Please help me, /lit/
I have been flip-flopping between writing in the first and third person for a short story
I essentially have two first drafts, and now I need to choose or I'm never going to make progress
Here's the beginning of the story in both first and third person:
http://pastebin.com/raw/TL5ZDpzC
Personally, I'm leaning towardsthird personright now (but I've gone back-and-forth several times)
I have no writing group to help me. I've always tried to offer good critiques and advice here.
Does anyone have any comments or suggestions?
>>7790802
I'd go with first person if you want to maintain a sense of intimacy. If you want that distant commentary style stick with third.
Why not both?
>>7790802
It all depends on where you're going with this, in third person it seems more cynical, ironic, the narrator has this detached quality, as if the particular, humane qualities of the character aren't of immediate importance compared to the greater point he's trying to make with the story, and in first person there's a similar detachment, but one which makes the character sound humble, as someone who sees himself as unimportant. It also sounds as if he's distant from himself or from a meaningful life.
>>7790802
Stop coming here for writing advice. The board is for conversation on literature and books; not your awful attempt at wanting to write a book ever since you bought the meme trilogy and now consider yourself an intellectual because you browse a literature board. You're on 4chan, you fucking faggot.
>>7791287
wew lad
go fuck yourself
>>7791287
>projecting this hard
heheheh
