Is this a good short story
http://pastebin.com/KuxTiZ94
>>8188397
No: it's edgy and blandly written.
>>8188441
edgy is not actually a criticism
what you mean is that edgy, but badly written and void of value
>>8188445
yes it is you dummy
>>8188441
okay i'll just delete it then
That was bad. Why did you even bother writing that? what was the point?
>>8188469
i just felt the need to write it. the opening sentences started appearing my head and i went from there.
i'm sorry
>>8188445
edgy is valid criticism when it's criticizing edginess for the sake of edginess. If a story explores some idea and in the process dances along some edges, that's just fine. But edginess for the sake of edginess is gauche.
>>8188473
You dont need to apologize for being a genius anon! Your work is grade a spiffy though I did not read it.
>>8188397
>Some would I "stared", but I don't believe in staring.
glaring and stupid mistake in literally the second sentence
but in some actual fucking effort you twat
you're not that special
>>8188487
>but in
karma is a bitch
>>8188496
You see, the Great Creator always sides with other creators, not the destroyers who pretentiously refer to themselves as critics.
Keep on chugging, OP. You are an artist.
>>8188503
Don't do it, OP! The repliers in this thread are just jealous. Your story is decent. Keep writing, and you will write great ones. I can assure you.
>>8188504
>Keep on chugging, OP. You are an artist.
No I'm not I am worthless as everyone in this thread has demonstrated beyond a resonible doubt
>>8188511
No I won't you just don't want blood on your hands
>>8188397
no, but someone already posted it in the thread where they were going on about killing themselves.
i remember the line about the ants, the rest is unmemorable, like a juvenile lydia davis kind of thing.
>>8188496
yeah, but i wasn't asking for you to waste your time on a critique for my post you pious faggot
when you ask for effort, you should put in effort
jesus you're retarded
>>8188528
>i remember the line about the ants, the rest is unmemorable, like a juvenile lydia davis kind of thing.
perfectly sums up why i should die
thank u
>>8188523
If you die, that's your choice and responsibility. I'm only speaking my opinion.
>>8188535
>when you ask for effort, you should put in effort
hoisted by your own petard yet again
>>8188540
yep
