Rate my haiku, /lit/.
4/7
annon it is great
the only thing it needs now
is a marry sue
>>7501746
quality post
>>7501744
Too real
>2015
>not living in a country where its already Christmas
I like it a lot, honestly.
>>7501801
Gotta keep it real.
>>7501804
>On /lit/
>Didn't even read my haiku properly.
>>7501832
Whoops, let me do it to myself now.
>On /lit/
>Not reading people's posts properly.
do one about iPads next xD
>>7501744
LOL LIEK PEOPLE DON'T TALK TO EACH OTHER JUST USE PHONES WE ARE SO DISTANT LMAO XDDDDDDDDD
Also, there's faint rhyme in the first two verses which doesn't fit in a haiku.
>>7501945
>eve
>here
>rhyme
Literally what.
>>7501860
>On public transport
>Next to me is some dumb broad
>Playing with her pad
>>7501951
Just ignore pretentious people anon.
>>7501951
Nah, sorry, I'm dumb and not a native English speaker.
>>7501966
What country are you from?
Are you a woman?
Would you like to have sex with an American male (me)?
>>7501978
I'm a Slav male
But if you look good I might have sex with you.
>>7501992
Sorry, brah, no homo.
If you lift, though, I'd totally mire your pecs and lats.
>>7501997
Nah, I'm a weak manlet
>>7501744
Good premise
Shit execution
>>7501997
>>7502002
Haiku are fucking gay and boring as fuck I never understood the hype about them. Fuck haiku and fuck you op
>>7501746
Where are the other two lines
>>7502008
>On this Christmas Eve.
>The whole family is near.
>In different rooms.
Does this sound better?
>>7501744
You are very smart and you are gud write. pleas write more
I never could sleep
On Christmas;trembling with joy
Now I get eight hours
>>7501744
Sounds pithy in a twittercore way. There's technically a seasonal marker in your first line, but the supposed image in the next 2 lines is not at all clearly evoked.
Worry less about syllables and number of lines and instead focus on painting a picture.
>>7501768
JJ please go
>>7501744
death to infidels
islam will dominate
allahu ackbar
>>7503868
British literary highlight of 2015
Haiku are but memes.
Cast off this faggotry now.
It gives me cancer.
Translations are fine,
Some women can write ok.
Don't start with the greeks
>>7501744
in what language does "different" have three syllables?
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0pzPOxB1J7d
>>7505019
Too much free time senpai.
>>7504984
dif-fer-ent?
>>7504984
>Haikus must be strictly 5,7,5
>different is differ-rent
wow so deep and depressing xDDDD
Off yourself 2bh
I'm taking a shit
Thinking of words to describe
My love of dank memes
>>7501744
How about you go
and socialize instead of
hiding in your room
Autumn is ending;
Frogs settle down into the
Warm, loamy earth.
>>7505356
*Warm and loamy earth
>>7505356
Winter approaches
Autumn leaves leave bare trees
Frogs settle in the earth
