Guys, rate the first sentence of my new (approximately 600 page) novel. I release one chapter at a time and get paid by the character.
>It would be remiss of me to abstain from explicating to you, dear reader, the vagaries of happenstance that propitiated the fortuitous currents of fate that led my G*d fearing soul to my current state of events.
>>7843732
Is your narrator supposed to be a pompous try hard pseud?
rather lovecraftian
>>7843732
It's fedoric
>>7843732
>G*d
chosen
I grimaced. Who talks like that? And it's not even poetically artificial. It's just trash. Trash. Try again, without the thesaurus this time.
>>7843732
This smells of De Quincey.
>>7843757
Shit I thought this was a Dickens opening you were posting for irony, but it's actually original? Good God. I'm sorry. I'm sorry for being so mean. It's... it's not that bad, Anon.
>>7843732
if you can keep up this uppity sounding twat style for 600 pages,I will eat my hat.
>>7843767
Wew lad, you should've seen the amount of furniture, building, and clothes research I did in order to have huge amounts of description. Reading my book will qualify you as an interior decorator
>>7843777
doesn't matter that you have tripliners,you shouldn't treat the reader as an inferior in this noble from of cooperation called reading.
