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First time in a while we've had four threads in the same weekend edition

Previous: >>83245743

Air date: July 11 at 10:30 AM EST

Promo 1:
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=QsK_tpwaHvM [Embed]

Season 2 info: http://variety.com/2016/tv/news/star-vs-the-forces-of-evil-season-2-melissa-rauch-mayim-bialik-1201783224/Links:
http://svtfoe.booru.org/index.php?page=forum&s=view&id=3

Fanfics:
http://svtfoe.booru.org/index.php?page=forum&s=view&id=1

Episodes:
http://svtfoe.booru.org/index.php?page=forum&s=view&id=9

Steam Group:
http://steamcommunity.com/groups/starvsevilgeneral

SEASON 3 COMFIRMED
http://www.broadwayworld.com/bwwtv/article/Disney-XD-Greenlights-Two-Original-Series-BILLY-DILLYS-and-COUNTRY-CLUB-20160304

Writefag list
http://pastebin.com/FJYvmdfg/

Fanart Archive (NFSW):
http://svtfoe.booru.org/index.php?page=post&s=list

https://countingdownto.com/countdown/star-vs-the-forces-of-evil-season-2-11-july-2016-countdown-clock-0
Countdown clock
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STARCO IS CUTE AND PERFECT!

CUTE AND PERFECT!
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Is everyone ready for LUDO GROWS A BEARD?

what happened to his hair phobia tho
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THIRD FOR MANNA
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We did it, /sveg/! 4 threads! (3 not counting the emergency one)

/SVEG/ IS BACK!
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Yes, finally!

I wanna nut in her ass
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Hi, /sveg/! Let's keep riding the hype together!

I'll draw something later in the day: stay tuned.
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Man if the hiatus conditioned us to be THIS active from a couple of promos and a date, imagine how wild this place will become when season 2 finally airs

Speaking of season 2 airing, I asked but never got an answer. Is anyone willing to stream it for those that don't have DXD?
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>>83275712
>Is anyone willing to stream it for those that don't have DXD?
I obviously can't speak for him/her, but there was one Anon who streamed the episodes, and also streamed the recent (kinda) marathon (maybe the first episode of "The Other Kingdom" too, if I remember correctly).
I don't know if the streaming Anon is still with us, though, nor if they're willing to do it again; though I would be very thankful if that were the case!
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>>83275828

Still waiting for the lewd.
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>>83275859
Make do with this until tomorrow
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im falling in love with her guys please make it stop
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>>83275886

I wanna see her pregnant.
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>>83276150
I wanna see Marco get her pregant
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>>83276210
I want to see Marco pregnant
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>>83276224
I want to make Marco pregnant.
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>>83275694
Woohoo! this weekend keeps getting better!

Also, Morning FC! I am fighting insomnia!
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>>83276255
Good morning to you too, Ama!
I'm sorry you're struggling again to get sleep: you're always so busy, that you sure would deserve rest!

In the end, I think I'll try helping RedHoodie's effort in making a visual novel: for now, I'll try my hand at making Star's model, with several poses and expressions. Let's see what good can come from this…
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>>83275859
Have a lewd edit
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>>83276339
I used to draw pics for my own RPG maker games back in the day but nowadays I dont have tools to do pictures clean enough to be used in games.

Glad to hear you want to help tho! I miss having the free time to use on making games.
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Good night /sveg/
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>>83276235
Someday, I'll request Princess Marco with her mother's body, but not today.
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>>83276406
Goodnight, Anon: see you later!

>>83276401
If there's something that I have aplenty, is free time; enthusiasm, on the other hand…
The idea of RPGMaker always fascinated me — despite the fact that videogame RPGs in general don't attract me, with their exaggerated focus on grinding, collecting stuff, and levelling. …And to think that I started playing TTRPG with red box D&D!
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>>83276373
Well I gotta go sit down for a bit
I'll be in my bunker, please knock
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A very early sketch.
I went with first person view: because I plan on recycling whatever is possible, I will use this basic pose for various expressions — but probably also make an energetic pose, and a hunched one.
Because I want Star to express a lot with her body language, I will also redraw the arms often.
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What is he reacting to?
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>>83276565
The thread waifu wars
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>>83276565
His mom
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>>83276565
Everyone's obsession with Princess Marco
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>>83276606
I wish real Mexicans were sexy
Maybe then LA wouldn't suck so bad
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A little update on the lines.
While I could have easily drawn only one side, then mirror it, I feel that would've felt kind of artificial: symmetry is not everything!
Maybe there's still not much for you to give me feedback, if not the general proportions of the body and head: as always though, it is very welcome!
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>>83276971
Oddly enough the neutral stance of a sprite can sometimes be the hardest one!

Good luck with that FC, and thanks for helping RH with these.

As for me I ran out of gas, spend the night catching up and reading fic updates, but now I need some sleeep!

See you in a few! and now lets see if I can for once get dubs with this stupid animation!
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>>83277026
Nope, no dubs this time,sorry.
Thanks for your encouragement — as always! Have a nice sleep, Ama, and see you later!
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>>83276565
The wall getting 10 knots shorter.
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>>83261037
Dammit I'm a little late
Ähem... weekly reminder
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>>83277367
Is that the name of her 『S T A N D ?』
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>>83277367
Bad girl Star bullying Marco.
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>>83277562
What's with all the marco bullying man calm down
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Another update, now with some color!
The expression is neutral and relaxed, very rare for Star: feels kinda weird drawing her like this!
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>>83277605
Everybody in here hates Marco for cucking them.
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>>83277669
Getting the 'children of the corn field' feeling here
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>>83275369
I'LL STEAL YOUR FACE
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>>83277367
>>83277562
>13-year-old Star meets 13-year-old Marco
>"Whatcha doing, beta? Staring at some skater chick who's WAY out of your league?"
>"Maybe she'd go out with you if you GREW SOME BALLS"
>"Yeah, I said it"
>"Fucking pimple-faced little pussy. You gonna cry about it?"
>"Oh, yeah, I guess you are. Suck my dick."
>Star steps back into her dimension while flipping Marco off
>Marco stands there staring at her long after the portal vanishes, his lip quivering.
>"That's the best thing a girl's ever said to me..."
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>>83277758
>Gazorpazorpstar
if you watch rick and morty you will get the reference
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>>83277716
Bullshit star is my waifu and I think he's okay
It's not like I can actually come into contact with her anyways
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>>83277736
I feel you, Anon, and I'm tempted of restarting from scratch.
It's actually the first time I do something like that, trying to develop a method as I go.
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>>83276339
Yey!
>>83276556
>>83276971
>>83277669
>>83277894
I love everything.
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Bad girl Star bullying Marco sexually.
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>>83278144
I dunno, she looks kid of uncanny, to me. I'm sketching another pose that is not so centered and "staring into your soul"-y, and see if that can turn out better.
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>>83275632
...Indeed
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>>83278240
Fair enough, that would look better.
Don't worry, the novelty of the situation will wear off, and I'll finish waking up, and I'll be able to critique properly again.
I still love everything though.
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>>83278240
I feel ya', it's always hard drawing a "neutral" stare in the show's style. That's probably why, in the actual episodes, characters rarely have the irises centered in the eye (unless when stratled, angry, scared...), they almost always look in some direction or they have the eyelid covering part of it.

You could try giving Star a goofier smile, making her cheeks go up a little, or open mouth, to show teeth, like pic related?
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>>83278356
My main problem is that, while I would like a pose that's easy to work with, it must also represent the character quite nicely, ESPECIALLY since it's going to be the very base of future poses.

>>83278420
My main inspiration was the neutral pose in the wiki page, which has a relaxed smile, and Star's trademarked huge eyes staring straight at the viewer.
I guess I'm still warming up, trying to put together something that one can work with.
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>>83278475
Folly, it's really cool that you're doing this for us. On behalf of everyone I'd like to thank you for your work.

Hopefully this project turns out alright!
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>>83278612
>neebwriter
Oh dear, that's embarrassing.
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Star and Marco ready to begin a countdown to Season 2.
How do you can't wait to watch excitedly this new show?
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>>83278612
>>83278625
Before thanking me, at least wait until I have started delivering something usable, NW!
These early steps could very well lead me nowhere.
(Thank you for the encouragement, though: god knows I'm going to need A LOT of it, before I'm done!)
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>>83278679
And, she makes a sign of two means this new season, too. That is so cute!
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>Carl Weathers
Will he have a stew going?
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>>83276707
>I wish real Mexicans were sexy
There are plenty of sexy Mexicans.
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>>83278692
As far as neutral poses go this one is definitely bretty gud.
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>>83278775
Currently, my guiding principle is: would IWNIHAanon wanna nut in THIS?

>>83278679
>>83278701
Very cute!
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>>83278338
I just noticed how her leg becomes less shapely after the boot is on it
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>>83278475
>>83278692
You work really fast. I'd take forever with something like this and call it a day, and it'd still look bad.
Is there a particular tutorial you learned from or did you work it out yourself? Because whatever method you're using is working.
Also, I love everything.
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>>83275449

>1) He's actually constantly scared of his beard, but had to get used to it due to no razor
or
>2) Only copious amounts of hair scare him since Star and a few of his monsters have hair
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>>83278951
Not a specific tutorial per se: I kinda start with a line that describes the general direction of the pose, then make an extremely blocky version of the body volumes (head, upper torso, hips, etc.).
Then I start drawing layers upon layers of sketches, trying to improve on every passage.

…THEN, I realize that the neck is too long, and so is the torso, and I have to make drastic corrections!
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Who /megacon/ here?

Pic related is not me obviously, just a cosplayer I bumped into.
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>>83279203
What a qt
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>>83279215
>>83279203

Has any cosplayer topped this semen demon yet?

Have there been any good cosplays of the other girls?
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>>83279275
Star shouldn't be 3D. This is scaring me.
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I've changed method, somewhat: drawing separately torso, head, hair and arms. Let's see if this change pays off.
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>>83279373
I think you should try to make the face lines a little bit thinner, just like you did for Chantelle's picture.
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>>83279373
You know what: I know what's wrong now: the lines are too thin, because I'm working on too big a scale.
Should I shrink the sketch and work with that, or keep this resolution and make the lines thicker?
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Does Star have a daddy kink?

Would she ever be one to call Marco "daddy"?
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>>83279406
The sketch was made all with the same width, so yeah, in the end the outlines will be thicker than the lines of the inner details.
Though as I pointed out, I think I used a wrong scale for this drawing.
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>>83279373
Modularity is probably good for VN art: a lot of games seem to make use of it.
I'll have to give your drawing method a try: I usually skip the blocky phase and generally come off worse for it.
>>83279418
What image dimensions are you using? Can't tell on my phone.
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>>83279458
Papi
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>>83279482
Eh, I probably am working on too big a scale: this sketch image is 1700 pixels high!
I tried making the lines thicker, and they seem much more appealing to me — but in the end, the better solution might be to downsize the whole image.
>I usually skip the blocky phase and generally come off worse for it.
For the longest time I started drawing from the face details, working outwards: making any kind of pose behind the very basic ones was pretty much impossible, that way!
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>>83279482
This may be the right time to ask: what scale will be the game at? Are you programming it using ren'py?
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>>83278175
This
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>>83277605
Bullying is just another way of saying "I like you and I want to own you."
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>>83279870
It reminds me of those hentai manga's where the girl bully's the guy into sex and forces him to blow his load in her and says shit like "you came in me!? i'll never forgive you!" and she keeps raping him until the floor is white and sticky and her belly swollen with baby batter
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>>83279870
Then Marco really loves Janna
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>>83277215

Stop
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>Check Tumblr for Starco
>This slight flood in art of Marco being dragged out in his towel

Perfect
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>>83280184
>Star and Marco performing the traditional Mewni greeting
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>>83280216
Post the good ones.
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>>83275632

Niqab version is better.
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>>83279610
Thicker lines suit the artstyle way more (and we're never going to get them back as thick as they were before Toon City... sigh).

And it's usually best to work with higher resolution, and then scale them down. 1700px height is probably way more than any VN needs, but you never know.

>>83280184
This is the quality content we need! Your work, Anon?
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>>83276707
>I wish real Mexicans were sexy

You shittin' me?
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>>83280247

Alright well aside from this one
>>83275379

There's this

I know it's not in his towel but close enough, posting the other ones after
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>>83280275

2/5
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>>83280294

3/5
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>>83280308

4/5
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>>83280320

5/5

There may be more later

Nefcy really knew what she was doing, baiting all of us with some extreme privacy invasion between those two...
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>>83280340
She obviously drew inspiration from her own life.
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>>83280266
The base canvas I work on is 2000×2000 pixels, usually — and often I draw full-figure, so I was working on a huge scale in general.
…Still, it feels like I'm going in blind!
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>>83280266
Yes. I finally found the reason why my tablet wasn't working with Sai and this was the first thing I drew fast.
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Good morning everyone
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Morning /sveg/ how's it been so far?
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>>83280515
sup
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>>83279678
Yeah, I'm using Ren'py. I currently have the window set to 1280x720 with sprites 600 tall, but even if I set it to 1080 I probably wouldn't need sprites bigger than 800.
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>>83280390
>>83280515
>>83280554
>>83280554
Hello writefriends finally woke up! Though its laundry day and I will update till the end of the day.
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>>83280515
Morning WriteFriend, good to see ya.
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>>83280599
In the end the drawing will need a little more rescaling, then, but now I'm working closer to the end result.
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Looks like everyone's celebrating the return. Glad to see it.
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>>83280707

Just 42 more days to go!
At least there will be more Loud House before that.
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>>83280669
Whoops I didn't crop the drawing. Oh well.

>>83280515
>>83280554
>>83280648
>>83280707
WriteFriend, HaremBro, Aegis, Zehntacles: hi, friends! Glad to see you all!
I'm super-busy ATM, despite not doing anything too much different than usual…
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>>83280651
Dem hope!
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>>83280669
No worries there. Bonus points if the final version is a .png with transparent background.
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Sup guys I'm sorry I wanted to drop my rough draft of Star for Disney but I'm already at work

I'll hopefully drop a pic tonight when I get out

I need coffee
>>83280515

Morning WF

>>83280554

Morning HB
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>>83280754
That's still some time to kill, but least there's an end in sight now. Anyone that's got fan works they wanna do better get them in before the next seasons lays down the rules.

It's good the LH is doing so well too. I haven't watched it myself but the more good shows out there the better.

>>83280787
Yo FC, Good to see you too. I get that feeling, it's why I usually only have time to peek in on the weekends unless I'm sharing something I finished.
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>>83280648
Hello Aegis, good to see ya.
>>83280669
Sweet, another Folly-Drawing. Looking good so far Cola.
>>83280707
Zehntacles the friendly neighborhood appendage, how's it been?
>>83280754
>42 more days
Such a relief to know how much time is left compared to guessing and waiting for a release.
>>83280787
>I'm super-busy ATM
Hope you find the time to post when you can.
>>83280889
It's a very cute drawing of her, one of my favorites in fact.
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>>83280754
Well I will have more than enough time to enjoy Hearts of Iron 4
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>Season 2 episode 1 finishes
>2 months till next episode
>same thing after that
>it keeps like this until the final
>have to wait a year till season 3
>season 3 does the same exact thing season 2 did
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>>83280939
Hello kaze.
>I'll hopefully drop a pic tonight when I get out
Sounds good, I'll be looking forward to it.
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>>83280913
Heh, I have those points already in the pocket!

>>83280944
So, did you read some of the stuff of our resident writers? (I'd personally love to have your feedback on some of mine…)

>>83280945
>Hope you find the time to post when you can.
Drawing and posting and drawing and posting!
Glad you're liking it!
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>>83281133
All the more time to enjoy these threads.
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>>83280945
Hey HB, it's okay, stopping in as I have the time. I got around to reading your Nervous Anatomy story, as well as part of the beginning of the sequel and some of the PonyGirl Steps one.
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>>83281175
Aw man, he's going for the highscore!
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Hey /sveg/! I'm back from the land of the sleep! What's shaking?

>>83281175
Ooh, new Folly-Cola drawing! This looks very good so far!

>>83281133
>mfw
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>>83281175
>Drawing and posting and drawing and posting!
Keep it up and it'll come to you as natural as breathing.
>>83281192
Well I hope they were amusing so far in some regards Zehn. Speaking of Nervous Anatomy though, you just reminded me of something...
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>>83280754
So will the first episode be a full 22 mins or the regular 11 min?
>Will we have more aloof attractive demonesses soon?
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>>83281175
I did read a few. Did you have a single story you'd present as your one that you'd like to be reviewed above all others?

>>83281396
How we're all self conscious about our meat filled skin sacks? I'm right there with you.
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AKUMALATE DA WEALTH
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>>83281133
Considering that it airs in the summer, they most likely won't do that.
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>>83281461
>How we're all self conscious about our meat filled skin sacks?
Indeed, I know I am at least.
So, if you don't mind me asking, what do you think of the stories so far?
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>>83281140
>Star in skin tight latex
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>>83281246
Hi, ST!
It's the first of many, in fact: I'm helping RH in his project for a new VN. …I'll have to draw a lot of different expressions, before I'm done!

BTW, which expressions would be the more useful? Thinking about the normal range of Star, these come to mind:
>excited
>grinning
>bored
>frustrated
>whoops
>pleased
>hug
>mad
Suggestions are welcome.

>>83281396
Knowing myself, before the end I'm gonna risk asphyxiation.

>>83281461
>Did you have a single story you'd present as your one that you'd like to be reviewed above all others?
Hmm…
Well, the story I have put the most effort in is "The Dream Girl" (http://pastebin.com/mAAXGNxc), but I'm still a lot proud of "The Nudist Saga" (NSFW: http://pastebin.com/0Md3nRgb) which was written following the prompts and suggestions of a lot of Anons.
Your choice.
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>>83281728
Forgot the drawing!
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>>83281728
Looks like a pretty good range for now, anyway. I was doing a little research on this the other day, but didn't find anything concrete. I'll let you know if anything turns up.
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>>83281688
It certainly suits her and it also gives me a few ideas for later.
>>83281728
>Knowing myself, before the end I'm gonna risk asphyxiation.
You'll get through it with no problems I'm sure.
>>83281751
Cute!
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>>83281806
>It certainly suits her and it also gives me a few ideas for later.
Are they lewd/kinky ideas?
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>>83281620
No prob, I'll try to keep it concise in one post since I know not everyone in the general cares about fics like us weirdos. Going to use Nervous Anatomy as my main review point since I read that one from beginning to end.

As far as dialogue and characterization for Star and Marco I thought you did well. The beginning portion where the two of them were conversing with one another felt natural and flowed well. For the kind of story it was it wasn't the worst plot device to get to the interesting bits but not the most natural either, especially with everything being in public but I'm guessing you did that to build to your sequel? As far as characterization goes Jackie felt the most odd to me, as she was either high as a kite or a stereotypical bimbo that went with everything almost too easily at the beginning. At the beginning of the sequel Janna wasn't bad and I thought it was funny that she was friends with StarFan so that they both got what they wanted. But I remember she left her house in bare feet when it was made a point that it was crazy hot outside. Made me wince thinking of her hitting the pavement with those.

More technical points, I've never been a fan of the "greentext" style of writing for a story posted elsewhere. But I'm guessing you recorded everything you shared here to preserve it for everyone else later. While these kinds of stories tend to have people being out of character by necessity Star seemed to veer off that way pretty hard all of a sudden and Jackie felt almost unnatural. The internal dialogue for Marco I'm guessing was him arguing with the Monster Arm, which was built to a punch line but would be confusing to anyone that hadn't seen that episode before so could have used a bit more set up.

I think you handle the characters well for the most part and would encourage you to try more traditional formed writing to refine yourself further.
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>>83281515
this is dinsey we are talking about
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>suddenly new S2 clips and stills everywhere
>mfw
I can't take it anymore!
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>>83281949
Did he rip off his lower eyelids?
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>>83282053

Hopefully not.
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>>83281751

Looks good FC

I wish my stuff looked that clean
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>>83281751
I always love when you draw, FC, because when you do these posts where you describe what you're doing and stuff it's sorta like watching something evolve, yknow?
Just saying. You're appreciated,my dude
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>>83281949
>he was just told by father time that Starco was canon.
>marco didnt believe him so he told father time to prove it
>father time showed him the future.
>Marco's face when
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>>83282422
>marco didnt believe him so he told father time to prove it
>father time showed him the future
>It was a glimpse of their honeymoon
>Marco's face when
Just needed to add a line to make it perfect.
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>>83282313
Glorious!
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>>83282379
>>83282411
Thanks, guys!
Truth is, I draw several times better and faster when I have /sveg/'s feedback, so it's a virtuous cycle, really.
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>>83281871
You'll just have to wait and see.
>>83281909
Thanks Zehn, reviews like this help me out in the long run as I originally wrote the stories in the greentext format and since they tend to be less descriptive and stright to the point, I wondered how they hold up and what I need to do flesh them out. Also, sorry for the wall of text.
The first Nervous Anatomy was somthing written on the spur of the moment and is actually based off of a picture. For what it was, to me, it was surprisingly very well liked so I decided to give it a sequel after a ton of idea's came to me and I just had to get them written down.
>as far as characterization goes Jackie felt the most odd to me
Understandable, see when I was first writing it as a greentext story, I had to think up of a character and personality for Jackie on the spot since we really didn't have any idea on how she actually acts. So I thought to myself, since this is a green full of nonsense with a crazy scenario, what would be funnier? Then I decided it might be good if Jackie acted nonchalant about being in the buff, so I tried to make her into an air-head. That's why she acts the way she does cause it turns out she's actually not very sensible at all. I thought that this would play off of Marco's serious side well for laughs when it turns out that his crush wasn't so high on the pedestal as he made her out to be, which is what the sequal and later stories down the road will deal with.
>At the beginning of the sequel Janna wasn't bad and I thought it was funny that she was friends with StarFan so that they both got what they wanted.
That's good that it worked out, though I still have yet to give Janna her moment in the spot-light so hopefully I do her justice.
>But I remember she left her house in bare feet when it was made a point that it was crazy hot outside. Made me wince thinking of her hitting the pavement with those.
Yea really, that comes up in the next part of the story.
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>>83282422
>every force in the universe pushing these two together
>scores of prophecies about them
>their souls are intertwined by mystical forces beyond their understanding
>the physical embodiment of time says they will end up together
>even his parents are pushy about him getting together with star
>marco just wants to go out with jackie, man, is that too much to ask?
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>>83282607
Wrote a story based on a picture? I've been there twice before now. Got me stuck in a very long story that's still not resolved.

Glad my input helped in some way. I'm not the best guy for reviews but if I can find just one thing that assists the author I'm happy. With Season 2 coming down the pipe maybe we won't have to invent personalities anymore for these characters.
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>>83282538
>>83282665
>Daron Nefcy comes from another dimension and explains to Marco that the every single character in the show and every abstract force is conspiring to get make Star and Marco a couple.
>every character from Toffee to Marco's parents, to the kids at school, to the monsters.
>only Star and Marco were unaware.
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>>83282665
The story of a man who will defy destiny to get the girl of his dreams.
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>>83281909
>>83282607
>I'm guessing you recorded everything you shared here to preserve it for everyone else later.
Indeed, I like to save my stuff anyway so I thought putting it in a pastebin for anyone who wanted to read them again was for the best.
>While these kinds of stories tend to have people being out of character by necessity Star seemed to veer off that way pretty hard all of a sudden and Jackie felt almost unnatural.
Hmm, yes I was afraid of this, hopefully I can address this when I get to their parts of the story.
>he internal dialogue for Marco I'm guessing was him arguing with the Monster Arm.
Kinda, I'll just say that Marco has more problems to deal with then he knows.
>I think you handle the characters well for the most part and would encourage you to try more traditional formed writing to refine yourself further.
I do plan on stepping away from the greentext style in the future. I've stuck with it so far since everything I've written so far has been posted here as a greentext.
Anyways thanks again for the review Zehn and I hope this gave you any explanations you needed, and again sorry for the wall of text.
>>83282701
>Got me stuck in a very long story that's still not resolved.
I know how that feels.
>Glad my input helped in some way
It did so thanks again.
>With Season 2 coming down the pipe maybe we won't have to invent personalities anymore for these characters.
Hopefully.
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Afternoon /sveg/! Glad that everyone's enjoying this revitalized thread - it's great to see it so active again. ICYMI, I updated Invisible Touch last night. Hope people like Chapter 3!

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11829228/3/Invisible-Touch
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>>83282753
>Even Jackie is trying to get Starco to happen
Actually that sounds like a cool idea for a story...

>>83282313
Looking great! Your lines look so smooth I could swear the picture was actually made of vectors!
...is it?
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>>83282411
Dang, this looks nice. Maybe I'll post my drawing too
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>>83282904
Do it Anon! More content is always good!
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>>83282927
Behold my garbage
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>>83282832
I'm tempted to call dibs, myself.
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>>83282806
Man, you write with such character. When I read the last chapter, I started internally cringing at all the awkward conversations out if sympathy. Keep it up, man!
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>>83282313
Looks great as always folly
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>>83282753
>>83282782
>marco is shocked about the true nature of his surroundings
>begins looking at everything from a different perspective
>more and more contrived events pushing him and star together
>marco is beyond distressed
>only jackie seems to be immune from the happenings around him and star
>marco must overcome increasingly hopeless odds to confess his love to jackie to stop this madness
>so he could free the universe
>so he could finally live a normal life
>so he could finally SCORE
>coming summer 2017
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>>83282832
>Even Jackie is trying to get Starco to happen

I imagine it going this way

>Marco gets the courage to ask Jackie out with Star's support
>he approaches Jackie and asks her if she wants to go out to a movie with him
>"but Marco, I thought you and Star were going out. you're so cute together"
>marco drops the spaghetti
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>>83282832
Yep! I really suck at drawing freehand, so I use the path tool to make straight and consistent lines.
The results are nice — but at the same time it's kind of a crutch, really.
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>>83282952
That's a long shot from garbage, anon! It certainly isn't the best ever, but I gotta say that there's something I like about how you drew that.
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>>83283049
Why thank you, I like yours as well
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>>83282952
That looks pretty good actually! Very stylized.
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>>83283019
Not afraid of using all the layers, are you?
...I really should be as well.
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>>83281751

Oh man, I thought it was Star in a wedding dress from the thumbnail.
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>>83282785
Writing game takes time and repetition, like pretty much all art. Can see why greens are more appealing, you get immediate feedback. It's harder with full on stories because you need to host them somewhere and people have to seek them out to read them.

But hey, Season 2 stuff, am I right!? I'm probably going to hold off on writing anything for Star until it finishes with the exception possibly being something for Cupil's St. Olga AU.
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>>83282952
This looks nice actually! Though if I may nitpick, the hand holding the wand seems to be at the wrong angle. The fingers don't seem to wrap around the wand correctly... At this angle, the wand should be rotating more to the left than it currently is. Aside from that, the drawing's good! It's very vibrant and colorful! And I like the background detail, looks very Star-like!

>>83283049
Yay for cute Janna

>>83283019
Ah, I see. I remember using Inkscape to make drawings back in the day. I'd get compliments saying my lines were very clean but in fact I was cheating.

Nonetheless, you're still pretty good with those paths! I dunno if I could manage the things you do with them...
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>>83282996
Thanks WF!

>>83283149
With this project I'm using a lot of layers too, more than usual. But different paths, those are always dozens and dozens, with complicated drawings needing over a hundred!

>>83283227
Hey, don't spoil the end of the VN, MishaLover!

>>83283376
Yeah, I too feel kinda cheating, and I don't really identify as an artist, really. It's like "join the dots".
>I dunno if I could manage the things you do with them...
Nah, just a matter of practice!
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>>83283019
And this is why I will never be able to draw.
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>>83283481
Lol: that screencap is solid proof that I am NOT able to draw!
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>>83282952
I like it, that's some nice looking art anon. I hope to see more of your stuff in the future.
>>83283227
>I thought it was Star in a wedding dress from the thumbnail.
It reminded me of pic-related. Such a nice and warm looking drawing.
>>83283299
>Writing game takes time and repetition, like pretty much all art.
All too true, and I'll keep at it for as long as I can.
>But hey, Season 2 stuff, am I right!?
Yup, I'm excited to see the new material for us to work with.
>I'm probably going to hold off on writing anything for Star until it finishes
I'll likely be writing more greens for when anons get ideas about something in S2.
>Spoiler
Oh boy that sounds fun. I guess I'll be looking forward to that.
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>>83282996
Yo WF, there you are. I read your Brand New Day story.
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>>83283611
Ooh, that is a nice picture! It reminds me of Kate Bush. Or is that the idea I wonder?
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Good afternoon everyone! Y'all seem super lively today as well. It looks like everyone is here too! How's everyone doing today?
Since it's memorial day weekend. Think we can make another thread for Monday if we max out today too?
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>>83283724
Hello Scarf! I'm doing okay, although my left eyelid is having a fun time twitching... It's very annoying.
We managed to get a thread on Monday last week, we just need to have this thread end late enough that it'll stretch into tomorrow, but not too late that it's not considered the weekend anymore. Though I dunno about Memorial Weekend and whether it'll be different for the mods
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>>83283682
Not sure, though I guess one can make the similarity. I just hope that who ever drew this makes another one soon.
>>83283724
Hello Scarfnoise, we might be able to if we're lucky.
>>83283794
Hopefully the mods are in a good mood then.
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>>83283794
There might be something in your eye. Try blinking a ton.
Our threads usually last until Wednesday every now and again. I was just hoping we could go through so many threads.

So question to the guys who are part of the steam group. What do you in it? Are there people there in general?
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>>83283869
We can only hope
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>>83283881
We played one game of TF2 ages ago, don't know if anything else ever happened though.
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>>83283794
I think it'll be different. Mods know that memorial day is part of the weekend
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Adding on to what I said previous thread: This may sound fanfic-ish, but this sounds good. I had a dream yesterday where Star went to a school to improve her magic skills. Little did Star know the principal was a transformed Toffee. She figured it out due to the bizarre dark magic teaching methods she discovered in a book, plus she saw Toffee turn into a second form (The Principal). Toffee's second form looked like a combination of the headmaster from Monsters University and his original form. Star tries to make the students believe, but they don't listen. Star tries to find out throughout the school arc what Toffee is doing and why. Toffee is actually trying to send her down the wrong path so she can get corrupted and surrender the wand. Remember, Toffee hates Star's magic, but the wand is still there. I think Tom was a student in the school, who is no longer in love with Star because of the Blood Moon Ball incident. He's like the snitch to Toffee, who will be his third in command (when he learns the truth), next to Miss Heinous (The St. Olga's Headmaster and a teacher in disguise) It does sound like a good plot if it's done well.
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>>83282993
Thanks anon! Writing for the characters is the most fun part for me. In fact, I was finally able to continue Chapter 3 after some writer's block by just writing the dialogue first without any prose.
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>>83282952

It's cute and colorful

You have a unique style all to yourself

Keep it up
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BRITTNEY DID NOTHING WONG
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>>83283881
Nah, if there was something stuck I'd feel it... It's very likely due to not very good sleeping or eye strain. May be because of my staying up late at night to shitpost in a imageboard[/spoilers]. I'll try giving my eyes a bit of a break today, and hope that helps.

>>83284124
Awesome! Looks great Folly! Looking forward to your next draws!
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>>83284166
Hooray for spoiled spoiler tags
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>>83284064
Oh hey it's the cool fanfic idea anon. Do wanna try writing the fanfiction yourself? Who better to try your idea than you?

>>83284037
That's unfortunate. Maybe when season 2 actually starts it'll become active

>>83284124
Congrats FC. Are you gonna do a Season 2 version?

>>83284166
Maybe just close your eyes in a dark room for a bit then?
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>>83277716
> Not wanting to gently nully Marco's tender body.
That's gay, son.
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>>83284217
*bully

oh fuck
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>>83284217
>Cast for live action Jojos is revealed
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>>83283611
I did give the script to the next Princess Charms comic to the artist that wants to make it. So that's done at last.

But since I don't have anything new to share this week, here's a beginning to a story that might not get made.

http://pastebin.com/HjyZyuHL
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>>83284212
A season 2 version would be nice, but the problem with making different dresses for Star is that the are not a simple color swap, but require to be redrawn.
I think I'll make all the necessary poses and expression for this outfit, then see how much time and effort I have left to give, and think of one or two additional series with changed clothes.

>>83284166
Thanks ST!
>>83284211
Try selecting text and press Ctrl+S.
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>>83284064
I'm sure that if you can pull it off when writing this that it can come out as a good fic anon.
>>83284124
Nice! Good job Cola, it looks great.
>>83284217
>That's gay, son.
What can possibly be gay about that obvious JoJo's Bizarre Adventure gif?
>>83284354
Cool, thanks for sharing Zehn. I'll give it a read.
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>>83284381
Ah so that's why you stuck to S1 star. I probably should've realized that myself.
Also, thanks for the ctrl s hint. I'll remember that so I don't have to always type out spoiler tags
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>>83284124
Awesome! It looks great!
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I hate that my responded are about an hour out

>>83283019

You need to practice man

Draw human models over and over to help you out

Cause you can't rely on that forever
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>>83284491
Besides, I think that that specific dress was also in one of the short clips in the second promo (when Star was talking with her hands inside the mouth), so we'll see the pastel green dress also in S2.

>>83284569
Glad you liked it: I'm working on the next expression, now, a grin.
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>>83284614
It's kind of late for me to even think of becoming a better artist — let alone a professional one. If I were 20 years younger I'd take drawing lessons, but as of right now, I accept that this is pretty much the best I'll ever be at drawing.
It's not a problem, though: lots of people are more talented and promising than me anyway, and some of them frequent this general!
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>>83284624
Oh I haven't seen that yet. I've only seen the first promo
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>>83284303
What the heck is that thing it's so hilariously angry I love it

>>83284381
And here I was inserting spoiler tags manually like some sort of old person. Now I'll know better

>>83284614
>>83284742
I wouldn't say there's much of an issue in terms of art skills. Folly seems capable of drawing poses quite well, but would rather use paths than draw by hand with a tablet. Which is definitely a valid move; for me drawing by hand is easier but the lines I make that way are decidedly less clean.
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>>83284799
Here's the link:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iLa2qefWvDU
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>>83285003
Thanks FC!
I wonder what the story is for Star changing her dress? Hopefully we'll find out.
I thought Lego stuff was CN only. Then again I haven't watched cable in such a long time
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>>83284569
Are you going to write the entire script on your own?
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>>83275828
Who's the artist?
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>>83284354
>http://pastebin.com/HjyZyuHL
This was an intresting read so far Zehn, I quite like where it was going so far. It's a shame to think that it might not ever get finished.
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can anyone write a crossover fic with crash bandicoot?
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>>83284110
She lost
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>>83285186
I don't think there's any particular reason: Star has already been shown having a varied wardrobe, so it's probably just one of several new sets of clothes they're giving them for the sake of cuteness.
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>>83285309
Thank you bro. Depending on the events of season 2 I might push for it, but I want to see how the actual story unfolds before going farther.
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>>83284742

It's never too late

>>83284868

Yeah I free hand all the time I just wish it my hand was sturdier
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>>83285504
I'd believe that if that was the case. She has as many different outfits as Marco has brands of band-aids
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>>83285544
>I want to see how the actual story unfolds before going farther.
Fair enough, hopefully you find a way to make it work out in the end then.
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>>83284124

Nice

>>83284110

Brittany did everything right
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Hello again, back home and about to start writing this week's Spade update.
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>>83285743
Everyone knows the right way is the Wong way.
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>>83285839
Welcome home!
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>>83285918
Thanks.

>>83286005
She looks so smug haha
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>>83286005
That was quick! What a smug face Star has! It is a face full of
>implications

>>83285839
Welcome back WriteFriend!
------
I feel like I should make more content, but I'm not too sure whether I want to art or to try my hand at some writing.
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>>83285839
Hey there WriteFriend, good to see you.
>>83286005
Looks good Cola.
Hmm, what could she be so smug about I wonder?
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>>83286005
Actually nope: I revised the arms a little bit.
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>>83286005
That's good as hell, FC!

>>83286119
Why not write something for one of your previous drawings?

>>83286164
The arms do look better now
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>>83285839
>>83283649

Howdy WF, finally got around to reading a few stories by other authors. Brand New Day was one of them.
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No wonder Star made the 'Grab a naked Marco' spell, The cheeky bastard has been teasing and enticing her all along
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>>83286571
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>>83286595
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I want to make a short green of this but i'm completely stumped on what to write
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>>83286677
i dont get it
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Young Star finds her way to Earth and gets a crush on Marco
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>>83286677
>Marco Diaz
>Psychologist, Chemist and Band Director, all at the same time
>What a lad desu
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>>83286595
>>83286571
>Marco is a wanton temptress
And here I thought Star would be the one to wind Marco up until he lost control.
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>>83284624
Looking forward to seeing it!
>>83285217
That was the plan originally, but given my experience with big writing projects that might not be the best plan. At any rate, I'll need to discuss the writing with someone to get it figured out.
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>>83286759
We need greens and arts of this
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New pic. I need practice for entering on the tumblr thing
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>>83286164

looks good FC
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>>83286495
Did you like it?
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>>83286185
Hm... I don't exactly have too much inspiration for either of those, since they don't really have much of a context at all. I just drew the characters in poses that seemed to fit their character!

Frankly, the only thing that really inspires me is that kidnapping story from yesterday but I'm not too much in a lewd mood (hah rhymes) at the moment.

Maybe I should read some other fics to get inspiration.
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>>83286005
>>83286164
Very nice!
>>83286858
I like it!
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>>83286726
destiny
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>>83286914
You could change the reason for Janna kidnapping Marco. Maybe Star asked Janna to keep Marco from coming home because they were planning a surprise birthday party.
Maybe you could think of a better one
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>>83286677
>I want to make a short green of this but i'm completely stumped on what to write
Marco's trying to study but Star keeps pestering him for attention. Cue Marco resisting Star's shenanigans to get him to play with her.
>>83286858
Very nice Moxy.
>>83286866
Aw, so cute.
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>>83287015
That sounds like an interesting idea... it would be fun enough to try out.
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I've decided that I would do some more binge reading. I currently have a bunch of tabs open with all the shorter Folly-Cola stories I hadn't yet read. There's quite a lot
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>>83286866
Those kids are dueling at a fifth-grade level.
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>>83286963
I corrected the default pose because one of the hearts was misshapen.
In the meantime I'm working on a disappointed expression: are there other expressions you would need?
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>>83287131
Woo!
Well FC has months of Hiatus to keep us going. You're in for a good ride, though. But you knew that already, didn't you?
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when will I find my Star /sveg/?
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>>83287283
Just do whatever you think. Looking great so far!
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>>83286881
I'll give full review since you're owed it. Bro and Ama got one too after all.

I liked the concept and execution of the story you were looking to tell. The story had some good length to it and you addressed a lot of questions like how their parents would feel and what they were doing instead of just sweeping them under the rug. Overall it was a solid story told clearly and with a bit of comedy using the puppies at the end.

The main critique I had at the end was the conversation felt a bit stilted. The characters responded to each other in a way that didn't always flow naturally. Also felt Marco was a little too understanding and not as unsure of everything as Star seemed to be.

I'm glad I read it, hope you got more on the way for us.
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>>83287109
>>83287265
Dark Souls baby edition
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>>83287388
…And another one!
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