteposting, creating your own wiki so you can keep the shitty details about your shitty fic straight, debating the definition and meaning of ménage à trois, noone cares about the comics, The most loved stories on fimfiction are also the most hated, converting shitty greentext into shitty prose and dumping a canon character into anon's place, prequels to Nightmare Stars Revenge, voiceguy threatens to narrate The Chase unless we can keep him sedated with booze, and why does Twilight always get turned into a mexican in humanized artwork?
Tired of the same old 'Human goes to Equestria to fuck his herd of underage waifus' formula? Burnt out after reading that Fallout crossover? Well, we've compiled the best of the worst in order to bring you our absolute average!
Introducing, the FiM-Fiction Starter Kit (list of winners):
http://i.imgur.com/vuTA7EN.png
List of nominees by category:
http://mlp-fanfics.herokuapp.com/
>Need a somewhat average writing prompt?:
http://autismwhinnies.tumblr.com/
>how do I write fanfiction?
http://eznguide.neocities.org/
Riffs & Reviews:
http://pastebin.com/u/notkickass222urmom
Voiceguy's readings:
https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCt68MpmvEketmqOdHncHI2w
>Prompt of the Week: Write a lusty clopfic which heavily involves a fetish that you, the writer, know nothing about.
Do you want critique on your story? Post it on Google Docs with inline comments enabled.
Old thread: >>25703967
scooterdude get
>>25750437
I thought bumping was these threads' thing.
>>25750490
>bitching about having to read things in a thread about reading
>>25750562
>implying words should be read
>implying meaning shouldn't be absorbed based on the general shape, color and font of the text block
I guess I just appreciate literature and/or horseporn on a higher level than you, anon
Have any stories come out since the Starter Kit's completion that might be worth adding to it?
this is most like ly not the place for this, but does anyone knoe the name of a fic im trying to find?
The fic is AU equestria, where humans are slaves to ponies. Twilight's family purchases one of these slaves, and names him gray (i think). yadda yadda, years pass and gray has feelings for twilight and vice versa, which is bad cause slaves and all that. That's all I can remember besides the fact that shinning was the main antagonist for this fic, and was racist towards humans and gray. Help would be appreciated greatly
>>25750696
>The fic is AU equestria, where humans are slaves to ponies.
that'd almost have to be part of the 'your human and you' verse
>>25750733
thank you friend, hopefully this will help
>>25750733
nothing. Couldn't find a thing.
I should aslo probably mention that the human could speak (again, if i remember right) and im pretty sure that the author only posted the story on fanfic, not fimfic
>>25751002
sorry then.I thought a couple of the YHAY bandwagons had talking humans.
but if its on ff.net i cant help
>>25751057
thats fine, it might not even be that good, I've been re-reading alot of the old fics i liked and realized that they are mostly shit, excepting of course Warming Up, my first and favorite
Here's Chap 9. Almost done spamming the thread. Only 3 more to go.
(https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m5rm2BGnEDSKNVCIWn_a2PM3PLinH3hdl3xatOFU90Q/edit)
>>25750696
>>25751002
Fuck, it took a little digging. It started to annoy me because I remembered seeing it before. At least, I assume this is it.
(https://www.fimfiction.net/story/53757/chains)
>>25751081
AH SHIT, THIS IS THE STORY NIGGA
thank you based anon, I havent been able to get this out of my head for three days
>>25751111
>I havent been able to get this out of my head for three days
I'm so sorry. Must be like when you never get a good song stuck in your head
also checked.
>>25752968
from page 5?
>>25752982
you fucked it up
you cunt
Quick question: has Starlight ever teleported in the show before?
>>25753687
I don't think so, but seeing what she's capable of, I think teleporting is well within her limits.
>>25753904
Actually, her not teleporting works out for me. There's a few scenes I want to write where things could be solved easily by having the characters teleport, and I don't want people asking "why doesn't Starlight just teleport?"
>>25754194
Maybe just tell them teleporting wastes a high amount of magic, too much for some situations.
There was a thing about a law for teleportation. I'd see the graph as a "partie entière" or a parabole with a positive A variable.
>>25750437
>creating your own wiki so you can keep the shitty details about your shitty fic straight
You say that like it's any challenge at all, mediawiki is just throwing a folder at an apache server and most other wikis are even easier. Hell, dokuwiki even comes with it's own miniapache server that just werks.
>>25754210
Except that there will be situations where that expenditure would be worth it, but would ruin the suspense.I'm trying to write a Mission:Impossible/A-team/Charlie's Angel style story with Starlight as a member of a task force that does secret missions and stuff, and I don't want her using teleportation to bypass some of the security systems they might want to hack into. I could put anti-teleportation barriers up everywhere, but not having her be able to teleport makes things easier.
>>25754247
Just think of teleportation, dude.
It is a spell that:
>forcefully shoves you through spacetime to another place irregardless of physical possibilities
>produces a fuckton of light
>produces a fuckton of noise
>needs prior knowledge of the destination to work
It could only work as an emergency getaway spell.
>>25754247
I think her not being able to teleport would be pretty unrealistic, seeing she apparently has the same amount of power as Twilight, during that fight scene.
Maybe have her having to concentrate for a few instants before teleportation, and that this leaves her vulnerable?On the other hand, how did SG get into the secret operation thing? Not saying it's bad, I'm writing a similar thing.
>>25754286
Twilight decides to form a team of Unicorns with Attitude in order in order to protect Equestria from threats against Harmony. She recruits Sunset, Starlight, Trixie, Moondancer, and Radiant Hope and sends them out on missions against bad guys. The whole thing is a bit of a spoof of 80's action movies, so things like logic and realism will be set aside in favor of explosions, over-the-top fight scenes, and one-liners.
Each chapter will probably be an "episode," with the team hunting down some bad with some bond-villain style agenda, infiltrating places and fighting waves of mooks until they finally they face off against the bad guy in his lair located underground/underwater/in a volcano/in space/all of the above. The bad guy will try to kill them using his signature weapon of a crossbow/a golden wingblade/a killsat/sharks equipped with laser weapons, but the good guys will ultimately triumph through cunning and firepower. I'm starting the story "in medias res," with the team already formed and doing missions, and probably won't explain how they actually got together until the inevitable episode where they have to face off against the firrst villain they defeated while flashbacks to their first mission keep interrupting the story.
>>25754382
>located underground/underwater/in a volcano/in space/all of the abov
>Underground underwater volcano in space
Please do this
>>25754382
>Recruits Trixie
Why? She's a cocky mare with a superiority complex, which we didn't even see display any superior powers.
>Radiant Hope
Who is he/she?
The plot sounds good, but you should probably explain how they got together earlier, maybe in some kind of vague prologue.
>>25754394
I will eventually. This is a secondary project I'll probably abandon and go back to multiple times between working on more serious (non-pony) stories, but if I do finish an episode I'll post it. Currently, they're fighting a cult of Nightmare Moon trying to revive her with an ancient ritual, so I could have the final battle be in a volcano located beneath an underground lake on the moon.
>>25754382
>She recruits Sunset, Starlight, Trixie, Moondancer, and Radiant Hope
Is twilight some sort of unicorn supremacist?
>>25754424
For the Trixie thing, I'm giving her a power level upgrade for her skills in illusion magic, so that she can sort of keep up with the others.
Radiant Hope is a character from the comics. She's Sombra's ex-girlfriend/possibly current girlfriend and a very powerful unicorn who was apparently on the way to becoming a Princess. I sort of threw her in on a lark but I might take her out if I can't fit her into the missions properly. Her Cuite Mark is a caduceus, so I'll give her a specialty in healing magic, and possibly make her an expert in defensive magic as well, in order to round out the team.
And I'm planning on writing some kind of A-team style intro voiceover to explain things a little at the beginning.
>>25754437
This whole thing started as a joke about Twilight collecting foils, so that's why they're all unicorns. I suppose I could throw Lightning Dust in there or something too, but I kind of like the idea of an all-unicorn squad who are all really smart but have a penchant for solving problems through the application of superior firepower.
This motherfucker right here
>>25754903
I suddenly feel much better about myself. Thanks, anon
>>25754903
I see his threads constantly in various groups
it's kinda sad
Should I write a good story or pander to fimfiction to get views and likes?
>>25754984
both
>>25754984
This >>25754990
The two aren't mutually exclusive. In fact, the things you need to do to write a good story and to write a popular story are mostly unrelated. The reason there's so little overlap between great fics and popular fics isn't because one precludes the other, it's because writing a great fic is hard, writing a popular fic is hard, and most people have enough trouble just doing one of those things, never mind both.
That's no excuse, though. You should try to do both, unless you're one of those spergs who don't care about quality/one of those "REAL artists" who don't care about popularity.
>>25755077
But what, exactly, is popular? Let's assume that I am completely cognitively disassociated from the popular mentality of fimfiction.
>>25755270
Just write shitty smut with a shitty title and a shitty cropped lewd picture. You'll get to the frontpage in no time.
And that wasn't a joke.
>>25755270
Off the top of my head:
-Stories where the main character allows the reader to vicariously live out a power or sexual fantasy
-Stories which tackle a philosophical problem in a straightforward and unambiguous manner which is easily accessable to all readers
-Stories which contain a major elements which most readers will have a personal connection to (e.g. video games, or dubstep)
-Stories whose plots are easily reducible to a single titular idea
Note that, although there are LOTS of shitty fics with the above elements, none of them are actually bad in and of themselves. For example, that last category includes great fics like Skywriter's "Princess Celestia Hates Tea."
>>25754464
It's shipping [INSERT NEWLY INTRODUCED/REFORMED CHARACTER] with [INSERT SAID CHARACTER FRIEND/RANDOM PONY YOU LIKE/BLACK AND RED OC], writing smut about them and cropping lewd for the cover.
And yeah, don't forget to add "It's my first story pl0x be gentle" at the start of the synopsis, in the comments and everywhere you can, except in the author notes or an author's notes chapter.
Also, as >>25755357 said, writing about abortion/transexuality/non-heterosexuality/war/racism in an overly simplified black and white way, without forgetting to tell your reader why your opinion is always right.
>>25755270
Porn and romance
Write these two well and you'll popular in every fandom, because that's what fans love the most.
>one of those "REAL artists" who don't care about popularity.
You know, there are people who do stuff because they enjoy it, without caring about exposure. In fact, these are the ones who become successful in the long run.
Write some love story about a girl and a vampire because I can't sleep at night. Get popular.
Write BDSM smut because I like it and it makes me horny and gathers to my fetishes. Get popular.
Write about wizard boys. Get popular.
You get the idea.
Shit writer masturbate over theme, idea, style, profundity, complexity.
Good writers just write.
>>25755357
>Stories whose plots are easily reducible to a single titular idea
A good writer should be able to do this to a certain extent, both for books of their own and what they read.
I don't disagree with you, just wanted to say that.
>>25755425
>In fact, these are the ones who become successful in the long run.
Extremism of all kinds is bad.
A good writer needs to masturbate a bit over theme, idea and style at least, the other two are optional and depend on the particular story being writen. The little prince, for exameple, is relatively deep without being complex.
Then, when theme, idea, and style are decided, he needs to sit down and just write.
>>25755399
>>25755319
>Wait was it that bad?
>Enable Mature viewing, head for the frontpage
Never you mind.
It is. There is a reason I keep the thing disabled.
>>25755464
>Extremism of all kinds is bad.
I think Anon meant that they become successful, but not necessarily good. It's like Past Sins and Chink Azura's fics becoming popular when they should have obviously been raising OPOC red flags.
>>25755319
>>25755357
>>25755399
B-but... I write clop, but I'm still unpopular.
>>25755923
Then git gud.
>>25755923
Are you virgin?
Because the crux for successful smut in fimfiction is being virgin. The more obvious you've never been within six meters of the oposite sex the better.
>>25755936
NO U!
>>25755961
I'm actually not... What makes a clop popular, besides individual fetishes and whatnot?
>>25755497
Good is entirely subjective.
People who read stuff like Past Sins, Twilight, 50 Shades think that stuff is good writing, and consider other stuff like Pynchon and Joyce unreadable and pretentious.
Quality of literature is entirely a matter of personal perception. Of course you can call people who like stuff that you consider as having "shit taste", but it still is your personal opinion, not an eternal idea from the platonic world of ideas.
>>25756057
The question is, how do I write something that I would like that would still fit with what everyone else thinks is good?
>>25756038
>I'm actually not
You dun guffed.
If you aren't virgin you can't be horsefamous. Cease and desist, profane being, for this is a place for those of Pure Hearths and Self-Managed Penises.
>>25756076
The answer for that is faaaaaaar too ample. And the right question is "How do I writer something that I like like and some other people would like too", because invariably someone will utterly despise what you did and truly believe you deserve to die for doing it.
There is good writing -which can save a bad plot-, good plot -which can save bad writing-, good slice of life, good character development, good character portrayal, good depth of characters, good mental images, and many things besides. Just write.
>>25756108
>you can't be a non-virgin and horsefamous
How many times has Black Gryph0n slammed Michelle by now?
>>25756194
Right after he got horsefamous? Constantly.
Allegorist bump.
Two of those masturbate memefics showed up with the same character at the same time and now they're both doing badly with angry people in the comments.
>>25758027
Who's masturbating?Pls say Photo Finish.
>>25758300
Wait you mean someone isn't?
>>25756076
You simply write.
Some of it will stick, some not.
As long as you're having fun and are satisfied with your stuff, it's all good.
And if you want to do it professionally, you can try and submit it to places, because being obscure on fimfiction doesn't mean that you don't have chances in the real world.
>>25754903
WELP
>>25759156
>tfw your writing isn't autistic enough for Voiceguy to do a mocking reading of
>>25759337
keep trying, anon. youll get there someday
Renacentist bump.
>>25759156
>namefagging
Get out.
>>25760146
>being this new
Can anyone recommend a lighthearted, 70k+ word romance or adventure (or both) fic? I feel for something on the longer side but I want to smile while I'm reading it as well.
https://www.furaffinity.net/view/18504300/
Thoughts?
>>25761206
I can't see it, hombre. I need to log in.
Please post your login name and password, so that we can see it.
>>25761145
The two that come to the top of my mind, are these:
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>Dreams and Disasters
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/89598/dreams-and-disasters
>99k words
Cadence realises that Rainbow Dash has a crush on Twilight, and since she doesn't have a kingdom to run or anything, Celestia and her send the two on a journey accross thinly veiled allusions to European countries, hoping the two of them get together.
There's a sequel but I haven't read it yet.
----
>Eyes On You
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/7531/eyes-on-you
>148k words
One day, Twilight hears a cry of help in the forest, when she goes to invesitgate, she founds a battered Trixie being attacked by Timberwolves. What follows is the birth of a strong friendship, and perhaps something more. But, why has Trixie returned to Ponyville?
Well, she wants Twilight to be her partner in the Manehattan Magic Display, Equestria's most prestigious show magic expo.
This fic has, in my opinion, probably one of the most satisfying build-ups to a relationship I've read in ponyfic. Ant the tournament itself is very enjoyable.
>>25761229
Oh yeah, no problem.
Login name is "Fuckthepolice"
and password is "shiggasain'tnit"
>>25760218
>>25760948
>circlejerking
Nobody. Cares.
>>25761651
There are better ways to bump the thread, Anon.
Looking to make a really descriptive story. Give me a list of tabboo words/phrases to avoid. Ex: "She was so happy."
>>25761856
Is, am, are, were, was
Chap 10.
(https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cO1tk-QVummyqeX-_ZpD3-Dnt-g8XlvWSI7t2OMoQ30/edit?usp=sharing)
I'm a little worried about Night Glider's characterization. I was trying to aim for her being impressionable and a little fanatic thanks to the whole "happily living in a cult town" thing, but I think I over did it.
>>25751111
No problem.
>>25754247
>anti-teleportation barriers
I like that more than just having her not teleport, since it makes sense that a high security place would try to counteract unicorn abilities.
>>25754382
>team of unicorns
Why not mix it up? There's no reason you can't mine the show/comics for some pegasi (Lightning Dust, Cirrus Cloud, etc.) or earth ponies (Maud, Cherry Blossom, etc.). It would certainly open up the plot and character interaction potential.
>>25754903
Every time I think my stories are shit and I shouldn't post them, I just have to remind myself that there's users out there who have no problem posting this kind of stuff publicly.
>>25754984
Write whatever you have more fun doing.
>>25755270
There's a lot of things that Fimfiction's audience likes:
>fics inspired by/based on the most recent episode
>clop with "mainstream" fetishes*
>comedy/slice of life oneshots
>a sequel to an already popular story
>a new take on an existing fanfic genre (warfic, TCB, evil!Twilight, x becomes a changeling, etc.)
>a parody/deconstruction of a recent popular story
>a totally new plot that's well done
>>25756076
Find a genre (comedy, romance, etc.) you enjoy writing and try out some short (>7500 words) oneshots in that genre. Comedy and SoL are preferred, but Dark oneshots can also get featured, especially if it's 2spooky as opposed to edgy.
Guys, I'm working on my first fic ever. Is it practically guaranteed to be shit?It's cosmic horror
>>25763010
Not fated, but probable.
>>25763043
Any precautions I can take against this? I have the obvious ones down (editing, planning, adequate command of the English language) and I'm looking through the eznguide as well.
My biggest fear is that I don't think I can write characters well. I worry that everyone's dialog and tone will be indistinguishable and lack personality, but I'm worried that if I make an effort to correct this the characters will just become flanderized.
>>25763079
Get a prereader. That's the big one.
>>25763106
Would I go to the writefags' guild thread for that? I don't know anyone personally that would be willing to do that.Actually, I'm pretty sure my friends would be willing, but I don't want to force my autism on them. Plus, they're liable to sugarcoat the results.
>>25763123
Ask people here. I suck at it, but I'm sure someone will be willing to give you feedback.
>>25763123
Get your nemesis to read it.
>>25763147I don't have a nemesis. I'm too passive. People either like me or don't notice me.
>>25763166
Sounds like you're your own nemesis.
You know what to do.
>>25763180
Take hallucinogens until I vividly see an evil version of myself and have a climactic battle to the death with them?
I'm thinking salvia.
>>25763197
>Take hallucinogens until I vividly see an evil version of myself and have a climactic battle to the death with them?
thats the solution for every writers issues.
>>25762698
>Why not mix it up? There's no reason you can't mine the show/comics for some pegasi (Lightning Dust, Cirrus Cloud, etc.) or earth ponies (Maud, Cherry Blossom, etc.). It would certainly open up the plot and character interaction potential.
Yes, this. Gilda as Mr. T, please.
>>25764356
I could much more easily see Iron Will pityin' the fool
>>25762698
>>25764356
>>25764362
Looking over my roster, I realized that there's a lot of overlap and pointless characters in my current team. How about this instead?
Sunset Shimmer
Starlight Glimmer
Lightning Dust
Gilda
I'd like to round things out with one or two members who don't have wings or magical horns, but I'm having trouble deciding who would fit into this team.
Iron Will doesn't feel right for some reason, mostly due to his sheer size and physical differences, which would make it difficult to fit him into the stealthier missions, and I don't want to keep having to write a special role for him every time.
Maud could work, especially since she could balance out all the hotheadedness on the team, but I'm having trouble finding a motivation for her being on the team, since she's supposed to be studying rocks somewhere, and it might be difficult to have her "click" with the rest of the team.
I want to avoid using OCs, since I think it's funnier to see canon charscters doing all these crazy things, so now I'm a bit stuck. I can't even think of a comic character that would work,
>>25764852
>I'm having trouble finding a motivation for her being on the team
She could be on the science team. She's the geology expert.
"For this mission you'll need to infiltrate an underground lair. You'll have to drill through several layers of thick sediments... and igneous rock... before... reaching the... bedrock."
"Maud, are you okay?"
"Shhh... give her a minute."
>>25764916
That could work. Accelerate her degree a bit so that she's already graduated, then have Twilight hire her for this team.Her motivation being that she wants to save people and fight bad guys just like her little sister
The Chase by kudzuhaiku chapter 1
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oANh11bHafI
liver poisoning.
>>25765123
>The Chase by kudzuhaiku
We could've prevented this...
What character(s) do you use most?
What character(s) have you not used but would like to use?
>>25765295
>What character(s) do you use most?
Twilight, but she's never really a main character.
>What character(s) have you not used but would like to use?
Applejack.
>>25765295
>Twilight, Sweetie Belle
>Cheerilee, Lightning Dust, Trixie, Derpy, Flitter
How do I make page breaks in my stories?
>>25765295
Twilight, Rarity.
Ponk, Zecora.
>>25765295
Most used: Twilight is the only one who's been at least *present* in all of my fics, whether published or abandoned.
Unused character that I'd like to: honestly, Flash Sentry. Most people who hate him point at his lack of characterization so it might be a fun challenge to give him that. It worked well for me with Twi's parents, at least.
>>25765908
But all the characterization he has right now is "rich dudebro". That's an awful fucking base.
>>25765908
All of my Flash Sentry stories have more dislikes than likes, even though I thought they were pretty good.
>>25765908
>Flash Sentry
will he be a stand in for a self insert who fucks everyone there, carcinoMoth? mythrilGeneticist?
>>25765554
I don't remember if fimfiction has a built-in feature for it, as far as I know most people just make one themselves. Some people insert images of custom-made scene breaks, some use a half-dozen blank lines.....it varies from person to person. Personally I just use a simple triple-dash with a couple of blank lines on either side. Do whatever looks the least ugly to you.
>>25765926
Rich? That's a new one to me.
>>25765935
I'm not expecting to win many battles there anyway, but the guy's seriously lacking in good fics.
What were yours about, out of curiosity?
>>25766099
If he fucks anyone it'll be Twilight, just because it pisses everyone off so much and I find that hilarious.
>>25766173
Rich judging from that fucking car he drives. Spoiled, at least.
>>25766173
>What were yours about, out of curiosity?
One was about him slamming Fluttershy. The other one he slapped his dick on Moondancer.
>>25765554
Press enter until you reach the next page.
>>25765295
>The CMC, Spike
They are awfuly underused, even when there is great potential for them. The CMC can give endless humor, and Spike character developmente and be the sober guy in a world gonne madde, which is also a fun position to write.
>The alicorns
I feel that all of them except for Twilight have tons, TONS of potential character development, especially Luna.
>>25765295
>What character(s) do you use most?
Twilight, AJ, Spike
>What character(s) have you not used but would like to use?
Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie
>>25764852
Why not Bon Bon?
I mean, she is the only actual spy/special operations pony we have seen in the show. Could be good for infiltration and stuff.
>>25767327
Or the hard boiled veteran.
>>25767346
I'm seeing her more like a rookie in New Harmony, with her and her team failing their first mission bringing the last nail in the organisation's coffin to Sunbutt's eyes.
Nevertheless, her training would be very useful in anon's fic.
>Rarity and Applejack's war PTSD is now canon
Does that mean I'm not a faggot for making fanfics about it?
>>25767399
You still are anon.What do you mean by PTSD? Wasn't the edgy spaghetti army combatti alternate future totally detached from canon?
>>25767327
I was actually planning on having Bon Bon rejoin whatever spy agency she was part of and show up as one of the recurring characters whenever the team needs to team up with the agency.
Also, I'm having too much fun with Maud's deadpan.
>>25767480
You would have to find a way to get the agency back then. Bon Bon stated herself that Celestia shut it down, demanding it never be talked of.
>>25767495
Well, according to the show, the reason they shut down the agency was the Bugbear escaping from Tartarus. With the Bugbear gone, there's no reason why they couldn't start things up again. There could even be a chapter where they're understaffed from setting up and Twilight sends her team in to help out for a bit.
>>25767532
>With the bugbear gone, there's no reason why they could start things again
FTFY
No more monster threat means no reason for the agency to exist. With the elements here for magic mcguffin, Equestria literally has no reason to finance such an agency.
The reason they shut down the agency is probably because they have failed at their job, in this case, catching the bugbear. Keeping six ponies together and alert is much cheaper than financing an entire secret service organisation.
I'm basically playing the agency off, in my fic, as a passive defense, to prevent the use of the elements altogether, by finding and hopefully destroying threats at their source. I wouldn't go with Bon Bon working in the agency, but rather her just going to help Twalot from time to time.
>>25767585
Well, one of the premises of my fic is that there are plenty of threats out there in addition to the stuff that the EoH solve, and it's not always practical send them out after every little thing, which is where these secondary teams and agencies come in.
And I prefer to interpret the shutdown as the Bugbear having some information that endangered them all, requiring the whole agency to go underground. Also, since it was after Bon Bon specifically, its possible that they sent her deep cover, burnt all the evidence of the original agency, then founded a new one in a new location without telling Bon Bon, since there was no way she could go back until after the Bugbear was taken care of.
Again, there's many ways of interpreting that episode, especially since they didn't give much detail. I like the idea of having an actual secret agency doing spy missions for the Crown that's currently active and I think that provides more fodder for my story.
>>25767757
>Monster can endanger a complete agency, requiring to shut it down completely
That's a bit far-fetched. Governmental intelligence agencies are so vast and organized you won't have a single factor put the whole in danger. I have no problem with resurrecting the agency, as I do the same, but I am a bit triggered by Hollywood-esque stuff about the military and intelligence services.
But that's just me. Fimfags will love it, I'm sure.
>>25767956
I mean, shutting an agency because of a single failure in general seems far-fetched unless it's a really dangerous target in the first place. And even then, canning an entire agency is a really big deal. It's probably easier to think of Bon Bon's statement as shorthand for saying that they only shut down the monster hunting part of the agency, and left the rest of it running, and then later revived that part of it under a different name and structure since it's probably really important to have a division like that around.
>>25768072
Either that, or tha particular incident was the last in a long string of blunders that ultimately lead to the disintegration of the agency.
>>25768072
Another explanation that I was going to use in another fic is that the Bugbear had someone high-up in the agency helping him escape, and that was the reason why they had to shut everything down, since everything was compromised.
Really, given how little detail we have about the agency, there's a host of possible explanations for what could have happened.
>>25768091
That. It's basically what's happening in New Harmony.
Phoenix (My name for the former organization) does well, ut starts its fall into decadence and incompetence one or two decades before its temporary shutdown. Its director promises Celestia the new recruits, including Bon Bon, will live up to her expectations, when put on the Bugbear case.
When they don't, Celestia has enough, and considering Twalot and her friend just redeemed NMM, doesn't see any need to keep Phoenix up and running.
This works if you only consider the organisation as a pure monster-hunting one, but I guess your explanation also works considering your PoV.
>>25767060
From personal experience the CMC are very difficult to write together as a group. The dynamic can be difficult to pin down unless you're familiar with the nuances of their characterization and having a good balance of dialogue/screen time for them to shine is difficult to pull off. That and it can be hard to write humor with them effectively.
>>25768487
That works. The whole business with Bon Bon having to go into hiding opens up a bunch of tantalizing questions, though. Is it actually the bugbear she's hiding from, or someone else? Does she have some kind of relationship with the bugbear, is it seeking revenge, or is it some kind of Pavlovian thing where she trained it, or what...? I've been wondering about that part.
what special talent for monster fighting could be represented as pieces of candy upon ones ass?
>>25770762
Jaw-breaking?
>>25770762
Special talent for fighting monsters? Pretty obvious when you think about it. Pic related.
>>25770762
Anon, sometimes shit doesn't work out like you hoped it would and you have to fight monsters in a super secret organization because your passion for candy making doesn't pay the bills.
>>25770762
It's an undercover cutie mark. She tatooed it over her real one long ago. Bon Bon was Sweetie Drop's most complete cover name, and was the one she used during her exile in Ponyville.
>>25770872
>special talent doesn't pay the bills
I know that feel.
>>25770762
She tosses 'em candy, and they follow her like a puppy. Or maybe she hurls candy right between their eyes, CRACK!
>>25771127
OH FUCK IT MAKES TOO MUCH SENSE
>Apple clan defends a city from buffalo with pies
>Rednecks can pierce wood with carrots
>Bon Bon can pierce your brain witth candy
THAT'S IT.
EARTH PONY MAGIC DOESN'T MAKE YOU STRONG. IT GIVES YOU THE POWER TO KILL ENTIRE CIVILIZATIONS WITH FOOD.
FUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK
Anyone know a good Space-Human story? Any will do, but I prefer Tech vs Magic
Do you guys enjoy reading other people's stories? I personally get extremely bored when I read someone else's story. Even when I leave a nice comment, I'm typically just glad I made it through a piece of crap. There have been very few that I've considered reading a second time.
>>25771404
I love reading other people's stories and your attitude about it is incredibly pretentious.
>>25771432
I'm not being pretentious. I'm just saying that I don't enjoy it, not that my writing is better than anyone else's. Faggot.
>>25771354
As in, humanized ponies in space? Or what?
>>25771541
No. No humanized ponies.
Just humans and quadruped ponies.
Humans from space and Ponies still believe they are alone.
>>25770826
kek
>>25770872
I could be the worlds greatest wafflemaker. That doesnt mean I'd make for even a passable commando
>>25771259
stop it. youre giving bleedin ideas
>>25771464
oh hi mythril welcome to the thread
>>25771700
oh scratch that last one. I read his reply as saying his writing was better than everyone elses
>>25771700
>I could be the worlds greatest wafflemaker. That doesnt mean I'd make for even a passable commando
Spoken like someone who's never reached the highest levels of professional tactical waffling
>>25771700
>Grammar
Oh hi Bleedin, we missed you.
>>25771614
Basically any crossover with a sci-fi franchise will do that. "Oh no, warp drive malfunctioned, now we're stuck in this weird solar system where the orbits are all fucked up."
A few that come to mind in particular:
>"The Thessalonica Legacy" (Battletech) - I remember liking it a lot, but at the time I also likedPast Sins, so maybe take that with a grain of salt.
>"A Foul Light Shines" (WH40k) - I actually remember nothing about it except it's by an author who has done other good scifi.
>"Outside the Reaching Sky" - The aforementioned good scifi. Not quite what you asked for, since pones go to space and meet the humans there (along with various other aliens).
>"My Little Apprentice" - Human turned pony becomes Twilight's apprentice. It's a bit hard to follow but the overall plot is something about multiple human factions from postapocalyptic shithole Earth wanting to colonize Equestria so they don't die as a result of living in a postapocalyptic shithole.
>"Falling Stars" (or something like that) - Battletech dudes show up on Equestria. Other Battletech dudes show up to fight them. Features missles and lasers and big stompy mechs all over the place.
Hello everyone.
Please yell at me until I get off my lazy fucking ass and write "Time and Tines."
>>25771960
Stop attention whoring. We don't care about you unless you have something interesting to talk about.
>>25771811
nice try, but no.
>>25771865
theres a fuckton of halo/spartan/odst in equestria fics like that as well
>>25771865
Danke
Someone write a story about a human who incites a workers revolution in the ranks of earth pones.
It happens in the largest farm Lans in equestria, and they stop exporting food so all the other FAGS starve to death.
>>25771404
Any other people willing to answer this question? I guess I'm just hoping that there are actual good writers out there who don't enjoy reading. (Not necessarily writers who don't read, but rather people who read specifically as a chore to get better)
>>25771960
Get off your lazy ass.
What the hell is "Time and Tines?"
I have a hard on for HIE stories where the human doesn't actually really like being there, and hides in the woods feeling like shit.
Bonus points for violence.
Got anything like that /mlp/?
>>25772359
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/5433/article-2
>tfw your space drive fucks up and causes the entire crew except specifically you to die on atmospheric reentry and all these aliens are real cunts about it
>>25772257
I guess it's sort of the opposite for me. I enjoy reading so much that it drove me to make contributions of my own.
Sorry I can't share the feeling.
>>25772359
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/184701/ending
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/185453/it-never-really-ends
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/163706/bad-mondays
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/71281/cultural-artifacts
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/167251/the-unity-pact
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/193838/woodpecker
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/221016/get-him
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/215237/equinophobia
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/57206/consequences-of-unoriginality
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/19300/the-man-with-two-names
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/102335/i-hate-you-all---part-one-in-the-dawnbreaker-trilogy
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/53317/no-i-am-not-a-brony-get-me-outta-equestria
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/45860/diaries-of-a-madman
more or less what you asked for. As with all HiEs, quality varies from mediocre to awful.
knock yourself out
>>25772719
Huh. That's a lot of literature to get through.
>>25773625
>diaries of a madman
>1,821,750 words
you madman
Nyx
>>25773625
well only a couple of those are miserable human hides in the woods (with violence)
the rest are mostly just miserable humans (with violence)
>>25750437
Is there a fic where Anon shows up in Equestria, but rather than whatever normally happens where he usually ends up at the top of the social ladder he gets thrown in a zoo instead?
>>25750437
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/225511/outofcharacter
Reading/read this. Recommend it, but I don't know what specificallythe author was referencing most of the time.
Still had a lot of fun cause it was offputting and pretty funny at times.
Thoughts or help withidentifying what he's referencing?
>>25773681
does it have to be anon? or will any human do?
>>25773718
any human, I guess.
Come to think of it I never really considered it.
>>25773729
I can think of a couple. give me a bit to look some up.
just a zoo or anykind of imprisonment?
>>25773775
I've seen many imprisonment ones, I really want a zoo. Bonding with the zookeeper or something but if it doesn't really show up much I might give it a go
>>25773783
Only zoo ones I can thik of off the top of my head are
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/95461/a-voice-among-the-strangers
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/128177/a-stranger-among-the-voices
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/120686/misunderstandings
and even then only a portion of them involves being stuck in a zoo
and misunderstandings
Chap 11.
(https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NTmMlxEsw1jGeXawdgdC9WLT1zuf0Sd8w0nVt2aH6Nw/edit)
>>25763079
Characterization's going to be harder to do given the non-show-like genre you're planning on doing. The hard part's not giving each one their personality. That's easy since the show defines them quite a bit. All you need to do is watch episodes centered on specific characters to get a good idea of how they act and talk.
The hard part is "how do they act and talk in a grimdark lovecraft plot, while still being the same characters?"
>>25763123
There's several Fimfic groups (https://www.fimfiction.net/group/801/proof-reading-pre-reading-and-editing) (https://www.fimfiction.net/group/27/the-proofreader-group) (http://www.fimfiction.net/group/97/looking-for-editors). Just follow the instructions in each group to see if you can find one.
>>25765075
She's getting her "rocktorate," which implies she's post graduate and getting a PhD, so you could quite easily write her in as doing field work or some government research grant thing.
>>25765295
>most
Twilight.
>would like to
Lightning Dust or Dash.
>>25765554
Do you mean a page break or some indication to the reader that there's been a scene change? The former you can't do in stories because they're in web format (you can in blog posts using [page_break]), the later is just by centering some asterisks between a few blank lines.
>>25765908
I'd read a Flash story if it was something about Crystal Empire lore or worldbuilding, but anything with Twi shipping will be summarily dismissed due to original sin.
>>25767757
>go underground
Seems kind of villainous given Celestia ordered it shut down. Then again, it reminds me of Section 31, so that's not necessarily a bad thing.
>>25771404
I love reading others' fics. There's a ton of ideas and inspiration you can tap from other fanfics. Not to mention learning about all the different fanfic genres.
>>25773639
IS it worth it?
>>25771404
I hated reading this shitty post.
>>25774337
I've kept mostly current on it.
Honestly its pretty hit or miss. Some parts are actually pretty good, some are pants on head retarded. Though to be fair, a lot of the earlier retardedness was retconned out and the offending chapters rewritten into something better (allegedly- I havent gone back to read the rewrites).
Quality also fluctuates depending on what arc you're reading. When he was off doing his own thing its was usually fairly entertaining. In the current arc hes stuck with the element bearers and his opinions on them run from despise to ambivalence and its starting to drag
Clop is mediocre and even the writer admits that theres only so many ways to phrase 'it jams its penor in and wiggles about until it spooges' before it starts getting stale
It doesnt go out of its way to advertise it, but its actually one of the longer spanning fics I've seen. Most half million word fics I've read will cover a time frame of less than 6 months. DoaM spans something like 7 years from start to current and the protagonist has actually matured somewhat over the course of that time (which again is somewhat unusual)
I could do a longer write up on it, but if youre the type that likes HiEs then its at least worth a shot. If it ever finishes I'll probably go back and give it a full reread
>>25774285
>original sin
Responses like this are why I want to write Flash and Twilight fucking.
What's your opinion onsongs and short poems in prose?
>>25775364
if you can compose your own lyrics that arent shit, you should be doing something better than writing fanfiction
if you are just copypastaing or ponyfying nickleback songs you should hang yourself
>>25775399
So Tolkien should have lead an orchestra instead, then?Of course Tolkien wrote fanfiction, what are you talking about? He's a well known trekkie.
>>25775364
That they should either be so well written that they're worth the inclusion, or so short and forgettable that they won't bother me. Poems I can usually tolerate, songs only if they're actually well written. They often break up the prose and the narrative too much, plus most people just can't write it well.
>>25775364
Hard to do well, and even harder to include in a way that won't seem try hard. You're in a tough spot to begin with because most published literature lacks poems and songs (because they're hard to do well even for professional writers).
That said, they're a great exercise to practice your writer. They're also something sorely lacking in fantasy, and if you're going with a fantasy themed story I'd suggest including them. Songs and poems are great vehicles to do world building and exposition without weighty walls of text. Tolkien was a genius at it, and you should read through LOTR to see how he used poems and song to convey long backstories.
>>25775816
Idea:
Using songs as a measurement of time.
For example:
You're having fun merry-making, bottle of underwatered grog in your hand and the other banging at the bar table. Off behind you, you hear the workings of alcohol, spouting loudly and coherently enough to carry past walls, "Fifteen men on the dead man's chest!"
Soon enough, your glass seems quite emptier than should be, and you look around, not yet weary enough to forget the material worries of your tab and rather seeking half-finished drink.
"Yo-ho-ho and a bottle of rum!"
Just as you pipe up to get a bottle refill, something hard hits your shoulder. You turn around, seeking for a target of your wrath.
"Drink and the devil had done for the rest!"
On the ground you see something metallic - ye-gads, a flask!
"Yo-ho-"
But then, a stirring. Just behind you, on the table.
"ho-ho,"
You turn your head. Damn it, that's my drink!
"and a..."
Your hand isn't as fast. The bottle whizzes by, down a clearing of any bottle.
"bottle of..."
Not long, and you hear a loud, wet KHRACK.
"rum."
Better get to licking.
>>25775084
I'm tempted (but not enough to actually do it) to write a trollific-as-possible-while-still-being-straight-up-adventure Flash as Flash Gordon space opera fic, with Twilight in the Dale Arden role.
It seems so obvious, but as far as I can tell no one's done it yet, which is probably a mark of how hated Flash is.
(Also, Equestrian solar system, how does it work? Are there other planets? Do they have their own suns, or just orbit pony-sun?)
>>25775450
Very much this. It can be done, but be very careful.
>>25776582
>Equestrian solar system, how does it work?
"The shape of the heaven is of necessity spherical; for that is the shape most appropriate to its substance and also by nature primary."
>>25776582
>Equestrian solar system, how does it work?
Does anyone still have the diagrams we made that time?
Wasn't there a stained glass window with all kinds of wacky solar system shit in it?
bemp
>Be Tolstoï
>Be granted wish in heaven
>Wish to see what wonders writers are creating now
>See world, circa 2015
>See Fanfiction and amateur writing is sprawling
>Go on Fiction website
>See this
>See them mercilessly butchering their mother tongue
>See general ignorance of education my contemporaries could only dream of
>mfw
>>25778496
every day we move further from god's light
Another friggin bump
>>25778496
>even remotely looking at anything on the front page
Did you expect something else perhaps?
Will write a prompt.
Gibm and it shall be done.
>>25773833
Maybe I'll break out the old MS Word and write my own then
>>25771404
You're reading fanfiction. What do you want?
Want to read something interesting, go to a bookstore. Want pandering to your desires, go to fanfiction sites. No one - absolutely no one - into fanfiction is looking for interesting stuff; all they want is to read what they like, and that's mainly romance and porn and feels.
It's ten days until Christmas. Can anyone recommend some good Hearth's Warming stories? Preferably of the uplifting, cozy sort that mesh well with reading by a roaring fire while wrapped in a snuggly blanket.
How is this guy not banned yet?
http://www.fimfiction.net/group/134/game-crossovers/thread/226169/the-fallout-4-review
>>25780661
Literally who gives a shit?
And why are you using a name?
>>25780127
No one wants a story written?
>>25780127
>>25781351
Knight getting knighted by Celestia and then removing kebab ponies from local village
>>25781403
Path of kindness and blood is finally getting gud.
pretty much everything before this was lighthearted drama but now there's actual conflict which is what you damn well need in a story about flutters being a pureblood.
>>25780127
>Will write a prompt.
theres a prompt in the op:
>>25750437
>>Prompt of the Week: Write a lusty clopfic which heavily involves a fetish that you, the writer, know nothing about.
no one ever reads the damned op
>>25781563
>no one ever reads the damned op
because the ops suck.
>>25771354
Arrow 18?
>>25781577
Only the ones thatguyishigh writes.
Do you see metaposting mentioned anywhere in my glorious op? Of course not. Is good op
>>25781563
K
https://docs.google.com/document/d/15dWqOaVYbz5XLOOrtf63VkAxCY157h8nA2LEQjqT25M/edit
>>25781403
Shit, didn't notice.
Welp, I just began the million word journey to reading all of diaries of a madman. I'll post an update like 50k words in or some shit.
>>25780127
Earth pony workers revolution. They stop exporting food and ponies starve.
>>25782825
I'm at the edge of my seat, Faggot.
>>25782825
1.8 million
>I'll post an update like 50k words in or some shit.
so 4 chapters in?
>>25782933
It was a very rough guestimate, leave me be.
Also it's notable that I'm pretty sure I read a shorter version of this guy's fic (guessing it's a rewrite) that was 40(50?) Chapters long and was on fanfic.net. I considered it a masterpiece being retarded, so this should be awful.
>>25750437
are there any (many?) good long fics with decent-good audiobooks? don't care for the genre, as long as it takes more than a week of listening to it potentially 5+ hours a day
>>25783167
He never comes out and says that, but one of the earliest comments (for chapter 2) alludes to having an almost 700k word count, so its likely
pic related
>>25783205
voicefag is getting drunk and doing the chase.
its long at least
What the hell would a public speaking or persuasion cutie mark look like? I'm probably not even gonna mention it in my green but it's driving me crazy that I can't visualize my villain character properly.
>>25783318
Maybe a stand or a podio?
>>25783245
>>25783245
Actually, I read a bit more and I know for a fact that he posted a shorter story on fanfic.net, but it ended really shittily, despite being so good in the middle imo. He must have thought so too and rewrote it.
Kinda like an ito story now that I think about it. Kinda unsettling.
>>25783350
That'll do. Thanks Anon!
>>25781454
guess no one likes flutterbat here.
>>25784283
Yes we have taste
I can't believe I'm getting anxious over whether or not it would be considered inaccurate to say that a cold-blooded reptile to huddle under a rock in night time for warmth. I say this because I have dialogue where characters (both of whom are main protagonists) who are supposed to know their shit say that. I'm fairly sure that's the truth (at least that's what my cursory research and personal experience tell me, and it might depend on the species). I know, artistic license and willing suspension of disbelief and all that, but still. Your piece of fiction can have magical unicorn and pegacorns and rainbow factories and the audience won't bat an eye, but god forbid you get a minor piece of zoology wrong.
Last chapter. I'll start posting it to Fimficand DeviantARTtomorrow.
(https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qwG8iLprnlHGchQPW-htbxyQN8yojCoLmb4u66RxXdc/edit?usp=sharing)
>>25775084
And responses like this are why I'll downvote them. :^)
>>25775364
I consider it to be kind of pointless--especially for songs. Since there's no music or beat and the only way to get one is to link to Youtube.
I'm not a big fan of poetry anyway, so I'm bias against it.
>>25776582
>how hated Flash is
Or how unknown it is. The last big rendition of it was in 1980.
>how does it work?
Standard fanon is Equestria's tidally locked and requires the princesses to either rotate the planet or literally move the sun and moon.
>Are there other planets?
Pic related, which is a vector of the Canterlot throne room windows. It suggests there's at least a Saturn closer to their sun and that the sun is singular.
>>25781563
>heavily involves a fetish that you, the writer, know nothing about
I'm really tempted to write a oneshot that parodies weird fetishes by having it center on "bellybutton worship" and devote most of the story to describing Dash's bellybutton in excruciating detail.
>>25782507
>Bleedy Coon
B-Bleedin, is that you?
Left some comments. Male rape/forced TF aren't my things so no luck there. Tense issues abounded, so I recommend you always read over what you've written to see how it sounds. And since it's supposed to be a fetish story, it doesn't hurt to really pile on the descriptive elements for the fetish scenes.
>>25783318
A soapbox? Podium? Parchment checklist with "yes" and "no" and the "yes" checked?
>>25785146
Are there an HIE fics about knights going to equestria? All I see are modern soldiers and it pains me, because I have a hard on for HEMA and HMB.
>>25785146
>bellybutton worship
That's a thing, you know.
>>25785146
>"I'm not a big fan of poetry anyway"
>implying poetry isn't comfy as fuck
>>25785555
Checked.
About how many soldier-in-Equestria fics are written by actual military people? I'm fairly certain that most of those things are cawadoody kiddos being Sergeant Major General Super Ultra Secret Elite Ghost Spartan Commando Gary Tzu, but I would actually be interested in reading about a Marine self-inserting into Equestria given he didn't go too crazy with the wish fulfilment and his military experience actually served the plot in a meaningful way (since that's pretty much the only reason I'd be interested in such a thing in the first place).
>>25785659
Funny enough, there's actually multiple stories I've read on fanfic.net by actual marines who wrote themselves dying in combat and that's how they got there, which is as grim as it sounds but nevertheless they exist. Most are what you described though.
>>25776582
>>25785146
>a oneshot that parodies weird fetishes by having it center on "bellybutton worship"
...Because you upstart kids today don't respect your cultural history enough to even know about FLASH MOTHERFUCKING GORDON, you probably also don't recall the absolute madness of the heso vs. heso-nashi wars when Cure Black's navel got covered by her costume in the second season of Pretty Cure!
That bellybutton thing is sure to backfire, you fool!
>>25786384
>FLASH MOTHERFUCKING GORDON
Always preferred Flesh Gordon.
>>25786388
>Flesh Gordon
why not Flesh Gorgon?
I mean tits and a cloaca? that shits hot
page 10
Why has no-one yet wrote a reverse-MLP fanfic where the main six are all burly men and https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R43dYg_Kuc0 plays in the intro?
Seriously.
>>25788216
Way too late, m8.
>>25786388
GORDON'S ALIVE!?Why aren't there more stories about Brian Blessed?
>>25788225
What are you trying to say?
>>25788319
way 2 l8 mate
>>25788336
What are you trying to say?
>>25788340
wayyy 2 lmao8 meight
>>25788460
protein 2 L8 hand 8?
Best fic is literally "fluttershy finds a cliff racer" for anyone who's been pondering
>>25788595
>Cliff racer
NO
KILL IT
SPIKE ESCAPE WHILE YOU CANinb4 cliff racer recursion
>>25788595
>cliff racer
NO NO NO
SOMEONE SUMMON SAINT JIUB
>>25784905
If your readers are not autistic, they would understand it as a way of speech.
>>25788595
What fic is that?
>>25788697
>If your readers are not autistic
In other words, he shouldn't do it.
>>25788713
Just search it on fim.net.
>>25771960
Fuck off, namefag.
>>25781936
your op a shit
>>25788460
>M
My nigga.
>>25789083
The namefagging isn't too bad for me, it's the blatant attention whoring that pisses me off. Especially because I know Jetfire CAN make posts that are of at least marginal value to the thread (basically everything he posted during BTWOE writing was at least okay).
Even his post ITT could easily have been written in a way that promotes discussion.
>>25771960
>Please yell at me until I get off my lazy fucking ass and write "Time and Tines."
The only way anything of value will come from this post is if people ignore the first 3/4 of the sentence and then indulge the poster's attention seeking by asking what the new fic's about. It would be a much less shitty post if it had gone something like this instead:
>How do you get motivated to write? I've been meaning to start a new fic about blah blah but I keep procrastinating because of blah.
This gives people at least two different things to talk about (motivation + whatever the fic's about) that aren't the poster himself.
>wanting to get earnestly moving on the moderately fetishy Trixie clop/adventure you've had stewing
>unsure if you should bother because it's anthro clop
>four legs clop does fucking nothing for you and you don't want to write it
What do here?
>>25790119
Do it.
Then burn it.
>>25790119
>anthro
>four legs clop does fucking nothing
Okay, so that explains why not pony, but why not go humanized then?
