Alright /lit/ I wrote 15000 words. The first chapter of which I turned into a podcast prototype this morning that's, eh, kind of like an audio book? At any rate, 14 minutes of your time, tell me all the things that I fucked up, and maybe if something was okay.
I know it's garbage tier, but do you think you could help a poor guy out and give me some hints on how to make it better?
https://soundcloud.com/valkyrieundornifex/pale-blue-vol-i-a-house-of-flame-chapter-1
>>7504483
Please post the text. I'm not listening to your fagcast
>>7504502
this
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>For you
come on man
This is pretty good man.
Podcast was a little cringy desu but nonetheless I quite liked it.
>>7507335
Yeah, I'm experimenting with ways to try to get it the whole story out there and try to drum up some feedback, so I'm gonna end up flailing it around like an idiot for a bit.
Thanks though. It eventually has a ton of visceral child murder in it, the real meat of where I think people might enjoy it? I don't know.
>>7504483
Its good, keep it up
I fucking love that intro man.
Pretty good TBQH senpai. Not perfect but some editing would make it high-tier. Also, change the main character's name.
>>7507421
Yeah, it's got a few more gauntlets of editing to go.
And reasoning for the name change? I wanted to use something relatively sexually amorphous so I could use paternal and maternal characteristics.
>>7507358
Well, good luck friendo and do post some updates senpai on here every so often.
>>7508332
Absolutely. This mild amount of positive sentiment is getting me in the blood.
