i made this story a bit ago, looking for criticism and an idea of what i should work on next assuming i do well with these kinds of stories its horror/suspense i tried to go for physiological horror
https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/52802631-where-am-i
its the first thing i have really done and shared with people
>>2344809
>-where-am-i
The wrong board
should be able to click on the title for the story
oh shit, sorry kinda new here
>>2344809
Get your shit together
>>2344823
lol
>kinda new here
sure buddy
i do admit to lingering around the random section but outside of that i haven't really explored much
>>2344809
like the other guy said, get your shit together. You keep referencing your characters actions in random tenses.
We all have to get beat up a lot before we learn to fight. this is an early defeat, go back to the drawing board
