I didn't realize that you wrote such bloody awful poetry
kinda short, but has potential. 7/10
true
>>7778779
sod off you poofter
I actually don't write poetry, because I know I'd be bad at it.
Some people on this board need to take the fucking hint.
Hell, I'm 18.5k words into a book idea and I'm considering giving that up too; mainly because I'm writing the sort of book I'd like to read, and I suspect (from /lit/'s critique) that my style is too formal (à la High Fantasy).
Don't persist in anything you're shit at.
>>7778779
yeah, alright and I suspect you'll go down in musical history
>>7778799
>I'm not stupid, i'm a realist
kek
>>7778779
keats and yeats are on my side
How can you stay with a fat girl who'll say
'oh, would you like marry me? And if you'd like you can buy the ring'
>>7778799
>Don't persist in anything you're shit at.
>Never get better at anything because if you're not perfect the first time you never will be.
>>7778779
Why do you think we're not published?though, granted, there are published poets even worse than the people on here
ahem
The death of the victim
but after 22 years the weather eye exception
suprised and impressed by deftly probing
children born of ideology
and recently
forced to choose between 1984 and old testament texas
>>7778779
Meter is a spook
>>7778878
It was good except the "ahem" part. That was just weird.
Things like other things, and very emotions
Now run-on sentence because big emotions
In my heart and soul and being and heart. Things.
More things. A lot of many things in here.
They make me feel bad but good at same time
Like a thing that makes you feel good and bad.
Something something something then rhyme
Then imagery and feeling bad.
Please critique, thanks.
a tree
I see
that sprouted limbs
and told me to walk again
>>7778799
>Some people on this board need to take the fucking hint
I feel like if I were to ever write poetry I'd do it just for myself. I assume a fair few people in the poetry critique threads write poetry simply to express themselves with minimal intention of being published. They share it out of curiosity and to improve. Should they stop writing poetry because a few /lit/izens call it out as shit (ie 'taking the hint')? Of course not, that's ridiculous.
>>7778879
Of course, we've already heard the best there is
>>7778779
you are a flatulent pain in the ass
>>7778878
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0YdbSjXavpA
>>7778896
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1m0y00uD6uX
>>7778879
How can you say I go about things the wrong way?
>>7778879
There's always someone, somewhere
With a big nose, who knows
And trips you up and laughs when you fall
>>7778901
I like this one m8.
The poetry of /lit/ is empty because we don't understand poetry's purpose
>>7779241
OMG I NEVER REALISED; DO YOU KNOW THE PURPOSE ?????????
>>7778779
Frankly I'd feel more fulfilled
Making Christmas cards for the mentally ill
I want to live and I want to love
I want to catch something I might be ashamed of
>>7778779
There's an old quote: "A writer is only as good as his readers." Most adults in the USA can only read at an 8th grade level. You do the math.
>>7779298
Can I use a calculator?
>>7778799
>my style is too formal (à la High Fantasy)
wew
>>7778779
Life is very long when you're lonely.
I used to work with a kid, fresh off uni, who wrote poetry. More precisely, fucking sonnets. From time to time he would take out this notebook and then ask us for some words rhyming with whatever. Completely mechanical writing, I don't think he even knew the first thing about metre, he only cared about lines and rhymes.
Why do such people exist.
>>7779854
You should've told him to become a rapper
>>7778896
wow this sucks
>>7779207
what a piece of shit
