Poster I did of a student-held event in my town (just for practice). Plagiarized a bit.
Logo, mascot and a few event variants.
The beforementioned plagiarization. I was struggling to make a cheerful environment but still wanted to finish it.
>>257792
I like it, it's cute :3
>that yu-gi-oh! card
noice
my professor say my poster is not clear enough to understand. What do you guys think?
>>258007
Yeah idk what its supposed to be, 2 guns behind a pillar drawn with shitty lines?
>>258009
The lines are suppose to resemble three thrones that represents the political elites. I'm trying to express gun control is the centralized ownership of guns in the hands of the political elites and their minions.
So it would be a lot better if I use a picture of a throne? Or the idea is too complex to express without too many text that I need to compress it a bit more?
>>258022
WTF are you talking about
>>258027
Which part do you not understand?
>>258027
If you are talking about the content, then it's not my fault that the professor chose the topic that can be sensitive to some people. I'm just doing my best. Or else I would be talking about how bad the public education is and offend everyone in my class
>>258023
even worst?
>>258044
my god. this might be the worst poster I've ever seen
>>258045
every design I can think of it get worst
>time to hang myself
>>258045
why I'm still working on this?
um why is he white?
installed inkscape 45 minutes ago and made my very first thing, what do you guys think
>>258246
Could be a good icon
made a couple simple logos, r8
>>258300
>>258057
Its not your posters it's your message.
I read your background text it comes across as sweaty palm gun nut shit.
Redefine your message and start again.
starting my portfolio today and needed a sort of home page art, so i made this. my name is indigo hart and i got the nickname honeydew in my teen years.
>>258337
so its a lot easier for me to just make a poster that supports gun control?
made something new
>all those empty space
>that divided line
thanks for replying though
>>258516
>>258044
>>258007
The anti-gov't sentiment makes you look crazy.
The gray hushed text on black background makes it look like you're talking to yourself alone in a dark room.
This croc of shit would do a better job of convincing the public to be pro-gun.
>>258341
make bg white
>>258549
>The gray hushed text on black background makes it look like you're talking to yourself alone in a dark room.
well thanks for the feedback. I'll switch around and make a poster that support gun control now
>>258549
>Wimmin
Fuck me...
>>258022
if your message is gun control == putting guns the hands of the elite and away from the populace, I think i'd shoot for something more big brother-esque, along the lines of disembodied hand plucking away gun from normie citizen and placing it in the lap of some sort of authoritative figure
that or maybe a "gun turn in station" mario-style tube feeding weapons into the hands of again some authority figure/police. or maybe the guns feed into a big furnace that fuels giant CCTV cameras and propaganda speakers, as a second thought.
third plan might center around some reverse psychology statement like "you cant be trusted with defending yourself/ making important decisions, let daddy do the hard thinking for you"
surefire way to prevent conspiracy modo would be making it seem more satirical and like a straight rip from 1984, the stuff you have right now is more "wake up sheeple" imo.
>>258573
never thought of that...I did went on about reverse psychology, but couldn't get any great ideas.
>once again proofs I have no creativity
>>258564
No ones telling you to make a poster that supports gun control. What we're saying is what you're doing isn't working.
I looked at your poster and have no idea what your trying to sell me, when I studied your poster the back ground text it read like some crazed rant, i doubt that was your intention.
>>258827
Ive thought of doing something else, but none of them really interest me. Yes, that quote is not my word, but I want to convey the idea that we shouldn't trust the state too much, since most of the society's problems are created by it.
seeing some promotional pictures on the net let thing think of making some connection with the soviet communism or maybe nazi, but that seems even crazier that what I've made
>>258827
what do you think of this tagline?
>gun control through education and good parents not the state
>>258044
It's all shit but the main things leaping out at me are:
>"gun ownership" not being centered is pretty jarring in this context
>linework on the guns are muddy and shit.
>no excuse to leave skin colour on the glasses like that
Been fighting with this thing for something like two weeks, and I'm out of ideas. Original plan was to go for a retro-eque horror theme, but one thing or another just doesnt quite work. I've got something like six different versions of this now, but this is probably the one I'm the most satisfied with. what do (Aside from trim down line thickness on the shifter knob patter).
>>259252
It's too clean, I think that's the biggest problem right now. Your edges are too sharp and not really reminisce of an older movie poster.
I'm not really sure what the term is, but I think searching for Grindhouse styled posters might help out (again, I'm not sure if that's the term, but it seems kind of like the style that would fit this).
The font you have isn't working to well either. I'm not sure what I would change about it, but there's something that needs to change.
I'm not too crazy about the red border going through the skull like that on the right side either. The way it goes through the nose hole (which is out of place I might add) doesn't look too good.
Is there a reason you chose that type of format for the width and height? If not, a different ratio might help you out.
Hopefully it helps you find a direction to work in.
>>259260
While grind house isnt the exact style I was looking for, it definitely will be an easier style to emulate. Previous versions of the slap had the dot-matrix effect on the background and eye socket to go for a more old-school hand bill style.
The reason the nose hole is out of place is because the skull is placed relative to the shifter knob, which has been aligned center. I might re-size the skull a little in order to bring the nose split further right and just eliminate the border on the right edge of the slap all together.
Sadly the format is fixed, as its for a vertical car slap (1440*450px, cant remember what it translates out to in inches). The font I'll give you though, it feels too modern for the style I'm looking for. Over all though, I definitely have a better idea of what to work on now, thanks a ton.
>>258549
this image is silly because it implies you can only either have a whistle or a gun
>>259305
Hold the fucking phone, you trying to tell me you can have both? Legally? All this time I'be been smuggling whistles, hiding them behind my gun cabinet.
>>258057
better than the last ones.
>>258341
damn that is a hot ass name.
also thought about using some kind of blue, like indigo or something?
>>259260
I'm still not super pleased with it, but damn it looks a lot better than it did. Just messing with the dimensions on the skull was a vast improvement. I'm still stuck on how to get that papery-look you see in grindhouse posters, but swapping to a grungey font was another huge improvement. Whats your verdict?
I'm a business owner trying to get some business cards for my pilot school. I tried my hand at this idea I had of making the back look like a checklist of an airplane. Front is traditional format. Name is obviously different...
Thoughts???
(Red is where the machine will be cutting)
Thanks!
Poster I did of a studen-held orgy event in my basement (just for keks). Plagiarized a bit.
I need a better supporting font, suggestions?
>>259548
I think little more space between the text and edges and aligning the top and bottom black bars with the rest of the text would look a little nicer
>>259548
Show the front, that's what matters.
>>259569
Century thin? I'm thinking of contrasting with the bold looking script of the name
>>259569
i like the idea of the Q as sun and the font style of it works too.
but this duplication of the Q as symbol and text doesnt work quite well.
maybe find a way to integrate it in the name.
for a supporting font i think some serif font with thin and big lines could work. check out regal finesse pro or something very playful like selima.
>>259549
kek
/tg/ here. I wanted to make a poster for a sci-fi short story I've been working on. Prosperity is a city on Mars dug into the sides of a lava tube. It's a one-way trip brought to you by Human Achievement (their HA logo in the corner). I wanted to make it seem like an optimistic frontier, with vague hints that the place actually sucks. The excess space is to leave room for graffiti I will add later.
Overall I'm pretty satisfied, but I can't figure out why the text at the bottom just doesn't work. Is it too cramped? Is it the colors? I'm not sure how I feel about the beige color of the city, either; blending it into the darker colors of the ground looks strange. I also think the design of the "cap" might be too simplistic. What do you think?
>>259613
>>259627
I played with font styles and made some significant adjustments to the logo its self, thoughts?
>>259701
first one works well
good job
>>259701
Very nice, love the flow. I'd go top option.
Just made this website: https://please-dont-cry.appspot.com/
It's a baby who reacts to your voice frequency.
The design is limited since it was made by code (P5.JS)
>>259639
its hard to say unitl you add the grafiti but looks like youve got a solid base. Has almost a slight Fallout 4 vibe
>>259639
I honestly don't know what that image is meant to be, it looks like a graph or maybe a thermometer.
>>259701
Me again, thoughts on this? Fonts may change, I guess I'm asking if the logo is working.
>>260159
Spacing and placement might need some work which you probably knew already, but the logo works, I like it.
>>260182
Yeah kerning is wicked bad on second look. Custom title font inbound.
>>258099
um why did you write he?
i'm trying to design a sticker
how do i improve? feels a bit bland, my ps skills are very limited
>>260264
Jesus christ, don't put yellow drop shadows behind white copy, ever. If you had a dark outline it would be a different story..
>>260159
Could use a horn on the helmet because viking.
Otherwise I don't really see a reason the head is there at all.
>>260279
Not him, but Vikings did not have horned helmets. This is entirely an inaccurate invention of plays written about the Vikings almost 1,000 years later during the late 1800s.
Actual Viking helmets were simple conical affairs with an iron nose and sometimes eye mask, occasionally with chainmail draped to protect the neck.
Something like this is more authentic than any horned schlock.
>>259505
much better than your first poster. The only thing I could think to make it look more "papery" would be to add some more distress throughout the poster, not unlike what you did with the font. Alot of grindhouse posters look really worn, so prehaps you could distress the edges of the paper a little? Also, you could redraw the skull irl with a marker or paintbrush and scan it in, as this might give it a more "hand-drawn" feel which I believe is consistent with the grindhouse style.
Looking much better though man!
>>260159
The viking logo that you have placed above your type could totally work at a "V" in place of the actual letter. Could be something to consider.
>>260307
The paper effect is the real magic trick here for me. The font is just a grungey impact with a little detailing and some awful kerning, but applying the grunge method to the rest of the image via a variety of free grunge brushes I found just does not quite cut it. If worse comes to worse, I'll crumple some printer paper and scan/photo it and just set all the white to transparency. Distressing the edges is a good idea, but then end product is still going to be perfectly rectangle in order to save vinyl and reduce the effort needed to cut it out. Hand drawing the skull is an awesome idea though, and while a good chisel marker would be ideal, I might be able to make a vanilla sharpie work just as well!
Huge thanks for the help, never would have gotten this far on my own.
>>260159
Right or wrong direction?
>>260411
>>260486
I think >>260309 meant more along the lines of something like this.
I dunno if it's the right solution, but imo you need to find a better way of incorporating it with your wordmark.
>>260502
Yes indeed he did, I'd messed a bit with using the logo as the title case letter prior to his post.
Problem as I see it - either the copy or the logo needs to change significantly, they do not marry well. Changing the copy to a sans serif quasi script makes it too comic-esq. I suppose I could work against the logo but I think it's pretty striking as is.
That's how I am seeing it, but hey I've been wrong before.
>>259701
What's the supporting font on the first one?
>>260524
Walkway UltraBold
>>259252
Here you go familia, try not to copy it too much.
>>259252
>>260542
Here's another one if you're into videogames.
The trick is to pretend you are using press production, with blocks, ink and all that. When you stamp a block with ink on to your parchment or whatever, the edges should look rough, imperfect, and with bleeding edges. And because this is ink press, your color palette (and budget too) is very limited. Also, don't be afraid to clutter up a bit and fill the space. The opposite of minimalism can be aesthetically pleasing too.
>>260486
This would completely destroy your symmetry, but your viking face/horn motif would make an excellent tittle (the dot on the i), it could look like a torch.
How to make this website design not shit? Should I start over completely?
>Example Pages:
http://soulslike.com/
http://darksouls.soulslike.com/wiki/Cracked_Red_Eye_Orb
>>259252
Maybe make the background more interesting with some people screaming or something. Will probably require changing the black skull though
>>259505
Font is much better
>>260578
Do not raise your small caps above the baseline, it looks like an error.
>>260578
>>260641
It's how the font is designed. It sucks, and causes quite a bunch of issue with line-height too. But yeah, gotta stick to the Dark Souls theme...
I decided to redesign the whole site completely, since I was starting to get unhappy with what it looks like. Hopefully it'll be an improvement, will post in this thread again when I have more to show.
Are there any other obvious flaws with the design? I'm self-taught and feel like my skills are lacking but I'm not sure what I'm doing wrong.
just made a little type excercise
>>260669
Besides the fucked up font, it looks like a wiki. And I guess that's fine because it should look functional and not too designed.
self portrait
>>260690
Looks great, especially the hair! Jaw looks a bit odd though.
>>260690
Kindof a newfag here, can you breifly say how you did this? It looks amazing!
>>260690
Dang that hair looks beautiful. Job well done.
>>260672
These colors are very pleasant.
>>260724
Not him, but vector drawing takes a lot of time, even if you're drawing over something. The results are usually amazing, but it's not very time efficient.
I'm working on a logo, typeset and color palette for my own business. I don't exactly specialize in graphic design, but i was wondering if this sketch looked okay. The aim is to create something minimalistic that speaks for what i do. The idea is to keep the design simple so that it won't grab too much attention from my art. My main mediums are digital painting and hatching with ink. So i figured i'd represent myself with initials combined with a pen nib or brush. I'm going for either the second or last version. With the last version being hand drawn in ink so that it looks a bit more rough.
>>260690
good job
maybe sketch out the nose a bit more it looks pretty messy
redesigning the slackware logo because i think the old one is garbage. these are some of the ones i have so far. which ones is best or are they all shit?
http://www.slackware.com/ for reference
>>260775
i don't like it because it reminds me of this font
>http://www.dafont.com/danube.font
>http://www.davidairey.com/what-makes-a-good-logo/
>>260806
>i don't like it because it reminds me of this font
the only thing similar is the a. also why does it matter?
>>260808
is just my personal opinion. the typo is not that bad but the 'S' seems uninspired and generic. and also the the logo shouldn't be the size as the x-height.
>>259701
Definitely go with the first one. Good job
>>260775
If I HAD to chose one I'd pick #1. But I'm not really diggin the font
>>260775
I don't really see why you couldn't just combine the logo and the first S in slackware. I think you should find another font because that K and W is pretty ugly.
>>259701
Loving the first one.
>>260770
I feel kind of ignored here, but maybe thats just how this board works.
I'm trying to design a contact card, but i feel like somethings not right and i don't have the eyes to see my error.
>>260770
>>260820
it looks OK. but very easy to forget. it reminds me of this:
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=vYEh0AeRVlc
in the intro he draw a ink-pen logo sketch.
I think you should try to change the position of the text (those don't work) and maybe make the fountain pen more recognizable (it just too abstract).
>>260770
Why is the tear drop looking shape not round? Looks like somebody who is really bad at using scissors.
>>260833
I took your comments into account and spun around.
>>260841
I'm still in the rough phase so i dont care about polishing things that will get redone.
>>260873
Oops wrong version.
>>260820
>>260873
>>260875
>>260883
9 second design
>>260159
You could go creative here and change the vikings head into a raven by removing the vikings mouth and adjusting the eye. You could have both a raven and a viking head.
The raven being one of Odins ravens...
>>260775
different fonts and icons
Another pass on the sticker, still not happy with the edges. Colours are more accurate to the grindhouse style, but it still feels super plain without the correct edge effects and the colour variations on the skull itself. Problem now is that I'm not sure how to re-create those effects without sifting through a billion brush packs. If worse comes to worse, I can go in and do each bleed line by hand for the edges, but I'd really rather not. As for the effects inside the skull, I might try inverting the colours on the paper texture I made to give it a worn look.
Remaking the logo [spoiler]my YouTube channel[/spoiler]
I need critique, please
>>261124
I like it, did you design the font yourself or just modify an existing one?
>>261125
Thanks! It's Apollo ASM and Advent Pro
It's supposed to be the front page of a booklet that companies would use to recruit students from law school.
I have no clue about what I'm doing. If anyone can point the obvious flaws that would help.
>>261157
Do you need both of those stripes going through the 20? They detract from the readability
>>261179
I did a few more attempts. I think what you said about readability applies to a lot of them unfortunately. I'll try to be more careful when I finish this. Thanks for the input.
Just one last small bump for texture.
>>261157
>>261196
>>261203
Mon dieu, ce n'est vraiment pas professionel.
>>261157
>>261196
>>261203
15 minutes of work. Git gud.
my first attempt at double exposure. how did I do?
>>261209
Come on, I know you can give proper advice.
>>261212
The left shoulder looks awkward, I'd remove it.
>>261196
>>261209
this
>>261209
Anon can you design a resume for me, i like your style message me soundcloud: xorts
This is a class assignment; does everything look OK in it?
>>261252
it does look ok.
But it could be a lot better. The lighting is one directional, the angle of the photo is pretty flat, the camera is too close, and the drink is obscuring the bottle a bit too much (unless the drink is the focus, then it has another problem of I can't really tell what the focus of this image is)
>>260875
I tried my best, i hope this works.
>>261212
What the other guy said, remove the body and leave the head left. You might want to try and increase the size of the head. I like the face, it's simple and clean.
>>261051
I really like your new logos, 2,3 and 5 in particular, with 3 being the best. The fonts are all unfit though.
>>261065
I'll just point out some immediate thoughts. You really need to remove the stroke on "Night Shift", it would be better without it. Same goes for the black texture on the text, you could try and make it see-through though. The skull has blur which you should fix. The last thing i would recommend is to put the paper texture on an overlay texture above all layers or alternatively see how your sticker turns out on actual rough paper.
>>261124
Top one looks neat. Personally i think it could be a little thinner, it really reminds me of some Flash game website right now.
>>261196
Theres too much going on in these.
>>261209
This is really nice.
>Bacon ipsum dolor amet chuck franfurter..
I had a good chuckle.
>>261224
"droit" is only a part of what is taught at Science Po. The font for the title sucks, the rest is OK.
Your kerning is awful, and the "D E" is triggering my autism to full power. Still a lot better than OP's.
>>261276
Is this too light?
>>261294
Yes.
>>261295
Damn that looks so much better, thanks for input.
>That subtle background.
Haha.
>>261294
i love the text and the cream, it works well with the green/blue in the image
Sketchin' a logo. Going to be a bitch to properly construct in Illustrator.
>>261544
Forgot to mention, it's for a tech company. Server administration, hosting, web development etc.
>>260690
Nice, what was this made with? Adobe Illustrator?
>>257794
It's nice, but consider if the chibi-style reads well with your target audience.
Also, you need to have more different values between foreground and background, so that the character pops off the background better. On the main poster, the face merges into the background; same on the sackrace card and the drama night card where the mask is not so clearly separated from the dark body and the darker background.
>>260486
That face looks nothing like a viking and more like a turk/persian/other-middle-eastern person.
>>261544
And done.
>>261679
Horrible G and S in that font. Makes me cry.
Also this bothers me more than you will ever know.
A flyer I did for a friend a while back. I had no idea what I was doing, what could I have improved on?
Backside
what do you guys think of this wedding invitation? the guy asked me something in Black and White because of his low budget. any feedback is appreciated
>>261758
Can you post a straight image?
>>261778
here it is
>>261783
To me the dotted line makes it look like a coupon.
Maybe try tine squares or double line?
>>261783
Yeah get rid of that dotted line.
Are any of those better?
>>261792
The lines work better.
>>261796
thanks, mate. how about my font choices? is it any good? I tried a lot of combinations but ended up using Mirador Bold and Emblema Headline
illustration practice
>>257796
Yeah, that's not plagiarism. No one would have noticed you used that environment as inspiration if you didn't mention it.
>>260264
the colors looks a bit too saturated, it is better to (almost) never use 100% saturated colors
also the white merges with the yellow
>>260159
try to make that beard less "pointy" maybe?
>>260542
just a little too crowded maybe? otherwise nice works!
how did you get that corrugated effect on the borders?
>>261792
try leaving more white space between text bodies
it's for an exposition of illustrations in books for children
the fancy word means: "drawn"
(I'm still working on it)
>>261882
- values are bad
- IMO for a childrens book, the font of the yellow text is too matter-of-factly/elegant
- since the word means "drawn", you should actually make it look like it's drawn. Right now it looks more... arts-and-craftsy? But really half-assed...
>>261953
thanks for the feedback,
what are "values"?
(btw it's not a childrens book, it's an exposition for adults, about illustrations for children)
>>261965
Values means the lightness or luminosity levels of the colors you've chosen. There is a lot of theory about it you can find online, and it takes some training to get it right.
But essentially, you want foreground objects to stand in good contrast to the background, so that they "pop off the page" and not blend into it. That can mean that your foreground objects are significantly brighter or significantly darker than the background, which can be achieved in various ways (e.g. outlining or shadowing can be one option).
When the foreground/background values become too similar, that is also sometimes called a "lost edge". That happens all the time in real-life (and is not a bad thing if you're painting e.g. a still-life, a portrait or whatever), but when you have objects that you want to very clearly be in the foreground (such as fonts), you need to make sure the foreground/background values are as distinct as possible.
You can "check" your values by desaturating the image with the ITU-BT R.709 or ITU-BT R.601 algorithm (see attached image). If the font is still highly readable (also from a distance) in the desaturated image, then your values are okay. Make sure to not use one of the other shitty desaturation algorithms (there are many) like "average", "lightness" et cetera, they are worthless. (Truth be told, the R.709 and R.601 are also pretty bad, but they are the least bad.)
>>262247
In this particular example, just looking at the 4chan thumbnail, you can see that the top three and bottom two lines are pretty readable, but the I, the R and the T in the fourth line vanish almost into the background.
>>262247
Also, forgot to mention, krita supports all the different desaturation modes, so you can use that to check if you want.
/wdg/ told me to come here as I am asking for design critique not technical advice.
I manage a small machine cleaning business that mainly deals with vintage motorcycles and bikes here in the UK, and am making the website myself. This is what I currently have as my first draft, but I could use some advice on where to go to make it stand out a bit. My observations so far are:
-I need a logo, but I won't be doing that myself, probably hiring someone on a freelancing website like fiverr.
-The navbar looks really plain.
-I am sort of happy with the next 2 sections (Jumbotron and the services)
- I need to fix the About us section and the footer, but the footer is mostly just re-arranging everything, and the about us should be fairly simple.
Any suggestions on how to improve the design of the page would be greatly appreciated.
Meant to be used as a billboard in a grungy sci-fi themed video game. Any critique is welcome, particularly on the grunge effects which I'm not sure how I should achieve.
>>257792
I hate those hopping head dolls.
Fuck you Op
>>261203
bit late for this, but you'll want to go back and fix up those two squares on the rectangle shape (i'd say sans them)
also there's a ton of areas where changing the color of the text looks like shit and messes with legibility
>>259639
Man learn what kerning means when you use text.
I'd would make
>>260542
this is amazing work anon, just maybe fade out the unimportant text a bit so the information is presented more clearly.
>>261689
there's no S in there, just the 'stream'
>>261692
that 25 sticker is so out of place with that bright red color and the shadow...
>>261157
Have a look at one of their "brochures" , do you think your design fits to the institution ?
So inappropriate.
>>261209
Where can I find that food-ish version of lorem ipsum ???
>>262399
googled "Bacon ipsum" to see how incompetent you are. First result is the generator.
>>262408
Thanks, you're such a nice chap.
>>262247
wow thanks a lot, those are really good advices
>>259549
nice meme
Inspired by the viking guy, made in about 30 minutes and would like to know what you guys think
>>262573
Remove stroke on the "A" helmet.
Change nose piece to the lighter red
post results
>>261224
hot damn anon what font is that for the title
Is this ok? I've tried my best to perfect it. I'm gonna print out soon, so i'd like to know if i need to change something.
>>262573
>>262593
Heres the suggested change and a variant leaving the A the same but giving the Crus der the same stroke
>>262660
It looks much better without stroke. Have you tried a different font btw? I'd like to see a font serif with sharp edges similiar to the helmet or have the helmet match the font by removing the sharp edges. Imo the only thing that i think looks off is the S in security, it makes the brand heavy on the left side.
>>262661
This is the closest font I currently own.
I left "Security" in the same font though, the font used in crusder looked weird smaller and below the same font.
>>260264
Ça s'écrit "t'inquiète" (c'est de l'impératif) :^)
>>262683
C'est moche de toute manière :D
>>262677
>that red on black
Just fuck off already
>>262699
Too bad its not black you knob
made this for a final project in my auto body/ paint class. i personally really like the rustic bar feel it has but im always looking for ways to improve. i can post the final project if it will help
I'm doing a project for my GD class, where we have to do branding for a company. Logo, business card, stationary/letterhead, and envelope.
Right now I'm on the business card and I'm looking for some critique on what I can do to make it better.
I'm horrible at doing type layout for business cards.
The fictional company, is "Local Honey" ; basically a hipster store that sells apparel and tries to be hip and modern. We had to pick from a selection of companies to do, and this it's what I went with.
>>262714
right now im reading it at first glance as the CEO's name is "phone" because they are across from eachother and thats how most people read. try putting elements side by side so that "CEO" and "Percius Mercius" are across from eachother
i put james blake lyrics on pretty pictures for fun, but i think they came out nice
>>262715
>CEO's name is "phone"
Holy fuck, I really dropped the ball on that one. Thanks for the heads up.
Like I said, laying out type on a business card isn't my strong point. I really need to work on it more.
I'll do some tweaking and change it up.
I'll probably change the name later on as well, I don't think many Imperials work in LA.
Looking for harsh critiques of this book cover mockup i made for a fake book.
>>262700
looked black as shit on my phone, had my brightness turned down with batterysaving. Still tho, looks like fucking ass.
L2Colors
>>262789
Too many ugly fonts, too many ugly colors, too much contrast between your two main colors.
>>262789
This is a ruse, right?
>>262789
leave more space around the text
work on a better, celaner grid for the texts
that blue on the sides is too similar to the blue on the photo, give it more contrast
the fonts are not the best ones
that justified text isn't really working, do something to make it look better
![Poster [Countdown 2].jpg](https://i.imgur.com/uQm8cHc.jpg "Poster [Countdown 2].jpg")
I realize that it's a bit too sharp, but opinions?
>>262810
>>262861
What do you guys believe would be some better font choices? Personally i felt like the odd title font mixed well with a really "boring" sub text. (clearly i was wrong)
Is their anything you would suggest for better fonts?
I really have no idea what kind of fonts to use, i just picked something with serif's in it and figured it was good enough.
Thanks for all the suggestions, especially the text shape, i cleaned that up and it looks much better already.
>>262872
Personally I would just leave the 2 black, no image behind at all. It would add to the mystery and look better imo.
I think you fucked up the splatterpatterns a bit, it doesn't seem to flow around with the shape, especially not around the face.
Actually like the sharpness kinda, maybe smooth it a bit, but not too much. The detail in the splatterpatterns make it look really interesting.
New to this. Trying to make a logo for a production company. Any feedback or suggestions welcome.
>>262929
Not horribad, but not good either. Way too basic.
Try sketchingon paper about 10-15 ideas for a logo, then take the 4-5 best and make a few variations on them.
After that you should have something more interesting than what you are stuck with now.
>>262872
I like it. Lose the yellow border though, it looks terrible and completely clashes with the whole high-contrast thing you've got going on.
>>262396
u fkin w0t m8? No S in the word GSTREAM? How fucking high are you?
noob here :S.
rough concept for a flyer i'm creating for a friend,
he is offering some tutoring.
looking for critique and general inspo for black-and-white photo use in existing designs (or some terms i can google in order to find inspo).
thanks guys
>>263007
forgot pic @_@
>>258301
Lose gradient
Bolder lines on the logo by a hair
Softer grey and a more saturated teal
Task was to make a vector face, first we had to draw our partner then render in illustrator. Here's mine, I'm near finished I just don't know what's missing.
>>263009
use newspaper-cut-out letters or make your own font using a tablet. anything is better than those boring letters in combination with your collage-like theme.
also, why are you cropping the forms?
>>262929
The arrow could be incorporated into the type much more effectively, though arrows in logos are a little stale all being said.
If you were to use the arrow as a standalone icon, perhaps incorporate something production themed into it.
Maybe have a browse through LogoPond for arrow/direction/production logos, as it's a useful source of inspiration. Don't go straight up plagiarising, but it might spark some inspiration.
The typeface selection could use some work. It's very vanilla at the moment, and while the fonts are complimentary to an extent, they're a dime a dozen. The line spacing is also making me cringe. If you were to use those fonts, I'd suggest matching the width of "RightWay" to the width of "Productions". Personal preference though.
>>261544
>logo
>on photoshop
that bad
>>263325
Looks off in the thumbnail. Some interesting details though. I'd suggest giving the hair some more love. The lips also get lost at a distance, so try using a darker value for contrast.
I'm not personally a fan of the color choice, but it's not bad.
This is super rough, maybe 15 minutes in Illustrator. But I'm trying to design a logo for an esports competition that's going to be held on an annual basis starting this year. 98% of esports design is cancer, so I'm trying to keep it basic.
I'd like to play up the diagonal that's formed by the V and A meeting, but I don't know the best way to go about it. Help me /gd/?
>>263355
He was sketching, which is fine in whatever medium you prefer. He finalized it in AI.
> illiterate
that bad
>>262789
displeasing color choices
yo, can I get some critique on this poster's design
made it for a gaming T-shirt design contest for T-shirt making website (remove the background and give the sword a shadow and you have the design itself)
>>263532
I wish I could be more constructive, but the biggest weakness for this at the moment is that it's stagnant. There's not a lot of motion carrying the eye. You take in the "Falchion," stop, look at the sword, stop, and then read something else, and stop. The composition is weak.
Try to be more dynamic and more creative with your use of space. Establish a better grid, but then break it when you need to.
>>257792
i like it. cute, well executed, professional looking, nice colors. the one thing it botters me is that the title on the poster could have been a little more well done in terms of composition and space-filling
Not expecting praise just curious what you guys would change.
Made this whilst looking at Bernhard btw
>>263325
girl. upper lip is always darker than the lower one, unless the head is seen from way up. illustration 101
>>263555
illustration is pretty neat, but there is a LOT of tacky things going on at once. the script font with a defined shadow with the white glowing over the ocre gold background looks so bad its seems satirical. it looks poorly executed premium-champagne-y motel kinda thing. i would look at some references on a entirely different aesthetic and go from scratch.
>>263327
hey, thanks for your advice.
it got me thinking.
started again from scratch.
critique appreciated.
(it's a flyer about tutoring)
>>263641
*Mathematikstudent
*Lernen
*informieren
Gut dass du nicht Deutschnachhilfe gibst.
>>263648
haha ja : )
ist für einen freund, der text ist nur ein platzhalter.
>>263551
fuck, I dont know what to do with this information.
I guess I could keep looking at vintage ads and hope I get a better Idea of what you mean
>>263641
That is going to be a lot of colour ink.
>>263665
yes.
going to print it in a copyshop though.
>>260578
Updated it. I think it's an improvement but still not satisfied.
I have to release the site within 2 weeks, so starting over again is not an option.
Any tips to improve this design?
>>263684
Looks better. But that font still bugs me.
>>263686
Thanks. I was using that font for the navigation as well, but decided to ditch it for that purpose. Now it's just the headings. It's not ideal but it fits the theme of the games. The official Dark Souls websites use the font as well. Not that those sites are particularly beautiful...
already a final draft but any improvements you would suggest?
How terrible/acceptable is this? I honestly have no idea cause i've had my nose in it for a while now. Even if it's shit I don't care cause messing with pacifico is a lot of fun. Did I go too far? probably. Was it fun? yeah. Thats how I like to learn!
>>263838
As for general idea, it's fairly bland.
>>263840
very good points, thank you. As for the pixel crap I found out how to get rid of it. Inkscape can be terrible for those kind of things. Integrated in the drawing it's planned for, the whole thing looks way better.
Also yeah the weird tail thing will be removed some time soon
>>263838
It's very hard to read. It took me at least 5 seconds figure out what was written.
Better in this version surely
thoughts on this for a metal supply company?
>>263526
Basic. Simple. To the point.
You should be proud, this is really good.
I really love the V and A complimenting the diagonal shape. I'm not sure if i can say this for certain though, but "Arch" looks off somehow. I would right moving it to the right and perhaps giving it a little vertical space.
>>263532
I'll just put it right off the bat: Generally just clean up your poster. Kill the gray frame border, the signature tag and logo is uneccessary, remove the texture overlay and what is all that commentary text? Try rotating the sword in a diagonal direction from letter F(alcon) to (Slice&Dic)e, lead your viewer! If you moved your zoom effect to a more assymetrical position you could also create more action, because honestly it's pretty boring right now. I wish you would create some context within the poster, because i've no idea what it's all about. I'm just going to assume it's some kinda of nerdy D&D stuff with references splattered around the poster, which honestly is very off-putting. I hope this works.
>>263555
It's like your trying to sell cat food of as perfume. The whole title is inconsistent as a whole with the illustration. It could probably use more cats seeing as you're dealing with cat food. I would probably avoid showing the product, seeing as canned food aren't exactly the most delicate thing for your eyes to indulge in.
>>263641
Please use blue instead of purple. Blue is a more serious color, which i would associate with math. Blue in general is frequently used by major businesses. I would probably invert the colors in the lower part below "Nachhilfe", so that the text is colored and the area is blank. Text on white space is just much easier to read and you avoid making a big blue pamphlet.
>>263732
Imo top and middle text is fine, just drop the shadow effects. Increase the symbol sizes, they're barely visible. Make the frame border a thicker monoline and make it smaller. And if i may ask, what is a yike?
>>263941
Continued..
>>263842
I don't think this font works, it gives a very graffiti/hip-hop vibe that doesn't fit with the overall theme. Unless that's what you want. Text placement is fine though, but if you could drop the noise or dots on the roof, the text would be much more readable in clear white.
>>263889
This is pretty good. My only question is why are the pipes hexagonal? I realise this might have to do with consistency within the font, but they come a bit off. As for color configuration, the white and blue versions are the best. I would probably enjoy the blue version in a more "blueprint" like color though and perhaps with a grainy paper texture. If i were you i'd also try a using thick inner stroke on "EMPIRE" so the logo doesn't become monotonous.
I was wondering if anyone could review my website please?
www.nudlillustration.com
I'm not really a web designer and so this is my first attempt. The site and works are work in progress. My focus is illustration, but i don't neccessarily want to exclude concept art, graphic- and web design in case a potential client wants any of those. I'm not sure what to add or remove or if theres anything i should supply more of? I feel like my biggest strength is versatility in mediums, but that i don't really get that message across and that this is also somewhat of a weakness. Because there isn't a consistant style that can be traced back to me.
>>263942
Continued pt.3
>>263942
Sorry i made a few typos, but i hope this was usefull. For the sake of clearation:
>I would try moving "Arch" to the right and giving it a little vertical space.
>It's like your trying to sell cat food off as perfume.
seeing as canned food isn't exactly the most delicate thing for your eyes to indulge in.
There are some bugs on the website such as pic. related. The Facebook icon not appearing in Firefox. The main slider not working in IE (does anyone even use this?). The last issue is that About doesn't get highlighted after pressing it and i don't know how to fix it unless i create a new area below with 500px or more.
>>263889
I think it would look better if the rods ended flatly before the text rather than at an angle. As if there was a white rectangle above the rods but under the text.
>>263942
the hexagonal shape is something they offer and wanted me to include
>>263948
I tried it before but it just looks wrong to me, like the beams are squeezing the text together. I feel that there's more breathing room this way, but I've gotten a few words about that as well so I'm not sure how to solve it.
final tutoring flyer, looking for critique.
what can I do better next time?
is there something fundamentally wrong with them?
>>264168
meh. forgot to take out the number and email.
dont know how to delete this.
(can somebody else do?)
please be cool guys.
>>264170
Little triangle>Hide Post. Too late now me thinks
Project logo/visual identity. Yep, I'm no designer.
This is what I've been using for the project a
year ago and what we're currently using as a
visual identity.
The project itself is a underrated music blog
type and it's called "Plum music magazine".
Basically our goal is to find and promote music
producers and artists that are exceptionally
good in what they do but do not get enough
exposure. Our userbase is most likely to be
of musicians looking to promote their work
and music lovers who'd like to be one of the
first people to hear game changers in the
music industry of tomorrow.
Rate hate etc.
>>259769
This is fun. Uses too much CPU though.
>>264170
Cant you click the options on your post and delete it?
>>264185
Reminds me of an illustrated diagram for the hunan eye. I also do not see how this mark relates to your product besides its color.
>>264219
It's supposed to be a not-thoroughly-defined vector
of a plum, when the parts on the left connect they
form a plum's ass
>>264225
Sorry man, I still don't see a plum ass. A leaf might do it some justice.
Also, why a plum?
>>264229
I was perpetually drunk on plum brandy when I
got the idea for the project.
>>264230
stop that man, It's bad for you healt
>>258022
>I'm trying to express gun control is the centralized ownership of guns in the hands of the political elites and their minions.
>trying to express
You're saying it outright. If your symbolism were strong, you wouldn't need to say it outright. I think you can tell that the image doesn't make much sense on its own, which is why you put the words in the background.
This thread isn't dead?
Shit well, here's OC.
project spec is sports team, dunno what kind, but think American.
>>264257
Fuck Aprils fools prank, can't delete post, think hockey.
Doing a flyer for a small time candidate. Any thoughts on the design? Stuff like black background and filler stuff will be replaced with two other guests.
I'm worried that the lines/pile of heroin disturb the otherwise flat design, but I'm blanking on how to get across a non-verbal message about the content of the town hall. Maybe I'm good with just the pills and the needles, but I feel like I might be missing something.
