You're gonna have a bad time in Pony Hell edition.
So in this thread anon is turned into a little and cute colt by the act of Discord who is now his dad and now our little anon has to learn about his new life in Equestria.
We last left our hero Anon dealing with Twilight thinking he was Queen Chrysalis while trying to avoid being sent to pony hell in her sealing spell rampage.
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Every writefag and drawfag are welcome here
I CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT CHAOS HAPPENS NEXT
After bookhorse realizes that she fucked it up, Anon will guilt trip Twilight into sex
>>25686006
Or guilt trip her into a truce with the changelings.
>>25686030
Why not both
>>25686042
And some wonder why we're called degenerates.
>>25685965
>Dat sex hair Chrissy tho
u-unph..
>>25686177
Why?
Erf I need filly Chrysalis.
Erf pls
hey erf my tablet broke so i'll only be here one or twice a week. (even though iv been here reading every night sence it started, the shame the shame) but im still reading please keep it up!!
>>25686573
>>25686650
Where's Erf tho
>>25686849
Erf is kill. He quit writing. He's done.
>>25686865
So he's with Kojima now?
>>25686865
>>25686849
Fuck, When did I die?
>>25686883
rip
>>25686883
Clearly three hours ago, if my sources are correct, but thanks to advances in necromancy, you're alive again.
>>25686573
You mean nymph Chrysalis?
>>25686883
You are ghost now
>>25686968
>>25686966
>>25686927
time for this ghost to write (haha, none of you guessed what the twist was going to be. But you were all very close)
>>25687116
CHRYSALIS OUT OF FUCKING NOWHERE TO SAVE THE DAY
HER MIGHTY BROOD SWEEPING ACROSS PONYVILLE LIKE A GREAT WIND
>You pass by Spike, who was waking up due to the commotion. "Huh..what?...Anon? hey"
>He waves to you, but you don't have ANY time to wave back. You make a turn and head to the front doors. Almo...OH SHIT!
>You skid on the ground as you try to stop. Twilight had teleported right in front of you. Ready for another shot at you. Goddamn, she was just as persistent as her brother.
>"Yo, hey. What's going on? Is the party happening? I thought it was at Sugarcube Corner...oh boy, how long did I sleep?" Spike was rubbing his eyes, he was feeling a little groggy from his nap.
>"SPIKE! THAT'S NOT ANON. IT'S QUEEN CHRYSALIS!" Twilight yelled to her assistant
"I'M NOT QUEEN CHRYSALIS!" You yelled out, stepping back away from Twilight.
>"What? What are you talking about Twilight. That's Anon. You locked up bugbreath. Remember?" Spike said, confused.
>"I thought I did Spike, But she's here somehow. I need you to get out of here! She might try to use you as a hostage!" Twilight warned
>You tried to move, but you once again were caught in the sigil as chains began to bind you back into the spot. Dammit, she works quick. You don't even remember her having this spell in the show. Must be new. Just your luck.
>"Woah woah, hold on Twilight. How do you know that's really Chrysalis? Wouldn't she had turned back or something?" Spike got up from the throne chair and walked over to you "Come on, this looks like a little much. Don'tcha think?"
>You struggled to break free, but it was useless. You weren't strong enough to break the magical chains.
>"She's a master of disguise Spike. I managed to figure it out from the way she was talking. And what's worse. I think she has the real Anon hidden away somewhere." Twilight turned towards you "Where is he? Talkm or I'll just send you to Tartarus right here, right now!"
>>25687116
Discord shows up with onee-chan Chryssi to save the day
>>25687205
I got it didn't I? along with most of the things we already said, just that Discord was gonna to introduce anon's sister to Twilight
>>25687201
haha, a mistake right out the gate.
>GODDAMMIT! No amount of struggling was working. And your mind was racing. Tartarus was never fully shown in the show. Who knows how bad it could be down there. What's worse, even if Discord could get your ass out later. How long would it take him to do it? Would he even know you were down there? Because it seemed pretty clear that he wasn't watching what was going on right now.
>"Yo, hey. Twilight!" Spike waved his clawed hands at her, in a motion to suggest she was being way too hasty. "Why don't you just ask him..or er..her. A question only Anon would know?"
>FUCKING BRILLIANT. BASED SPIKE.
>You looked to Twilight, with a meek and frightened look. Not even faking. You were fucking scared. This was the second time you couldn't escape a situation. And if you somehow failed this test. You'd be in Pony Hell soon enough.
>Twilight eyed you, and side stepped directly between you and the exit. "...I Don't know.."
>DAMMIT!
"COME ON! JUST ASK ME A QUESTION! ANYTHING! COME ON!"
>You yell out in panic. You needed her to try.
>"Twilight, come on. If that's really Anon and you send him away." Spike cringes hard "Yeah, I don't even want to imagine what would happen..."
>Twilight took a moment to imagine it however. It didn't take her long to realize perhaps she was being TOO hasty. Sending a colt to Tartarus? If that happened. All her friends would look at her as if she was a monster. She'd lose the favor of the town...maybe even her teacher. But it was hard. If Chrysalis somehow knew everything You knew, even though the case was that IT IS you. Then she'd be letting a villain go, one who could plot a deadly revenge. And that too, would be her fault. She'd have to think of a question that only you, as Anon, would know. But what?
>You were breathing hard, scared. Hoping Discord to show up at some point. Your eyes never left Twilight as you shook. You'd never think you'd be this scared of her.
>>25687344
>"Alright anon. What is the best Fallout?"
>>25687386
"F-Fallout2!!"~~~~~~~
>>25687496
"WRONG EVERYPONY KNOWS THAT IS FALLOUT 3, METACRITIC CAN'T BE WRONG"
>>25687496
>Not New Vegas
You rustled my jingle jangle jingle
>>25687201
>bugbreath
aaaaaaaand saving that name for later
>>25687529
They can be wrong.If given the right price
>>25687552
Mah nigga
>>25687386
ha, we all know that's FalloutTactics
>>25687344
>Twilight sighed, she never loosened the spell. But she didn't send you away, no, she was going to try Spike's plan. "You're right Spike, But...what question do we ask?"
>"Leave that to me" Spike walked over to you and gave you a wink as he chuckled "Trust me, I got a question only the REAL Anon would know"
>Twilight raised an eyebrow "....Spike. Are you sure? Maybe we need somepony else. Like Fluttershy." Twilight knew that Spike had, like herself, very little interaction with the colt. But all the interactions they did have suggested a cute happy little colt. Twilight was even hoping Discord would show up, he could clear things up easily. She could cast a spell that would reveal the truth. But that would require her to drop the sealing spell. Giving "you a chance to escape".
>"Trust me Twilight, I've got this." Spike looked to you, you said nothing. Wondering what he was going to ask, While waiting, if for a chance, to run out of the castle if possible. "Ok, you ready erm...I dunno if I should call you Chrysalis or Anon. So er, do yo-"
"GET ON WITH IT GEEZ!"
>You yell out in a burst of anger. your fear making you more and more hostile to any kind of stalling. You feel the chains get a little tighter after your outburst.
>...shit..
>"Yikes, ok ok." Spike was still willing to give it a shot, but your complaint made Twilight even more suspicious.
>"Ok, so. If you're REEAAALLLLYYY Anon. Then what kind of gems did you collect for Rarity. And for what?"
>Twilight slapped her hoof to her face "Spike, really?"
>"Hey, relax Twilight. It's still a really good question. I really doubt Queen Stinkbug would know about it. In fact, where did you get the gems too. That'll really clench it."
>>25687529
Come on nigga, 1 was better than 2
>>25687652
That one isn't even canon
>>25687529
>>25687552
I actually liked the combat gameplay of New Vegas more then 2, 3 and even 4 as it is so far. To the point where I even downloaded TTW Tales of Two Wastelands so I could enjoy Fallout 3 more. But the most fun I've had in Fallout was playing as a retard in Fallout 2, sorry guys guess I'm going to Tartarus...
>>25687679
I actually play as Mr. Magoo when it comes to Fallout. 1 in Perception, 10 on Luck and Charisma
>>25687679
what?
literally what is good about the combat in NV
Anon should stop trying to yell things he knows as bad words or out of his level
Like, last chapter he said "TWILIGHT WHAT THE HELL"
I don't know if in the show they use the word 'Hell' but they use hay instead.
I mean, if I were Twilight I would have noted that.
Last we need is Anon swearing to another character, no matter they don't know what they say.
I mean, i'm just saying.
Anon should be careful.
>>25687703
Aiming down sights was a godsend, and the guns where mainly historical. To this day I still miss grenade launchers, lever action rifles like the cowboy repeater and the m1 battle rifle.
>>25687652
>....you really hoped Twilight would accept your answer.
"Radiant Gems. Rarity needed them for a dress! but I bought her enough with money Dad gave me! In fact! More than enough! Enough for four dresses! I got them in a shop at the Crystal Empire. These two brothers. Flim and Flam were the new managers at the time! Please, that's the truth! Please let me go!"
>Twilight cringed...that was an awfully pinpoint answer. You could already feel the chains loosen up. "S-Spike?"
>Spike nodded, he was convinced. It hadn't hit him yet though that Twilight was now chaining up a colt. "That's all pretty correct."
>"Even the Flim Flam brothers managing the shop?" Twilight asked
>Spike nodded "Yup, I know that because I wanted to see if I could order some of those gems myself for...er...tasting reasons. But the prices for delivery were INSANE! Wait hold on!"
>You stayed silent, and watched as Spike exited the room. And came back with a sheet of paper. "Check it out. See? this was the price for even ONE gem. And look at the bottom. It's from their desk.....and...oh boy Twilight...." It finally hit him.
>Twilight's horn began to dim. as the chains on you began to dissipate into nothingness. Twilight didn't know what to say. She just looked at you, shocked at what she had done.
>You look at her, you were angry. Beyond angry. But you only stared at her. You were in disbelief. That Twilight, of ALL ponies. Would do something like this.
>"...Anon.I-" Twilight was about to apologize, but you snap at her. With a growling low voice.
"Save it....I don't want to hear it."
>"Woah..hey Anon. It was ju-" Spike was going to try to speak up for Twilight, but you quickly turn, and snipe at him too. "I SAID SHUT UP!...I can't believe this."
>You never thought you'd be cutting it so close. Even if Spike was the one to save you. You were beyond angry. Discord was definitely busy with something. Because he didn't even show up to stop this madness.
>>25687826
Tell everyone about this. That princess needs to relearn what does it mean to be humble and level headed
![[CHUCKLING INTENSIFIES].gif](https://i.imgur.com/uhdHA4T.gif "[CHUCKLING INTENSIFIES].gif")
>>25687826
I demand Anon walking outside trying not to cry like a bitch and failing like the bottom bitch he is, sobbing for daddy.
>>25687826
Anon has all the rights to be mad at Twilight
Almost going to Tartarus.
Tell Fluttershy or Discord.And I bet Chrysalis was planning this
>>25687890
imagine celys response to this.
>>25687826
he just needs to masturbate, hell be good
>>25687826
On how many levels of fuck up does the Princess of friendship realize she fucked up?
https://youtube.com/watch?v=Nf5ukMJO2cY
>>25687910
i dont think erf wants anon to be this marry sue
>>25687911
Or maybe not but this will be a nice plus. But I agree, anon's has all the right in the world to be angry and to tell both Discord and Fluttershy, I even vote that anon goes straight to Fluttershy's to tell her.
Let's give Twilight a bad time
>>25687936
>being a baby back bitch
>a mary sue trait
You know what those words mean when put together right
>>25687936
i don't think you know what a mary sue is
>>25687911
I doubt Chrysalis could plan something completely out of her control.
>>25687953
>>25687963
i just realized how wrong i read what >>25687910
this said. way to make myself look like a faggot. i'll just go in the corner and be quite now.
>>25688010
its okay man, as long as you acknowledge the mistake then youre a better person for it.
>>25688020
thanks.
>>25688010
>i'll just go in the corner and be quite now.
>quite now
*quiet
>>25688033
>>25688020
that was nice
"Kids like you should beplayinginhome"Instead of talking about villians and stuff
>>25688042
god dammit! thanks....again. but still im on a roll with fuck ups.
>>25687910
I'm surprised he's holding it together as is. I would have lost it.
>>25688089
I would have started plotting my revenge. Anyway, I guess Twilight just uninvited herself by fucking it up big time
>>25688089
I would have cried harder than when Anon cried with Fluttershy.
Well not that much, a crying that says "Stupid horse i'm not a bug, let me free"
>>25687826
>"Oh, ill forgive you twilight. On one condition. I got something that needs sucking inbetween my legs if you can help me out with that"
>>25688098
pinkie is gonna want to know why.
>>25688113
And we sure as hell tell her. Anon has the fucking right to not wanting to see Twilight in a long time, and everyone knwing why is a fair pay off
>>25688111
Trips confirms alternate story about Twilight sucking Anon's little horsecock
Then going to prison for doing foalcon
>>25687826
again, another Anon text mistake. Sorry, I'm just a little distracted due to how work went. I'll focus a little more
>You start to step towards the door, eyeing Twilight with dagger filled eyes.
>Twilight tried again, raising her hoof towards you for you to stop so she could explain herself. "Anon, please, I did-"
"You didn't what? Mean it? You're sorry? You think I'm just going to accept it because I'm a kid? I know exactly what would have happened if you sent me down there Twilight. I'm not stupid. I just wanted to have a civil debate with WHO I THOUGHT was a levelheaded and very smart pony. Because who else could I have this kind of discussion with? Nopony else, that's who."
>Twilight cringed "A-Anon it's. I'm...I just didn't. You have to understand. I-I made the wrong call. I....mnnn"
>Twilight realized she was making excuses, and then said nothing. She looked horrified with herself.
>You drew closer to her. your eyes growing ever sterner, harder.
"Yeah, you did. You really did.....I'm leaving now. Don't even bother trying to apologize. I won't care."
>Spike muttered under his breath. He wasn't understanding it as much as you or Twilight was "Harsh..."
>You head towards the exit. You don't even look back. Nor does Twilight try again to apologize or talk to you. She doesn't even beg you not to tell anyone. She'd probably never do that anyway. But you felt, in some way, she would have.
>You exit through the door. And close them. you look up into the sky. It was getting dark. Your legs began to shake. But you press on. You try to rationalize with the fact that hopefully. Discord wouldn't have left you hanging.
>>25688145
I'm surprised anon didn't piss himself, did he piss himself when fighting the two discord stallions? Can't remember, then again he didn't piss himself in front of chrysalis neither.
>>25688145
Go with Fluttershy, tell her what happened, she will know how to calm anon and make him feel better. Plus it will be a nice and well deserved revenge to have the element of kidness going apeshit on Twilight
>>25688184
Hey, maybe tartarus ain't that bad.
He could hang with Tirek and and play pool with the monstrosities there.
>>25688145
I really want to see twilight try to fix this one
>>25688145
Now if Anon brings up the truce thing again, due to her wanting to distance herself from her prior actions, Twilight may actually have to consider the idea of finding common ground. Anon works their world towards a more peaceful albeit far more chaotic future.
>>25688200
>yfw Tartaus is a big comfy bar where all villains just chill out until they can escape, do their shit and then come back to laugh with ther mates
discord confronts twilight about having to comfort anon to sleep because of nightmares of her.
twilight has feels, bad feels
>>25688145
So long horsebook social worker
>>25688236
>discord is lying just to mess with her
>>25688266
hard kek
>>25688236
>>25688266
Bonus points if Fluttershy has to console and coo Anon back to sleep after the nightmares.
>>25688266
What if he isn't. I mean the fact that someone was going to send you to hell can actually be pretty traumatic. On the other hand, Discord can go on a high horse about that, lie to Twilight and have his own payback at what she did to one of his best niggas and actually to mess with her
>>25688292
PTSD shaky Anon whenever Twilight is mentioned or in the same room.
Chrysalis's Canterlot invasion was a very personal hit to Twilight. Her friends wouldn't believe her and her brother was brainwashed. She lost some of the respect of her idol and teacher and something from her childhood was tarnished by Cadence being impersonated. It is somewhat understandable if with the addition of stress of the perceived threat on her nice Twilight would be basically in fight or flight mode with any potential hidden lovebug.
>>25688311
>The word Twilight becomes a trigger warning for anon
>>25688145
>But you didn't know. You could think of a few times where he couldn't find someone. He couldn't locate Starlight. But he was able to find Chrysalis due to her home apparently being obvious to find. Hell, thats probably how he found her when he went into Tartarus. So that begged the question. Would he have been able to find you? And...what if you ran into someone like Tirek while down there?
>You looked back at the castle doors. You weren't being followed. Good. You wondered what Twilight was feeling right now. You hoped she was absolutely crushed. You didn't even need to tell her not to come to the party. She wouldn't. And that was fine with you.
>You went back to walking, aimlessly forward. With each step. you started to feel your anger turn into fright and sadness. You didn't realize how possible it really was for you to get fucked over in what you saw as a paradise. With each step, you came to realize Discord probably saved your life more times than you could count. When you went to Twilight's. You thought you could have a debate with her, and it would be fun. Maybe bounce off ideas. Maybe even allude to a few human inventions. You would have gotten a kick out of it.
>Instead, because of your form. She saw you as someone else, and immediately condemned you. Or, Chrysalis really.
>You didn't know where you were going. You were heading down an empty street. You head over to the side of a house and sit near a small garden patch beside it. Gathering your thoughts.
>You looked at your hooves. You were still shaking. You began to realize just how helpless you were in this world without help. Without Discord, without miraculous luck, without your horn. You were at your opponent's mercy. Even if that opponent was a pony you thought was at least ok for so many seasons.
>>25688266
Pls Erf, deliver this
>>25688311
He sounds more pissed off than traumatized.
I think Anon is pretty hardcore actually.
>>25688315
Niece, not nice. Fucking god damn piece of shit phone
>>25688311
>>25688322
The dubs have spoken!
>>25688292
>"colts your age shouldn't be displaying this kind of stress"
>now suffers from post dramatic stress disorder do to her actions
>>25688407
kek
>>25688407
t-thanks princess
>>25688323
Seriously nigga, go with Fluttershy, she'll make you feel better
>>25688323
>you laid there for quite some time. You didn't want to go home Chrysalis was right. Or, thats what you felt. But you couldn't shake off something was off about her. Or maybe...just maybe. That sort of thinking was the same as Twilight's. You didn't want to think about it all.
>you looked up at the sky again, you could see the moon. How much time had passed? You didn't know. It didn't even look like Discord was looking for you. Why would he? He's still probably off doing whatever he was still doing.
>You didn't want to go home to just Chrysalis. no, you couldn't. even if she wanted to be your "friend". You'd feel alone. You were, at this moment, wishing for Discord's company...
>You got up and began to wander. Again, you tried to rationalize that everything should be ok. It had to be. Twilight was just an idiot who got in over her head. Right?...well, even if you just tried to think of it lightly. The fact she so hardheadedly and immediatly jumped to conclusions without so much as a fucking test both infuriated and terrified you everytime you thought about it.
>You didn't feel safe. You didn't feel safe on the streets of Ponyville at night.
>You, who were supposed to be this man. This adult. You were now terrified. to the point that it matched your form well. You weakly called out.
"Discord?...you around?...Applebloom? Scootaloo?...Sweetie Belle? Diamond?...F-Fluttershy?"
>...Fluttershy...
>...what would she say about this? It would crush her so badly. You couldn't just tell her. Not because you gave a shit about Twilight. But because you didn't want her to worry.
>....you started making a heading towards her cottage. You kept your composure while on the way. You were trying to convince yourself that you were only going for a friendly visit. With any luck, Discord would be there too. You wished for him to be there.
PTSD ponies!~
PTSD ponies?!~
Ahh!~
Ahhhhh!!~
Ahhhhhhh!?!~
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!~AAUGHHHHHAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!?!??!!~
Shit nigga. Flutters gonna know something's up.
maybe for one angel will back the fuck off.
>>25688470
Tell her nigga, you will worry her more if you don't
its quiet... to quiet.
>>25688470
>through a tireless walk. You could see the cottage in the distance. The windows were a light. So Fluttershy still had to be awake.
>You cross the little bridge, slowly, gathering as much willpower as you could.
>You stop just short of the door and turn to your left. The three statues still sat there. Still in perfect condition. There was a bird bath in front of it now. Fluttershy must have put it there. For what reason? you didn't know. Nor did you care at the moment.
>You stepped up to the door. One last time. You tried to rationalize things.
"Twilight's an idiot. Come on Anon..you knew that. Remember lesson zero? Or it's about time? Hell, she couldn't even fix her friendship with Moondancer without Pinkie. ngh..It's fine...It's fine...It's fine.......it's....fine..."
>It wasn't, it didn't fix the fact that being sent to pony hell, with a chance of no escape. was a possibility.
"Come on Anon...don't be a wimp..c-come on. Discord's fucked with you so many times..."
>And he never meant to actually do you any harm.
"......"
"...just.....play it cool."
>You prevent yourself from knocking at first, hoping to see Discord. You even look at his statue for...you dunno...a wink?
>Nothing
>You sigh
>You knock on the door.
>You wait....
>The door doesn't open, but you head a very soft "Hello?"
>She was probably wondering who was knocking on her door so late.
>You say nothing at first.
>"H-hello? Is anypony out there?" Fluttershy was beginning to think maybe it was the wind...or something.
>You gulp.
"A-aunt Fluttershy, it's me...A-anon"
>you were stuttering....good going dipshit.
>"Anon?" Fluttershy opened the door, she didn't even crack it open to check, she just opened it, she was smiling. At least for a moment. The moment she looked at you, she got worried. Even you hadn't noticed that you looked raggedy and even dirty from laying around on the street. "A-Anon?..are you.."
>She steps aside, to let you in "Please come in, what happened?"
>>25688602
I'M SORRY, NEIGHBOR, WOULD YOU LIKE TO FUCK MY WIFE?
>>25688602
*too
>>25688520
Hoping for this.
>>25688623
>"Please come in, what happened?
WELL THE PURPLE ONE TRIED TO SEND ME TO HELL.
>>25688637
(sigh) i can only laugh at myself at this point.
>>25688673
kek, hoping for this
>>25688311
Pfft. Wouldn't shock me. Probably would have gone full catatonic.
>>25688322
Holy fuck lol at that pic
>>25688323
Ugh. It's all catching up to him.
Wait when Bug Slut enter to this? Why is she OP and not big sexy Discord?
>>25688623
WELL I WAS GONNA TAKE SOME FORCED VACATIONS IN HELL, COURTESY OF THE PURPLE CUNT
>>25688673
>>25688749
Don't forget being chained as a foal.
>>25688673
>>25688749
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2SfPkSlequY
>>25688673
Correct answer.
>>25688746
Bug skut reintroduced herself about 5 or 6 chapters back and there was a lot of content.
Discord hasn't been seen or heard from for a while.
>>25688623
"U-uhm, what do you mean?"
>you looked away from her. there was still something obvious about you that she caught on to. Best to just not look her in the eye.
>Fluttershy closed the door as you stepped inside. "Well, Anon...you don't look well. Actually...Anon...what are you doing outside at night? Don't you know there's school tomorrow and....oh" Fluttershy giggled.
>You cringed, still looking away so she couldn't see. What did she find so funny?
"W-what's so funny?"
>Fluttershy walked up from behind you and gave you a gentle nuzzle from behind your neck. It was...reassuring. But not enough for you to look back. "You must be nervous about the party tomorrow. Well, don't you worry Anon. I know crowds can be a little scary. But you'll be around all your friends. And it's going to be lots of fun, you'll see!"
>You had to not look at her. That's all you had to do. But as you looked ahead, towards the couch. You could see Angel, staring back at you. He was wrapped around a blue blanket.
>Dammit....him.
>just keep it together.
"O-oh, right..yeah...the party...I-I guess...I am a little...nervous..."
>"Oh Anon, please don't be nervous." Fluttershy went to look into your face, so she could give you one of her bonafide reassuring smiles "I'll be there too, and I'm sure y-...."
>"Anon?" Fluttershy noticed that everytime she entered your peripheral vision. You'd slowly turned away from her. "Anon, why...why won't you look at me? I-I know you're nervous but..."
>........this was a mistake. She was already seeing something was wrong. And this wasn't related to Discord. You couldn't lie....because the moment she went to Twilight's castle....she was going to...
>You started to tear up, you fucked up Anon. You fucked up.
>And as you hid it from her, your focus being towards her, Angel was able to see you were crying.
>"Anon?...please answer me...please.."
>....you didn't want to upset her.
>>25688746
She's not OP. She's stuck worse than Anon is.
>>25688846
Incoming feels
yeah angel will back off. he may be a dick but hes not heartless.
>>25688925
Yeah, he's not that big of a cunt
>>25688935
You doubt his level of asshole?
>>25688946
Yeah, he's an asshole, but he's not an edgy motherfucker
>>25688946
He wouldn't do shit in front of Flutterbutter
>>25688935
i honestly could even see him taking sympathy just this ones and doing something nice like giving us the blanket
On an unrelated topic, the next time I see the general I'd like to give him a reminder that he tried to gore you, a colt, to death. Couldn't think of a quick and easy way for a poor colt? Sounds like the warriors death in wing commander.
>>25689018
>an unrelated note
That note's pretty fuckin unrelated
>>25689018
Well it was you or him, because Chrysalis would have gore him if he didn't do anything
>>25689044
Just with my thoughts waiting for green
>>25689050
Would have preferred a buck to the head instead.
>>25688846
>Angel got up from his blanket and rushed over to Fluttershy, grabbing her attention.
>"Angel? What's the matter?"
>He was trying to pull her away from you. For what purpose? You didn't know. But, you were actually thankful for him taking the attention this time. You wiped your tears away. And tried better to compose yourself.
>Angel on the other hand, could tell that's exactly what you were trying to do. And while he considered you an enemy when it came to Fluttershy and her affections. Even he had never seen you cry. And considering he was now, at this moment. In third place in knowing anything about your secrets, which of course wasn't too much. For him to come to your rescue. If you knew, you'd thank him later for it.
>"Angel, come on now. I-I'm dealing with something important. I promise I'll get you a snack when I'm done ok?I'll even give you some extra, just for you." Fluttershy was trying to shoo away Angel. she couldn't do it by just telling him to go away, wasn't in her nature. But maybe with the promise of treats?
>After you were sure your tears were wiped off. You turned to Fluttershy, who was looking down at Angel. And the moment Angel saw you were ok. He just backed off from Fluttershy. But not without giving you the "I'm watching you" gesture. While he believed you were really hurt, he still had some doubt.
>And seeing that, you could tell he definitely did you a favor. Though, you weren't sure yourself why he did such a gesture.
>"Angel?...Angel Bunny?" But he just hopped off, just out of the room itself. Without telling her a word apparently.
>"I-I sure hope I didn't upset you..." Fluttershy was talking to nobody now, but she was afraid she hurt Angel's feelings. In fact, she was starting to think she hurt yours..somehow. She turned towards you, she could see you were facing her now. But despite your tears gone. your somber smile was offputting. "A-Anon...did I hurt your feelings when I mentioned you were nervous about the party?"
>>25689097
tell her
>>25689162
Even after angel's intervention I doubt anyone could keep a secret from her at this point.
>>25689097
>....even trying to put up a false front. Fluttershy was upset about something. Maybe she could tell something even deeper was wrong. Or maybe she really thought she had hurt you....and...
>...nope, you started to tear up again. All you needed her to do was just smile and cheer you up. Not act sad.
"N-no, I'm fine...I'm just...tired"
>Why couldn't you get over this? WHY?! Chrysalis threatened to kill you before. So why did this affect you more?
>....you couldn't figure it out. And you couldn't stop your tears. Your lie was easily saw through.
>"Anon...." Fluttershy stepped up to you and wiped your tear away gently with her hoof. "Please tell me what's the matter. If it's not the party, then what is it? Maybe I can help? Oh! In fact! I know just the trick to turn that frown upside down!"
>Her maternal instinct was kicking in as she put on a bright smile, even though she was still worried, she knew you always calmed down when she was affectionate towards you. She, like before, gently grabbed you, and flipped onto her back, so you could hug onto her tummy.
>"Are you feeling bett-.....Anon?" She was smiling up until she looked onto your face. You still looked miserable to her.
>But you still took the opportunity to lay your head down on her belly. even feeling as shitty as you did. It made you feel safe, but not enough to make this a distant memory. Maybe it was because someone you seen for so many seasons. go through so many friendship issues, and get through them with her friends. Suddenly went full retard on you and tried to banish you. And if the show was any indication...it could have even been for a 1000 years....if you lived that long.
"......Aunt Fluttershy....Au...nt.."
>You grasped onto her tightly, and just nuzzled, taking in her warmth. You didn't want to be anywhere else.
"C-can I stay here tonight. Can I sleep here? Can I sleep here with you..please...please..please?"
>>25689187
And she will know one way or the another, lying to her now will only make things worse
>>25689207
well hes not lying. hes just talking about it.
>>25689206
>Fluttershy's mind only grew with grimmer thoughts when she heard that. What could have happened to make you want to sleep in her home? Not that she minded, you were always welcome. But she never thought your first real sleepover with her would be because of....whatever it was. "Of course Anon...but....won't you please tell me what's the matter?"
>.....you can't. ...you can't.
>"....is...it's not your father is it? Is something going on at home?"
>You open your mouth to tell her yes
"Y....y......"
>You can't, you see a look of genuine worry in her face. Not just Flutterbutter worrying. REAL worrying.
>You clam up.
>"Yes?....oh...oh no. I...he didn't do anything...t-to bad. Did he? Maybe just..a prank?" Fluttershy was hoping it was just one of Discord's silly pranks.
>...great, she was blaming Discord now. no, you couldn't let he blame him. for his sake, your sake, and her sake. You shake your head.
"No, it's not him..or anything at home.."
>"...then what is it? Is there anything I can do to help? Whatever it is Anon, you tell me. I'm here for you" Fluttershy started to gently rock herself the best she could while on her back. Wrapping her front hooves around your body.
>....You thought about it, just keeping it to yourself. But what good would that do? once one of the ponies went to see Twilight. They'd know, and it'd spread among them. Including Fluttershy. It was inevitable. And as you tried to contain it. You knew, holding it in would only make it worse. As the worry of WHEN it would be found it would settle into your mind. You felt like a big baby. But...it felt, sort of ok. When it was with Fluttershy.
"...Aunt Fluttershy..."
>>25689354
>you thought about asking her to promise not to get upset. But you knew that was futile.
>You took a breath. Between hiding it, and talking about it. You weighed the options one last time.
>By not telling her. Life could eventually proceed as normal. But you knew everyone would find out, probably during the party. You would get barraged with questions. the hassle would be great. And Fluttershy, she might even be hurt that you didn't trust her enough to actually tell her whats wrong. And if she had to react at all, you didn't want her to do it in public.
>but by telling her. You'd have someone who you could talk to about it. Maybe, to help you sort your thoughts and maybe not be so upset. Maybe even not be pissed off at Twilight. But that was going to be hard. The problem was, you knew this would upset Fluttershy. So no matter what the choice. You'd upset her.
>...you decided to tell her. You would just have to make sure to try to cheer her up somehow right after.
>And even looking at her, you hesitated. And so you thought one last time. Was Twilight really at fault for her actions? You thought on Chrysalis. even you didn't fully believe her when it came to prejudice. And Twilight just attacked you right when she suspected you. And even with all the ways to think of another way. It was Spike who essentially saved your ass.
>She was. She was totally at fault. And within your fear, your hurt on being attacked by a character who you essentially felt you watched "grow up". You felt anger, that this same character would be so damn aggressive.
"....It's about Twilight.."
you done erf?
>>25689384
>Fluttershy was extremely confused, she even held her breath for just a moment upon hearing Twilight's name. That...that couldn't be right.
>"...about Twilight? Anon what do you mean?"
>Just were shaking, just from hearing and saying her name. That was it, wasn't it? The terrible realization that Twilight just condemned you for even trying to talk with her about something you were sure would be ok to talk about. And then the fact that you knew if you were sent into Tartarus. It was possible you'd be in there for quite some time. If Discord wasn't watching you when you got sent in, how would he know how to find you? He couldn't even find Starlight Glimmer or Suri Polomare through normal means. You could have maybe used the horn. But you doubt Twilight's spell wouldn't have let you take your things with you. And although she didn't know what degree of power the horn had, you knew that she knew you had it.
>You could have possibly been lost forever. And the very fact that Twilight would have caused it. Made you cry, you didn't want to be alone again. You didn't want to know that could have happened. That was it. The fact you could have ended up alone because Twilight was being a fucking FUCKING SHIT! A FUCKING PIECE OF SHIT! You would have been alone in a place worse than earth, in a near literal hell. even if you found the exit. You'd be torn apart by Cerberus.
"Twilight, she tried to send me to Tartarus..."
>And thats all it took. Fluttershy went wide eyed. Utterly shocked. No, that couldn't be right. "A-Anon, a-are you sure? I mean...that just sounds like a bad dream."
>You shake your head. as tears began to well up. You never EVER wanted to be alone. or a chance to be forced to be alone.
>"It wasn't a dream. It wasn't. S-she thought I was the changeling queen. She thought..."
>>25689471
ech, fucked up dat Anon text.
>You tell Fluttershy what had transpired at the castle. With each sentence. Fluttershy's heart grew heavier with sadness...and as the story went on. She even started to feel anger. The details you gave didn't sound like the imagination of a child. Fluttershy wanted to get up, and go find out Twilight's side of the story. And she was hoping she had a good one. Because Fluttershy thought that if she had succeeded. Then it was DEFINITE you weren't coming back.
"...I was afraid...I thought I'd never see you, or dad, or my friends again..I...I"
>You started crying. Now that you figured it out. You just cried. Telling the story, while it got it off your chest. Didn't help in the ways of calming you down.
>You liked your life here. You liked the excitement. You liked being dragged around for stupid shit, even if you didn't like it at the same time. You liked how different each of your friends were. You liked having friends. You liked looking forward to the new day, even if on school days, you got slammed into it head first. Hell, even falling on your head multiple times wasn't that bad. Because you would always get back up, because you still had a good day ahead of you....or you were running for your life. Whatever it was.
>And you never wanted to lose it.
>Ever...
>Fluttershy, could feel you shaking on her belly.and the tears from you flowed more and more. No She wouldn't go confront Twilight now. She held you tight. Gently rubbing her right hoof along your back. "Anon....would you like to sleep with me tonight? We can cuddle close, and I'll tell you a story. Would you like that?"
>You sob and cry, nuzzling firmer into her. You just wanted to feel her warmth, and her love. Things you'd never feel ever again back on earth. You tell her, in a weak, sobbing voice.
"I-I'd like that...s-s-o much.."
Chapter End
>>25689554
http://pastebin.com/tCSzUjVE
woo, good sized chapter.
>>25689554
Not gonna lie, this hit me hard.
>>25689563
Not that particular post, I mean the entire series of events.
>>25689559
Excellent chapter
bumping this shit
twilight is worst princess
>>25689554
I woke up to major feels.
100/10 Erf
>>25690575
i agree.....damn
good erf better and better :D
Twilight is gonna have a bad time
>>25690931
aaaand here come the memetale posters
erf, you're still doing good
>>25691173
>memetale
/v/ please go
>>25691268
But is true
The game is good but the memes are overrated
>>25689554
Imagine a story of Anon in Tartarus
A what if
All alone
Creatures looking at him wondering what a colt is doing here
Time pass and he is still thereTirek soon takes him as his adopted son and the rebellion starts, Anon plotting revenge agaisn't Twilight, father and son unitedhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q5ZY8Fz9GGU
>>25691319
I guess you're having a bad time.
>>25691319
COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORN OOOOOOOOOOOOOON THE COOHOHOOOOOB
>>25691319
>"Twilight...whats wrong?"
"I feel, a presence, some pony i haven't seen since..."
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OTfFLxn_ZmE
>>25691319
>>25691452
>Prequels shit
>>25688323
Now that he realized how much Discord has actually done, he needs to give that nigga a big fucking bro hug for everything.
>>25691642
Yeah, after Discord finishes dealing with Bookcunt
>>25691268
the memes are everywhere
>implying i go to the cesspool that is /v/
What do you think happens to this Changleling during all this?
>>25692002
They sit in Discord's basement bored.
>>25692002
Oh, you meant THAT changeling in particular.
He obviously left as soon as the wedding was over so Twilight wouldn't murder him.
>>25692002
He came just for the buffet
>>25691634
>>25692136
He even had to hire private security. Twilight just hates bugs
>>25685965
>Twilight with CSC hair in Chrysalis's colours
I had no idea how much I wanted this until now.
I feel for Twiggy, because she saw through Anon's web of lies but came to the wrong conclusion.
How ironic that it's Chrysalis of all ponies that's only one that knows the real truth outside of Discord. Anon must think that if he confessed to his real friends then he'd lose them.
>>25694338
>Anon must think that if he confessed to his real friends then he'd lose them.
I mean... yeah. He probably would. And the princess(es) would probably make Discord send him back.
>>25694392
I don't think they'd subject him to that if he really wanted to stay. Especially since, mired with bullshit and half-truths as they are, the friendships Anon has made in Equestria are real.
>>25692002
Oh, you mean Chungus? Who knows.
While this whole thing was a nice twist, please don't dwelve deeper into the trauma thing, please keep it as a light hearted story. Just make fluttershy and discord having a serious conversation with Twiggy about her big fuck up and maybe establish this as the gateway to Luna and Celestia's Nightmare Night
Anon and Discord are really gonna have to come clean about the fact they falsely implicated Chrysalis in foalnapping and possibly infanticide, because that's what really set Twilight (and this whole situation) off.
when anon gets home im half expecting him to walk right up to chrysalis and hug her then apologize
>>25695491
Nah, Twilight fucked it up on her own
>>25695934
She fucked up royally. One of the reasons why is because she was making decisions based on facts creatively re-interpreted and edited by Anon and Discord.
>>25695491
Nope. The ruse kinda comes apart if they come clean like that. Their burden, if they care to care.... Which I do now.... Damnit
>>25696161
But still reacting too irrationally... Which is her fault.
>>25696161
No that's one of the context, the reason is actually that retarded morale at the end of the wedding episodes. Trust your instincst no matter what or some bullshit like that. She acted irrationally, the fault of this situation is entirely on her
>>25696355
This too. Now we're piling on.
>>25696461
It's more like common sense. If a nigger tries to shoot you just because you said that maybe we should try to be more diplomatic on the middle east and his excuse is that he thought that you were an ISIS terrorist, then that nigger is at fault and should be punished, not you
>>25696355
>She acted irrationally, the fault of this situation is entirely on her
That's exactly what I'm disputing. Discord and Anon created a narrative where Chrysalis is specifically targeting Anon. Anon has built a relationship with Twilight based on pretending to be something he isn't. She had experienced, and was right, about a similar situation in the Canterlot wedding.
While Twilight made the wrong choice, she wasn't acting irrationally.
>>25696790
But she was, she actually didn't know anon that much as she knew Cadence. She only spoke with him for what? two or three occasions? and all of them were formality. One to introduce himself to her, the other because DT dragged him in and the last one to be interviewed. Twilight doesn't know anon that much or at all, she acted irrationally because she made a really strong decision based on flimsy evidence
>>25696835
How filmsy is it really when a colt still going to the pony equivalent of elementary school starts talking like he's twenty years older, tries to manipulative their conversation to learn what he wants to know, and has battle damage on his saddlebags?
>>25696986
Again, she doesn't know anon, and you don't know m8, there are 7 years old that talks like a 15 year old, and anyway, the damage on the saddlebag could easily be due to a kid being a kid. She just arranged in her mind that "oh, this colt is now sounding too intelligent and is speaking of changelings, he must be the Queen Chrysalis, there can't be another explanation". Again, she doesn't even know anon, she just went with the first thing that crossed her mind, if Spike wouldn't have asked that question then she would have sent anon to hell, no questions asked, no evidence gathered, or even informed to Discord and the other princesses to council what would the best course of action be. Ergo, she was a complete irrational cunt
>>25697044
We have already seen that she possesses the means to break a changeling disguise in the Canterlot wedding two parter, and as a unicorn she could manage it on drones. As an alicorn, it may be reasonable to say that such a spell could be used to dispel a queen's disguise. She made no attempt to verify that it was Chrysalis and instead went for a brand new spell that would honestly qualify as one of the most powerful she knows. A logical path would be to cast the sigil of binding and then verify the identity for certain, then banish if needed. She acted instead with sudden and extreme measures from the get go.
>>25697044
You're right, you could explain all those things, (obvious for us because we're following Anon's perspective) but that doesn't mean it would be a convincing argument to someone in Twilight's position. She's working from a false set of facts that she hasn't been given a reason to disbelieve. She's wrong but not irrational.
>>25697151
She had reasonable justification, considering the things Chrysalis had been supposedly up to recently. All of this is after the four princesses decided the changelings had gone too far and had to go.
She did give Anon a chance to explain himself too, and then again, after he'd tried to run.
>>25697300
>She had reasonable justification
They just 'sealed' the entire fucking hive into their equivalent of hell, there was no justification.
>>25697410
Them terries got drax'ed on the sclounced.
>>25692002
>>25692268
Do you think this changeling was also banished if Erf's storyline? Since he was tolerated enough to be allowed to attend a wedding even after the reputation changeling have with weddings.
>>25697660
No, he's in pony Guantanamo
>>25697410
TWILIGHT DID NUTHIN
Guys guys, we are all forgetting something. How will Fluttershy actually react to this?
>Erf's version of the finale is that Starlight guilttrips Twilight and convinces her about the equality shenanigans
>>25698138
PLATINUM MAD
>>25698138
She's now the element of rage. The anger she's feeling now won't let her sleep or do anything else until she slaps Twilight in the cunt
>>25698264
RIGHT in the CUNT
>>25698280
That's what she gets for being a cunt
>>25698138
She's internalizing it for now, probably the most evil and heinous crime she could ever imagine. But due to her God tier kindness she's taking it in stride to care for the broken colt clinging to her side. Vengeance is not part of her mindset, but she is probably more conflicted about her feelings than she ever had been before in her life.
>>25698486
I do expect her to just implode at Twilight tho
>>25698500
Yes. I would expect her to implode on Twilight. A sadness and grief so intense that neither light nor anger could escape her collapse before her friend. Twilight could can only begin to imagine the damage she has done after nearly killing a colt and devastating the element of kindness.
>>25698589
Anon just did it. He brought more chaos than anything Discord could have ever hoped to.
>>25698598
Ooh man, when you say it like that..... Mission Accomplished...
>>25698613
We did it boys. We won the chaos game, Discord can't do shit to top this
>>25698598
>>25698613
>>25698623
I can already tell Discord is going to congratulate him for it and make Anon feel even shittier.
>>25698640
To be fair, and just based on this Discord. I think that he will make anon feel better with some of his shenanigans, then he will go and have some sort of retaliation at Twilight, or just implode at her along with Fluttershy. Chrysallis will be the one to congratulate anon, but just on something like "Now you opened your mind" or "You just experienced what we have experienced for centuries"
>>25698665
That or he jumps off the dam.suicide is painless
>>25698702it brings on many changes
Where's Erf tho
life is not black and white we are the product of events, people act stupid, true courage lies not in how we condemn those for that which we might fall prey to ourselves, but in how we forgive those their mistakes.
>>25698809
You fucking hippie get out of my imageboard. We are all out for revenge
>>25698808
fuckin yo girl
>>25698808
erf is ded
died inna car accident
rip
>>25698809
What's this faggotry.
>>25698836
Well, he's in for a ride, my ex killed my $700 PC when I told her that I wasn't interested in going back with her
>>25698825
>>25698857
Someone who doesn't want to see a painful wedge driven between two good friends either.
>>25685965 Im on pony thread simulator. JUST look at me on that beautiful video. Aww.
>>25698808
YOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO.
I've been carefully reading ALL the feedback and discussion. I realize i'm on a slippery slope here with the incoming chapters. I could totally botch it, or it could be brillaint. I do have plans. maybe it's not what everyone wants. But the main point of the story is to be a light hearted romp. We'll see how this goes.
>>25698918
You are a boring guy and completely irrealistic too. There's no way in hell that shit won't hit the fan, at least for some moments
>>25698993
>But the main point of the story is to be a light hearted romp.
This please, have some conflict without falling on PTSD and broken friendships shenanigans. Maybe just use this as a way to reintroduce Celestia and bring Luna to the story, Twilight learns het lesson and we move on, so the story don't deviate onto something dark and edgy
>>25699034
Nah, I don't need Celestia and Luna for this. If anything. throwing them in NOW would lead into it. and don't say it doesn't have to be. because then it'd be an overcrowded shlock. Just trust in me. I'll figure this out.
>>25699002
I think anyone who's fucked up big and felt terrible about it can sympathize with how Twilight must feel. I know I do.
>>25698825
>>25698857
The weak can never forgive. Forgiveness is the attribute of the strong. Will anon be a man and forgive the weak their mistakes or will he condemn them. I've very curious to see what kind of a man anonymous wants to be.
Ok, for the sake of the story. I'll let you guys decide on how to proceed. choose a number. and we'll tally votes in 15 minutes.
1. Twilight gets utterly crushed, like. were going dank and edgy here.
2.Twilight gets crushed, but somehow this stays light hearted (my choice goes to this)
3.Twilight gets a stern talking to
4.LOLZ FRIENDSHIP
5. Anon meets StarlightThink carefully if you choose this choice. For you do not realize what power it holds
>>25699073
Did you tried to kill a kid?
>>25699102
A man with enough guts to deliver justice, I hope
>>25699136
Nope, and neither did Twiggy.
>>25699131
3
>>25699131
Something between 2 and 3
>>25699131
>3.Twilight gets a stern talking toAlso think you should write whatever the fuck you want, you're the writer.
>>25699159
>and neither did Twiggy.
She totally did, she was gonna send anon to hell where he would have died. She thought that he was bugbutt sure, but that doesn't change the fact that she's guilty of murder attempt.
Also 3 that leads into 2
>>25699136
you have no idea what it's like to have people threaten you and those you care about, you live in a suburb and you're too young to remember wondering if the world was going to end every time due to mutually assured destruction, when you're trying to protect those you care about you can do some really stupid shit. She made a mistake based on fear, those are the easiest mistakes to make.
>>25699181
I am the writer. But this is more of a focus group sort of thing. I've never gotten this far in a greentext before. just because a choice will be made, doesn't mean it's going to be cut and dry
>>25699217
i dunno if i have insight on this in actuality.
But my grandmother had my father killed, then was planning to kill me and then my siblings down the line. But the assassin got caught and ratted her out.
>>25699131
2 because if this is the one you voted for then it will probably come out the best
>>25699217
My neighborhood was infested with druglords and I still never did something overly stupid that could put someone else life in danger
>>25699131
1 leading towards 3 to make everything better. But 2 in relation to anything non-Anon.
>>25699155
this is something either a 13 year old says to sound edgy, a weeb who watches too much shonen anime, or a spiteful old man who wasted his life and hates for hates sake
>>25699242
Damn
>>25699242
You've lived a wild life, brother
>>25699306
Bad justice
>>25699242
well I wasn't talking about you anyway, you're writing is exceptional and characterization is top notch with is 10x more important than plot
>>25699131
2 with a happy ending
>>25699131
>2.Twilight gets crushed, but somehow this stays light hearted (my choice goes to this)
>>25699242
Are you like, long lost fucking royalty or something?
>>25699242
>But my grandmother had my father killed, then was planning to kill me and then my siblings down the line. But the assassin got caught and ratted her out.
nigga what
>>25699242
Are you polish?
>>25699171
>>25699196
>>25699304
So basically a crushed Twilight that receives a stern talking to while slowly somehow becoming lighthearted again? Either in time or somehow redeeming herself to Anon.
At least to a point where he no longer feels PTSD near her?
>>25699396
Yes, this is the best case scenario
>>25699396
Perfect, submit this idea to Erf
>>25699396
>redeeming herself to Anon
Yes, this.
Her trying really, adorably hard to make it up to him.
What would a friendship lesson letter to princess Celestia sound like in relation to almost sending a falsely judged foal to pony hell and give him PTSD from your actions?
>>25699484
Does this mean we gonna have a dick suckin scene?
>>25699502
Yes, and she will like it
>>25699344
>>25699364
>>25699389
Long story, I was just seeing if it qualified. in anycase. going to tally up the votes,
>>25699484
Unf
>>25699396
Yes I like this.
I like the serious elements but then we can come back to the niceness and lighthearted again.
>>25699484
But I don't clop
>>25699550
Well, 3 and 2 look like the winners anyway. TIME TO WRITE
>>25699396
>>25699458
>>25699484
>>25699470
>>25699526
What do you think Erf?
>>25699560
Already working on it. just leave it to me. I think I got something that everyone will like
